LOLZ for Rangerwill! Make him like an assassin type guy so hes more into the Rangers Apprentice thing! Or shadowy guy...meh, your story ^^.
Nice so far, HUMOR INPUT IN STORY FTW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Cradle beckons young knights... Prepare to die...by a swarm of purely evil, malicious, curs'ed...JELLIES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oooohooooohh I wanna be a good assasin type guy, cmon make me a Ranger already! Sweet, nice chap.
Any idea when you are going to make the next chapter?
im gonna make my story about the alpha team, just so u peeps know, so if anyone is thinking about making their story about it, i got dibs first. o yeah, new chapter coming out today. been kinda busy sorry. o yeah, im gonna make the ending kinda sad. just a tip off. but i might change it...
I see u r online and im hopin u r makin next chapter with tons of me!!!!
Chapter 4
“AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!” Revan screamed. Why was he screaming? It was quite simple, really. For one thing, Revan’s escape pod was going at approximately 1,000,000 miles an hour towards the planet below. Revan took a deep breath and calmed himself down.
“Okay”. He said to himself. “First thing I need to do is brace for impact”. He covered his head with his hands. Then he waited. And waited. And waited some more. He waited for a couple more moments and then took his hands off his head. It was at that moment that the pod just had to crash into the planet below. The entire pod blew up. Literally. Revan came flying out and landed on his butt. Hard. The remnants of his pod were blown to pieces and Revan had to bring up his Boosted Plate Shield as a bunch of shrapnel came flying his way. They bounced off, but one especially big piece made a big dent in his shield.
“Darn”. Revan muttered as the pieces continued to fly his way. “I just had my shield fixed from that last duel!” Revan hated fighting, but that didn’t mean he didn’t fight at all. He practiced when he could, but he tried to avoid it as much as possible. The rubble stopped flying and he dropped his shield. Then one last piece of rubble bonked him on the head and he fell on his back.
“Oof”. He gasped. He sat up, dazed. “Why do all the bad things happen to me?” Then something in the air caught his eye. He turned his head and saw a cloud of smoke that was continuously rising.
“Must be another pod”, he said to himself. “Might as well check it out”. He stood up, only to slip on a pool of oil and he fell back on his butt. Again.
Revan sighed. “I hate this”, he said. He got back up and almost slipped again, but this time, he managed to stay up.
“Whew”, he said to himself. “Finally”. He started walking towards the other pod and after lots of other falls and hits-on-the-head-by-a-low-branch-on-a-tree, he finally got there. He was behind a bush and he peered over it. On the other side, a tree-like creature stood walking around a body. In fact, he recognized the body as his friend’s, Will. Revan knew of him because they were both in the Spiral Order. Revan wasn’t really a knight, though. He was a team medic. Revan had healed Will after various fights with monsters that had injured him, and they had become great friends.
As Revan stared at the tree like creature, the gears in his head started to spin. Literally. He thought of ways he could get past the creature to save his friend. But the monster was guarding him closely and he could see that his friend was severely wounded. Will was in no condition to move. So the only option left was to get rid of the creature. Revan charged up his Ascended Calibur and ran at the monster. As it slowly turned around, Revan let his charge loose, sending the monster several yards away, and also causing it heavy damage. At the same moment, it slammed its club-like arm down, and Revan was just out of reach. If he had been a couple inches closer, he would have been smashed into the ground.
He swung another swing or so at the monster and green spots appeared on it as it fell to the ground. He walked over to the dead monster and picked up a bronze bolt that looked like it might be useful some other time. He put it in his pouch and heard a groan.
He turned around and saw Will groggily sit up and observe his surroundings.
“Where am I?” he said. “I don’t feel so good”. He tried to stand up, but he fell back onto his back. Revan ran over to him and propped him up against a tree.
“Here”. He said. “This will help”. Revan handed him a water canteen and Will drank all of it in one gulp.
“Thanks”. He gasped. He tossed to water canteen to the side and tried to stand up again, but was overcome by a wave of nauseous and he sat back down.
Revan knelt down and examined Will’s head. His helmet had been destroyed but surprisingly, it had actually taken most of the blow and Will’s head had taken minor damage. He took out his medical kit and repaired Will’s head. After he was done, Will lightly patted his head as if testing it if it was fully repaired. Satisfied, he dropped his hand down and sat for a while. After a minute or two, he looked up and said, “Where’s my Avenger?”
Revan said, “Wha- oh. You must have lost it in the crash. Let me go find it.” Revan got up and searched around the rubble until he found his Avenger a couple yards away from the crash site. He picked it up and walked back over to Will to give it back to him.
Will took it and sighed. “Thanks. I feel safer with this. Now I wanna bash some of those tree stuff. And all of their monster buddies”. Suddenly, a brown blur dashed in front of Will and nipped Revan.
“OW!” Revan shouted. He turned to see what it was but I wasn’t there. It dashed out again and Revan was able to catch it with his Ascended Calibur and it fell down to the floor out cold. Revan stared at it for a couple minutes before he said, “Its…its…its…SO CUTE!!!!!” Revan grabbed it and cradled it in his arms.
“I’m gonna keep him.” Revan said. “I’ll call him…Chomp. Yeah. Chomp is right. After all, he did almost chomp off my leg…”
Will gaped at Revan. “You serious?! That thing could have killed you! And now your gonna keep it as a pet?!”
Revan stared back at him as if he were a moron. “It wouldn’t have killed me. It would have just bit off my leg. Besides, who can resist such CUTENESS??!!”
Revan hugged it but Will heard something behind him. He turned around just in time to see a tail whip behind a bush.
“Uhh, Revan? Revan…” He tried to warn Revan but all he did was cuddle the wolver and say, “HE IS SO CUTE!!!”
“Revan. Revan! REVAN!!!” Will shouted at Revan. Revan looked offended but finally turned around long enough for him to speak to him.
“What? Me and Chomp here were just beginning to know each other.”
Will snorted. “Not with him out cold like that… Anyways, I think he brought some of his friends with him. Look.”
They both turned around to see an army of a couple dozen monsters surrounding them. And they didn’t look happy.
yay!!! i was right! Im awesome. And i lub chomp. I likie this chapter VERy much. U should put me in every chapter that will make i tmuch better!!
why is there no new comments? does no one like this story? hmpfh. everyone go read my brothers story then. leave mine in the graveyard. no one cares anymore...
Can't forget you shadow.
Anyway, LMAO once more! some guy with extremely bad luck and a pacifist finds a Wolver and acts like a Teenage schoolgirl that found a Jelly cube XD.
ROFL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
...They are so screwed.....
As I said Valkyrie182 should be in our guild. And good story, Its almost worth the wait. Thumbs up! d(^_^o)
although i know that you're working on a chapter...
MORE!!!!!!!!!!!! @#$%^@ING HURRY UP NOW!!!!!!!!!!! (please?)
really.
lol. u know i cant post my new chapters necro. besides, i though u hated it. anyways, im working on it. im busy with my school work and all. i cant post cuz i save my stories on my dad's computer and necro already said that all spiral knights wepsites are blocked on it. i can post on my moms which im using now, but i cant post the chapters, since they are saved on my dads computer.
shadow and/or necro, if you have a flash drive, you can store any info on your dad's computer to your mom's or about any other computer
just saying :D
Was it a wolver Revan caught as a pet?
Any idea when the next chapter? Need moar. :(
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YES! FINALLY!! AFTER SO MANY DAYS FROM NOT BEING ABLE TO POST, I NOW CAN!!!!
lolz. i bet this is like on the 10th page now...
well i bet u guys are starving for the new chapter. been a while.
Chapter 5
Nexon slashed away a few bushes that were in his way and continued walking. After his pod crashed, he had climbed out, exploring the mysterious world. It was quite different then his home planet, Spirulus Prime, as there were very strange monsters there that had almost killed Nexon once or twice.
Nexon continued walking, searching for any signs of other pods, or possibly civilization. He suddenly tripped over something, and fell to the ground. He cursed, and turned around to see what he had tripped over. He saw nothing. Nexon got up, confused, but he tripped again. He turned around, looking for what had tripped him. He then felt something… something… cold… sticky… he slowly looked down at his leg and saw… nothing!
Nexon cried out in frustration. He shook his leg around, when he heard a shriek. He looked up to see the source of the sound, just in time to see a lizard like creature hit a tree.
“What the…” Nexon muttered. The lizard had appeared out of nowhere. Or so it seemed… The creature-or whatever it was- scampered away, camouflaging, so that it seemed… invisible!
As Nexon watched it run away, he heard a growl. It came from the bushes. He turned around, only to get hit in the chest by what it seemed to be a giant fur ball. With lots of sharp teeth. Luckily, Nexon’s wolver cap and coat withstood the creature’s sharp teeth. It gave a growl with extra stinky breath, and ran away.
“Hey! You! What’s your problem?!” Nexon yelled as it ran away. Nexon was tired of being beat by the creatures of that seemed to come out of nowhere. It really was annoying. Nexon started chasing after it, yelling and cursing all the way. The wolf-it looked like one-turned and growled again, but Nexon shot his Magnus at it, blasting it back several feet. It yipped, and started running away again, this time with a limp. Nexon was about to turn around and go back to searching for people, leaving the creature alone, when he heard some shouts and yells.
Nexon quickly turned back around and ran towards the noise, ignoring the creature. He ran into a clearing and almost ran into a tree. Or, at least, it looked like a tree. The only way he could tell it wasn’t one was because of the giant gears on it’s back and a giant piece of wood stuck on it’s arm-no, wait, it was it’s arm-that it was using to smash someone. Nexon quickly realized that it was smashing two other knights. The lizard-like and wolf-like creatures he saw earlier were also attacking them, growling, and yapping, and croaking. The two knights were doing their best to defend themselves, but it was a losing battle, and they knew it. One of them was crippled, his leg smashed by the giant tree thing. The other was multi-tasking, trying to help the other’s leg, defending him, and holding one of the wolf-like creatures, which was yapping and biting the knight’s arm, but he didn’t seem to notice.
Nexon didn’t know what happened next, it was too fuzzy to remember. Whenever he saw his fellow knights being injured or killed, it gave him some kind of fury, the kind when your child is being viciously murdered right in front of your face. Worse yet, they were both seriously injured already, probably from the pod crash. Perhaps that is what saved them that day, for if it was not for Nexon, those two knights would have died, right then and there. Nexon yelled, waving his sword back and forth, charging. The tree stuff were the first to go. They slowly turned, their small brains still not registering what was happening. Nexon’s Ascended Calibur unleashed its wrath on them, slicing, dicing, chopping, stabbing, like it was cutting through warm butter. The two knights stopped what they were doing, watching him. Nexon then turned on the wolf and lizard things, cutting through their ranks easily. He stopped, breathing heavily. This had all happened in a little over ten seconds. Nexon swayed a little, and then fell over, his vision fading away.
A couple hours later…
Nexon woke to the sound of someone’s voice. He groaned, and opened his eyes. The first though that entered his mind was where was he? He slowly sat up and paused to look at his surroundings. Then it all came rushing back to him.
Nexon tried to stand up, but quickly fell over again as a nauseous feeling overcame him. Someone suddenly shouted, “Hey! Revan, come over here! The guy’s awake!”
Nexon turned his head to see two knights coming toward him. One of them was holding one of the wolf creatures, cradling it in his arms. It was sound asleep.
“Hi there. Thanks for that rescue back there. It was fantastic!” one of the knights said. “The name’s Will. The other guy is called Revan. Nice to meet you.” He helped Nexon stand up and shook his hand.
“Hey, no problem. My name is Nexon.” He shook Revan’s hand but he quickly saw the wolf creature again.
“Uh… aren’t those things… dangerous?” Nexon asked. He remembered how vicious they were and shivered at the memory.
“Oh, this guy isn’t. In fact, he’s my pet. I’ve decided to call him Chomp. See?” The wolver- Nexon had decided to call them that- had woken up from it’s nap and was now busily nipping Revan’s fingers. “Of course, he still needs a little training is all…”
As Revan tried to calm the wolver down, Will put his arm around Nexon’s shoulder. “You know Nexon, there’s a whole new world to explore out there! New creatures to confront, new places to discover, I’m actually kinda glad we crashed…”
Nexon looked into his eyes. They had a gleam in them, and he had a dreamy kind of smile.
“You can’t forget though. Many knights died that day. It was only luck that we survived.
Will’s eyes darkened and his smile faded. “Yes, of course, many people did die…” He seemed deep in thought as he looked into the fading sunlight. It was amazing. Sunsets like the ones on the new planet were nowhere close to the ones on Spirulus Prime…
“Well, then, we’ll just have to explore this new planet and survive, making sure that the lives lost were not in vain.”
Nexon smiled at the thought. “Yes, indeed…”
READ MY STORY OR I WILL GO INTO EPIC RAGE MODE!!! ARGH!!! U SHALL ALL FEEL MY LEVIATHAN BLADE'S WRATH!!!
o yeah, i am also welcoming new people into my story, only eh, lets say 3 for now. same character sheet, just post what job u want too.
Name: Dusk
Color: Crimson
Personality: Likes fighting , making friends , does not have patience with people that bother him
Gear : divine veil , grey feather mantle, grey owlite shield , acheron, bolt brand, gigawatt pulsar, volt driver
IM SO HAPPY FOR NEW CHAPTER< MAKE MORE NOW
put me in the story so i can crush people with my javolec
i would like to mentro, but u have to put in a chracter sheet so i know what kind of person u are, what gear u ahve, ur name, stuff like that. i'll hold a spot for u in case u put it soon. if the chracter sheet is not entered by the end of the week, i will assume u do not want to be in anymore.
Ign: Diamondos
Gear: Half Skolver, half vog, divine avenger, fang of vog, and leviathan
Likes: to use swords, tell jokes, team up with others, kats and lichens, explosions
Dislikes: fiends, retrodes (sometimes), greavers, rocket puppies
Job could be swordsman or traveler who finds the other main characters
Personality: is funny but is also serious when monsters come out
Dude, I sent u emails about mine ages ago DX
Dyrus
Gear: Unknown
Likes: Good strategist, meditate
Personality: He is nutjob XD
update on equipment i have a leviathan blade ^^
haha, nice Atgatg. too bad for u though. i got mine a month ago :D
name:MENTREX
color:blue
gear:javolec,mighty defender,snarlbox cap,snarlbox coat,hunting blade
likes:,cutting things,money,and collecting mats,rushing into battle the moment he sees an enemy,not stoping until everything is dead that tried to kill him,using swords
dislikes:antthing that he is trying to kill that runs away from him,using prjectiles(he will if he has too though),weak people,the crazy merchant who is always following him,and people who use bombs and are complete dicks.example:alamar
personality:likes killing things and fighting,and pretty much a battle freak(seriosly i kill every single enemy i can!)
there now put me in the story!and include the crazy merchant too : )
one more thing that i want u to do but u dont have to do untill about 10 chapters after u put mentrex in is upgrading his javolec to a triglav and his hunting blade to a wild hunting blade.so yeah dont include this stuff for a loooooooooong time.
i dont apprecite u using my name mentro.u can use it but next time ASk ME FIRST!k?k
fine.and shadow if u decide to put mentrex in the story dont write too much about his background cause i might make my own story soon
i found a 1st person to 3rd person switchin chapter 1.it says"kozma screamed at me.nexon was about to explain what he said erlier......".see the switch?
it goes from "me"(1st person)to "nexon"(2nd person).so prisega was right.and yes im talking about the comment that was posted in july
and atgatg mentrex is gonna slice chomp in two. : )
NEVA EVA EVA EVA EVA NEVA EVA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! DIE DIE! DIE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I saw you when u first made it and I just read it now and I was wondering if I could Join:)
name: Sir Shade
gender: male
color: yellow
likes: machinery, gremlins
dislikes: monsters, obnoxios people
hobbies: inventing things, dissembling the clockworks, conversing with gremlins
personality: keeps to self, loyal, a tinkerer
arsenal: hunting blade, polaris, grey owlite shield, mercurial mail (wolver cloak), mercurial helm (magic hood), wyrmwood braclet
job: assault knight
hmmm... this is a hard decision. there are 5 people who wanna join now. i guess i'll let u all join, so no more for a while. and for those of u who did not post what job u wanted, i'lll just put a random job for u. o, and mentro, sure thing.
Shadownox, I don't mean to be insulting or anything, but making your levi before even your 3* armor was a very foolish decision.
Ascended calibur is proven to do MORE damage in tier 2 then levi.
You don't have access to tier 3 yet, so you made a very foolish decision.
Make your armor 4* before you craft anything 5*.
4* items are proven to do more damage then 5*, so it is a total waste unless your already tier 3.
Upgrade your armor.
On topic, your story is looking good man!
yep chomp will die atgatg. well actually i dont get to decide but it would be very nice if mentrex came into the story trying to kill chomp.oh and 6 more comments and its page 3!
good point ranger. acutally, i am using my sealed mainly now, cuz i dont wanna use my levi yet. the only reason i made it was cuz i was bored... and cuz i couldn't find any armor recipes. DERP. well, i am upgrading my armor now, so i should be able to use it soon. :D
P.S. u should tell my bro that HES the foolish one. He made a nightblade, twisted snarble barb, electron vortex, and a bunch of other stuff... and he sold them to a vendor cuz he wanted to make a triglav even though he coulda made one the next day.... and now he says he wants to sell his triglav...
im getting bored so my next comment will be my last and hopefly the first comment on page 3 will be the next chapter.oh and 2 more!
this is the 100th comment! and hopefully the next chapter will be comment 101! 1 more and its page 3! so everybody dont put anything! and shadow dont type anything unless its the next chapter! and this is probably the comment with the most exclamation points!(aside from chapters of course)so hrry up and put the chapter shadow!
Grats. I made it 2. You owe ne 5000k CE now.