Spiral Knights - <Fanfic> Disturbances <CANCELLED>

<Fanfic> Disturbances <CANCELLED>

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Mon, 03/19/2012 - 05:19

Shue-Donnym

Welp, here goes my try at making a fanfiction that doesn't have a shock ending and is longer than just a single post. Anyway, I've still got my finger on the Graveyard button in case things start to go downhill... anyway here goes

Prologue

-- Tinkinzar's Residence--
The gremlin raced up to Tinkinzar's throne.
"What? What do you want?" asked the Gremlin King.
"Sir, bad news. We've lost a platoon of Knockers, thwackers and demos that were escorting some supplies for the reconstruction and deployment of more Roarmulus Twins."
"That happens all the time! What's so special about this time?"
"Well, they were lost in an uncharted area of the Clockworks."
"Wait...uncharted?"
"Yessir. As far as we know this can only mean that another being of great power has surfaced in the Clockworks."
The king's face expressed a mix of thoughtfulness, wonder, and a tiny bit of fear.
"Those supplies. What were they?"
"Laser emitters and cranial armor."
"Get an investigation team together. Find a Commander. Bring Stalkers and Mortafires and rank-and-file Thwackers. Find out what's in this area. And most important of all, retrieve our comrades, dead or alive, and the supplies."
"Yessir. On my way sir."
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-- Spiral HQ--
Kora looked around the table. Gathered for the meeting were Feron, Vaelyn, Brinks, Kozma, and Barrus.
"What've you gathered us here for, Kora?" asked Feron. "Something's up in the clockworks, I suppose?"
"There's not a better way to say it," said Kora. "Knights have reported that there's a strange fluctuation in the levels near the core. Recon teams say that these levels are apparently heralded by an elevator with an icon of the numeral 1 and lights that spell 'save _ us' in place of energy cost. No knights have dared to use the elevator yet-they've radioed for help instead and were brought back to Haven via transport pads. Those who near the lifts say that they radiate a foreboding feeling-some even report that there are little voices in their head insisting on turning back when they approach the elevator."
"Sounds...scary," said Vaelyn. "What do we do now? My core team can handle most monsters but they can't go so long without supplies..."
"I'll tell you what do we do," interjected Barrus, "we-
"Excuse me," said Kora, "but I remember being the one who is at the helm of this meeting. We are going to assemble a team. We need the finest of Vanguards to investigate this disturbance."
"That's what I was going to say!" said Barrus.
"Or," said Vaelyn, " we pick random people off the street and ask them to demonstrate their skills and toss the best of them into this dark tunnel."
"Sure," said Kora. "Let's go with that. This meeting is over."

...Oookay that wasn't as hard as I expected. Sorry if it seems a little long-winded... the action will come later if my crippling laziness doesn't get in the way of things. Post apps if you want to.
--APP FORM--
Name:

Gender:

Species:

Equipment:

History:

Relations:

Well I guess that's it. See you guys soon.

Mon, 03/19/2012 - 11:52

Pow-The-Commando

Name: 'Older' Pow Gender:

Name: 'Older' Pow

Gender: Male

Species: KNIGHT

Equipment: Azure Guardian, Aegis, Leviathan, Acheron, DA, Voltedge and a Valiance.

History: He was born aboard the Skylark, and his pod blew up in Cradle's air, nobody knows how he survived. As a child he rose up the ranks amazingly fast. He still has yet to defeat Seerus.

Relations: He has a pet frostifur called Frostbite.

Mon, 03/19/2012 - 14:06

Valorai

Name: Blue Gender:

Name: Blue
Gender: Female
Species: Skolver
Equipment: Claws, fur, fangs.
History: A vicious skolver that lives in the clockworks. Although she is usually hostile she will sometimes try to befriend knights.
Relations: None

Mon, 03/19/2012 - 16:45

Shue-Donnym

Mhm

Welp thanks for the apps. Pretty sure Pow can fit in and Blue can probably be one of the random clockworks creatures that wanders down. anyway
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CHAPTER ONE

When the knights arrived, they were in for a surprise.
"Gremlins!"
"Kill them!"
"AAAAH RUN"
"Hey, you!"

Commander Barnard sighed. Being picked off the street and assigned to lead some total strangers was bad enough. But now they were confronted by Stalkers and Mortafires. Oh well, thought Barnard, better talk to them.

"Which of you gremlins can translate for me?"
A slightly rough voice said, " Right here, Knight. You better have a good reason to be here, since we've got investigation and recovery to do."
"Well, we've been brought together to investigate these depths."
"We are too. But what's stopping us from ripping your measly force apart?"
"Because you're gonna need us."
"Well then...I'll talk to my commander."
...
"So be it. A temporary truce for the length of this investigation." said the Gremlin.
"Good. Now let's get into this...building."

The forces were standing outside the wall of what was unmistakably a castle. The pathway in was a bridge that lead over a moat.
One of the knights looked at the moat...and pulled back with a sickening feeling in her stomach.
"What? What's in there, Gaile?"
"Take a look for yourself."
The forces, gremlin and knight, looked over into the moat.
"Yeah... I think that's enough looking." said one knight.

The moat water was a wispy gray. Scattered across it were limp wolvers, dead gremlins, and empty husks of Zombies.
"I'm not sure about that bridge..." said a gremlin.
"Well then, why don't you try swimming across?"
"Ookay then..." the gremlin replied hesitantly.

The moment the gremlin touched the water, every corpse hissed and proceeded to tear him limb from limb.
The crowd watched aghast as he screamed for his life, until he screamed no more.
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Okay that wasn't so bad either. The two of you will be introduced in the second chapter. Remember, while your characters won't just walk into a spike and die a few seconds in, the potential for death is pretty real.

Mon, 03/19/2012 - 18:53

Tevokkia

I think you need a gremlin with a name

Looking interesting- can't wait to see how this colony gremlin/knight co-op pans out.

Here's an app ... don't know if you can use her, but here she is. Seeing her die would be unsurprising; hopefully it will be an intriguing demise.

Name: Atraxine

Gender: Female

Species: Gremlin

Equipment: Standard-issue Ghostmane Stalker gear.

History: As Ghostmanes are generally chosen at birth due to their unusual coloring, Atraxine began her training to be an elite assassin at a very young age and saw little of her biological family. She was hardly through training when she took a mate after a brief romance that occurred during a mission, but the two of them weren't together long when her superiors ordered her to kill him to prove her loyalty to the Ghostmanes. She gave him a mortal-looking wound that she knew wouldn't kill him and hasn't seen him in the years since; it is the only time she has ever defied orders.

Atraxine is a serious, sober gremlin whose emotions are highly difficult to gauge. She is also studious, and has put on such a busy facade between her studies, training, and work, that she has few friends. Slow to anger and likely to think an action through before performing it (except for the necessary split-second decisions made on the battlefield), she will forgive a slight quickly but never forget it. Naturally suspicious of everyone and everything, she often internally questions the motives of anyone who does the least thing nice for her; the nicer the gesture, the more she distrusts it (but never aloud).

Fanatically loyal to the Crimson Order, Atraxine follows orders without question or hesitation. For this reason, she is often given the most arduous, dirty, or morally dubious jobs. She has committed unspeakable horrors while working, and while she may privately mourn a bit after doing something particularly reprehensible, she will assume there was justification for it and will never regret having fulfilled her orders.

Relations: She has a sister, Petralia, who works in one of the research labs, but barely knows her. The previously-mentioned mate, Koroliss, was a thwacker, but she doesn't know where he is or whether he still lives.

Tue, 03/20/2012 - 02:50

Shue-Donnym

Mhm

Thanks for the app Tev! Also revoking my decision on Pow because if I make him feel safe he'll spam ads in here.

--CHAPTER TWO--
The groups had been very jumpy entering the castle. The sight of a Gremlin being ripped apart by seemingly dead creatures had sobered any high spirits.

The group came to a halt at a split in the corridor. Two ways.

"Well, which group goes which way?" asked Gaile, the knight from earlier.
Almost as if in answer, two banners unfurled from the ceiling- one with a Knight emblem and the other with a Gremlin emblem.
"Well, that's odd."

--THE GREMLIN PATH--
Atraxine the Ghostmane walked along with the rest of her squad through the corridor.
The group came to a halt at a point where the corridor opened into a room.
"Okay," said the commander, "I need five Ghostmanes. Any volunteers?"
Atraxine raised her hand, along with four others she didn't know.
"Good. Cloak and sneak across this room. Once you reach the end of it at the corridor on the other side, uncloak and signal."
Atraxine and the others saluted, cloaked and stepped out into the room.
Halfway across the room, alarms sounded. A whirring mechanical noise emanated from the ceiling.
Atraxine and one other stalker were quick to interpret it as a warning and dashed back to safety. The other three, however, continued on.
That was when a hatch opened in the ceiling and forty-two dead Knockers came tumbling out.
The gremlins gasped as the three stalkers were buried in a sea of cold, dead bodies.
The three stalkers clawed their way out. They were breathing heavily, and were evidently scared to death.
"Well," commented Atraxine, "the Knockers are accounted for."
"Hey," a Mortafire said, "um...where are the wands?"
Another hatch opened, this time releasing forty-two Crimsonite wands.
Two more stalkers thought that this was enough and scrambled back to safety.
Then the ceiling made one last whirring noise, before it released forty-two Moonstone wands traveling at high velocity towards the pile of Crimsonite wands, Knocker bodies and one unlucky Ghostmane.
"Watch out!" shouted a Thwacker.
It was too late.
The mass of unstable crystals collided at terminal velocity, ripping apart the wands themselves, the Knocker bodies and the poor Ghostmane.
Evil laughter echoed through the room.
--DEEPER DOWN--
Blue the Skolver knew she and her brood had earned a breather. There was an apparent commotion in the depths above, and their nightmarish enemies had ceased assaulting their makeshift home to halt whatever was up there and prevent adding more opposition to the mix.
The Skolver, one of the last of her kind, protected the Frostifurs that were under her care with unparalleled vigor and strength.
However, she knew it wouldn't hold back the enemy for much longer.
Three of her frostifurs had already been killed.
Blue remembered how, as she milled about in her Wolver den a few weeks back, the ground had disappeared completely and been replaced by stone floors covered in rich carpets. The wolves yipped in joy, as the felt carpet was, quite simply, a pretty nice thing to walk on, especially on all fours.
Then the Unforgiven appeared.
They had been first sighted walking a hallway near the makeshift den of the Frostifurs. The wolver that followed it around the hallway reported no signs of anything being or having been there-not even a scent.
Then a few days ago, they opened fire.
The poisonous bolts had nailed a poor Frostifur clean through the eye-in one and out, and another in the middle of the mouth. The survivng wolves resorted to huddling under bookcases and moving more furniture to serve as a bulwark.
There was another danger-the Masons came from the shadows, attacked once and only once, and fled. None of them had been killed by defense attempts, and a Frostifur had had its skull broken by one.
Now they were free to move outside the fort.
Blue told her brood that they could attack the enemy from behind as they were occupied by the newcomers.
The frostifurs wholeheartedly agreed, and they set off for the staircase connecting them to the upper depths.
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After one or two more chapters I will post a bonus read, which is basically a little story I cook up every now and then. It will be related to SK, but that's all I can tell you.
Also, new enemies! What does this hold in store? Give me your best guesses.
Next chapter will be focused on the Spiral path and a three sided confrontation.

Tue, 03/20/2012 - 04:12

Tevokkia

Perfect bit of morgue humor, there

"Well," commented Atraxine, "the Knockers are accounted for."

... am I a bad person for laughing really hard at this line? I'm sensing an increasingly macabre story coming this way ....

Then again, I'm also laughing at your comment about Pow. XD

Tue, 03/20/2012 - 04:30

Shue-Donnym

Mhm

Thanks! Well, maybe you are a bad person for that one... Also, you hit it right on the head, I'm planning for an increasingly macabre story as we progress.

Also, I felt in the mood to post one of my earlier fanfics, with a little editing. The thread itself sank down through the weeks...all of my threads do that without proper care...

Rituals

"What a day this will be," I thought as the everyday flow of visitors went through the town. Oh wait, I haven't introduced myself. I'm...well, I forgot my name. It's been a looooooong time since I've seen anyone I know. Well, the one thing I do know is that I'm dead. What a surprise! You see, I used to be part of a great tribe. We had recently taken down our most dangerous enemy tribe, and we were studying their magic and research to push our tribe further up the ranks. We quickly started mastering their magic skills and set to work.

Dark magic was discovered not long afterwards. Those who used it became addicted to it, more and more, until it looked as if their entire life depended on performing dark magic. However, to prevent the spread of this addiction, our leaders banned any performance of dark magic, and any one caught would be exiled. Me and my best friend, let's call him Bub, had found an abandoned mansion. Well, we thought it was abandoned, atleast. One day, me and Bub decided to try a little bit of dark magic, try and ressurect a chromalisk. We carved a ritual circle in the ground, and Bub looked over with interest..

Ritual execution was a tricky thing...but that didn't matter, for one hundred miles away another of my tribe was concocting a dark ritual to end all dark rituals. He was almost finished...and then he said the words, and a wave of energy blasted out, decimating every living thing in the area, including me and Bub However, the dark energy messing up my dark ritual had unforeseen consequences...I was turned into a ghost, but Bub, strangely, was turned into a skeleton right away. Dead as a doorknob. Because of the conflicting magic, I was anchored to my place, and Bub's skeleton flew backwards into the ritual circle, messing up the ritual even more. The disrupted ritual shrank me, and removed my speech, but worst of all, it doomed me to only be able to speak, in order, the first words of these paragraphs!

...Yep.

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 05:00

Shue-Donnym

Mhm

--CHAPTER THREE--
The knights stopped abruptly as the hallway widened into a large chamber.
The main aspect of the room was a giant rotating stainless-steel paper thin 10 by 1 sheet of metal which was spinning around at high velocity.
"Well," said Barnard, "who wants to go in?"
"I do!" said one of the faster knights.
The knight leaped on the beam and sprinted across, diving into the corridor on the other side.
Several others did exactly the same thing after him.
Bailey, a keen eyed Knight, spotted a shiny thing somewhere near the wall.
"Hey... is that a button?"
"Um, maybe we should press it." said a Knight clad in Cobalt gear.
"Okay, you go first."
"Fine."
The Cobalt knight ran halfway across the beam and leaped off, triggering the switch as he landed.
The beam ground to a halt.
"Well...that was pretty simple..."
Before the others could continue across the room, the ceiling light glowed red and the blades sprang back to life with unprecedented vigor.

The Cobalt Knight was dead before anyone could act, half his head sliding off of a clean diagonal cross-section cut.
The horrified knights looked on with fear. Anyone of them could be next.
Bailey felt queasy inside. It was his fault. If he hadn't pointed the button out, they wouldn't have lost a knight.
They ended up proceeding like the first few knights, and everything went rather smoothly except one knight jumped a little to slow and faceplanted on the wall instead.
He promptly slid down to the ground and was sliced in half.
...
The Knights arrived at a junction where two paths merged and the Gremlins had already set up camp in a large library-like room.
Rich curtains hung from the ceiling and the shelves were fully stocked with books.
The other side of the room narrowed into a tall hallway, ending in massive double doors of oak.
"So," said the Gremlin commander, "What happened?"
"Spinning beam of death."
"Doesn't sound so sunshiney on your end," noted the Gremlin. "We got four tons of unstable crystals and one big explosion. Oh, and forty-two dead bodies."
"Neither does it on yours, I must profess," said Barnard.
"Well, it wasn't my choice."
"Fair enough."
They went off to talk to their troops.
...
Twelve minutes later, a voice rang through the halls.
The gremlins and knights were brought to attention and looked fearfully for the source, but to no avail.
"Testing...testing... can you guys hear me?"
Barnard thought it best to humor whoever this was and shouted as loud as he could,
"YES!!!"
"Okay, okay, geez! You didn't have to shout that loud. Anyway, what was I going to say... oh right...
Hello, everyone, I am your host for this evening! Oh, and every other evening you spend in this death tra-um err I mean the most extensive library in the Clockworks.
Now that I've gotten past introductions, I'd like to announce the approach of my forces of eeevil!
I didn't think it was fair to let you guys, um and gals too, get slaughtered without prior notice, so anyway, stock up because they'll be here in a few.
Have a nice night!"
A click resounded through the hallways, and there was no more speech.
The camp instantly burst into chatter.
"Who is this guy?"
"Or gal."
"Whatever!"
"Why's he being so nice to us?"
"What is love"
"What are these forces he's talking about?"
"Baby don't hurt me"
"Shut up"
"Stone Luigi"

Then, the massive double doors flew open, and an impressive amount of...somethings marched out.

Taking the front was an line of dead gremlins, except they were walking.. The shuffling deceased carried swords made of a material that looked like it should've been better used for making bricks and tiles. Once they reached around halfway the corridor, they broke formation and started to wander aimlessly around.
That was all that was visible then...to a regular eye.
"Hey, Gaile," said Bailey.
"What?"
"D'you see something over there? In the darkness beyond those doors?"
"Not yet...lemme see," replied Gaile as she held up her Binocular Visor.
In the darkness, barely noticeable, was a...one would describe it as the...thing that adorned the face of Carnavons.
"Carnavon?"
"I don't think so," replied Bailey.
A short beam of green light appeared next to the thing.
It promptly turned into a dot and moved to under the cursed symbol.
"What is that..." said Bailey.
The energy bolt whizzed through the air and promptly tore off the Guardian flag hung on Bailey's back.
As knights and gremlins looked back to where it was pinned to the wall, the flag began to hiss and corrode, slowly turning to ashes.
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Well, I won't be able to continue with the fight for a few days as I will be going somewhere.
The enemies are based off of stuff I scrapped together in spiralspy, along with some of the characters.
Expect screenshots after three days.

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 05:17

Tevokkia

Stone Luigi? Huh?

Zombie gremlins ..... niiiiiiice.

While I appreciate the insertion of humor (and laughed at the Haddaway lyrics), I found the type of humor used in this section rather jarring in juxtaposition of the dark nature of the rest of the story. Maybe that was your intention, though. Still, good job, and looking forward to your next section.

Also, good-natured facepalm at the short from your previous post. ^.^

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:35

#10

Pow-The-Commando

One mistake. if Pow survived

One mistake. if Pow survived a really deadly explosion in a cramped pod, he can survive that cut. If that wasn't Pow, don't edit it. If it was, edit it right now.

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:47

#11

Tevokkia

@Pow

First, I think you missed the part where the acceptance of your character was revoked. In other words: Pow will not be appearing in this story. Second, it's presumptuous of you to assume that he would even consider editing something at your behest, particularly considering the rudeness of tone in which you demanded the edit.

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 14:16

#12

Kaijuhunter

Hmm... It appears that

Hmm... It appears that Tevvokia is a fellow smartie... BEHOLDZ.

It seems to me, Pow, that your characters are much too overpowered. They are seemingly perfect, with no flaws whatsoever. They are always quote unquote, "invincible", thus draining from the excitement of the fanfiction. If there is no pain in a fanfic, well, no gain. Eat bitter, taste sweet. Second, i find it quite self centered of you to just presume that Xplad would become your lottle slave and do things for your mere pleasure. You disgust me, you overgrown pachyderm. Actually, that is an insult to elephants. You are a troll. A mother$@&#ing TROLL. So please, if you will not comply with everyone's request and stop spamming us, then get off the forums, and get out of our LIVES

HAVE A NICE DAY, SON O' A SNIPE

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 14:24

#13

Softhead

May i join?

Name: Charles 'Chuck' RH Devilite

Gender: Male

Species: Devilite/Chroma

Equipment: A pike that he whields that does shadow/Pierce.

History: A Devilite working in a Gremlin Gentertics plant uptop the surface as a janator. He was going through both debt and divorce. Die to a faulty cat walk(?), he fell into a chamber which mutated him with a Chroma, giving him the blanding ablity. He was captured by the knightsa and was forcfully recuited into the rankings.

Relations: A ex-wife and two children.

another idea:

Name:Kana

Gender: Female

Species: Gremlin

Equipment: A Emberlight Ghostmane costume as well as Two long Red and Blue knocker wands and a polaris. Without the hood, she has pale fur.

History: A decade back, a squad of knights saved her father after his group was kidnapped in a Graveyard area by the undead. She looked up to them and promised to help knights to payback the debt.

A bit before the rescue, her mother left the grand colony following the recuitment of knockers. Her father wanted her to join the army, and was left during an arguement. The familiy was reunited after the rescue and went to emberlight.

Comparing Atraxine to Kana is like comparing hot and cold. they are polar oppostites. Kana is for sociaolble, yet determined in her cause against the Grand Colony.

Relations: Her father and mother, who are Emberlighters

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 15:43

#14

Isisdelltion

I love this Fanfic! :D

Name: Dorian

Gender: Male

Species: Gremlin

Equipment: Thwack Hammer, Hooded (T2) Mender Stuff

History: The only child of a Knocker and a Mender, Dorian was instantly told that he really only had one choice... being a Knocker himself, due to being fairly tiny. This had opposite effects, and Dorian immediately wanting to use a Thwack Hammer. Deemed much to small to be a Thwacker by most, and scoffed at by the rest, he had some tough times going through Thwackschool, and never really fit in. However, against all odds, he learn how to successfully wield a hammer about the same size as himself. He joined the Colony forces so that he could smash some stuff, and has been plesantly surprised by how much Thwackers...thwack things.
He's usually silent, hoping that nobody will notice him and he could just get on with what he loves most... crushing skulls!

Relations: His parents, but nobody else really.

The humor really makes this story one of the best here... :D

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 16:01

#15

Scamall

This looks grim. Niiiiiice.

Definitely one of the darker stories I've seen on these forums. And, adversely, one of the more interesting. I'd like to apply, if you'll have me. Would you recommend I use a stock character of mine, or would a fresh face be necessary? I have two dark characters at my disposal, one of which has yet to formally make an appearance in any fanfic as of yet. If you're looking for a happier character to counterbalance the dark, then... I could come up with something, given enough time, provided no one else does first.

I'll edit this into an application if necessary. I await your response, Xplad. Scamall out.

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 13:14

#16

Pow-The-Commando

For killing what was possibly

For killing what was possibly me, DIE THREAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *places blast bombs on every post*

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 13:26

#17

Softhead

You know what!!!

Your fanfic sucks pow!!

Get off the thread and come back in a few years.

When you have matured.

Why are you jealous of other popular fanfics?

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 14:03

#18

Pow-The-Commando

NOT

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 00:27

#19

Nechrome

Name: Necro Gender:

Name: Necro

Gender: Male

Species: Spiral Knight

Equipment: A lot of stuff, mainly uses Khorovod and Jalovec combo, Bristling buckler, Wolver Coat, and Magic hood.

History: Just an ordinary Knight with a profound interest in Greavers.

Relations: No one but his Greavers. He breeds a small amount of them as pets and to take on missions. Has about 25 Greavers now, of different statuse types (you decide)

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 00:54

#20

Pow-The-Commando

The rule of a fanfic with my

The rule of a fanfic with my character in is to let atleast one live.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 00:58

#21

Pow-The-Commando

@Kaiju That's an insult for

@Kaiju
That's an insult for gremlins. HAHHAHAHHAHAHA

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 05:42

#22

Softhead

Pow, get this through your thick head,

YOU'RE NOT ACCEPTED. Now get on with life.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 05:51

#23

Shue-Donnym

Worst things first

oop double post

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 05:50

#24

Shue-Donnym

Worst things first

I'm baaaaaaaaaaack
@Pownotsayingthatsixtimesforgetyou
Did your eyes glaze over the part where I said i revoked my decision pertaining to you and the part where Tevokkia pointed it out?
Anyway, the fact that you are trying to enforce your rules on my thread?
lol lol lol
gtfo
you're balls deep in [crap]
get out of this forum
get out of spiral knights
stay in roblox until you realize it's a horrible game like i did
come back when you satisfy the godforsaken age requirement
@Isis
Dorian's in.
The first thing i thought when I first read your app was
"An undersized thwacker? He's prolly stalking my spiralspy stuff..."
@Atrum
Not sure about both your characters. Why would knights send a forcefully recruited devilite down with them? And why would an Emberlighter know about this whole thing?
@Scamall
Well, from what I've seen around the treasure vault, the main issue with most of your characters is that they're too "darkish" or something like that. I'd like to see the one you haven't shown in your fanfics and a lighthearted face. Then I'll take a pick.
@Necro
I'm not sure here either... this is pretty much the exact same character you used in tons of other fanfics. Get creative and I'll think about it.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 05:56

#25

Shue-Donnym

Mhm

Also, I have two bonus reads at my disposal. Which one would you like to see first?
A: The Tome of Owlite Success
B: Bookworm

Both are shock-ending stories like "Rituals". I'm not giving a hint on them, so just vote and hope to god you like what comes out.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 06:14

#26

Softhead

Ah, okay....

Let me try again:

Name: Butio

Gender: Male

Species: Knight

Equipment: Bombastic set with a recon cloak, this makes him on par with other bombers. Owns all bombs, but his preferences are:

AoA, Shiv, VT and SS(stagger storm). At certain points, he may swap out some of his weps to fit the stratum. these are:

GV, DR, RSS and EV.

History: A knight who comes from a line of bomber families who specilise in bombing, and take it like an art. He uses Chemical bombs and some others to create 'stained pictures'.

Relations: A sister named Fragor, and a list of bombing relatives

Second,

Name: Demolisher

Gender: Female

Species: Gremlin

Equipment: A Crimson Order version of Gremlin Demo set, DR, Heavy Darkfang Deconstructor(the one used by Darkfangs), DBB and VT.

History: Originally a Knocker in an outpost, she decided to become a demo after being saved by one during a knight raid there. She learned about boms under his tutelage. He was known as the 'Demolisher'. He eventually died in a battle between Some Vanguards and saddened, the young knocker took over the mantle of the 'Demolisher' to avenge her mentor.

She was eventually recuited to go into the strange levels due to her skill....

Relations: The original 'Demolisher' as a mentor/friend/ adoptive father.

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Sat, 03/24/2012 - 06:15

#27

Softhead

Also,

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 06:39

#28

Tevokkia

The Tome of Owlite Success sounds hilarious, whether or not it actually is.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 07:07

#29

Shue-Donnym

Mhm...

@Atrum
I think I'll take Demolisher. Are you okay without DBB or DR? I mean, DR is probably restricted to Seerus's use and DBB doesn't strike me as something a Gremlin would use.
@Tevokkia
Thanks!
Also...
Spoilurtime

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 20:40

#30

Isekuube

Character App

Name: Akaira

Gender: Female

Arsenal: Valkire Set. Divine Avenger and Glacius. Divine Valkire Wings.

Characteristics: Compassionate and understanding.

lol sorry tpo leave you hanging, but I need to go, so I'll update the rest of this later! Thanks,

~Isekuube

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 07:28

#31

Softhead

Okay,

May I replace those weps with VV and Shiv?

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 20:25

#32

Shue-Donnym

mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

@Ise
Sure go ahead
@Atrum
Okay

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 01:29

#33

Pow-The-Commando

On Chapter III

When you killed (what was possibly) Pow, I got put off the whole fanfic here, scrolling to the bottom of the page and putting a note saying you're too mean to me, as Pow is me on SK, but Older Pow is my dream knight, and Revised Pow is my current knight, and Noob Pow is him in proto gear, while just Pow is my old knight. So it makes no sense to kill ME! This fanfic is a disturbance itself. SO GET A LIFE NOOB!

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 06:27

#34

Shue-Donnym

Oh my god are you blind

Can't you understand that I am NOT accepting you into this fanfic? Good god, it's like trying to explain colors to a blind man.
You were NEVER in this damn fanfic and you never will be!
You know what? That's it. Go on, refuse to acknowledge that you are not in.
How about this?
EVERYTHING IS POW
POW IS BEST PERSON EVER
POW IS THE GREATEST
POW ASDGFGNAURRG NIOUAERHNGC POWPOOKPDJRSGOIPWAKTINOSEJPOITRWIOGAORIW
THEN SCUTTLEBOT WENT BLARG AND POW LIKE DODGE
SO POW THE BOSS MAN
BUT TEN A SKELTON POPED OUT
---
ARE YOU HAPPY?
WELL IT DOESN'T MATTER IF YOU'RE HAPPY
NOBODY GIVES A FLYING [bleep] IF YOU'RE HAPPY
YOU ARE AN IMMATURE FIVE YEAR OLD WHO EATS OFF HIS MOTHER'S CREDIT CARD
YOU ARE THE MOST MENTALLY DEFECTIVE PERSON ON EARTH
I WILL USE ALL ORIFICES OF YOUR BODY TO OPEN SODA BOTTLES
I WILL RIP OUT YOUR TEETH WITH A PNEUMATIC DRILL
GET OUT
GET OUT GET OUT GET OUT
YOU'VE ALREADY SCREWED YOUR REPUTATION OVER
OR CAN YOU NOT UNDERSTAND

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 07:13

#35

Scamall

@Xplad

Yeah, I was thinking of making more characters. Didn't know I was getting this infamous with characters in such a short space of time. I'll meditate for a brief moment while I think of one...

First, I guess, comes the dark guy that hasn't made an appearance anywhere besides auditions. I'll just copy and paste him here.

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Name: Null

Gender: Male

Species: Spiral Knight/"Spiralian"

Equipment: Carries only a Sealed Sword and a Darkfang Shield. The Gremlin fur stuck to his shield is stained with blood.

History: Captured along with his squad by the Gremlins, Null was imprisoned and forced to watch the horrendous torture and brutal slaughter of his collegues and friends for days on end. Once the rest of the squad were gone, his turn came, and he himself was tortured. He eventually snapped when the Gremlins tried to kill him with his own Sealed Sword, the inner darkness of the blade calling out to him. Disarming the Gremlins and reclaiming his sword, he then went on to start his own slaughter, claiming his trademark Darkfang Shield while doing so. This left him with a split personality, with one trying to break free of the blade's influence, and the other relishing the blood it allows him to spill. Null keeps his alter-ego pacified by wrapping his head in his sword's bandages. He cannot remember his own name, so he calls himself Null, meaning "nothing".

Relations: Pretty much no-one but his alter-ego, Faust (yeah, I know). It's more of a strained and reluctant alliance than a friendship. Faust usually appears as a hallucination to poke fun at Null or offer advice, usually about fighting or escaping. Null gets annoyed by Faust's advice, claiming that if Faust knows, then Null does. He doesn't his his fear of Faust's insanity, though, because they inhabit the same mind. He does respect Faust's strength of will, and often removes his bandages to give Faust free reign over his body to destroy their foes.

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Ordinarily, I'd post his alter-ego as a seperate application to emphasise his character, but I should get to the brighter character. Unless you'd like me to edit this so I can show off Faust a bit better. Doubt it, but... Anyway, still thinking... hmm. Have one, and I'll let you decide how good/bad she is.

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Name: Cree

Gender: Female

Species: Gremlin

Equipment: Tenderfoot Mender Staff

History: A timid young girl from the Gremlin colonies, Cree was conscripted into the Gremlin army like the majority of the Gremlin species. However, because of her pacifistic nature and feelings towards the totalitarian dictatorship imposed by King Tinkinzar, she was never promoted beyond the novice Tenderfoot clan. She is still too young to be exiled, as Gremlin law states that children can still be "redeemed" for the cause if under a certain age, which she is. Despite the uncertain future ahead of her, she remains optimistic and cheerful, as she secretly hopes to someday make it to Emberlight, and maybe even Haven itself, to have fun and adventure with the Spiral Knights, no matter what the propaganda says.

Relations: Keeps a pet Chromalisk in the pockets of her robes, who she adopted during her time in Jigsaw Valley.

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Hope you like them. Scamall out.

EDIT: Hmm... looking back at your reply to me, it seems that you wanted me to pick a dark character I haven't posted at all on the forums, when I meant a character that hasn't actually made it past the audition. Whoops.

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 07:33

#36

Tevokkia

So many chicks ... how ... unusual.

Is it me, or is this particular story oddly filled with applications for female characters? Almost makes me want to fill out one for a dude. XD

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 07:39

#37

Scamall

@Tevokkia

Really? Hadn't noticed. Darn. I just used a female application because most of my stock guys are... guys.

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 07:40

#38

Tevokkia

@Scamall

I guess I just noticed because I'm often the only lady in the thread. XD That, and even when given the choice between two characters from the same person, Xplad has been choosing the females.

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 15:55

#39

Shue-Donnym

fdsfgghsf

Hi guys
I'm currently working on Chapter Four
Also I didn't notice that I was subconsciously choosing females
ffs everyone pretend we didn't notice
now excuse me while i overdose on creepypastas

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 16:21

#40

Tevokkia

Enjoy those creepypastas

It's okay Xplad, we know you just want to surround yourself with violent gremlin ladies. XD

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 03:02

#41

Pow-The-Commando

I am still put off your whole

I am still put off your whole fanfic. DIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (I kill Xplad with the most powerful sword ever made, the Energizon, which outputs six thousand times the damage of a Levi)

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 05:28

#42

Shue-Donnym

fdsfgghsf

your silly play-actions do jack
go back to bed
@Tev
noooooooo
i shall hire ninjas to get you

--CHAPTER FOUR--
One of the zombie gremlins fell. This provided some relief to the gremlin-knight forces. That relief was small, however, as it had taken several sawblades and mortar shells to down it.
Then five knights in Dread Skelly sets marched out of the doors.
Each of them held a buckler marked with a cursed symbol in one hand and in the other...
some sort of insane crossbow-like hybrid of sentenza and plague needle. A crackling energy bolt was nestled in the barrel.
Their faces were hidden by a cursed rune.
One of them proceeded to take aim and fire at a Mortafire, punching a hole through its shield and nailing it in the stomach. Its body started to corrode and dissolve.
Several mortarshells, sawblades, bullets and bombs flew towards the nightmarish forces. It did little, but the majority of their enemies had been knocked down and stunned by the ferocity of the assault.
Atraxine tossed a sawblade that embedded itself in the head of one of the knight-monsters. The monster stopped, and Atraxine prayed she had killed it.
Nope.
The monster picked out the sawblade from its head like one would pick off a bit of scrap metal from one's armour.
Then it took aim and fired.
On Atraxine.
---
Dorian bashed away a zombie gremlin as it tried to hit him with the strange ornamental sword it wielded. The sword shattered on the ground and the zombie tried to dart away into the shadows.
Tried to.
A darkfang deconstructor sailed through the air and knocked down the undead gremlin.
The monster muttered some indistinct words before it was blown to bits.
Most of the knights and gremlins were too engrossed in battle to mind, but Dorian remembered that there were no demolition gremlins sent on this mission. "So where did that bomb come from?" wondered the hooded, undersized little gremlin.
The answer came in the form of a shout from a female gremlin.
"Hey! How's it going?"
Everyone looked back and saw a Crimson Order suit-wearing Demolition gremlin followed by a bunch of other gremlins like menders and scorchers and more demolition grems.
"King Tinkinzar realized he forgot to send menders and decided to just send most of everything he could. Hey wait are you guys fighting alongside knights? What's going on here anyway?"
--CHAPTER END--
Mwahaha cliffhanger on Atraxine! Problum Tevokkia?
Also, Gremlin reinforcements have arrived! Knight reinforcements sold seperately(but they are coming pretty soon)
With the lack of player made Knights I encourage you guys to pile in applications, that is, if you haven't made one yet! Also remember that Knights and Gremlins aren't the only ones that can be in this!
I hereby increase the characters allowed per person to three. Pile up as much as you want and I will root out the ones I like best/ think I can make in Spiralspy(that was a large contributor to my decision to choosing Demolisher.)
Also Scamall I encourage you to come up with a new Knight character- I'm not sure how I can justify Spiral HQ sending a mentally unstable combatant into a danger zone.
Also, it seems there's been a depressingly low amount of votes, so I guess Tome of Owlite Success takes the cake!
Be back soon with it!
-Signing off-

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 06:35

#43

Tevokkia

cliffhangers = <3

No problem with cliffhangers, my dear; I rather enjoy them.

Although I was going to ask you, since I haven't seen other fics by you, whether you tend to use people's background characters ... I had an idea for Koroliss, but since he was created in relation to your fic, I didn't want to plow ahead with it if you had plans for chucking him in somewhere.

Waiting to see the Tome of Owlite Success. ^.^

EDIT: I would suggest just ignoring Pow and pretending he's not posting. Replying to him in any way is just going to ensure he doesn't get bored with coming here.

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 06:26

#44

Pow-The-Commando

I didn't read any of it

And, there is no such thing as *a fast knight* but there is a *THE fast knight* which is Pow, so technically, you did kill me. And, Azure Guardian is a kind of cobalt.

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 06:50

#45

Shue-Donnym

fdsfgghsf

HERE WE GO
Note: The ending isn't really SK-related, but since I've sunk myself so far into this, ah well
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Rumors float around the back alleys and dirty streets of Haven. One of those concerns a tome. A tome named The Tome of Owlite Success.
It is said to be a book from the ancient Owlites that contains a ritual that will make you succeed in every endeavor you undertake.
How do you find it, you ask?
Go into a Candlestick Keep. Cast away your weapons and shield, and step into the darkness.
The Grimalkins will not assault you, and neither will anything else. Spike traps will deactivate upon your approach and explosive blocks will lie defused and useless.
Once you reach a gate, pick up an ember. There will be candles nearby.
Throw the ember into the darkness beyond.
The gate will open.
Step through and you will find yourself in a large room with a book in the middle.
Flip the book open to the middle and recite the words written there. Everything that the book tells you to recite.
Then look down at your feet. Don't look up.
A spectral image will appear-that of an Owlite. When you see his cloak on the ground in front of you, do not move. If you look up too early, you will die-forgotten by all, lost to the world.
When he says "Hello," look up. Directly into his piercing yellow eyes.
Treat him with respect. He will say, "You wish to attain everlasting success?"
Reply with these exact words: "I swear that I do indeed wish for what you have named."
He will then laugh.
Smile back, for if you don't he will disappear and you will find yourself surrounded by Grimalkins.
Then everything will start to shake. Look into his eyes.
The world will be blacked out by a blinding light.
As soon as you recover, run to the lift.
From then on, you will be virtually invincible. Projectiles that would've killed you will miss you by inches. Enemies will block their kind from attacking you. You will win every thing you bid on.
There is one catch.
Once you look into his eyes, their image is branded forever into your mind. And every second after that moment,
You'll always feel like...somebody's watching youuu...and you have no privacy.

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 06:54

#46

Tevokkia

I had rather been expecting a ceiling cat macro after all that. XD

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 06:56

#47

Pow-The-Commando

NOMNOMNOMNOMNOM I ATE U XPLAD

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 10:36

#48

Softhead

I would suggest a male char....

Name: Charles RH Norris.

Gender: MALE(Cmon!)

Species: Devilite

Equipment: Janator Scrubs, Pike that is attatched onto his leg.

History: A janator that worked in the CEO's HQ, he was promoted by his superiors to work in King Tink's Area. He felt like he wanted to escape from his mundain life, he sneaked off with a Group of Gremlins.

Relations: A divorced wife and two children(?)

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 23:10

#49

Softhead

I would suggest a male char....

Name: Charles RH Johnson.

Gender: MALE(Cmon!)

Species: Devilite

Equipment: Janator Scrubs, Pike that is attatched onto his leg.

Relations: A divorced wife and two children(?)

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 10:45

#50

Scamall

@Xplad

Yeah, I forgot to add to Null's character (very unlike me, by the way) that because of his mental instability, he pretty much wanders the Clockworks and keeps as far away from Knights as possible. Hence why he removes his bandages whenever he gets into a tough fight. Yeah... should have mentioned that... I guess you could work him in by using his nomadic status, but if not, I'll try to make a new character.

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