Fanfiction: Two paths.
Tue, 04/03/2012 - 01:13
Stuffs:
Herro :D This was a lil' story of mine, but it....got to long, and my mind wanted to make it longer and longer and...I wanted to make a real fanfic :D This is also a chance to make my writing better, as you'll see as you read my later chapters.
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Prolog (Yeah, the prolog is pretty bad.):
*~Sirens sounding on the skylark, shouts of spirilans calling to each other~*
The Skylark was crashing. Iris couldn’t find her family, or even the escape pods so many people were shouting come here to different places. Then, she heard a high-pitched voice. Her daughters voice. She ran over there, jumped through the closing escape pod doors, and found herself with her family. Then, she looked out of the pods 'porthole'. Whoa, a planet with only half a crust almost. Holes all over the crust, and below the faint outlines of something looking like clockworks. She would soon know that one, they were and two, there were also named the clockworks. She would also know that they were a death trap, and she would call them hell-works. The pod started spinning. She could see over pods burning as they crashed into atmosphere. Five…four…three…two…one…the pod started burning as well. The yellow flames flickering over the window blocked the view. Nobody had any proper gear; it was going to be burnt with the ship. They were in ‘comfortables’, known as proto gear. They also had no weapons, only what the pod provided, again, proto weapons. ‘Ewe’. Iris’s daughter had been nearest the door when someone shot it with a Punch gun, so she had seen what the pod had landed in first; a mud pool. ‘Hurry up’ Arena, Iris's husband, urged. 'But-' *Splash* '-Aww.' They got to the edge and with help from the rescue team got out. They were quickly briefed with what to do, and then killed all in their way (roasting chromalisks, and making jelly pudding with the things they killed). At the rescue camp, they rested. They had such nightmares that they just went on the journey to haven during the night. Iris was caring for a two year old child, wildfire. He had, even though his parent’s colours were amber and a dawning yellow, red as his colour so they had called him wildfire. While she was getting him to sleep (a seemingly impossible task to anyone else because he was always alert, looking around, and getting into trouble, yet iris always managed) Lumbers, retrodes and scuttle bots were the main things they faced. Iris had an odd feeling. Then she fell. Her family knew that she was having a vision. Iris wasn't quite normal; she had a sort of sixth sense. In her vision she saw spirilans living on Cradle, as if it were there home planet...certainly a mysterious planet if she saw that. Some how, she felt a connection with the planet. Maybe the answer really did lie at the planets core, or maybe in history. She had always felt some weird sensation when looking at cradle from the Spirilans home planet, Spiral. Maybe they were Cradleians. Or Coreians. But then, the light was dawning on her. No, don't wake up...no. Iris whimpered at the light. Arena and Grace didn't bother asking what she saw. Nor did Wildfire, but only because he was still a suckling. Iris then remembered to turn her com-link on and contact her guild. She told the others and did so. 'Hello? Iris reporting. All my family are alive and well. Nope. Were going to haven right now. Half way through. Yes, I had a vision. OK. Whoa, set up base already? Sure. See you then.' They continued, only stopping to feed Wildfire. They arrived in Haven. Separating, Iris went to the guildhall, where everybody warmly greeted her and wildfire. Seeing everything was all right, she updated her com-link. Arena looked up the gear the 'strangers' were selling. Some good stuff. He bided [and later won] two brandishs, a calibur and wolver gear. Grace wondered around and had a swim in the pond, everybody knowing her so they didn’t care. She was an idle wonderer who could settle down and make friends with every body, so nobody minded seeing her scantily clad body swimming there. Iris left guildhall and called to Grace. She got out, with remorse, and they went to her father. They bought their own gear, combining jelly, wolver, cobalt, magic and a good set of weapons. The suddenly guild called again. 'Hello?' '....' 'Great' '…' 'Really?' '.' 'Fine'. 'Err guys.' 'What’ replied Arena and Grace. Wildfire mumbled something in his sleep. 'We've been told to make a squad...' Iris said slowly.
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More stuffs, but poisition stuff.
These are positions, taken slots and whats e' barbar.
Positions for it are:
-Selfless 4/4 (Iris's squad, the main knights)
Recon: Iris
Guardian: Arena
Striker: Artist: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439#comment-333020
Medic: Grace
-Rivals 4/4 (Not bad, just fighting for first place vs. Selfless)
Recon: Ebony http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439?page=1#comment-341283
Guardian: Korin http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439#comment-337453
Striker: Bane http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439#comment-336747
Medic: Whyyk http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439?page=1#comment-348524
-Unstoppable 4/4 (Allies to Selfless, they form a strong friendship with each other)
Recon: Echo http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439#comment-335735
Guardian: Ion http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439#comment-335388
Striker: Element http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439#comment-335388
Medic: Sophie http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439#comment-335388
-Daring 0/4 (Rouge squad that will do almost anything for cash, even if it means they have to be thrown from the knights order)
Recon: Profit http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439?page=2#comment-421454
Guardian: Firestar http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439?page=1#comment-407495 (He isn't made by me, I just had to re-format it)
Striker: Suzaku http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439?page=2#comment-420031
Medic: Luigart http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439?page=2#comment-408521
-Solo-ers: 2/2 (Knights who want to become the best, but want to do it alone.
Xeris http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439#comment-333607
Reiylris http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/49439#comment-340730
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Application:
Name:
Age:
Personality:
Equipment:
Skills:
Biography:
Additional facts:
Pets:
Allies:
Suggestions:
Position:
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Latest set of chapter plans. I will probably change them, and every now and then (probably at the same time as a chapter) they'll be a different version.
I. Getting to know the squad.
II. A rival rises.
III. A Battle.
IV. Snarble start.
V. Allies - Let's kill snarby.
VI. Moorcroft and Tier two.
VII. There's a lotta coin in this job.
VIII. Fighting Fire, with water.
IX. Not again!
X. Ember light – A light in the dark depths of cradle.
XI. I wear a mask too!
XII. Heat wave.
XIII. Where's the key?
XIV. Racing.
Bye!
Tue, 04/03/2012 - 04:36
#2
Not about crashing
^only the first sentences are about crashing.
Please read all of my writing before commenting -.-
Tue, 04/03/2012 - 04:59
#3
Ima send an app for ya when i
Ima send an app for ya when i get outta school. Save that medic position for meh!
Fri, 07/06/2012 - 10:31
#4
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Fri, 06/22/2012 - 09:31
#5
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Tue, 04/03/2012 - 13:26
#6
oh, sry, your right i
oh, sry, your right i shouldve read the whole chapter. Could I be in the story then? My app is in this place: Embrace the Dark: Role Casting, page 7, post 308.
Tell me if you like my app.
Wed, 04/04/2012 - 01:37
#7
Preferably
you would re-write it in to the format I've put it up there
Oh, and those of you wondering, iris is mine and no bodies getting the position of main!
Tear
tears fall to the ground, heedless of anything.
P.S. i will look at your other one, but still make it again in the format unless my app format it the same as it's. By the way, mah squad is called squad-less (random but cool) or Self-less (not true but it's makes me sound good)
Wed, 04/04/2012 - 03:49
#8
The app.
It's OK. I'll let you in if you make it a proper app.
Thanks, it gave me space for some more stuff :D
Wed, 04/04/2012 - 04:24
#9
Thanks here it is:
NAME: Artist
AGE: 16
PERSONALITY: Smart, ready for action. Happy to be a Spiral Knight and thinks it is a great honor that Feron has chosen him to be a knight. Likes piercing weapons and is a striker. Kind hearted but a little full of himself.
EQUIPMENT: Ash tail set. Swift flourish, Antigua lines. I don't care if you upgrade this armor or weapons to a higher lvl of it.
SKILLS: Expert Swordsman
BIOGRAPHY: Father was a well-known knight and Artist wants to live up to be what his father once was. When he was 7, Artist's father was killed on a Vanaduke run. From then on, Artist vowed to become the best Spiral Knight ever and to take out Vanaduke. Because of this tragedy, Artist does not have any patience for monsters in the clockworks. He made many friends and with their help decides to try Vanaduke. He fails and just barely escapes Vanaduke's clutches. His friends were not as lucky. Artist feels guilty and that the only justice would be to kill Vanaduke. Now, after more training, Artist is ready to destroy Vanaduke once and for all.
ADDITIONAL FACTS: Is a male. Artist's nickname is Art. In his freetime, Artist will play Lockdown to train.
PETS: Small jelly cube that has followed Art around since he killed the Royal Jelly King.
ALLIES: n/a
SUGGESTIONS: Um..i don't know, I think ur doing fine with the story.
POSITION: Striker.
MORE: Expandability: kill him, i dont care.
Role: wherever u fit him in.
Wed, 04/04/2012 - 05:12
#10
Thanks for the compliment ;)
Hmmm. I accept him, i'm just wondering one.
OK.
Artist is the striker in the mains group. I might make him just slightly un-hinged, because it fits in with his wanting to kill vana obsession. He'll enter in a weird way, but that's all. I like mini royal jellies as well :) He'll be the person to hit the final hit on vana if i remember. * writes a sticky note *
Wed, 04/04/2012 - 14:41
#11
What Dark Ritual
Name: Xeris
Age: Unknown
Personality: Friendly. Skilled with a final flourish and an avenger.
Equipment: Skolver armor.Divine Veil. Grey Owlite Shield. Final Flourish/Avenger. Silversix
Skills: Agile, skilled with swords and a pretty good shot with silversix.
Bio:He has amnesia.The only thing he remembers is fighting a monster in the clockworks.
Additional facts: He likes cupcakes and cookies *_*
Pets: Gets a skolver named Frostie later on in the story.
Allies: NA
Suggestions: None
Position: Main Character??( one of them?)
*EDIT* I get position now. Ok he can be a lone wolf.And umm...i guess Striker?
Wed, 04/04/2012 - 14:44
#12
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Hey do you want to pool any characters from my archive? Just say that you did (if you do) on there. IF not then, I might give you a new character /shrug if you want idc.
Wed, 04/04/2012 - 15:19
#13
Wow. Thanks for accepting my
Wow. Thanks for accepting my application. Im happy to have Art in your story.
Thu, 04/05/2012 - 01:35
#14
read what i put on your archive
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also, i'm being chucked off, will reply to that app later!
P.S. Np art.
Thu, 04/05/2012 - 04:33
#15
I will say again and put it in a edit on the main thing -.-
iris is mine and no bodies getting the position of main!
Ise, make an App!!! i like your people :) but i want fresh material from you!
Altos, why not be the striker in the rivals team? Seeing as you wanted to be main (but not allowed, why not be him and leader? (main's rival will be the leader of the rival team ovbs)
Thu, 04/05/2012 - 17:47
#16
What Dark Ritual?
But...but....i dont want to fight against the good guys ):
Fri, 04/06/2012 - 00:54
#17
-.-'
weeeeeeeeeeeeeeelllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll, the rivals aren't 'bad', you know like two friends who are always challenging each other to do better. But there not friends, they just like to stop/slow down main's team and be cooler? or maybe they are. You could be a rager? (guy who rages around the clockworks and kills all clockwork things, sometimes helping and sometimes not (he won't not help on purpose))
Fri, 04/06/2012 - 12:09
#18
Ok, CHARACTER APP! >:D
Name: Element
Age: 17
Personality: Generally happy, Joker, gets offended if anybody makes fun of his habits.
Equipment: COSTUME: Snarbolax Coat with Shadow Valk Wings and Crown of the Fallen. REAL ARMOUR: Skolver Coat and Vog Cub Cap SHIELD: Crest of Almire UV: Elemental Max. WEAPONS: Glacius, Gran Faust, Argent Peacemaker, and Plague Needle. NOTE: His armour tends to chan ge on whatever mission he is on. (Feel free to nerf his gear when he is on different missions, I'd like you not to nerf his Ace Gear)
Skills: Likes to use double guns or double swords at times, with his Crest on his back. Often made fun of this habit.
Biography: Born into a group of Swordmen, who were built on the sole purpose of the art of Swording (does that make sense? :3) he never really followed the rules, always sneaking his guns on his missions, one day he was found out and was exiled from the group, after that he didn't have to stress about sneaking his guns in his coat, but he still does and is often thought as a swordsman from knights who don't know him.
Additional facts: Likes to sneak his guns on the inside of his coat and is often thought as a swordsman from knights who don't know him.
Pet/Friend: Teir Three Ghostmane Stalker, Echo, exiled from the colony. His most trusted friend, he has other knight friends, but he is considered his closest.
Allies: Tank, All Variations of Ice (IceKlaw, IseKube, etc. Not the zombie Ice though, :P), Bull, Glacier, Fluro, Jack, Mark, his girlfriend Sophie
Suggestions: I have seen an issue with the dialogue you often use apostrophies to quotation marks ' instead of " so it kind of made me confused.
Position: Maybe a lone knight with Echo and Sophie. I'd like him to have a main role if that's not too much to ask.
Name: Sophie
Age: 17
Gender: Female
Race: Spiralian
Arsenal: Valkire Set, Divine Flower on Valk Helm, and Divine Valk Wings. Grey Owlite Shield. Silversix, Blitz Needle, Voltedge, and Leviathan Blade.
Personaity: Fun loving, and positive, when critizised of her past she won't talk to anybody but her snipe, Jovie
Bio: She lost her parents in a horrible takeover with devilites, she was only a little girl of 9 then, but promised to avenge them, she was still always down, untill she stumbled upon a snipe that wouldn't stop following her, finally she took her home and named it Jovie, since then they are forever friends, one day she was walking around Haven and she got an outbid, she kept trying to win the auctio, but she eventually lost, she sighed looked to her side and saw that a knight was getting what she was bidding on, she got mad at him and the two fought, htey became good friends after that, and eventually boyfriend and girlfriend.
Additional facts: She loves her Snipe, Jovie, a lot, sometimes more than her boyfriend, Element.
Friends: Element, Jovie, and Echo.
P.S. Sophie is kind of the same one on my Archive, just not evil, I will post them (Echo and different Sophie) on this post.
Name: Echo
Gender: Male
Age: ??
Race: Gremalian? (lol waht?) maybe just Gremlin
Personality: Generally quiet and wise, often will wait. Comical at times will often crack jokes on their bleak situation, just for kicks he will cloak himself and sneak up on Element and scare him.
Equipment: Issued Ghostmane Stalker equipment. Besides his glaives/shurikens, he sometimes uses an Antingua.
Skills: Loves cloaking and is a good shot with his Antingua and glaives/shurikens
Biography: Shortly after Lord Seerus (Seerusly :D) rose to power he led a rebellion of Gremlins who didn't agree with him, the rebellion utterly failed and the living Gremlins fled the colony making their way to Emberlight. He got separated from another Gremlin friend, during the frenzy of the fleeing. By chance he stumbled upon a knight and they quickly made friends and traveled with him mostly everywhere.
Additional facts: Sneaks up on Element a lot, scaring him for kicks.
Friends: Element, Xovian, Jovie, and Sophie.
Hope you like these people, do you want me to post Echo and Sophie's Apps on here?
Thanks, Isekuube
Fri, 04/06/2012 - 17:36
#19
Hmm, i got a charactor
Ok lets see...
Name: Ion
Gender: Male
Age: 25
Personality: prefers to fight alone,quite, but kind when with other knights
Equipment: Azure Guardian set, Leviathen Blade, Argent Peacemaker, Final Flourish, and Crest of Almire.
Skills: General sword combat, Stealth, and being able to keep calm.
Mini bio: His grandfather was a knight of Almire, hence the crest of Almire he never leaves his home without. He was born into a family of Biologists, but decided to instead become a advanced sword trainer. He is not married, and doesn't plan on doing so for a while.
Facts: He was one of the support knights who helped Infiltrate Seerus's Grand Arsenal. His brother designed the laser turrets used by the Spiral Order.
Pets: Baby Ash Tail
Allies/Friends: Element, Sophie.
Suggestions: None really.
Position: Rival Recon, (I originally though the rivals were evil but then i read your comment saying they were just friendly competition.)
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 01:31
#20
:) unlike my last attempt at a fanfic(pffft)this hasn't failed!
Element: √
Sophie: √
Echo: √
Ion: √
...yay, lots of ticks :D Love your idea of Ele and soph's 'meeting' xD lovey duvy.
This has given me an idea...three people and someone as an Allie? doesn't make sense...but an extra squad...does :{D I use " ' "s because i find it easier and I've got use to it. Sorry if it confuses you. Rivals aren't particularly friendly, but not evil. If Ginger will agree, i'm going to make a third squad.
Tear. Θ Tear do not show fear and weakness, but strength and power Θ
P.S. Ise, i'll make sure your not to main that you have to be in story ALL the time....I think we all know why... XD jokes, but ovbs he won't be in all the time.
Sun, 04/08/2012 - 12:25
#21
First try... I-Getting to know the squad
hope it's good enough, i was having some trouble because there in zero-to-two star gear.
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Getting to know art, and making rivals with all gremlins for using a lift they were fixing!
(Starts off where the pro log finished)
Arena, as practical as ever, opened some sort of notepad on his com/HUB device. '‘So, who goes where? And Iris is obviously the leader.'’ '‘I’ll be a medic, you know I took those classes on Spiral.’' '‘Medic it is, and Iris, I’m guessing Recon.’' '‘Yes...’' answered Iris in a far away tone. '‘We need a striker,'’ Arena replied not noticing Iris’s weak voice. Just then they heard the shouts of someone saying '‘Looking for a squad that needs a striker!’' ''Wow, just what we need'' thought the family. Walking up to him, Arena made conversation. '‘Perfect timing, we just made a squad and need one.'’ ‘'Great, what are you going to call your selves though’' Arena looked at Iris. She had wondered off to cheer someone up who was crying. '‘Selfless…’' '‘Nice name! I’ll join, by the way, the name’s artist, art for short.'’ ‘'Oh but…never mind art. Iris, this is art, he’s are striker and we, accidentally, called ourselves Selfless.’' '‘Nice’ said Iris back in he world, who was still trying to cheer the young girl up. '‘Life isn’t over yet, my parents died when I was young too you know.'’ ‘'Really?'’ Said the girl slightly more interested now. ‘'What did you do?'’ '‘I was adopted by some lovely people, who are now dead as well…’' '‘Oh…’' whispered the girl, '‘I’m sorry’' '‘Don’t be, you can’t help it.’' Gently hugging the girl. '‘I think we have to go now, so do you know anywhere you can stay?'’ The girl shook her head. '‘I know, you’ll go to my guildhall and they’ll look after you. (Yay, a nice ending for the girl :D) Sending the girl there with a message, she turned around to her squad. '‘So, how about a simple Tier one run?’' '‘Sure, lets get going.’' '‘OK, Iris'’
Using the mission base, they accessed a quick run. Moving through it quickly, a bomb here and there, a bullet flying over gaps and blades slashing everywhere they could, they got to the terminal. Sitting down on the healing pads, they talked with Basil. After getting a few healing tips and some gossip, they left thanking basil as they went. When they pressed the down button, nothing happened. Basil had no idea of what could be wrong. They were worried. *Clank…boof* Suddenly the lift dropped. Almost flying, they saw angry gremlins jump into the gaps between the shaft it’s self and the lift tumbling through. ‘'Whoa…I think we upset some gremlins!'’ commented Art. '‘And I think your right about that…'’ Replied Grace, who had mostly been silent through out the run. '‘Hehey, you spoke…’' '‘Art…’ growled Arena (ooo, overprotective father) '‘Just joking!’' '‘Hmmm…’' the rest went quickly with a lot of talking and getting to know each other.
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EDITED with ''s instead of 's
Tell me anything you want, i just thought that the first bit should be getting the main squad together with a name. That's where the girl comes in if you didn't understand it. Iris goes to cheer her up and arena thinks shes selfless, then Art thinks that's the name :D anything in brackets isn't part of the story if you haven't guessed! I WANT FEED BACK!!!!! and people to join the coin squad and rival squad.
@Ion, i put you in the Allie squad because you allies with Ele etc.
@Ise you don't mind me typing ele and soph do you?
Order of events (might change)
I - Getting to know the squad.
II - A rival rises.
III - A Battle.
IV - Allies.
V - There's a lot-ta coin in this job.
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 05:38
#22
Nope I do not
But, a, did you see my suggestion? I have seen an issue with the dialogue you often use apostrophies to quotation marks ' instead of " so it kind of made me confused. Can you take that into consideration? THe dialogue often confuzzles me! :P But other than that great! (OOOOH Overprotective dad :P)
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 05:56
#23
fine, i just find it easier
fine, i just find it easier to do '. How about i do '' rather than "? i would find it easier :P they might be the same to you, but ones two 's and the other is a "
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 06:06
#24
Well yes...
I didn't really understand that, but I think you should use " insdead of ' it might help me understand the plot more thanks,
Isekuube
Sun, 06/24/2012 - 05:45
#25
Done -.-
done it. Can somebody tell a forum-ie friend of there's to make a rival app? '' instead of '. but " is different to '' being, one is two ' and the other just a normal quotation mark.
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 06:45
#26
Hmmmm....
idk, I would say yes, but he isn't friends with Jovie >:D :3 And another thing... I would accept him if he's friends with Jovie, dispite his age... seems kind of old to be with a bunch of teenagers :P anyways, if he's friends with Jovie, idk, he can be in the squad only on that condition! :D THanks,
Isekuube
Sat, 05/05/2012 - 09:51
#27
lol, true
but it doesn't really matter does it? (about the age) Your the mains teams friends and allies, meaning your friends/allies with a family. of around 20, cos they have two kids, Grace and Wildfire. (Grace: around 13 Wildfire: 2)young people :D My squad has a 16 yr old (Art), a 13 yr old(Grace) and two 26 yr olds (Iris & Arena) i'm sure his friends with Jovie...And i got some more chapter names for now :D
WARNING CONTAINS SPOILERS!!!!
Wow! lots of chapters! I'm hoping you can't wait for them xD but i need the squads to be full, at least the rivals for now!
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I - Getting to know the squad.
II - A rival rises.
III - A Battle.
IV - Allies.
V - Moor craft and Tier two
VI - There's a lotta coin in this job.
VII - Fire with Fire? I say Fire with Water.
VIII - Not again!
IX - Ember light, Tier Three and Depth Twenty-three!
X - Heat wave
XI - I wear a mask too!
XII - Where's the key?
XIII - R.a.c.e.
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 10:03
#28
STUFF >:D
Do you know your Roman Numerals? IX=9 So... You skipped 8 I think, yeah, that's the only one :P Oh well, not much of a prob, just thought that might help ;)
And Oh dang! Wildfire is YOUNG! Wow... LOL How dare you put a three-year-old in battle? o_O And a SL too (I'm sure he's gotten older by then, but maybe 5 at the most :P) Don't kill him! :O
AND... ok I guess I'll accept Ion in the squad, but can I add someother ppl from my archive in the squad too? Or is 4 the max? (Not counting Jovie)
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 10:27
#29
LOOOOOOOOOOOOOl
wildfire is taken care of by the guild, you know that kind (nameless) guild iris talked about?
4 is max because i don't want to expand the damn lifts.
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 11:27
#30
Third Squad
Yeah I agree of Ion being in the third squad. Great story By the way.
Also with the age difference with him and Element and Sophie, guess i really didn't think of that. Lets just say he knows them but not real closely.
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 12:13
#31
Yeah, good way of 'breaking the ice' i guess
yeah, i think that solves it.
thanks as well
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 12:18
#32
I agree
Mhmmm, but.. wait... does Jovie couint as a squat member? o_O
Sun, 04/08/2012 - 01:58
#33
@Ise lol
Hmmm, i don't think so. Jovie can just fly down if she did. By the way, Ele and Soph won't be bf and gf at beginning (EDIT i spelt it right i think), but * censors EPIC spoiler * will become bf 'n' gf if that's all right.
I still think it's funny how you thought Wild was in the squad! ''I'm a two year old and i did darkfire vanna yesterday!'' 0 0
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I can't wait to write X - A new mission and a break from the clockworks...but not the hard work!!! It's going to be so good, because it's something i hope no one has ever bothered to do before. SPOILER;Spoiler put into an anagram. word one: [Lye Owl] word two [Lad Rec] word three [Grin]!!! do not write what it is, unless you think someone else has done it or it is known!
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 13:38
#34
:P
Curse you for censoring the spoiler >:D, and yeah... hehe lol
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 14:17
#35
What Dark Ritual?
i would still like to be a lone wolf. but if you really, really need someone to be the rival team then i guess i'll do it :\. im sorry if i've been an application pain.
Sat, 04/07/2012 - 17:13
#36
Rival
I see you need some people for the rival squad, so i guess i got one.
Name: Bane
Gender: Male
Age: 21
Personality: Slightly over-reactive, talks a lot, and enjoys winning at anything
Equipment: Red rose set (with a toasty pipe as costume), Grey feather set, Dread Skelly Shield, Silent Nightblade, Barbourus Thorn Blade, Plague Needle, Dark Retribution.
Skills: Smuggling, Operating large machineary, scamming.
Mini Bio: He was born on a Moonstone farm outside Haven, where he learned to operate mineral harvesters. He tried to be a chef, but never felt comfortable cooking (although he was quite good at it). After searching several years for a career, he decided to instead steal all he needed, never being caught once.
Facts: He once tricked a new recruit into buying a dark shard for 700 crowns, who has since stole back his money. He has never been to the sanctuary, saying the pictures of it were so bright hes afraid he'd go blind. He stole his dark retribution from one of seerus's guards
Friends: (other members of the rival squad)
Pets: A pearl greaver he found in a devilite office.
Position: Rival squad Striker
Sun, 04/08/2012 - 10:23
#37
THAT DARK RITUAL!!!! xD
Altos, I said you can be a Rager, but I do need a rival squad. EDIT this edit dissapered xD
Ginger, I can see bane as a great pest to the main squad!
Guys, how do you do bold and italic on this? i know how to on wiki but not here
P.S. HAPPY EASTER GUYS!
Sun, 04/08/2012 - 08:07
#38
May i please say, that i'm
May i please say, that i'm turning all of your gear to the one/two star version because the skylark only crashed a few days ago? (somehow or other xD remember how the pro log starts with the crash and the first story is a continuation of the pro log?
Sun, 04/08/2012 - 10:22
#39
^
So all the characters will have 2 star gear now, and by about say 75ish% in they will have the 5 star?
Sun, 04/08/2012 - 10:51
#40
OP Time? OP Time! Kidding. Somewhat... -.-
Name: Zen
Age: 25
Personality: Card carrying member of the Square Enix Brooding Hearts Club, founded and presided over by Cloud Stife. (Dark and Detached)
Equipment: Nightblade, Valiance (Stolen off the corpse of a dead high ranking soldier)
Skills: Advanced sword and gunman ship training, acrobatic skills above average
MINI Biography: Zen was the only surviving engineer that was still aboard the Skylark during it's crash into Cradle. Though he lost significantly more than any other Knight in the crash, the fact that he did not have to make his way across Cradle to Haven has fostered anger in most Knights. His wife, Twilight, was dragged into Cradle, and he has been searching for her since. He makes no discretion between foe and ally, stopping at nothing to find her.
Additional facts: So much dark brooding, generally the stereotypical 'You don't know what I've been through' Angst character, has extreme anger control issues.
OP Handicaps ("Pets"): Shadow (Derived from the fact that this Void Wolver is ALWAYS following him. More of a stalker than a pet really), Sir Truffelton The Third (Not only a abnormal Phantom, Sir Truffelton will, upon sighting Zen, follow him and attempt to kill him with extreme prejudice. Zen's name choice for Sir Truffelton may or may not be a cause of this behavior.)
Allies: None
Suggestions: You've got a great start going, but you do need some more in the way of spelling and grammar checking. Get someone, preferably someone you really trust, to take a look at your story and see if you've made any spelling or grammar errors. It will really help, not only with reading, but with the size of your story too!
Position: Antagonistic Outcast
Tue, 04/10/2012 - 06:41
#41
Name:KorinAge: Not
Name:Korin
Age: Not known.
Personality: Aggresive, protective to his group, Tactical, silent and reserved.
Equipment: A typical GUardian Set(Shield, Horse helm, Almirian like robe). His equips, Bombastic Demo helm/Volcanic Demo Suit, and owns all bombs His main starters are Nitro, Shiv, AoA and owns a Levi. Near the middle , he replaces his Levi with a Glacius. He would change his bombs each run.
Skills: A good guardian and bomber. He can throw bombs like grenades and timed explosives.
MINI (for all you who hate writing long bios (and me wanting not to have to read loads of stuff)) Biography: A 5* Champion who was friends with Izola. They both looked up to arkus. When the crash came, he was one of the first few to get to haven. He then gained every bomb and is hoping to create new bombs via trial and error alchemy.
He was jealous about Izola becoming a HoH representive and lost faith in arkus when he went solo after Alpha squad's dissapearence. He then became more silent after. He still alchemises and multi tasks with his squad....
Additional facts: Would change his bombs each mission/depth(ie. Shiv with Stagger in ice lvs, DBB for nitro in some lvs, ect). Stays out from most arguments.
Pets: none
Allies: none
Suggestions: Put some paragraphs please. It's hard to read.)
Position: Guardian Bomber for rivals squad.
EDIT: Added his rank...
Sun, 04/08/2012 - 12:31
#42
Erm...
First, Atrum,welcome to the rival squad, but your gear will be changed to the lower star versions for now. I put a paragraph line in the only sensible place (seeing as there made to separate things of different subject) for the first chapter.
Second, Zero please think about your person. How will he fit into my story? If you can tell me that, I might let you in, but otherwise you'll have to make another person. sorry, but i can't do anything else. (Advice; make a person for the rival squad, i'm desperate for the squad to be full!)
I will have to put this in the main subject as well, but as we only just crashed it's very rare for anybody to have gear higher than 2-to-3* Only guards on the skylark and other high official people have them on, and they wouldn't be in the field!
Tear. From heaven to hell, tears will always fall.
Sun, 04/08/2012 - 16:47
#43
Ok, well
I'd rather you call tehm Element and Sophie when you're writing, just makes it better, grammar makes everythi8ng better! :P As for the nerfing bit, Sophie will turn out better than Element because Angelic set goes all teh way to 3-5*, heh, and if you're doing that you might want to introduce Echo sometime in the plot.
Mon, 04/09/2012 - 02:48
#44
of course silly!
^ unless there talking, it'll be element and Sophie, but when i'm not story writing for quick typing ele and soph. When i get to IV-Allies i will introduce Ele, Soph and echo a bit later on. (they'll probably meet in when Echo is scavenging (cos he from emberlight if he's against Seerus) in some T2 levels) And stop talking about grammar and spelling! I'm rubbish at it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (i fail at all languages, even my mother/father tongues, French and English. I have problems writing, reading AND even speaking)
Mon, 04/09/2012 - 13:11
#45
What Dark Ritual?
Can i just be an undefined lone wolf :D??
Mon, 04/09/2012 - 13:29
#46
Grrrr
fine. though it'll take time for me to find a way of putting you in.
Tue, 04/10/2012 - 06:40
#47
-_-
What about Arkus?
Feron?
Barrus?
Virgil?
It wouldn't be rare for 5*. I mean, My dude's a Champion. Shouldn't he be 4*, if not, 5?
Wed, 04/11/2012 - 02:05
#48
Live with it or face my blade.Are you going to rob a high ranky?
Do what i say, or get outa here. My story is biased on normal knights, not high ranking officers. Wanna be in my fanfic? Be a normal knight. Want 5* gear? Go somewhere else where they haven't just crashed. High ranking officers are one thing, normal knights another. Get it? Good. Do not complain about it, just live with it. I write pretty quickly, i mean type, when i have a good bias, and whaada you know, i have one so you'll be 5* soon enough. I just need two more full squads. Remember how we ALL started as apprentice or what ever, not any random thing which applies to are gear/amount of play? Well as we've only just crashed, there's not much chance of being a star higher than three. Now off wiv ya.
Wed, 04/11/2012 - 13:35
#49
Character?
Ok I'll try
Name: Reiylris ( Pronunciation: Rayl-ris. Yes I took random letters to make a name :P)
Age: 17
Personality: Silent. Only will talk to those he trusts or knows well, and not much at that. Helps those in dire situations, but would otherwise go his own way.
Equipment: Proto stuff at first (obviously.) Working towards: Wolver Set along with a Snarble Barb and Blaster. Shield will be whatever he can get his hands on.
Skills: Good recon, being silent and quick on his feet. Although not the one to deal large, raw damage, but can wither away at enemies in order to perform a final blow. Like to have fluent, quick, graceful attacks.
MINI Biography: A knight that likes to be alone and focuses on the mission objective. Although primarily recon and such, will play any role necessary and take any path to get to the end. His way of completing missions sometimes are a bit careless and can get himself into trouble, but has come out alive so far. Is best in places such as Gloaming Wildwoods, or any place that has places to hide and etc.
Additional facts: Loves wolvers and has befriended a few of them during travels. Ironically though, will mercilessly kill any enemy that crosses his path.
Pets: Not entirely a pet, but has a very loyal Alpha Wolver that helps him during battles and recon missions etc.
Allies: Some small groups of Wolvers from all over the Clockworks
Suggestions: Good layout so far, can't wait to see the story get going! Hope my character can fit a good part!
Position: Soloer (if thats ok ^^) or will team up with any group/squad that takes him in. Swordsman, and hardly knows how to work a gun besides Proto/Blaster style ones.
Wed, 04/11/2012 - 06:36
#50
-_-
K.
D:
I literally already have a fanfic about the Skylark crashing... D;