Okay, so while I'm brainstorming for Ideas of what's to happen in [EXCEED], read this to satisfy your hunger for stories :D
Melancholy
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Also-- Reader Discretion Advised.
Melancholy (Fanfic)
Wed, 03/13/2013 - 01:52
Wed, 03/13/2013 - 05:08
#2
Nice book one
Nice book one. Looking forward to Book two.
Thu, 03/14/2013 - 04:42
#3
Aww? No one's reading?
D:
C'mon guys, read it.
Thu, 03/14/2013 - 04:49
#4
I did freakin' read it
You watched me watch you write......
Anywya, I love the part where Erik says, "Can you be my girlfriend?" It's like a proposal, yet like asking to be Drama partners.....(Work on your flirting skills, Erik...)
Fri, 03/15/2013 - 23:52
#5
Update!
:D
Mon, 03/18/2013 - 05:28
#6
Update!
~(._.)~
Sat, 03/23/2013 - 21:04
#7
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I got prostate cancer from bumping this.
Sat, 03/23/2013 - 23:26
#8
uguu
It's a very good story, but just a tip: refrain from describing your characters excessively, and keep it simple. For example: Instead of, "The boy had dark, tousled hair and a pale complexion. He was wearing a green collared shirt and maroon khakis", try writing something like, "The boy had dark hair, and was wearing a collared shirt and khakis", or something like that. If possible, try to make it simpler than that. When you put too much detail into describing your characters, it can be unecessary, and even sometimes be boring and make your story look bad or not very well written.
It's simply a suggestion, don't take it the wrong way :D
I look forward to seeing more of your writing!
Sat, 03/23/2013 - 23:43
#9
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Very good story?! Those two had-
UGH GOD. MY EYES BURN. MAKE IT STAHP
Sat, 03/23/2013 - 23:43
#10
nyaa
Also, some more advice: Please try to keep any sexual fantasies you may have in that beautiful brain of yours, and if you really want to post them, do it on a more suitable site. I wanted to bring that up because that part was a little disturbing. Don't get me wrong, I've read my share of erotica, but I feel like you would be better off if you concentrated more on other styles of writing.
Other than that, I enjoy your story so far and will keep reading it!
Sat, 03/23/2013 - 23:53
#11
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Not even close to putting the flames of my eyes out.
But yeah...
Like ^ said, ya might wanna refrain from doing that sorta stuff since the minumum user age is 13. That stuff is a bit graphic for kiddies.
Sun, 03/24/2013 - 02:59
#12
UPDATE!
I promise, I won't write that stuff anymore-- I, myself had some problems made when I finished this... Heheh...
Solemnly sworn that I will never write those again. ~Skye
PS... I tried to balance the story, so try to forget about Chapter 3 for awhile XD
Tue, 04/02/2013 - 00:33
#13
Derpity-Derp.
Update!
Tue, 04/16/2013 - 00:51
#14
Derpity-Derp.
Update! Not much, but here, since my idea of the ending is quite... how to say it... melancholic.
Fri, 04/19/2013 - 16:59
#15
Update!
Sat, 04/20/2013 - 00:31
#16
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Not a Harlem shake, but a Harem shake?
Sat, 04/20/2013 - 03:43
#17
VIN!
Stop mentioning that, please XD
Sat, 04/20/2013 - 19:20
#18
No offence....
No offence but the one of the chapters was quite sickening to read so please do not post anything else like that again
Sat, 04/20/2013 - 19:20
#19
Oh
Oh. Somebody already mentioned that
Sat, 04/20/2013 - 22:40
#20
Yes, I am aware of that.
Sun, 04/21/2013 - 00:38
#21
Erotica!
Don't feel too badly about it - it was amazing erotica. <3
Prologue 1- Done 3/13/13 - 4:54 PM UTC
Prologue 2- Done 3/13/13 - 9:14 PM UTC
Chapter 1- Done 3/13/13 - 9:54 PM UTC
Chapter 2- Done 3/14/13 - 2:55 PM UTC
Chapter 3- Done 3/16/13 - 2:45 PM UTC
Chapter 4- Done 3/18/13 - 8:27 PM UTC
Chapter 5- Done 3/23/13 - 5:56 PM UTC
Chapter 6- Done 3/24/13 - 5:56 PM UTC
Chapter 7- Done 4/2/13 - 3:32 PM UTC (God I haven't updated in a long time).
Chapter 8/9 - Done 4/16-20/13 - 3:43 PM/7:58 AM UTC *Took a long choice of words and some gravedigging for ideas, here.*