Good start, I thought it was interesting how this seemed based off an actual run.
There are a few things I want to point out, if you don't mind.
Try to separate the text into new paragraphs, I did see the new lines, but adding two will break up the wall of text and make it easier on the eyes. I would have liked to see a bit more interaction between you and the other knight, who's name we didn't even know. To make something italic in these forums, use < em > (without spaces) instead of [i], in the same opening and closing format (the rest of the text modifiers are right below the text box). You could have added a bit more suspense and "during the moment" action, which I saw a bit of when you fought the 'Toxilargo'.
Since I've never seen you before, welcome to the Treasure Vault! Hope to see you improve and write more! :D
Good start, I thought it was interesting how this seemed based off an actual run.
There are a few things I want to point out, if you don't mind.
Try to separate the text into new paragraphs, I did see the new lines, but adding two will break up the wall of text and make it easier on the eyes. I would have liked to see a bit more interaction between you and the other knight, who's name we didn't even know. To make something italic in these forums, use < em > (without spaces) instead of [i], in the same opening and closing format (the rest of the text modifiers are right below the text box). You could have added a bit more suspense and "during the moment" action, which I saw a bit of when you fought the 'Toxilargo'.
Since I've never seen you before, welcome to the Treasure Vault! Hope to see you improve and write more! :D