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I have to hand it too you, although I still need to read your other fanfics (i assume they are related), I can easily say that you are an amazing writer just to write a fanfic that long.
*Applause*
Edit: Also, just to check, which of your stories are canon and which are not?
You already both pissed me off and made me chuckle without even getting into the story yet so I'd guess thats good. I'll be reading the story and hopefully I'll enjoy it, shouldn't take too long to read. The problem is that you may have turned some people off by throwing way too much of the story out at once. I don't know how many people will actually read this.
@Necroterra - There's a huge difference between quality and quanity. I could easily write a ton of work about nothing at all but its a lot harder to write a shorter story that is just exceptional. What defines a good writer is being able to have both quantity and quality; a lot of very good writing.
EDIT: Alright I read it. First off, you need to proofread it seeing as there's a lot of stupid mistakes in there "I hit his chest with on of my staffs" then there's more complex mistakes that you don't need to worry about but should fix if you find them "Next to me, one of my Troopers . . . all his four arms wielding the guns." The story wasn't too bad actually as a whole. Until chapter 6 (or chapter 4, depending on preference) it was really boring though. There was absolutely nothing happening for way too long and your only plot twist was way too easily seen in advance. The rest was good though, except for chapters 8, 10, and 12(?) [BTW you have two chapter 11's]. Doing that is a big N-O. You can't have two different first person narrators like that. Chapter 8 was the absolute most confusing thing I had read and honestly, in chapter 10, I never would have made the connection if Prima hadn't been shot (but that wound up being a bird anyway). Big suggestion would be to fix up those chapters to have them make some sense, unless of course Severus is secretly a dual presence, one of whom is a snake creature.
What I meant was that I could probably never write that much, and I admire him for even putting the effort in, regardless of whether or not it is good.
tl;dr
lol jk jk (jelly king jelly king)
I used to have to feeling of writing a book/novel too :D
it's kinda fun when u're imagining things and trying to surprise the readers with something unimaginable or unexpected.
I got busy somehow and scrapped that project :(
will try to redo it again :D
Necroterra, don't worry about it. It is pretty tough to dedicate yourself to longer writings, trust me, I have a billion of unfinished works that I just stopped in the middle of working on them. Someday I'll hopefully be able to finish them rather than just constantly coming up with new ideas and starting new projects that I know won't ever be finished.
@Sinistermackz- Thats the way to keep people interested, but its so much harder to do in writing than with visuals. Done in writing, it'll be full of "suddenly, this happened" or "but then..." and so on but then it gets bland and winds up looking like deus ex machina which is basically, higher forces magically stepping in and making an impossible situation become possible again. Like in LordofNecromancer's story, if a giant tidal wave came and solved the problem of the invaders.
I had a big~influence from Necro. I first met him in Knights and Days, And I started to read let the flames begin when he told me. It made me think about the concept of the SK, and expand on it, resulting in my fic. Dont worry about spelling mistakes, you are doing a good job. I would nominate u for SK fanfic writer of century
Yeah like I said its just really dumb typos mostly, and they all (from what I saw) form words, so even Microsoft Word wouldn't pick up on it. At one point I think you wrote trooped and it should have been troops or osmething, I don't remmeber. (Check it out, just typo'd twice... my point exactly)
I used the term plot twist for lack of a better word(s), I was reffering to Kyrie being a girl.
OH MY GOB!!!!!!!!!!!
*Faints*