Lost, the saga ( accepting new characters!) fanfic

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Hey, I was thinking of making a story: here it goes!

Prologue

When Michael was sleeping, he had terrible dreams. One was a furry beast trying eat his heart, another was getting smashed to pieces by a huge flaming axe. Worst of them all, he saw himself in an abyss, dying. He woke up with sweat trickling down his cheek. "it was just a dream." he said, as he walked to school.

When he was at school, he spent most of the time just sleeping. When the teacher woke him up, he would tape fake eyes on his real eyes. Then, the bell rang. For once he was glad it was gym. He walked to the gym. He noticed that no one was there except for a hooded figure. "What do you want?" said Michael. " Oh, I'm just paying what you'll do to us because of the prophecy." he snarled. He took out a blinking button. No, it was a bomb. Michael tried to sidestep, but the thing threw the bomb, and he shot up into space.

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...

Surprised he didn't get gibbed.

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Chapter 1

When Michael woke up, he was lying on the ground. This couldn't be earth he thought. The place looked like paradise. There was a huge lake with a spring in the middle. He sat up and found a huge scar that was located on the stomach. As he walked, the sound kept on opening up. Then, he found himself face to face with... Jelly? Right when he was trying to know what this place is. The jelly rammed into him. Michael went through the air and into the springs. When got up, he tackles the jelly. When he stood up, he found himself splattered with jelly and a ball of this kind of squishy material. He looked for something to use against those cubes of jelly, but all we found was a stick. Michael frowned, but continued on.

As soon as he took 50 paces. He found himself face to face with a tree. But when the tree moved, he startled. He found himself surrounded by tree trunk mechanics, a pack of lizards, and this kind of butterfly that had an aura that glowed faintly. The tree trunk swung it's branch at Michael, thankfully, he sidestepped and kick the tree. He used his stick to remove the gears. As he turned around, he found 4 more lumbers coming. Right when he was about to lose hope, he saw a huge blue sphere beig hurled at the tree. The trees tumbled over liked dominoes. When he turned around, he saw three men and a women, each armed with swords and guns. "You better come with us" the women said. The squad (and michael)marched over the hills.

When they reached camp, Michael saw how many people were there. " um, how many people are usually here" Michael said curiously. " a lot" the knights said in unison. The campers looked tired. Many were wounded. He wasn't sure this place was safe. Then again, it would be suicide to just walk out. Michael almost dropped his mouth when he found a knight wearing a fencing jacket. What he thought was cool was that he found a tall man giving away shields, armor, helmets, swords and guns. The people he were selling them to gave him copper, silver, and gold coins. "what are those coins called?" Michael asked. " crowns" the women said stressfully. " we'll let you take a walk around if you want" said the man. As he walked around, he saw what was the problem, there was an ambushed. He grabbed the vender and threw him to the ground. He took one of the swords and shields and ran into battle.

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Wow

This guy can get the best luck at times and the worst luck

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Like it? Please post!

Like it? Please post!

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Wait...

Did he just mug a vendor?! DAFUQ?!

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Chapter 2

When Michael charged into battle, even the monsters were surprised. He swung completely unorthodox style. He whirled past his enimies with the flat of the sword, instead of slashing with the edge. In 10 seconds, he completely brandished 5 lumbers. When he saw who was leading he attack, he charged at he/it. The thing had a huge torch on his right hand. "Who are you?" Michael said. "why, I am razwog, the living flame" when he said that, he pointed his torch at Michael ans said:" I think you would make a good prisoner". When Michael heard that, he said "Knights, you guys should charge at the front lines, I got a bio human to kill, and this could get ugly."

When Michael charged, razwog just smirked and blew on his torch. "Woah!" Michael sai as he tried to dodge the fire. as Rawog advanced, Michael sidestepped an struck with his sword. The cut wasn't deep, but Razwog yelled in pain. Razwog did a spiral, which spreaded across the whole battlefield... and on Michael. Michael put the sword on his armor and the sword catched on fire. "Are you giving up?" Razwog said as he laughed. Michael smiled an he said "More like the opposite". His mind willed him to say three words. He struck his sword at the ground and said the three words: "Ring of Fire".

Suddenly, the ground rumbled. Volcanoes appeared in a circle that has a diameter of a mile. They erupted and lava poured out while tons of fire shot up from the ground, burning everything except for him and the knights. When the fire stopped, every bio human crumbled to ashes. When they let that sink in, the crowd started cheering " Michael! Michael! Michael! Michael!" some knights grumbled " A little overkill perhaps". But the cheer quickly changed to " New recruit! New recruit! New recruit! New recruit!". Hey picked him up and traveled him around he whole campus. Until night fell.

When the next day came, or at least Michael thought since you can never be able to keep track of time. The knights got him in touch with Feron. "We accept you, michael, show the spiral HQ at haven how strong you are. Also, return the weapons you have to he vender." As michael followed what Feron said, be said the name he would need for him to be a member. He said "Michael, Spiral HQ"

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Humans?

Is it just me or does this saga describe all spirilians as human?

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Chapter 3

The answer is no. Michael is the only human, the humans can understand what spiralians say. Why? It will appear later.

When the glow died, Michael was standing there with armor, a shield and a sword with a gun strapped on his back. The only difference was instead of his skin being spiralian-like, he had normal skin. "Hold on, I got to get a video of this." He reached for his camera. He took a video for 30 seconds. When he played the video, instead of the knights talking English, they said: "ex tracks cad sedwaqioeid. Deytero lun andbuiloid. Hyhesteg wan tresehakula. Kundia anie hagesg koka!" Michael frowned and said: I thought you guys speak english." the knights looked surprised, and said: " You are a dimension traveler. You have landed on this planet. When someone speaks to a traveler, It sounds like the language they speak the most fluently." Michael had to have some time for that to sink in. When that did, he said "well, what can I do now?" The knight snorted and said " well, what feron told you to do, reach haven" " can I go right now?" Michael questioned. "if you want to." 5 seconds later, Michael was on the elevater, attempting to cross the chasm.

When Michael got to depth 1, he almost suffocated because ash was in the air, everywhere. When Michael advanced, he found...machine puppies? When the puppy opened his mouth, a bullet came out and shot Michael. If it wasn't for the armor, Michael would've died. Michael took out his gun and shot the Puppy. The explosian caused many scuttlebots to explode. Michael found a key at the edge of the floor, he grabbed the key and found out that the key had to go through the door. He pressed the key to the door and ventured on.

Michael stopped when he saw a huge war machine guarded with gremlins that were equipped with...wrenches. I hope his is a joke Michael said. But just then, the warmachine shot a rocket at michael, Michael dodged the rocket and thrashed the gremlins. He kept shooting at the warmachine. Eventually, a piece of iron shot out of the machine. Michael picked up his sword and struck it at machine. The machine exploded. When Michael looked down at his armor, he realized he had been electrocuted. Michael took a pill. Sorry, health capsules, or at least that's what they called them, and drank it. He felt better instantly. He trudged on.

He came to the room, he found himself face to face with a hooded figure. With a shock, he realized who it was. "who are you?" Michael asked. " I am herex, the whispering venom. Michael charged. Herex took out two torches. He grinned, and set the whole place on fire. When Michael saw that he was fireproof, he ran for his life. He kept running and running until he ended up at a calm, little spring. "i'm not dying, not for that." before he fainted, he heard a voice that said "bring him into the infirmary, he is still alive."

When Michael woke up, he was sitting on a bed, at first he thought he was lost, then, a knight came in and shouted "He IS AWAKE FERON!" that last word made his hopes high. Then, a tall knight walked in. "Hello, I am Feron, please tell us more about your...encounter." michael explained how herex was the one who shot him up to cradle and how he blew up the chasm. " by the way, where the heck am I?" Michael asked. Feron smiled and answered "congratz, you have reached haven."

P.S: Now excepting new characters! Please tell us his name, type (swordsman, gunslinger, etc) gender and bio

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Actually, it's you

Actually, it's you

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O_O

*drops truckload of Chromalisks off and drives away in a hurry, you never knowing this a compliment or an insult*

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How Come none of you guys

How Come none of you guys post? Are you actually reading this?

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Chapter 4

Michael stood there in shock. It took him a minute to register that. When he did, he ran outside and looked at the safe haven. There was a huge lake in the middle. Behind the lake was an auction house, which many knights were joining. "Can I go sightseeing?" michael asked. Feron hesitated, then said "yes, you may" Michael ventured off to the auction house.

Fortunatly, Michael had 1k crowns from the battle if razwog. He put his coins on the table and said, "give me the best sword you have that is about this much." the merchant found many swords that were high tech, Michael tried on a cutter, which Michael thought was to light. Then he tried on a troika, which he couldn't lift off the ground. Then, one sword cought his eye. "I'll take that one" Michael said. Then, another knight slammed into him an said "Thats mine"Michael tried to protest. But the crowd shouted "Three hits! Three hits!" which Michael guessed that he had to hit him three times with a weapon. Unfortunately, he was right.

The knight charged an slashed with his sword, which looked like a fencing sword that has a red glow at the end. Michael rolled over and realized there was a wound on his right hip. Michael tried to strike, but the knight was was good at guarding his left. The knight parried easily and hit Michael with the flat of his sword. One hit. The knight charged at Michael and tried to slash him with the tip of his sword. Michael sidestepped, but the knight slammed the butt of his sword at Michael's chest. Two hits. Michael grabbed the tip of the sword, which was searing hot, and slammed the hilt of the sword at the knight's chest. Michael thought he sword into the lake and punched the knight in the face. The knight tries to kick Michael but Michael does a flip and slashes him in the chest. Three hits for Michael.

"No!" the knight screamed. "I can't fail herex again!" he took off his mask and revealed his true face. "I have defeated by a mere human!" The gremlin screeched. Michael eyes widened. How did he know he was human? The gremlin took out a gun, but Michael cut him with his sword. "You should've let me kill you, Human. You have brought the orders attention. I will be the friendliest one you will meet, THEY will not be easy on you. The gremlin disappeared. Suddenly, the arcade exploded.

Feron felt uneasy since Michael arrived. He thought he might've been a spy, but defeating razwog... he wished all recruits were as strong as him. But he knew that Michael was one of a kind. He also reached for his sword when he saw Michael taking on that 'knight'. But what surprised him the most was how confident he was. Feron thought a normal kid his age would be screaming on this alien planet. Of course, he had other things to worry about. Like his rocky relationship with Kozma, actually, don't let that get to mind. But what surprised him the most was the gremlin. Just when he was about to talk to Michael, Gremlins started spilling out of the exploded arcade elevators.

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Chapter 5 (This one is short)

No matter where he ran, Michael was surrounded by bio humans. He couldn't fight them, he couldn't even outrun them. "There you are!" said a raspy voice. When he turned around, he saw himself face to face with a bio human. This bio person looked like a salesman, except that instead, it carried a huge venomous axe. He gasped for air, but he didn't seem to be getting anything. Michael drew his sword and slashed the gremlin. The gremlin parried and swung its axe on him. Michael had poison running through his veins. "I will not die. Not...by...this" he said. He knew a way to escape this, even if he would, he would still die from the poison. He remembered his promise to his sister; "Will you play with me when you get back from school?" He breath was slowing down, is this what it felt like to die? "Sorry Juliet" he said with a tear in his eye. He pulled out a bomb, detonated it. At least I won't die from the axe he thought. The bomb blew up, making everything flee.

When Feron came out, he looked at the explosion on the ground. He went to the explosion that Michael made. He shouted "Is everyone alive?" There were all the knight accounted for, but Feron detected a tinge of sadness. When he realized why, his chest turned to ice. "Where is Michael?" he asked. They all just shook their heads. Feron cried, he sacrificed himself to save them. "He died with great honor. By the name of god shall we not forget him and what he has done to save us." Feron said sadly. "We need a shrine, to the unknown solider.

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2 chapter 4s :P

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Thanks for noticing :D

Thanks for noticing :D

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FALCON PUNCH!

Here are some of my honest opinions, And no I'm not trying to be rude I'm just being logical :p

the fact that some kid gets pulled into the world of SK, and starts being a total badass and doesn't even know what he's doing is a little...how do I say this? Unrealistic :/

"Michael" probably should've started out not knowing whether knights were girls or boys. considering they don't have faces or hair.

The overall story is good, it needs some spell checking and grammar fixing. I can help out with that if you want and if you are interested contact me ingame,

Ingame name: Fallconn.

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Thanks!!

True, although there are spiral tailed helms.

Thanks! I would like any suggestions!

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Yeah...

I guess I'll say what I think:

The story is just too, generic. I've witnessed countless stories where little kids get sucked into beautiful, wonderful worlds where they can truly shine.

Unfortunately, Spiral Knights, in my opinion, is not one of those worlds.

Looking from the missions in the game, there is an intense stress over the theme of loss. You have to put relics into shrines of the dead, kill your own comrades, not to mention running through a place literally cursed to be a hell.

Because of this stout image I keep, I usually view Cradle itself as a labyrinth of worlds that have lost their normality, their once-peaceful lives, all for some sadistic king's greed. And guess what? The Knights will probably be one of the many worlds sucked in. :L

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uhh

Thats... kinda of the point

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SPOILER ALERT!

Thats... kinda of the point.
Michael Thinks its an amazing world, but he is corrected once he comes back to Cradle.