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dim, 03/18/2012 - 17:54
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Ok, well i feel like writing a book.....so Ill name it The Crash of the Skylark. Ok.......here goes nothing......

THE CRASH OF THE SKYLARK: CHAPTER ONE

Our story starts with the childhood of Feron. One early morning, Feron woke to hear the sound of spinning blades outside his home. Bursting with curiosity, he ran out the door of the house to see a large helicopter-like spaceship. A tall man with a large suit made of iron walked out of the strange ship. He looked like a leader to Feron, who was gazing at the man's stately appearance. The man saw Feron and greeted him.

"Hello, young lad! Could you bring your father to me?" the man asked. Feron nodded slowly and dashed back into the house.

"Father! There is a man outside who says he needs to talk to you," Feron told his father once he had found him in his study. Feron's father looked up from his work and got out of his chair. He walked out of the home and found an old friend waiting to see him. For this man's name was Ozlo, and he was a Lieutenant that assisted the Captain, who was named Taren. Ozlo knew Feron's father from an experiment they had done together on the life cycles of Spiral Men and Women.

"Ozlo! I haven't seen you in ages!" Three years has it been?" Feron's father said.

"I guess it has. But Corin, I wanted to tell you that Captain Taren has chosen you to come on an expedition through space with him and I. If you accept, you will be the official scientist for the mission," Ozlo told Corin.

"Well, of course I will! It will be great to do another mission with you!" Corin answered. "But is there a catch?"

Ozlo nodded gravely. "The expedition will take 4 years. Which means 4 years of being away from your young boy." Ozlo looked over at Feron. Corin turned to Feron also.

Feron, being only 7 years old, did not know how long 4 years actually was. "Father, its ok. I can survive for a little bit without you."

"Corin said worriedly, "No son. I can't leave you. Wait! Ozlo, can you ask Captain Taren if I can take Feron with me?" Corin looked hopefully at Lieutenant Ozlo, who said, "I will see what I can do."

Ozlo grabbed a small item from his arsenal and pressed a button on it. This item was a pager. Ozlo talked into it and said, "Taren, Taren? Are you there?"

A voice responded, "Ozlo? Why are you paging me? I am busy making the preparations for our trip."

Ozlo answered, "Sorry sir, but I am here with Corin. He wants to know if his son can come on the mission with us. Corin can not bear the thought that he would have to leave his son for 4 years."

"Well sure he can come! The more the merrier!" Taren happily said.

"Ok sir. Thank you sir," Ozlo ended the chat. "Come! You heard the talk! Let us get onto the ship. I mean, after you've packed your bags."

Corin and his son, Feron walked into the house. Feron may have not understood somethings, but he understood that his father and he were going to take a trip. Feron went into his room and grabbed a bag off the floor. He started stuffing everything he had into it. He picked up a mini-pager his father had given him for his birthday and a small knife he had found in the woods among other things. When Feron had finally stuffed everything in the bag, he zoomed out of his room. His father was waiting for him at the door. Together, they walked outside to meet Ozlo. Ozlo waved to his ship and they all got into it.

As the helicopter-like ship flew away from his house, Feron stared out the window at the only home he had ever known. He would miss the peg-legged neighbor who always gave him candy and the well trimmed grass in front of his house, the peaceful sounds of life just outside his door and the small room that he had cluttered up with all his items. Feron would not be back here for 4 years. He would be 11 when he came back. Feron would always remember that house.

(To Be Continued)

sam, 03/24/2012 - 01:29
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sam, 03/24/2012 - 05:07
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Artistbma
?

What in the *** does that mean?

sam, 03/24/2012 - 07:22
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Isekuube
Pow really?

NEVER spam threads when you are the first one to post, especially if you want to post first to brag about it! Oh yeah, I loved the first chapter, keep goin :D

sam, 03/24/2012 - 09:03
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Artistbma
thx isekuube i dont know when

thx isekuube i dont know when ill get the next chapter out but i actually made this as i went. So that means a lot thanks.

sam, 03/24/2012 - 14:27
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Artistbma
Well....here we go with chapter 2.

THE CRASH OF THE SKYLARK: CHAPTER 2

The ride seemed to take hours. Feron couldn't stand the wait. He just sat on the small cramped booth of the ship staring out the window thinking. He though of what their destination might be. Will it be grassy? or scorching hot? Feron thought of all the different possibilities. The time had almost gotten away from him when the ship slowly touched ground. When it stopped, Lieutenant Ozlo opened the door and held it for the passengers to get out. Once they had done so, he slammed the door shut.

"Welcome to the Garden," Ozlo exclaimed. The place looked much like a garden but there were many high-tech items scattered around. Mechanical warriors with glowing swords (which Ozlo named Mecha-Knights), many pagers like the one in Ozlo's arsenal, people walking around wearing large exo-suits which were called 'demo sets' by Ozlo, cranes and machines like such were there too. Feron was amazed. He had always loved tinkering around with his toys and wanted to become an engineer. He thought he could be the best engineer the Spirals had ever known. But alas, those working days were far ahead of Feron. He wouldn't be able to live his dream for at least 7-9 more years. (14-16 yrs. was the normal time Spirals started working.)

They all walked through the mechanical wonder, as Feron named it. They were walking past a big 'Mecha-Knight' when a young man walked up to them who looked to be 17 years old.

"Reporting for duty, Lieutenant Ozlo," the man said. He saluted to Ozlo. Then, thinking a salute wasn't enough, he bowed. He then saluted again. "Um..um.....Taren..um..he told me to tell...you to come with me. He...is in a secret room right now."

"Lead the way!" Ozlo shouted. The young man led them through several rooms, including what looked like a library, a room with a large box that had growls coming from it, and an office. When they had finally gotten to Taren's room, it was sundown. Feron looked around the room; there was a bookshelf on one wall, a desk across another, a bed, and tables in just about every other space. The tables and desk were covered with so many papers that Feron only knew they were what they were by seeing the table legs under them. Even those were not completely noticeable because the floor was cluttered with papers too. The man walked over to the bookshelf, navigating his way through the papers of course, and took a look at one book labeled 'Stories and Legends of Mythical Worlds.' He pulled it off the shelf and, to Feron's surprise, revealed a secret lever. The man pulled it and the bookshelf split in half, showing a tunnel behind it. He threw the book on the ground and walked down the hidden passage. Feron sneakily snatched the book off the floor and threw it into his arsenal. Then he followed the group into the tunnel.

Once they had reached the end of the passage, the man turned around and said, "Remember: Taren is working on blueprints. So keep quiet."

He walked into a dimly lit room with one large table in the middle of it. Captain Taren was sitting at a chair writing things down on a piece of paper. He kept getting aggravated with his work and then would throw it on the floor and start a new page. When he threw a paper on the floor that he had only drawn 6 lines on, he looked up.

"Ozlo, Corin! I see Paken has led you to me. Thanks for that Paken." Taren greeted. Paken bowed. "So, I expect you have accepted my request?"

Corin answered, "Yes, but when shall we all go?"

"Tomorrow, at 8:00 in the morning," Taren answered. He motioned them over to a paper lying on the table. It seemed that was the only work he was proud of. It had a picture of a large ship with thousands of windows and tons of small spheres connected to it. A single word was written under this: SKYLARK.

(To be Continued)

sam, 03/24/2012 - 14:27
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Artistbma
:)

Hope you guys like Chapter 2. :)

sam, 03/24/2012 - 21:49
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Ecmanl
CHAPTER 3

When Feron saw the Skylark, he was appalled. " What the cheese-balls is that," said Feron. Corin replied, " It's the Skylark. Taren has been working AGES on that blueprint..." Everyone just stared at the paper. ( As for Feron, he was gonna faint.)" We ready for the building of the ship," asked Taren, excitedly. They nodded gravely. Soon, a young teen probably in her 18's, walked in. "Hi! My name is Parma. Ozlo assigned me and some other knights to explore this.. this... death-chamber called," The Clockworks," said Parma. Everyone stared at Ozlo. Ozlo said," What did I do? You know I'm not the best..." Euclid, (also one of those knights going in the Clockworks) walked in. " PARMA!!!!! WHERE THE FAQ HAVE YOU BEEN," yelled Euclid. Parma turned and had tears. She replied, " Oh my.. *sniff* I didn't mean to worry you. *whimper* Let's..." BOOOOOOOM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Everyone jumped. They turned around. They all saw a thing. A non-human thing. It looked like a dog/human. "Everyone.. stay still... It's a gremlin. Don't move....," said Taren. The Gremlin was holding a bomb. The thing smiled and ran. Feron was obviously over-comed with excite. " THAT WAS THE COOLEST THING I'VE EVER SEEN!!!!!!!!!!!," screamed Feron. Everyone except Feron went to run after the Gremlin. Then Feron ran after. (TO BE CONTINUED....)

dim, 03/25/2012 - 05:18
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Artistbma
:(

^DO NOT PAY ATTENTION TO THE POST ABOVE; IT IS NOT A PART OF THE STORY^

Please, please don't ruin my story. Any new person reading might think it is part of the story or one of those games where everybody adds their own chapter. Please only post things like: If you like the story or not. If you want the story to go on. Or if you want me to report spammers. >:(

dim, 03/25/2012 - 07:33
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Ariasky
Lovely

Lovely chapters, Artist. Hope for the best with writing the story.

dim, 03/25/2012 - 15:57
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Artistbma
:)

Thanks Ariasky. I don't know when ill get the next chapter out. I think ill wait for more people to start possibly reading. And if there are already more people reading, could u all say that u are? Cuz i can't keep the book going with only like 3 readers. :) However, if people like the story, i already have all these ideas for the plot. This book will be dramatic, happy, and will have good, brave characters. So, if you are a silent reader, could you tell me that ur reading? thx :)

To be truthful, though, I didn't think anyone would read it so im happy u guys like it.

dim, 03/25/2012 - 16:21
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Soulstaker
Since there are multiple

Since there are multiple stories on the forums, instead of this post turning dead why not create a website and work on the story there and copy and paste the new chapters to this post from the website

dim, 03/25/2012 - 16:29
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Artistbma
well.......

I really dont have time to make a website. I wont make people wait a week or longer. I just gotta find time when im done homework and not doing anything else. I will probably have the next chapter out before april fools day. :)

mer, 03/28/2012 - 16:30
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Artistbma
Anyone reading this? If not

Anyone reading this? If not then ill just end this thread.

dim, 04/01/2012 - 17:25
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Artistbma
Goodbye book...-finger hovers over delete buttonn-

-hovers over delete button

dim, 04/01/2012 - 17:28
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Outnuendo
Keep going

Keep going

dim, 04/01/2012 - 17:51
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Isekuube
NO NO NO!

I'm reading :O Don't delete!

dim, 04/01/2012 - 18:14
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Artistbma
um......fine. I havent been

um......fine. I havent been adding chapters becuz people didnt tell me that they are reading it.... An author has to know if people like his book or they wont make more copies or continue the book. So...glad to see people are still reading...might add chapter soon....

lun, 09/10/2012 - 09:16
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Masterchieef
pls continue the story

please continue the story man i love to read this kind of things and i liked all of your chapters !!!!!!!!!!!!

lun, 09/10/2012 - 12:23
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Artistbma
Necro. -.-

Are. You. Kidding. Me?

lun, 09/10/2012 - 12:25
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Artistbma
PS.

I was a noob up there.

mar, 09/11/2012 - 23:05
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Masterchieef
pls man continue

man pls continue i was sillent reader but i love YOUR chapters not chapter 3 it wasn t from you and you are not noob soo post another chapter

mer, 09/12/2012 - 03:13
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Artistbma
I'm glad you like my chapters

I'm glad you like my chapters but I don't think I will continue this because I have another fanfic to take care of. If you like my writing, please check out my other fanfic here: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/58608

mer, 09/12/2012 - 15:49
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Dreathuxy
NOOOOO!

NOOOOOOO DONT GIVE UP ON THIS FANFIC!!!! ITS REALLY GOOD AND INTERESTING!!! I WANT MORE KID FERON!!!!

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