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Wed, 03/21/2012 - 12:25
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando

This is my second fanfic.
If you wanna have a character for this one, don't wish! I am NOT rolecasting until Chapter I is done.

Prologue:

I am Pow. Hi here, I am a very popular knight in the Order, mostly for my scout skills. I have trained many new scouts in skills, and no other scout is close to or matching my skill. Many knights have tried to steal my gear, but I redress in the exact gear I was wearing before the steal. Not even Parma was as good as me now. I may just be 13, but my scout skills are totally second to none. Don't believe me? Refer to my book *Pow's Adventure Book*. My under-5* gear may suggest a lower famed knight, but my name has been heard by thousands. Some knights that have heard of me but never seen me think I'm legend but I am real. If you don't want to spend crowns on my book, I am willing to read it to you. Sometimes, I might also use a cannon mounted on my hand and do a quick-draw pistol showdown on someone who doesn't expect it, but I mostly use swords. I have won many duels against knights to show who is the most elite and I have always won. No other knight has ever downed me once, not even in Blast Network or Lockdown. NJow for the book.

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 11:33
#1
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
Chapter 1!

Chapter 1: Not started

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:30
#2
Softhead's picture
Softhead
OH GAWD!

Really?

Mr overpowered?

I have seen Goku get his ass handed to him. GOKU.

I can't wait for the hate to come. Be prepared, it will be just the start of heck.

As well, Multitasking two fanfics? Two bland, uninformative, horrible fanfics about a very overpowered noob!?

Son, I am dissapoint...

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:37
#3
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
No, check me on ROBLOX. I

No, check me on ROBLOX. I KILL noobs. ROBLOX is proof. And, Pow is really a robloxian that acts and looks like a knight. He is the greatest scout in the Order because of that.

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:42
#4
Softhead's picture
Softhead
To show the overpowerness....

"I have trained many new scouts in skills, and no other scout is close to or matching my skill"

"Not even Parma was as good as me now"

"I have won many duels against knights to show who is the most elite and I have always won"

"No other knight has ever downed me once, not even in Blast Network or Lockdown."

Jesus, powerful than the person who broke the measuring computers during her evaluation.

Won against everyone.

Has not been killed by other knights.

Parma, who go to inside the core, who kicked ass, who was part of the greatest squad ever to live, is upsurped by some idiotic newb.

If he is the best figher ever, how come he is not in Alpha Squad!?

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:44
#5
Isisdelltion's picture
Isisdelltion
^He goes beyond even Max...

I'm confuzzled to a whole new level.
What's Roblox?

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:45
#6
Softhead's picture
Softhead
WTF has Roblox has got to do with SK!?

Two different continuties. Does not make sence.

Someone please make him troll until he is broken down in tears please, because he is asking for it.

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:48
#7
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Max had his limits Isis.

He couldn't kick Vana's ass and had amnisia, as well has getting his ass handed to him via the Gauntlet. Oh yeah and got his face pounded to him via King Tink.

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:51
#8
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Scamall
Couple of things.

1) Well, at least you started straight away this time. No spam yet, but still. Brace yourself.

2) Not really a prologue, just a short paragraph about a cocky 13-year-old with a book about how great he is. About as well-written as what you'd expect from a cocky 13-year-old, too. No offense. A lot of the writing makes little sense: "Not even Parma *was* as good as me *now*". Merging past and present tenses like that makes for a confusing piece of writing. The prologue itself makes little headway in terms of... what exactly is supposed to be happening? Some indication of a plot should be present, if it even has a plot. If it's a guide book for scouts, which it looks like, maybe not have Pow prattle on and on about how famous and great he is.

3) You're kinda ruining a plan I had to start my own fanfic. Now, because of all my criticism, I'm afraid it'll look like I'm trying to show you up. For the record, I'm not. You need some help with your writing, and I'm offering what I can to help you.

EDIT: Wow, I type slowly. Spam's already here. Whoops.

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 13:50
#9
Isisdelltion's picture
Isisdelltion
It's a bit mean, but...

...I love it when he says, "I am a very popular knight in the Order..."

I'm sorry to break it to you Pow, but your trollery has brought down your popularity in teh forums quite a bit.

But seriously, what's Roblox?

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 14:55
#10
Outnuendo's picture
Outnuendo
Roblox

Is a game that my 8-year old brother plays.

Pow's from a completely different universe? God, now all you need is for a couple of characters to love each other a lot, and you've committed every major sin of fanfiction.

Wed, 03/21/2012 - 16:11
#11
Ariasky's picture
Ariasky
I think...

Pow is out of his mind, By playing Roblox...I mean really. I was about to say something bad about that game, but I can care less about a game for children that is not for young people like most of us playing here(I guess)
I don't think anyone would steal a set of cobalt.
No one is elite, since there will ALWAYS be someone better or on par with you.
I would like to say more but it has been said already and I don't like repeating things.

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 10:43
#12
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
He just made that in a

He just made that in a plastic model. He really wears noobslayer amour. That's why he's flawless, but appears very flawed.

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 10:45
#13
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
Why Pow wasn't in Alpha

Why Pow wasn't in Alpha Squad? Ozlo didn't know his skill.

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 10:45
#14
Softhead's picture
Softhead
You sir,

Are a lobomtized monkey in disguise.

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 10:49
#15
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
No I'm not you gremlin. *Gets

No I'm not you gremlin. *Gets the Noobslayers and kills GodOfSkype*

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 10:55
#16
Softhead's picture
Softhead
I rest my case

Ypu INSULt lobomtized monkeys.

Also, shoulden't you be working on you fail AKA fanfics now?

Fri, 03/23/2012 - 20:31
#17
Fallconn's picture
Fallconn
FALCON PUNCH!

i believe so Atrum....he fails everytime he posts....true story.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 00:23
#18
Nechrome's picture
Nechrome
Wait... when I read Atrum's

Wait... when I read Atrum's posts the first time, his name was 'Godofskype'... WHAT??? O.o

Back to the main topic...

Well, Pow is very, VERY modest, wouldn't you agree? Oh well, everyone is entitled to some amount of pride.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 00:52
#19
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
It's all what he's managed to

It's all what he's managed to do with only 20% of his might. ONLY 20%!

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 05:27
#20
Isisdelltion's picture
Isisdelltion
^So very modest

OH GAWD! THE POWWALLS ARE FAILING! EGAD!

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 05:55
#21
Artistbma's picture
Artistbma
:(

I cant take your pride pow. In fact, i didnt even know who the heck you were before i started posting on forums!

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 07:02
#22
Isekuube's picture
Isekuube
Dang...

Pow, you are SO OP IT'S NOT EVEN FUNNY! D:<

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 08:54
#23
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
*combine harvesters clean all

*combine harvesters clean all the spam from ise,art,isis and scam*

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 09:08
#24
Softhead's picture
Softhead
I hate this community

Still alive and kicking...

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 10:24
#25
Artistbma's picture
Artistbma
-_-

Wow, Pow, Wow.

Cant you see? the only things people are posting on this thread are about how not modest you are. You gotta write the story about a character. Not yourself. I did that in my fanfic called The Crash of the Skylark (a book I decided to write) . I wrote it about Feron and Ozlo and those ppl. Not about myself. But, I dont mean that the character cant be you i just mean that nobody wants to read a story about how great someone is.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 09:41
#26
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
Artist, Atrum, just get off

Artist, Atrum, just get off this thread once and for all. I'm tired of people not letting me make Chapter 1. And Chapter 1 is when all the action begins.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 09:43
#27
Softhead's picture
Softhead
I hate this community.

And I'm tired of your imaturity.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 10:23
#28
Artistbma's picture
Artistbma
Okay

Fine...but if you want me to stop posting on your threads, then i want you to stop posting on mine.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 11:34
#29
Ndognine-Forums's picture
Ndognine-Forums
Anyone else get the feeling

Anyone else get the feeling that Pow here doesn't even actually play SK? I mean, the only time I see his user name and idiotic posts are in the Treasure Vault.

Also you say your 13. I call so much bull**** on that. You may have to say your 13 to not get banned, but by the way you act you may as well be 6.
Your "Fanfics" are barely about SK and far more about your narcissistic views and overpowered weapons. I mean, a ****ing CANNON on your hand? Do us a favor and leave and never come back.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 11:40
#30
Wenkuang's picture
Wenkuang
[Insert Title Here]

Now, normally I'd say "let this thread die" but this guy would probably keep bumping it up again.

Yeeeeeah, this is awkward. We really can't do anything about him except hope he gets banned for spam.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 15:28
#31
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Shadownox
pow, if u wanna do chapter 1,

pow, if u wanna do chapter 1, jsut do it. no oens stopping u, only urself. i'd like to see how much more "modest" you get.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 16:49
#32
Ariasky's picture
Ariasky
Watched The hunger games, it was great!!!

@Ndogten: yeah I feel that way as well since he's probably new to the gaming world after playing way too much of roblox with its closed off areas and just fell down here,
we can let him go back to where ever he came(probably gets bored)and move on,
say sorry for what he's done and then move on,
apologise to everyone for his ways and let him enjoy spiral knights for spiral knights not for something else. Or something along the line*praying for Eurydice to come*

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 16:58
#33
Kaijuhunter's picture
Kaijuhunter
Yeah, the hunger games was

Yeah, the hunger games was pretty good. I saw it earlier today and it was so sad when the little girl died... NUUUU WHY THE LITTLE GIRL RUE!!! D,

... Go eat a Lumber's arm, Pow you son of a snipe. Oh wait. Thats an insult to the snipes.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 17:06
#34
Isekuube's picture
Isekuube
Heh

I got a freeze vial for that burn! :D

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 17:41
#35
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Azure,

It's even worse. I'M 13! THIRTEEN! I do better fics.....

Jeez.

Also, let him do chapter 1. Can't he ignore us?

Critic:

The character is an over powered mess, the story is jumbled, and the story is just one block of writing after another.

Help:

Un overpower him. Make him weaker, make more paragraphs.

Sat, 03/24/2012 - 19:23
#36
Selenium's picture
Selenium
Roblox?

Waiwaiwait. Roblox? *researches*

A game based around what is essentially Spore's Adventure Creator (not sure which came first) but with Lego people and rocks instead of stuff you/EA made?

... Correct me if I'm wrong, but that skillset includes... imagination, right? So why has it taken so long to write Chapter 1?

And even Chuck Norris lost a fight (to Bruce Lee, I think? Dunno. One of the movies he did), so you know you're OP when your win-loss ratio is beating Chuck's.

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 01:47
#37
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
BECAUSE EVERYONE IS STOPPING

BECAUSE EVERYONE IS STOPPING ME TO MAKE CHAPTER I (Pow has unbreakable NOOBSLAYA armour under SK armour) And, I do play SK. I'm just about to right now anyway.

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 03:07
#38
Ariasky's picture
Ariasky
I love Dark chocolate for it's bitter-sweet taste

Don't think anyone is stopping you from that but the only person stopping you is you(I think) since everyone has the right to speak freely on the Internet.If they want to speak then they can, if they don't, then they don't. If no one can speak freely on the internet then there's no point being here cause there is nobody to talk or listen. So instead of saying EVERYONE is STOPPING you, write the chapter.

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 04:15
#39
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
IT'S BECAUSE I HAVE TO REPLY

IT'S BECAUSE I HAVE TO REPLY TO EVERY REPLY

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 05:32
#40
Isekuube's picture
Isekuube
^ That's not true

You do not have to reply to every post, just check and see what is happinig. Or just write up the first chapter and don't pay attention to the forums at all untill you are dont with the first chapter.

Sun, 03/25/2012 - 05:58
#41
Valorai's picture
Valorai
So many snipes....

So many snipes....

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 02:40
#42
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
PWARP! -My snipe on my

PWARP! -My snipe on my stranger hat

Mon, 03/26/2012 - 18:26
#43
Varsian's picture
Varsian
guys guys guys

if you guys want a laugh, let him make his chapter....i want to see this ^.^

Thu, 03/29/2012 - 08:31
#44
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
Reserved for Chapter 2

Reserved for Chapter 2

Thu, 03/29/2012 - 13:38
#45
Isekuube's picture
Isekuube
Why?

Why make a reservation for chapter two when you haven't done chapter one?

Thu, 03/29/2012 - 14:01
#46
Scamall's picture
Scamall
Better yet...

Why do this at all? It's not a fanfic, it's a flame war!

Thu, 03/29/2012 - 16:36
#47
Isekuube's picture
Isekuube
^^^^^

What Scmall said, I mean you are doing three, ~THREE~ fanfics at once, one only has half of a prologue ond has an introduction that makes you look OP and "nice". The other one isn't started at all!

Wed, 04/04/2012 - 07:25
#48
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
HOW CAN I BE OP IF IM

HOW CAN I BE OP IF IM ACTUALLY INGAME!!!???
Everyone thinking the cannon is OP, this is where I got it from.
Heavy: POW! HAHA!
Scout: X_X

Wed, 04/04/2012 - 07:29
#49
Tohru-Adachi's picture
Tohru-Adachi
WoW

Sdem sih ffo tsum eh.

Wed, 04/04/2012 - 07:32
#50
Pow-The-Commando's picture
Pow-The-Commando
Gosh, this is the ENGLISH

Gosh, this is the ENGLISH language forums! Speak in ENGLISH!

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