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My first fanfic: Spiral knight: project retribution [FINAL BOSS: Type-Ω]+Epilouge[END]

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Wed, 12/04/2013 - 02:59
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Note from the writter.

Hi, Midnight here, your favourite valkyrie troll is here with his god-awful fanfic. The fact is, this is actually not my first fanfic, the one before is even worse (I buried it deep behind my garden so it will never be seen)!

Here are some notes before you start puking at my fanfic:
-English is not my first language and I am bad at language in general (my highest mark is about C - ), so there will be poor vocab and bad grammar in this fanfic.
-Herex is the main baddy in this fanfic, he is a bit like Caleb Goldman from the house of the dead series, a completely insane scientist who wants nothing more than watching the world burn.
-No apps ATM, I don't want to ruin your good character with my inferior writting.
-The story will be written like a movie script with a lot of talking, the characters in this fanfict may sound like as if they all have autism.
-This story will have some really messed up contents, like the rest of my fanfic I made for other games. Things can get a bit gruesome and dark.
-Desna will be the heroin of the story, spoiler ends here.
-This story is as far from original as it can be, so if you see a reference or a quote from your favourite movie or game, it is likely that I have copied from there.

RATED M for mature...

---SPIRAL KNIGHTS: PROJECT RETRIBUTION---

Interval-00: type-042

Location: Depth 23, Herex’s secret lab.

[Deep in the clockwork. Down in the darkest abyss lies a secret lab. Herex, unaware of by his colleagues, has set a plan into motion. He sits in his private room filled with research paperwork. Papers filled with equations and sketch drawings of his ‘master pieces’. He inspects one of the weapon blue prints and grinned. Herex places the paper onto his desk before crossing his hands. He gazes stilly at the entrance door and begins to soliloquy.]

Herex: *in a deep voice* “For too long the Gremlin race had escaped the course of nature, there are now too many of us and not enough to go around. Cradle, as a planet is dying under our abuse. It is my righteous duty to revert the inhabitants of this planet to their original state.”

[Herex presses a red button on the side of the desk drawers. The floor in the centre of the room opened and a large culture tank emerged from the underground. The tank is filled with blue fluid and inside there is a male gremlin. Herex stares at the tank’s content and grinned.]

Herex: *smiles* “Perfection… soon you and your three fellow brethren will be released upon this world, then, they will finally understand my cause. The four horsemen of the apocalypse, the divine salvation of my people is neigh. Nothing can stop me now…”

[Herex’s self-indulgence is interrupted when Desna and her fellow rangers busted through the door of his private room. They draw their weapons and aim at Herex. Herex remains unalarmed, as if this is a part of the plan all along.]

Desna: *sees that Herex is not alarmed* “Herex! I hereby arrest you for the crime of genocide against the people of the Spiral Order!”

Herex: *laughs* “Ha ha ha, Desna, always the feisty one…But Feron really shouldn’t let a mere woman do his biddings.”

Desna: *sees the culture tank with a Gremlin in it* “What is this? Another one of your failed experiment?”

Herex: *winces* “Failed? THAT IS my masterpiece!” *takes out a remote controller, presses down the red button on the controller*

[The blue fluid was withdrawn from the tank, the tank is soon emptied and the test subject inside is awakened. He breaks out of the bulletproof glass of the culture tank and instantly rips one of ranger’s throat out with his bare hands. The two remaining rangers fired at the subject, the bullets punched through his body and the subject flinches and was stunned. Desna catches the opportunity and signals her two teammates to step back and reload. The subject’s wounds are miraculously healed, Herex, seeing that his ‘masterpiece’ is performing well, stands up on his chair and congratulated the subject.]

Herex: *smiles* “Well done, type-042.”

Type-042: *looks at Herex* “What is my instruction?”

Herex: “Simple, liberate the inhabitants of this planet from their false hopes. Their ‘Hope’ is nothing but an illusion and it has driven this planet to the brink of destruction. It is up to you now to liberate them from these, illusions. You know what to do, liberate them from the lies they lived with.”

Type-042: “I will bring freedom to them, even if it kills me…” *walks towards Desna*

Desna: *steps back*“Lies? What lies?”

Type-042: *in a mechanical tone* “The lie of living. Alive, undefined, passing of genes, survival of individuals, irrelevant. Higher causes must be attained.”

Desna: *draws her sword* “And I thought Herex was crazy!”

Herex: “Farewell, Miss Desna. Hope you enjoy this departing gift of mine… type-042, take care of our guests.”

[A shadow materialized behind Herex, the shade manifested into a Gremlin in a black gas mask. He tabs Herex’s shoulder and Herex nodded his head. In a blink of an eye, both Herex and the masked Gremlin vanished. Type-042 refocuses his attention to Desna’s team, one of the Ranger steps in and tries to attack type-042 with his sword. He seizes the ranger’s sword in the mid-air and jabs it into the ranger’s chest, instantly killing him.]

Desna: “What in the hell are you?!”

Type-042: “… I … am Type-042, prototype gene-modified super soldier.”

Ranger: “Captain! We need to get out of here! He is invincible!”

Desna: “I am putting this guy down! I can’t allow this freak roam freely in the clockwork!”

Type-042:*hears the word ‘freely’ * “Freedom, unnecessary, only directives mattered.”

Desna: *laughs* “Hah that is coming from a man who wants to bring freedom to us all! You don’t even know what it is!”

Type-042: *stands still* “… I …”

Ranger: “Captain! What are you doing?”

Desna:*whispers to the ranger* “Remember in that movie? Where the hero killed the genocidal robot by asking it a paradox? I am trying to do the same thing to this guy!”

Type-042: *twitching* “I must obey Herex’s directive, no choice but to follow, no freedom-” *enraged* “ARGHHHH!!!!!!!!”

[Type-042, like an upset child who just lost an argument, charges toward Desna and knocks her to the ground with a massive fan kick. He then breaks the last ranger’s wrist before turning his pistol against him. Type-042 squeezes down the trigger and blows the ranger’s head wide open. Desna recovers from the ground and regains her leviathan blade. She drives it into type-042’s stomach at lightning speed, the attack results in a mass bleeding and type-042 was incapacitated. But even with a blade buried in his stomach, he is still able to talk.]

Type-042: “Must, fight on. Freedom, no freedom, must obey Herex’s order, freedom… un-undefined…” *dies and falls to the ground*

Desna: *frowns* “What would a monster know about freedom?”

[As Desna was about to walk away and retrieve her fallen comrades’ dog tags. She looked back at type-042. The gene altered Gremlin somehow started to breathe, bubbling through his own blood. Desna quickly takes out a tranquilizer dart out of her pocket and sedated Type-042 before he could miraculously come back to live. ‘This guy is no ordinary Gremlin.’ Desna thought to herself.]

More to come... if that is what the community wanted...

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 12:31
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Midnight-Dj
:|

Note: If no one tell me to stop, I will just keep going then....

Interval-01: recovery

Location: laboratory, Haven, town of Spiral Knights

[After the skirmish inside Herex’s hide out, Desna retrieved type-042’s corpse and carried it all the way to the bio-lab for further studies. It is in the same time when Hahn, the head of the Spiral order biological research effort, is scribbling down on his note book. A picture of Desna’s back view, the curves and motion of the hips were spot on. Hahn has always dreamed of dating Desna, but never had the courage to do so.]

Hahn: *scribbling* “Oh Desna, I wish you could just take up my hint sometimes… man, girls are hard to get these days-”
Desna: *enters the lab* “YO!”

Hahn: *quickly hides the notebook into his desk drawer* “Oh! Hi Desna! What brings you here?”*fidgeting*

[Desna drops type-042’s corpse onto the ground. Hahn jolts and yelled. The sword wound on type-042’s stomach is still visible, but is being healed slowly.]

Hahn: *yells*“WHY did you brought a dead Gremlin into the lab?!”

Desna: “It is because of this Gremlin, my entire ranger squad was gone.”

Hahn: “This Gremlin, killed all your teammates?”

Desna: “Yes, with his bare hands…”

Hahn: “Ugh, okay, I need to put him into a restrain tank first. Then I am run some X-ray on this guy. You sure he is not just a Gremlin assassin?”

Desna: *sees that Type-042 is only wearing shorts* “Last time I checked, assassins don’t just wear shorts to a fist fight.”

[Type-042 was put into a restrain tank and was put on leash in case he struggles. Hahn runs X-ray scan throughout his body and the data is displayed onto the computer interface. To Hahn’s surprise, it seems as if there is something, clinging onto type-042’s heart. The shape resembles a parasitic worm.]

Hahn: “There is some kind of foreign organism hanging outside the Gremlin’s heart.”

Desna: “Do you think you can remove it?”

[Suddenly, a small pulse is emitted from the heart beat monitor. It seems like Type-042 is apparently alive. Hahn inserts a microscopic camera into type-042’s chest and the parasite is within Hahn’s view. He inserts a second microscopic wire with a mini-scalpel at the end in an attempt to remove the parasite. But as the scalpel got closer to the parasite, the parasite reacted by biting violently toward type-042’s heart. Type-042 responded with a massive spasm. Hahn quickly withdrawn the scalpel and the parasite returned back to its calm state.]
Desna: “Why did you stop?”

Hahn: “Desna, is this one of Herex’s tinker toy?”

Desna: “Yeah, so?”

Hahn: *rubs the sweat off his head* “I can’t remove that worm from his heart! Every time I try to get close to it, the parasite responds by biting a hole through its host’s heart! In another word, I can’t remove the parasite without killing this guy!”

Desna: “Hmph, this guy said something before I defeated him. He said he must obey Herex’s order. Do you think this parasite that is messing with his head?”

Hahn: “That is unlikely, if this is meant to be a Neuro-parasite, Herex should have injected it into the subject’s brain. That way, Herex will have much more control over his experiments.”

Desna: “So any idea on what this parasite is for?”

Hahn: “This parasite may serve as some kind of… metabolic booster… allows the subject’s heart to ‘overheat’ and perform actions at lightning speed… maybe that is how he beat your entire team with his bare hands… if that worm can inject his heart with the right amount of adrenaline during combat, it can work wonders. ”

Desna: “Then something else must be controlling him… Hahn, run a scan on his head!”

[A microchip is revealed hidden deep beneath the network of neurones in type-042’s brain. The chip has a Crimson order insignia on it, there is no doubt now that it is controlling type-042’s action.]

Desna: “Brain control chipboard?!”

Hahn: “Just like I have suspected, I think I know a way that I can remove it without damaging the Gremlin’s brain!”

[Hahn throws an electromagnetic probe into the restrain tank. The probe identified the chipboard hidden inside type-042’s brain and it shoots out a beam of acute electromagnetic pulse and the chipboard was fried into pieces. And it is in the same time that type-042 awoke from his dormant. He breaks off the leash and jumps out of the restrain tank. At his first glance, he sees Desna with her sword ready and Hahn is hiding behind her.]

Hahn: “What?! I put enough sedatives in the tank to drug him for a whole day!”

Type-042: “WHO ARE YOU?”

Desna: “You don’t remember anything?”

Type-042:*gasps* “I… am… type-042, proto…prototype… gene-altered…”*twitching* “Argh!!!” *realizes that he is in a room with two spiral knights* “Where am I? And who are you?”

Hahn: *tries to be friendly*“Hi, my name is Hahn, I am the head of the biological research of the Spiral order and welcome to my lab!”

Type-042: “I… shouldn’t be here… I was in the colony and then I…” *instantly runs to Hahn and grabs him in the neck* “WHAT WAS MY DERICTIVE?! I NEED A DERICTIVE! No freedom, must OBEY!!!”

Hahn: *struggle* “Ek! DON’T KILL ME!!”

Desna: *shouts at type-042* “Stop! Unhand him, now!”

[Type-042 comes to his senses. Without the chipboard’s control, he slowly catches his breath and released Hahn from the chokehold. Desna sees potential in using type-042 to fight the man who created him.]

Type-042: *looks at Desna, with an emotionless face* “Are you, my commander?”

Desna: *tries to play along* “Yes, Type-042. You are under my command! And I want you to be a good boy. Okay?”

Type-042: *still remain emotionless* “Affirmative…” *releases Hahn*

Hahn: *catches his breathe* “Argh! What just happened?”

Desna: *shrugs* “I hardly know it myself… It seems like I am his master now. Hahn, can you get him some clothes? I can’t just walk around with this half naked Gremlin stalking behind me…”

Hahn: “Clothes? Wait, I got something for this guy.” *flips over a lockbox* “Where is it? Eh… Here it is!”

[Hahn presents a suit made out of tight rubber like fabric. Type-042 made a nice fit to the suit and upon zipping the suit. The collars on suit’s legs and arms are tightened.]

Desna: “So how do you feel?”

Type-042: *strokes the lining of the suit*“Comfortable, yet, restraining…”

Hahn: “This power limiter suit restricts his muscles, with those collars locked down on his limbs, he shouldn’t get into too much trouble!”

Desna: “Thanks Hahn, now then, Type-042, I need to give you a name.”

Type-042: *surprised*“NAME?”

Desna: “Since you just came back from death, I think I am going to call you ‘lifeless’.”

Type-042->Lifeless: “Lifeless, an adjective which describes something as been not alive, directly correlate to my emotionless nature. Amusing…”

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 16:18
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Midnight-Dj
It is just keeps on comming :/

Interval-02: poisonous

Location: Spiral HQ, Haven, town of Spiral knights.

[Desna has taken Type-042, whose name is now ‘Lifeless’, to the Spiral HQ. Kora, who is on night shift filing her nails, Kora wasn’t expecting to see Desna this late in the night. Lifeless, standing emotionlessly beside Desna, stares blankly at Kora. It seems as if Lifeless only respond to Desna’s command.]

Kora: “Desna? What are you doing here? And who is that Gremlin behind you?”

Lifeless: “I am type-042---”

Desna: *interrupts Lifeless* “---Don’t mind him! He is just a volunteer from Ember light…”

Kora: “Okay, your squad have conducted a raid on Herex’s secret lab. Now let’s review the result. Three of your fellow rangers died and Herex got away. From the data you recovered, it seems like Herex is planning on something big, really big.”

Desna: *chuckles* “That is what she said…”

Kora: *rolls her eyes* “Ha ha, very funny… on a more serious note, It seems as if Herex has created the ‘four horsemen of apocalypse’. The four mythical judges of Heaven raining down the divine retribution onto the mortal world…”

Desna: “So, what are you saying?”

Kora: “He has created a four gene altered Gremlins to carry out his plan. And we need to find them and destroy them to ensure that Herex never succeed. I am unsettled by the fact that these data are left behind and not destroyed…”

Desna: “… does that mean Herex’s plan is already in motion?”

Kora: “I have to inform Ozlo and Feron about this... You should have a rest for now…” *suddenly, the radio communicator rings, she picks up the radio* “Hun? Echo two, this is Spiral HQ, what is your status?”

Echo two team leader: *with gun fire in the back ground* “Kora! We need some back up!”

Kora: *responds*“Clam down soldier, what are you attacked by?”

Echo two team leader: *running with heavy footsteps* “We have been cornered by a swarm of noxious, flesh eating mosquitos! They have pushed us away from the exit elevator, we are getting overrun!”

The voice of a Gremlin: *in the back ground* “NOTHING CAN ERASE MY PAIN!”*buzzing sounds of Mosquitos*

Echo two soldier: *firing his gun* “It is him! The Famine! Argh!!!”*sound of mosquito devouring the flesh*

Echo two team leader: “Oh crap!” *sound of his gun been emptied* “Oh, no, argh!!! HELP!! ARGH!!!” *signal is cut off*

Kora: *shudders* “ECHO TWO! Do you copy? Desna! You have to go investigate! Those mosquitos must be another one of Herex’s experiments!”

Desna: “You kidding me? I just lost three of my fellow teammates and now-” *looks at Lifeless* “-you know what, never mind, me and this volunteer will go check it out. Just send some reinforcement afterward, okay?” *aside* “It is time to see what this ‘super soldier’ can do!”

Kora: *salutes* “Good luck Desna, you will need it.”

[Desna opens her locker and takes out a handful of incendiary grenades, along with a machine gun carried on her belt. Lifeless was standing still besides her the whole time, doesn’t even make the slightest of noises. Desna inspected Lifeless further, he is a very tall Gremlin with a body fit for a champion boxer, the muscle linings is completely visible outside his limiter suit, he had a pair of tea green eyes, armed with a merciless glare. Desna, still finding it too quiet, decided to turn around and ask her living dead companion some questions.]

Desna: *takes out additional ammunition and wraps it around her shoulder* “Hey, Lifeless, did you know, for a Gremlin, you are quite handsome! In my standard that is. Think you can get a girlfriend? Not with that kind of attitude.”

Lifeless: *slows turns his head toward Desna* “…why have a love relation knowing that the one you love is bound to die or leave you?”

Desna: *sneers* “Well, you can enjoy the moment!”

Lifeless: “… moment, unneeded, only something that lasts for eternity matters.”

Desna: *tries to argue* “Hey, no one lives forever. You will be forgotten eventually… so why not live-”

Lifeless: *slightly heightened his voice* “--I am WAR, war shall always be remembered by those who survived its horror. Those who survived my wrath will fear me and remember me. I am Type-042, the embodiment of war itself, I am dynamic and merciless. Just like war itself.”

Desna: *frowns* “What are you talking about?”

Lifeless: “I am one of the four horsemen of the apocalypse. Famine, death, conquest and then there was I, the fourth member of the horsemen.”
Desna: *gasp* “… so you know who you are? Yet you still followed my command?”

Lifeless: “My life is meaningless without a purpose, no directive, no reason to exist, by serving you, I find purpose in life.”

Desna: *tabs Lifeless’ s shoulder* “Fine, enough bull crap, let’s go kill your friend down there, what was his name again?”

Lifeless: “…”

Desna: “I guess we just have to dig down the bunny hole on this one.”

[Desna and Lifeless descend down the elevator to the depth where the last transmission from Echo two is received. The level they ended upon is a ruined city, it was destroyed after Tinkinzar called in a nuclear strike on the city when it is infected by a deadly virus years ago. The elevator opened and a miasma of poisonous fallout flooded in. Desna instinctively puts on a gas mask, she turns around and looks at Lifeless and he isn’t affected by the miasma at all. He takes in a mild breath and walks out of the elevator as if nothing happened.]

Desna: *sweats* “Geez, this guy…” *follows Lifeless*

Lifeless: *hears the buzzing sound in the air* “Be ready, a swarm is coming… the ‘famine’ is here.”

[Lifeless stands in the open while Desna hides herself near a pile of debris. She was shocked by what she witnessed, a swarm of flesh eating mosquitos scoured the land. Four dead knights are on the ground, who are likely to be that of the Echo two. Their flesh are being slowly eaten away by the mosquitos and their larvae. But what makes Desna want to vomit out of her gas mask the most, is an anorexic Gremlin floating in the sky. She can see every ribs beneath his skin and the abdomen is being eaten away by the mosquitos. But strangely enough, the Gremlin is still alive and he is actually supported by a swarm of flying mosquitos. The mosquitos that just finished their meal started to return to the Gremlin, they regurgitated the food into the Gremlin’s mouth, most likely keeping him alive. And gave the rest to the larvae that are still crawling inside the gaping hole of their host’s abdomen.]

Desna: *gasp* “Is that, the ‘Famine’?”

Lifeless: *recognises the anorexic Gremlin floating in the sky*“He is Type-792. Genetically engineered to act as a queen ‘Night fright’ mosquito. ‘Night fright’ mosquitos have developed a hive system within their population, segregated into classes of warriors, workers as well as a single queen mosquito that rules them all. Herex genetically altered Type-792’s body to emit a special type of pheromone, only secreted by that of a queen. These mosquitos are technically, his loyal subjects…”

Desna: “WHAT? That sounds so freaking freaky!”

Lifeless:*looks back at Desna* “After seeing my regeneration ability, you still think this is freaky? And also, should I eliminate the threat?”

Desna: *shrugs*“I don’t know… make your own decision!”

[Type-792 spotted Lifeless and Desna, he grinned and turned his mouth wide open, a mosquito is shot out of his mouth at lightning speed. It penetrates Lifeless’s body and buried itself deep beneath the ground. Lifeless flinches and quickly regenerated his wound.]

Type-792: *sees that lifeless regenerated his wound* “Type-042? Is that YOU?”

Lifeless: *shook his head* “My name, is no longer Type-042, I am lifeless, the loyal servant of Desna…”

Desna: *sneers* “Servant? When?”

Type-792: “DESNA? NO! You are under HEREX’s command, our creator!!!”

Lifeless: “… Desna, what is my instruction?”

Desna: *shrugs*“Well, don’t just stand there, do something!”

Lifeless: “Understood…”

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 16:25
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Midnight-Dj
:|

Is anyone even reading this?

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 16:45
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:3

The English is completely understandable, although the vocabulary certainly isn't as varying as other writers I've seen.

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 16:52
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Midnight-Dj
@Playerman

I will try my best to improve.

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 16:55
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Playerman
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It's not like you're making it hard to read with what you have right now, I was just commenting. :3

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 20:21
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Midnight-Dj
First BOSS BATTLE! Type-792

Interval-03: darkest day

Location: depth 17, ruins of an old Gremlin colony

[Lifeless jumps onto a wreckage of a vehicle and dashes into the mid-air in an attempt to grab Type-792 by the throat. A swarm of mosquitos appears at Lifeless’s flank and flounders him to the ground. Lifeless recovers and quickly runs up onto the wall of a nearby building, he boosts his jump from the wall and once again lunges himself onto type-792. He grabs onto type-792’s legs and reaches into the hole of his abdomen. Type-792 screams and instantly ordered a swarm of mosquitos to sting lifeless off from him. Desna intervenes by firing at type-792’s lower abdomen with her machine gun, type-792 shields the bullets with a wall of mosquitos. The bullets bounced off along with a handful of dead mosquitos.]

Type-792:*frustrated* “WHY, WHY can’t you ERASE MY PAIN?! The pain… they are eating me, consuming me…”

Lifeless: “There are too many mosquitos… we need to come up with another way to destroy his swarm…”

Type-792: *laughs like a madman* “HAHAHAHAHAHA!!!” *gasps* “AHAHAHA!!! These mosquitos are just some of my abilities…”

[The mosquito larvae on the dead bodies of Echo two started to crawl into the brain of the corpses. The dead bodies begin to come back to life, the dead knights started to limp slowly towards Desna and Lifeless. Lifeless rushes to one of the reanimated knights and punches it in the chest, two powerful jabs followed by the sound of cracking bones, but the living corpse is not affected by a few broken bones. It tries to bite Lifeless but Lifeless instinctively grabs its head and twists it. The pristine sound of a cracked spine and the dead body falls to the ground for the second time.]

Type-792: “MORE! FEEL THEIR PAIN, FEEL MY PAIN!!! PAIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNNNN!!!”

[More reanimated corpses started to flood into the street, all of them died during the nuclear strike. Type-792 commands his army of zombies and corners the duo. Desna emptied one clip of her machine gun and had little effect.]

Lifeless: “Desna, shoot their head… it is their weakness…”

Desna: *shoots one of the undead in the head, the zombie’s head bursts and falls to the ground* “How did you know that?”

Lifeless: “Adaptation, a soldier needs to figure out flaws of his opponent before the opponent figure out his…”

Desna: “Adaptation huh?” *takes out an incendiary grenade* “Let’s see how they adapt to this!” *pulls the pin and tosses it at the horde*

[The incendiary grenade detonates above the horde of living dead and it burns a path through the wall of zombies. Desna and Lifeless catch the opportunity and dash past type-792 and his mosquito minions. As they ran further into the ruined city, Lifeless spotted a gas station, with intact gasoline canisters littered outside.]

Type-792: “Eat their flesh! Devour their GUTS! Let them know our PAIN!!!”

The corpses: *whisper* “To die is to live, to live is to die…”

Lifeless: “Desna, hold the advance, I have to prepare a trap…”

Desna: *passes her pistol to Lifeless* “Fine, just make it quick! And if I got surrounded by those damned zombies! Shoot me with this gun! I don’t wanna get eaten alive!”

Lifeless: *accepts the pistol* “… this is unlike of you… don’t you always cling on to hope and life?”

Desna: *sees that the horde is getting closer* “Against an opponent like him? I don’t think I stand any chances… Haven’t got any news from Kora, reinforcement doesn’t seem to be coming any time soon… it is just you and me now…”

[Lifeless picks up some of the gasoline tanks and pours their content onto the ground. The road is soon covered in slippery greases, the zombies started to trip over the oil and begins to crawl. Desna seizes the opportunity and landed a few quick shots onto the horde, all aimed to the head, killing many.]

Lifeless: “wait here… I am going to ambush him from the top of the office building… you try to get his attention… once he is above the oil slicks, you should toss another incendiary grenade into the slick, killing as many undead as possible…”

Desna: “Hey, since when are you making all the decisions?!”

Lifeless: “You told me to make my own…”

Desna: “Fine, I hope you know what you are doing, Gremlin boy!”

[Type-792 hovers above the air between two tall office buildings. Unhappy with how the battle turned out, he decided to attack Desna directly with his mosquitos. The warrior mosquitos charged at Desna at lightning speed and one of them managed to bury itself into Desna’s arm. The warrior mosquitos died while leaving Desna with a wounded shoulder.]

Desna: *covers her wounded shoulder* “Damn!”

Type-792: *smiles* “Can you feel it? The passing of their lives? These mosquitos served me! And they did not question their loyalty until their death! So many died, sacrificed themselves for a meaningless goal. What are you fighting for Desna?”

Desna: “Protecting the weak of course! That is what a knight does!”

Type-792: “Then ask yourself this! Who saves the weak, from the woman who saves the weak?”

Desna: “Hun?”

Type-792: “Does killing me really do anything in the bigger picture? I am dying, slowly and painfully. These mosquitos have been eating me for a long time, and they kept me alive as their queen… I am the weak here…”

Desna: “You are not weak! You are freaking Insane!”

[Type-792 is enraged, he commanded the entire swarm towards Desna, all of them flying above the gasoline slick. Desna caught the opportunity and tosses an incendiary grenade into the slick, the mosquito swarm is instantly set ablaze and the entirety of type-792’s minions is gone. The flame soon dies down, but more mosquitos start to arrive from across the city to reinforce type-792.]

Type-792: *yells* “Like I said! NOTHING CAN EARASE MY PAIN!”

Lifeless: *emerges from the roof top of a building* “I will now erase your pain…”

[Lifeless dives onto type-792 and plunges him to the ground. He reaches into the hole of the abdomen and rips out a strange organ. A gland that was responsible for the production of the queen mosquito pheromone. The reinforcing mosquitos quickly dispersed as the gland was popped by Lifeless with his bare hand. Type-792 is now on the ground, gasping for breath, his body is so weak to point that he can never stand up again.]

Type-792: *coughs* “Type-042, you, beat ME…”*coughs*

Lifeless: “Call me ‘Lifeless’…”

Type-792:*laughs* “Type-042, Lifeless, they are all the same, the victim of Herex!”

Lifeless: “Why did you attack the knights? Did Herex give you the order?”

Type-792: “I was sent here, to gather bio mass for the second coming… of…”

Desna: *cuts into the conversation* “Whose second coming?!”

Type-792: “I have already said… too much… erase me of my pain… Herex had taken so much away from me… kill him… stop project… ‘Retribution’…”

Desna: “…I think your friend wants you to finish him off…”

Lifeless: *takes out the pistol Desna gave him earlier* “What is your real name? Type-792?”

Type-792: *looks at Lifeless and laughed* “…People like I will never have names…Either will you, this world thrown us away like garbage. At least Herex gave me a means to live, even though I want him dead… my real name… is Onix… please, remember me…” *a bitter smile on his face*

[Lifeless did not hesitate, he squeezes down the trigger and put one round into Onix’s head. He died in a clean manner, just like any other corpse on the ground. The mosquitos that are still lingering about the place started to amass on his body, slowly eating him away, as Desna and Lifeless are about to leave the place, Onix’s body has already disappeared, not a single bone was left, only some blood splatter on the ground… Lifeless can hear a faint whisper in the air… ‘Thank you…’]

Note: I feel like taking a break for now, enjoy the first boss battle and try to read this if you are waiting for other fanfics to update. If you happen to see this message, thank you for reading :3

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 21:05
#8
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Feline-Grenadier
Hm...

Like the script-style it's written in, but do review your first chapters to improve the way characters talk. I'm seeing the lack of abbreviations, which makes dialogue sound a little less...smooth. Well, unless the vernacular of the characters does call for their style to disregard abbreviations ((like Mawashimono's fanfict. The epic-like way it's written can allow for the disregard of abbreviations)).

Even then, since you're warmed up now, polishing your earlier chapters might be good for taking a break.

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 21:05
#9
Skayeth's picture
Skayeth
Wait

If you aren't English, where did you come from?

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 21:34
#10
Midnight-Dj's picture
Midnight-Dj
@Vinny

Are you talking about Lifeless's speech pattern? It is just a part of his personality, he talks in a very mechanical manner, a bit like Abathur from Starcraft2: Heart of the swarm campain, where he skips verbs and only say the nouns, all for the sake of efficiency.

If you are talking about the other guys, yes, I may need to improve on those aspects.

@Annilaton

Some secrets are meant to be kept, my nationality will be kept in secret for now, hellscream-forum knows my exact nationality so ask him.

Wed, 12/04/2013 - 21:41
#11
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Skayeth
Wait

I think I know your nationality, or a general idea. Are you either from Asia, or South America? (I promise I won't judge you. My nationality sucks too, compared with the outside world.)

Fri, 12/06/2013 - 04:52
#12
Midnight-Dj's picture
Midnight-Dj
The abomination continues.

Note: You can think of this chapter as a filler, where Desna and her mutant Gremlin friend, Lifeless, will have a nice little chat. Nothing major happened so you can skip this if you want.

Interval-04: silent night

Location: Haven, town of Spiral knights

[Desna tries her best to describe what happened to Kora, but no matter how hard she tried, Kora couldn’t believe what she just heard. It was outrageous what came out of her mouth, thought Kora, Mosquito whisperers, reanimated corpses, maggots that can crawl into people’s brain and take control of their body? Is she crazy?]

Kora: *rubs her sweat* “Desna, I think you did well today, you avenged the death of Echo two by killing their assailants. The fallout in that ruined city must have messed up your head. Go have a rest now, you deserve it!”

Desna: “You gotta believe me! Look! Here is the wound left by one of his mosquitos!” *shows Kora the wound on her shoulder* “You see?!”

Kora: *looks at the wound and shrugs* “Desna, that is just what the ‘night fright’ mosquitos do when you got too close to their hive, you must have stumbled upon one and all they did was self-defence. A gene altered Gremlin soldier that can control mosquitos? Don’t be crazy! Herex will never have technologies like that! His experiments must be elsewhere!”

Desna:*sighs* “Forget it… I going back to my home now, but stay on alert okay? I think Herex is really planning on something big, really big…”

Kora: *smirks* “And that is what ‘she’ said…”

Desna: *shook her head* “Signing off… see you…” *she sees lifeless waiting outside the HQ* “Come, we should both have a rest.”

[Desna arrives at her apartment and she is relieved when she opens the door, the day has been exhausting and she buries herself into the bed as soon as she takes off her boot. Our heroine quickly fell to sleep with her armour on. Lifeless locks up the apartment door and wonders across the Desna’s bed room, he sees photos of she and her fellow teammates, a wall of medals and decorations she got from the services. The memories, he thought, Desna has so many of them yet my own past was wiped clean by Herex, not a single trace is left behind.]

Lifeless:*quietly* “Desna…”

Desna: *snores* “ZZZzz… oh yeah… more…”

Lifeless: *flusters* “…”

Desna: *snores* “ZZzzZZZ… Luminite peperoni… more…” *licks her own lips*

[Lifeless sits onto a chair besides a small round table in the kitchen, the table is most likely the place where Desna have her breakfast, lunch and dinner. Lifeless takes a massive raw steak out of the fridge and starts consuming it. Desna is eventually awakened by the sound of Lifeless munching on the steak.]

Desna: *rubs her eyes* “Lifeless… what are you doing?”

Lifeless: *eating the raw steak* “Must… replenish, energy…”

Desna: “But it is a raw steak! Put it in the Oven first!”

Lifeless: “I am fine with it…” *continues eating*

Desna: *changes the topic* “Suit yourself, so, yeah… Lifeless, do you like your new name?”

Lifeless: “That name is meaningless… only when a person has attained a certain level in his society would his name be truly mattered. The name ‘Desna’ must have meant a lot to your fellow comrades… they trusted you, they loved you… and now they are dead, because of me …” *sobers*

Desna: *sighs* “Look, what is done is done, you have already defeated type-792 to make up for it… Herex made you attack my teammates, it is his fault not yours…”

Lifeless: “I would have killed them if they were a threat to me… with or without Herex’s command…” *finishes the steak* “You freed me from his control, I appreciated that.” *a faint smile on his face*

Desna: *crosses her arms* “So is this a debt thing? You follow my command because you think you owe me?”

Lifeless: “No, I need a directive, like a parasite needs its host to stay alive. I need an order, I accomplish the order and I feel complete… it is a soldier’s duty to obey orders, requests and directives…”

Desna: “So, helping Herex destroying this planet will also give you a sense of completeness too?”

Lifeless: “No… Herex never wanted this planet to be destroyed…”

Desna: “What? Then what does he want?”

Lifeless: “While he was conducting experiments on me… he said something about his plan, the divine justice that will be brought out by the four horsemen. The ‘justice’ that will convert, according to him, everyone on this plane to their natural state. Tinkinzar and the Spiral order have lumbered, mined and deconstructed many levels of the cradle inners, Herex fears that the planet will collapse due to their ‘greed’, so he created us, who shall bring an end to Tinkinzar as well as the Spiral order…”

Desna: “Any idea on how he would do that?”

Lifeless: “From the evidences I gathered form my memories… It is inconclusive of what Herex is up to… I am only a piece of the puzzle of Herex's Project 'retribution'.”

Desna: “can you tell me a bit more about your life? Who were you?”

Lifeless: “I can’t remember, only small fragments are left behind… but I can see… spot lights, crowd cheering and bell rings…”

Desna: “You sounded like a boxer or a martial artist to me, the way you take down enemies with your hands like that…”

Lifeless: “Perhaps, but memories can be deceiving, just because there are fragments doesn’t mean that they are real, all this could just be Herex’s way of teaching me the CQC techniques while I was in the culture tank…”

Desna: “Hmph, that is that, I going to sleep now…” *takes off her shoulder and breast plate* “wanna join me?” *winks*

Lifeless:*leaves the table* “I will sleep somewhere else, it is not your concern…” *opens the door of Desna’s apartment* “I will be gathering more intelligences of the where-about of the two remaining ‘horsemen’. You should recuperate now… I will meet up with you in the morning.” *closes the door*

Desna: “Lifeless! Wait-” *frowns* “Damn, I hope he doesn’t get into troubles out there…” *returns back to bed*

Lifeless: *reopens the door* “By the way, are you really this desperate that you wanted to copulate with a male from another race? Isn’t that considered immoral in your people’s custom?”

Desna: *blushes* “…” *pretends that she has already fell to sleep* “ZZZzzzZZZ…”

Lifeless: “It is okay, I know you were only trying to bring out the good side of me. But despite all your achievements, you are still capable of such a depravity, is this why no male of your race ever looked up to you?”

Desna: “…They are just afraid of me that is all…”

Lifeless: “I see… you shouldn’t be ashamed by your masculinity… have faith in yourself… and you find the one you loved eventually…” *closes the door and disappears into the night*

Sun, 12/08/2013 - 02:29
#13
Midnight-Dj's picture
Midnight-Dj
This travesty just won't end.

Interval-05: White shadow

Location: Haven, town of Spiral knights

[The eight o’clock sunshine reflects off Desna’s cheek, she slowly rises from her bed and lets out a long yawn. It has been too long that she had a nice sleep like that, no nightmares of the dying of her old teammates, just a nice dream of her standing at the end of a dock, feeling the ocean breezes across her skin. She quickly washed her mouth and had an energy bar for breakfast. She performs the usual daily routine, reporting to the Spiral HQ, but strangely, the place is fenced off. No one is allowed to enter.]

Desna: *walks up to Kora, who is also waiting anxiously outside the HQ* “Kora, what happened?”

Kora: *sighs* “Don’t know, two vanguards who were on the night shift committed suicide. The two had a clean mental profile, so I have no idea what made them do it…”

[Feron and a few other forensic knights arrived at the scene. They are fully equipped for a crime scene investigation. Desna crosses her fingers, hoping that Lifeless is not responsible for the death of the two knights.]

Feron: *salutes at Desna and Kora* “Morning, Lieutenant Desna. Morning, Com-master Kora. What is our situation here?”

Kora: “We have two confirmed suicide inside the HQ, both vanguards took their own life with their handguns, it happened somewhere around 3:00 am ~ 3:40 am…”

Feron and Desna: “Suicide? Are you sure?”

Kora: “Yes, I have the CCTV tape here…” *hands Feron the surveillance tape* “see it for yourself…”

[Desna, Kora and Feron sat down in the dark room and played the surveillance tape while the two forensic knights are outside, scrapping the brain matters of the corpses off the ground. At the start of the rewind, the two vanguards were sitting perfectly in their office chairs, drinking coffees and filling out some paper works. Few minutes had passed, the two vanguards suddenly became alarmed. They drew their handguns and tried to investigate the noise behind the door to another room, they opened the door and secured the place. All seemed to be normal…]

Kora: “Hmm… let’s skip this…” *presses the remote for fast forward*

[Suddenly, the face of a Gremlin appeared on the screen for only a brief second before disappearing. Kora jolts off from her chair and falls to the ground.]

Kora: *trembles* “D-Did you SEE THAT?! That FACE!” *shivers*

Feron: *with a chill down his spine* “Let’s pause… right there!” *presses the pause button*

[The video stopped at the exact moment when the twisted face appeared. The face of a Gremlin, the fur on his face is bleached and his eyes are crimson red. He is also wearing a scary gas mask that has three tubes coming out of the front. Feron looks back at Desna, Desna did not even flinch.]

Feron: *curious* “You are not scared by all this?”

Desna: *smirks*“After what I saw yesterday, this is nothing… we should keep watching the video.”

Feron: *breathes out* “Okay, let’s finish this…” *presses the play button*

[The two vanguards stopped, they stared blankly at the CCTV before drawing their own handgun against their own head. They mumbled something, Kora caught the lips and tried to pronounce what they were saying.]

Kora: *squints her eyes and paid close attention to the vanguard’s lips* “Death…Is…Coming… huh?”

[The two vanguards blew their heads wide open right before the CCTV, they fell to the ground and the blood soon covered the entire floor. After a while, a shadow materialized above their corpses. It was the same masked Gremlin as the one who appeared on the CCTV before. The Gremlin stared into the CCTV and frowned, he vanished without a trace, leaving only statics on the screen.]

Feron: *confused* “I don’t understand…’death is coming’… group suicide, I didn’t even see the slightest of regrets in those vanguards’ eyes. And who was that Gremlin? One of the Crimson order?”

Kora: “If he is he should have an insignia on him! But this guy is wearing full black! He, must be, my sweet Haven. Desna, were the stuff you told me last night… true?”

Desna: *winces* “Yes, I would never lie to you, you know that.”

Kora: “what happened to that Gremlin volunteer who was with you yesterday? Is he still around?”

Desna: “He probably have already returned back to-”

Lifeless: *appears out of nowhere* “-Sorry to keep you waiting, Desna…”

Feron: *alarmed* “What the, how did he get in here?”

Lifeless: “…I have decoded the security pass and evaded the security guards. It is simple, only fair amount of patience is required to bypass the surveillances.”

Desna: *chuckles* “Hey, he is a stealthy guy, what can I say…” *sweats*

Lifeless: “I have discovered the location of the third horseman, the ‘Death’. He is inside an abandoned compound near the great colony of Gremlins. Tinkinzar seems to be not taking notice of the facility so the infiltration would be easy.”

Feron: *raises his eyebrows* “Oh, thank you, Mister…”

Lifeless: “You need not to know my name, Mister Feron, I am here only to serve under Desna, and nothing more… the location of the facility is at depth 26, northwest of a Gremlin owned electric dam.”

Desna: *drags Lifeless to the corner of the room* “Hey, stop that!”

Lifeless: “I wish only to serve…”

Desna: “Didn’t I tell you to make your own decision?!”

Lifeless: “I have already made up my mind, I shall serve you…”

Feron: “Are you two having a little heart to heart over there?”

Desna: “Yes, and we decided that we will infiltrate this facility alone!”

Feron: “You can’t be serious! I will send another team down there, you should stay in Haven for now, regroup with your fellow rangers.”

[Desna avoids further argument and leaves the HQ, she fears that Lifeless’s cover is blown and she is certainly eager to hunt down this new ‘horseman’ by the name of ‘Death’. Two vanguards had already fell to his victim and more lives may be on the line if she doesn’t do something about it. But before she could get ready for the infiltration, Kora ringed her.]

Kora: “That Gremlin… he isn’t a ‘volunteer’ is he?”

Desna: “No, he is type-042, one of Herex’s experiment… according to him, he is one of the four horsemen, the embodiment of war.”

Kora: “What are you going to do with him after the remaining horsemen are defeated? Are you going to kill him as well? According to Herex’s file, he is agile, remorseless and has the heart of a lion. If he fell in to the wrong hand…”

Desna: “…I will handle him when this is over… You can count on it…”*closes the Com-link*

Lifeless:*sees Desna is talking on the Com-link* “We have precious time, I suggest we move out, now. I am sensing that the final phase of project retribution is near, these suicides are only the beginning.”

Desna: “Ok… Lifeless, what does Herex meant by ‘returning to our natural state?’ Is he planning on turning us into cavemen?”

Lifeless: “He promised me a peaceful life, where the wind blows and the leafs fall… and justice shall return to cradle once more, it will no longer be ruled by a certain individual, but by the hands of the people…”

Desna: “Sounds like a bunch of anarchistic crap. Where would the world be without rules and boarders?”

Lifeless: “But who are you or anyone on this planet to decide the fate of others? The rangers that perished in your team, were their deaths their personal choice, or because you pushed them to their doom?”

Desna: *didn’t know what to say* “I… They…” *sighs*

Lifeless: “It is unlikely that a single correct answer exists…Is this your first time losing an argument to a man?”

Desna: “… If you were expecting a ‘yes’, then yes, I lost.”

Lifeless: “Good, we can get on now…”

Note: plz, make some comment if you are not sure where the story is getting at. I tried to keep the story as linear as possible so you won't get confused. But still, ask me any question if you are not sure what is going on.

Sun, 12/08/2013 - 14:52
#14
Midnight-Dj's picture
Midnight-Dj
:|

I hope people are actually reading this, or is my labour really that fruitless?

If not, here is some thing that I wanna share with my audience(s).

If you managed to read all the story so far, you should see by now that there is a trend to the story line, progression->boss battle->character development->boss battle. You will be seeing this trend alot...

Sun, 12/08/2013 - 19:41
#15
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Ultimaknightz
le critique

Interesting.

I think with only dialogue this would not really paint a picture of the scene in the audience's mind. Although your script style of writing is not necessarily bad, there's a BIG difference between:

(1) Slowly brushing his right hand forwards throughout his cerulean hair that coruscated in the glister of soft sunlight emanating from the emblazoned window, Nathan focused his unique sanguine iris as a piercing glare towards Jason anterior to gently confabulating with a humble, yet arrogant voice. "You make me sick."

AND

(2) [Nathan brushes his hand through his hair, and glares at Jason]
Nathan: You make me sick.

~~~

The point is that if you wrote like (1), then you would be able to have more chances to add more descriptions to enhance the overall feel of your story. (2) is more like a script, which would be awesome if you only wanted to focus on dialogue. But seeing as you want some boss battles, you should use (1), because it becomes a lot easier to describe fight scenes.

Your fanfiction is quite cool so far, though. :)

Sun, 12/08/2013 - 20:03
#16
Midnight-Dj's picture
Midnight-Dj
@Ultimaknightz

:| Damn, there are atleast five words in (1) that I do not understand... very nice writting, ok, now I am going to make the next chapter, stay tunned for more.

Mon, 12/09/2013 - 19:16
#17
Midnight-Dj's picture
Midnight-Dj
Will this ever end?

Interval-06: penumbra

Location: Depth 26, an abandoned Gremlin science facility

[A pair of glasses shimmered in the darkness, it was Herex’s and he has turned the old facility into his own personal lab. Thick rubber tubes deliver nutrients straight into a colossal glass tank in the big opening of the facility, it is three times as big as the one that housed Type-042 (aka. Lifeless). The Masked Gremlin materializes beside him and Herex raises his eyebrow, it seems like his creation has returned with some good news.]

Herex: “Type-013, did the Spiral knights get their message? The retaliation of the death of Type-792?”

Type-013: “Yes, I have killed two of their high ranking vanguards and left them with the video tape. Now the world will fear us.”

Herex: “Of course they will fear us, your codename is the ‘death’ after all. Nothing escapes death!” *grins* “Just need some few more moment before Type-991 the ‘Conquest’ is complete! The strongest out of the four of you!”

Type-013: “I await his birth…” *senses a disturbance in the air* “Doctor Herex, it seems we have company… should I take care of them?”

Herex: *smiles* “Do your worst…”

[The squad Feron dispatched has arrived on time, their progress however, is hindered by a large steel gate. Seeing that there is no other way into the abandoned facility, the team decides to use wielding tools to break down the door. Meanwhile, Lifeless and Desna observed the squad from the distance with a binocular. The water streaming out of the electric dam nearby creates a soothing sound in the air, the water flows, leafs are parachuting into the water… everything is as it should be.]

Desna: “Hmm, all seems to be fine… you sure this is where the ’death’ is hiding?”

Lifeless: “The ‘death’ has a gas mask with three tubes on it, bleached hair and crimson coloured eyes… the exact same Gremlin that attacked the Spiral HQ…”

Desna: “So he is responsible? But how did he made the Vanguards suicide? Telepathy?”

Lifeless: “… from the limited intelligence gathered, the ‘death’ is the only Gremlin that survived through the unknown passage… unknown passage is a sealed section of deep beneath the Cradle, where shadows manifests into entities and attack whoever came near… a Gremlin expedition team was dispatched years ago to explore that part of the cradle, but sadly, they all died at the hands of the endless void… but one made it through…”

Desna: *gasps* “And he is, the ‘death’? But how did he survive? I have seen the toughest guardian fallen under the blows of those monstrosities!”

Lifeless: “Somehow, some way, he made it through… he was the only one who survived in his entire expedition team… he was soon sent to the hospital Herex owned after he returned back to the colony… no one saw him ever since… until now…”
Desna: “So he got attacked by the void and survived?”

Lifeless: “The shadow infused with his body, he now shifts between reality and nothingness… he might be the toughest opponent we have ever faced…” *tightens his face*

Desna: “Is that fear I smell in the air?” *smiles* “Maybe we have more in common than I thought…”

Lifeless: “I do not know of his weakness… even if I did figure it out, it would be impossible to exploit…”

Desna: “We will find it out, together…” *looks into her binocular* “Hmm, the squad has opened the gate! I am going in after them!” *runs towards the facility*

Lifeless: “I will stay in the shadow…”*follows Desna*

[The Charlie team disappeared into the shadow of the abandoned facility, Desna slowly stalks them, changing from cover to cover, while Lifeless ventured his way across the gas pipes on the ceiling. The team is not aware of their presence, the place is awfully dark, and Desna equips herself with a night vision goggle. Suddenly, with the help of infra-red, she spots a shadow running across the wall, it was so fast that Charlie team was complete unaware of it. Desna quickly moves out of her cover and runs towards Charlie team.]

Lifeless: *alarmed*“!”

Desna: *shouts at the Charlie team* “It is an ambush! Spread out!”

Type-013: *chuckles* “Too late…” *materializes behind one of the knight from the Charlie team*

[Type-013 instantly breaks the neck of the Charlie team leader before disappearing into the shadow. The three remaining member of the team fired at all directions, completely ignoring Desna’s existence, they were frightened by the death of their leader and Desna is forced to take cover before she is caught in the line of fire. Suddenly, the shooting came to a halt and the entire facility is light up, Desna emerges from her cover only to realize that the three remaining member of the Charlie team are standing emotionlessly in the middle of the room, pointing their guns to their own heads.]

Desna: *shocked* “Hey! What are you three doing?!”

Charlie team soldier A: “Death…”

Charlie team soldier B: “Is…”

Charlie team soldier C: “Coming…”

[One by one, they pulled their handgun’s trigger against their own head. Their bodies fall down like dominos, above their corpses, the masked Gremlin reappeared. He hovers in the sky without any supports. His crimson eyes glare into Desna. Desna draws her sword and prepared to defend herself. Lifeless, overseeing the situation from the pipes above, jumps down to reinforce her. Type-013’s face is wrinkled badly, he must be a battle tested veteran, Lifeless thought to himself.]

Lifeless: “Don’t look him in the eyes… his eyes are influencing the knight’s action…”

Desna: *quickly look away* “How do you expect me to fight him if I can’t look at him in the face?!”

Type-013: *chuckles* “Good observation as always, type-042, Herex was right, you DO have the instinct of a perfect soldier. Obeying your superior’s order as if your life depends on it… even when that superior is a Spiral knight…”

Lifeless: “The identity of my superior is irrelevant, only directive matters…”

Type-013: “Let’s see how loyal you are to her when this is over!” *eyes glowing bright red*

[Type-013 made a brief eye contact with Lifeless. Lifeless tries to blink away but when he reopened his eyes. He realizes that it was too late, he is transported to another place, a savannah desert with a boxing ring set up in the middle of nowhere. In the thin air, he can hear the sound of a Gremlin crowd cheering a name, ‘Lifeless! Lifeless! Lifeless!’]

A voice in the air: “Introducing, inter-colony medium weight champion, twice defended his title! He is the man without a life, his name is, LIFELESS!!”

The crowd: “YEAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!”

Lifeless: “…?”

[A shadow manifests besides Lifeless, Lifeless dashes away from the shadow only to realize that the shadow is a copy of himself, wearing a boxing gloves and a pair of red shorts and boots, on the shadow’s waist hangs a golden belt, this is all too familiar. Lifeless tries to remember but he can’t. The shadow takes off his belt before walking into the ring, he stands in a boxing position and raises his fists right below his chin.]

Lifeless’s shadow: “Who wants a piece of the champ?”

The voice in the air: “And our challenger! Weight 120 Kg, from the eastern colony! Rezon!!!”

The crowd: “BOOOOOOO!!!”

[Another shadow appears next to Lifeless, it is probably Rezon, a giant who is almost twice the size of himself. Rezon, a burly Gremlin with a pair of elongated canine, walks up to the ring and glares at Lifeless’s shadow.]

Rezon: *laughs* “I will destroy you and claim the title all for myself!”

Lifeless’s shadow: “You think you can beat me? After you failed once?” *hears the bell ring* “Ha, I win this one!”

Rezon: *grinds his teeth*“You will regret this, little man!”

[Lifeless stood and watched as Rezon and his former self battle each other for three rounds of boxing, many time has Lifeless been pushed to a corner and was beaten relentlessly, it is clear that Rezon wants him dead, but every time when he thought he could put Lifeless down, Lifeless’s shadow just keeps on coming back and punches him in the lower body. The two soon stepped off from each other, they are both out of breath, tired and covered in sweat, the interval bell finally ringed.]

The voice in the air: “Whoa, it seems we have a tie here, we will come back shortly after these commercials.”

Type-013: *appears out of the thin air* “Do you see? Lifeless, you were once a great man, a champion boxer, who was at the top of his career…”

Lifeless:*frowns* “What happened? What happened after that? How did I became Herex’s experiment?”

Type-013: *disappears* “You will see…”

[It is round four and two are at it again, blows for blows, Lifeless’s former self finally got an upper hand, he dashes into the air and performs his signature move, a quick jab in the mid-air and Rezon was down for the count.]

The voice in the air: “Ten, nine, eight, seven, six-”

Lifeless: *puzzled* “If I won, the how did I-”

Rezon: *stands up* “I AM NOT Finished yet!” *repositions himself*

[Something is different this time, Rezon starts to tear Lifeless’s former self apart. He is pushed into the corner of the ring and is hammered down. Lifeless’s former self tries to defend but soon crumbled after a powerful upper cut. Lifeless watched in silent as his former self falls to the ground, the crowd booed, as the countdown slowly draws near to ‘one’, Lifeless collapses down to his knees, he can feel the dry sand and the emptiness in the hot air, this must be how he felt when he was in the ring, complete and utter emptiness… defeat, the ultimate disgrace to a fighter, lifeless feel like he could kill himself right now, end the shame, once and for all.]

Lifeless: *twitching* “My life, my career, everything…”

Type-013: *reappears* “… so you see?”

Herex’s voice: “It is okay my friend, everything would be alright, you help me bring justice to this world and I will bring your life back… just sign here and your surgery will begin tomorrow.”

The voice of Lifeless’s former self: “I accept the offer… I have nothing left to loose…”

Herex’s voice: “your wife left you and your coach denied you… I am all that you have left…” *chuckles*

Lifeless: *covers his ears* “STOP! MAKE IT STOP!!!”

[Lifeless reopens his eyes, he has returned back to reality. He suffers a severe headache and struggles to recover from the telepathic attack. Desna, unaware of what is going on, becomes increasingly worried about her partner’s health.]

Desna:*tabs Lifeless in the back* “Hey! Gremlin boy! What happened, for a second there you were at tip top shape and all over a sudden… what happened?”

Lifeless: *breathes heavily* “Type-013, he…”

Type-013: “I let him see what he wanted to see…”

Desna: “And what the hell would that be?”

Type-013: “His past, I returned it back into his brain…” *looks at Lifeless* “So what do you say? The world has taken something from us, it is time we taking something away from this world, we will destroy the planet Tinkinzar once created and beneath its ashes we shall build one of our own, a kingdom for people like us…”

Lifeless: *catches his breath* “I am not anything like you… who are you to decide who lives and who dies?”

Type-013: *raises his right fist* “We are the next step of the evolution, we are the superior beings! We shall rule over all!”

Desna: *draws her machine gun* “I have just had enough of your bull crap!”

Type-013: “Either I get you, or the conquest will…” *casts two green fire balls into his hands*

Mon, 12/09/2013 - 21:25
#18
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:| The evilest bump ever

Here are some character profiles for those of you who are intrested, skip this if you don't care.

The four horsemen are four of Herex's gene altered Gremlin super soldiers. The four horsemen in the original book are the war, the famine, the death and the conquest (some recap if you don't already know). The divine apocalypse rained from heaven to the mortal world, Herex named them this way in homage of his retribution against Tinkinzar and the Spiral order. Herex believes that Tinkinzar and spiral knights are ruining the planet so he decided to kill us all to stop that from happening.

The four horsemen:
Type-042 "the war"

Type-792 "the famine"

Type-013 "the death"

Type-991 'The conquest"

Note: there is a fifth and final boss whose name I will not reveal for now, I will leave it as a suprise at the end. you may guess if you want.

Wed, 12/11/2013 - 02:21
#19
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Just gimme sometime for the next chapter

Coz good work takes time. And BTW does anyone read this while waiting for their favourite app fanfic to update?

Thu, 12/12/2013 - 06:05
#20
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A boss battle to be remembered

Note: This boss battle is sick
Interval-07: empty

Location: Depth 26, an abandoned Gremlin science facility

[Desna aims her sight at Type-013, a burst of machine gun bullets riddle through Type-013’s body, he was stunned but unharmed. The bullet holes on his body disappeared, not healed, but magically vanished. Type-013 raises his arms to horizontal with his shoulder, makes up the shape of a crucifix, he grins at Desna, who is still empting clip after clip on his near indestructible body.]

Desna:*keeps firing* “WHY WON’T you die?!”

Type-013:*soaks up all of Desna’s bullets*“I already died once, I won’t die again…” *tosses a green fire ball*

Desna: *evades the fireball* “Rrr!” *takes cover and reload* “Lifeless! Figure out his weakness! Now!”

Lifeless: *dodges multiple fire balls* “Orders received…”

[Lifeless picks up an iron pipe and throws it at type-013 like a javelin. The bar went straight through Type-013 and dealt no damage. Type-013 lets out a continuous stream of green fire from his right hand, the fire engulfed the entire room and turns the place into an inferno. Desna tried to stomp out the mysterious fire with her boot, but she only made it worse. The fire started even melt the fabricated steel flooring, Lifeless manages to survive the fire stream and climbs up to a vantage point. Type-013 tries to make eye contact with Lifeless, but Lifeless utilizes his agility and jumped from one gas pipe to another, constantly repositions himself, preventing him from making any eye contacts.]

Type-013: *yells* “STAY STILL!!” *tosses another fireball at Lifeless*

Lifeless: *backflips and evades the attack* “… why are you doing this?”

Type-013: “Herex gave me a second chance, a second chance in life to make everything right… I foresee the birth of the ‘conquest’, Herex’s true masterpiece.”

Lifeless: “There is no such a thing as second chance… you should have stay dead…”

Type-013: *chuckles* “Do you want to know what I saw at the end of the unknown passage?”

Lifeless and Desna: “?!”

Type-013: “A little island… floating in the middle of nothingness, away from this world and its trouble… I rested there, my wounds miraculously healed and the place gave me just enough strength to make it to the elevator… the uplifting energy converted me, I felt complete at last. But when I returned to the colony, it saddens me to see that the hovels I born in remained unchanged, people still mistrust each other… Tinkinzar refused to give up his throne and continued his oppression. Herex wanted an end to all this, we can end the fear, the pain, the fury and the sorrow of this world, isn’t that what you wanted? Lifeless?”

Lifeless: “…”

Desna: *yells at Lifeless* “Don’t give in to his words!”

Lifeless: *nods his head* “He is right… those are exactly what I wanted…” *jumps down from the vantage point and sneakily picks up a shard of broken mirror from the floor* “Sorry Desna, I am relieved from my duty…” *winks at Desna*

Desna: *sees the wink* “Hey! Lifeless! How could you?!”*aside* “What is he up to now?”

Type-013: *drops his guard* “Yes, we are finally getting somewhere…” *lands onto the floor and walks towards Lifeless*

[Type-013 takes out his right hand, offering a handshake to Lifeless. Lifeless approaches Type-013 with the shard of mirror in his left hand. Lifeless realizes that if Type-013 can attack others telepathically with an eye contact, then it is about time that Type-013 had a taste of his own medicine.]

Type-013: “Welcome back, brother.” *tabs Lifeless’s shoulder* “Miss Desna, I suggest you to leave before you overstay your welcome…”

Desna: *grins* “Well, that is where you are wrong…”

[Type-013, for a moment, realizes that he is caught in a trap, Lifeless, in a blink of an eye kicks him in the groin before slamming his head with a roundhouse kick. Type-013 steps back and quickly fixed up his dislocated jaw.]

Type-013: *red eyes started to glow* “You will pay for that!” *locks Lifeless in the arm and body slams him to the ground*

Lifeless: “OOfff!” *recovers and punches type-013 with a quick right hook*

Type-013: *disappears* “Hah!” *Throws a gas grenade to the ground* “I hope you choke!”

Lifeless: *choked by the white smoke* “Desna! Locate him with your goggle!” *coughs*

Desna: *checks with her goggle* “Damn! He used red phosphorous grenade! Infra-red can’t see through the smoke! Lifeless, back to back!” *draws her sword*

Lifeless: *stands opposite Desna, shoulder to shoulder* “Here he comes…”

[Type-013 levitates off the ground before diving into the smoke, he rushes in with a fireball ready in his right hand. He went straight for Desna, slamming the fireball into her breast plate and knocked her away. Lifeless catches Type-013 before he could disappear into the smoke and attempts to break his wrist, Type-013’s CQC is superior and takes the upper hand. Lifeless is knocked down, Type-013 seizes the opportunity and grabs Lifeless by the throat. He gazes into Lifeless’s eyes in order to break the last of his sanity, but Lifeless, at the last second, pulls out the shard of mirror. All Type-013 could see, is his own eyes.]

Type-013: *shuts his eyes* “ARGHH!!!!” *Falls to the ground*

Desna: *recovers* “Damn! What did you do?”

Lifeless: “He looked himself in the eye…”

Desna:*chuckles* “Ha! About time! Umm, I wonder what he sees in his own past…”

Type-013: “…”

[Type-013 opens his eyes, he sees himself in the sanctuary. He wonders slowly to the centre of the island, there is a fountain there and the water is pristine. In the middle of the fountain stands a mysterious machine, Type-013 steps into the pool and tries to touch the marble exterior of the device, but to his horror, as soon as his finger makes contact with the marble, the machine crumbles and the pristine water turns blood red. Type-013 collapses under his own attack as he drowns into his dark memories, he sorrowfully roars and slams his head against the concrete wall of the facility several times before falling to the ground. He was defeated, Lifeless and Desna stood and watched as Type-013 slowly dissolves into the air.]

Type-013: *mumbles* “Colony HQ, do you read me?”

A voice in the air: *with static*“Izilius, this is HQ, what is your status?”

Type-013: “I have made it to the sanctuary… requesting return…”

A voice in the air: *with static*”Permission granted… an elevator is up ahead…”

Type-013: “… I am coming home…” *explodes into a green fire blast*

Desna: *raises her shield and stand before Lifeless* “Take cover!”

[The entire room that the battle taken place is completely charred, but the green fire disappeared and so did type-013. Lifeless feels a little bit sad on the inside, ‘all of them’, he thought, ‘Both Izilius and Onix, they all fought and died for the cause they believed in… What am I fighting for? Freedom? I hardly know what it is…’ Desna blocks the fire blast but her shield is deformed by the intense heat. ‘It is about time I throw this piece of scrap away’ thought Desna as she discards her old shield.]

Lifeless: “Desna, what is freedom? And why does Herex want it so bad that he created all this?”

Desna: “Freedom is dirt to those who have them… but to those who don’t I guess they are like gold… you have plenty of freedom now, so cheer up…”

Lifeless: *remain confused*“I still have none, I am only taking orders from you…”

Desna: “But didn’t I told you to make your own decisions?”

Lifeless: “I did… at your order…”

Desna: “Well, there you go! That is freedom! You get to make your own decisions!”

Lifeless: “But how could I know that my decision is the best?”

Desna: “That is a problem for another day, you walk your own path from now on. Don’t let anyone tell you otherwise.”

Fri, 12/13/2013 - 06:02
#21
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This is not a bump I swear

Here is a poem I wanna share with you guys, it is not my poem but I think this is probably the theme of Lifeless (aka. type-042 the war) if he ever has one.

Born
Into a pack
There's no choice
But take orders to attack
Locked up in chains
I get fed
But the hunger still remains
Not content to live this way
Being led by the blind
Got to plan my dispersal
Time to leave them all behind
Breaking out of my pain
Nothing ventured -- nothing gained
I'm my own master now
Bear the mark of my scars
Shedding blood underneath the stars
But I will survive somehow
Oooooooo
Oooooooo
Hear me howl
Time to leave them all behind
I'm my own master now

Note: Lifeless is not a wolf, I swear... I will be not playing SK for a while due to this awful winterfest event, a spark grinder with a prize that is completely not worth it. It is a bit like the reward at the end of 'shadow of the colossus' after fighting through 16 gaint monsters, each one are as powerful as God, getting possessed by dark energy and was turned into a monster and never got together with your girlfriend, that is what this winterfest is to me. I am off playing other games but that doesn't stop me from posting more crap at you guys ^^, more exiting story is comming! Stay tunned and if you see this message and managed to read it all, thank you again for reading.

Sat, 12/21/2013 - 19:07
#22
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Oh crap, new chapter!!!

Note: Desna is not super saiyan, just saiyan... (lol)

Interval-08: betrayal

Location: depth 26, abandoned Gremlin science facility

[Desna and Lifeless proceed to venture deeper into the facility. It was eerily quiet, jars of organs are stored on a few metal shelves, computers with blue screens. At the end of the long corridor lies another large room. The large culture tank that is housing Type-991 is centre, Herex stands up from his chair and greets the duo.]

Herex: *grins*“You are right on time, Miss Desna.”

Desna: “It is over Herex! Two of your four horsemen are already dead! Your plan is ruined before it is even begun!”

Herex: *smirks* “So you think you have ruined my plan?” *laughs* “HAHAHAHAHA!!! Insolent! They are merely the pawns on my chees board! I will sacrifice any piece to save the king!” *activates the culture tank* “Soon, justice shall rain down on cradle for the last TIME!”

Desna: “What?”

Herex: “I have gave birth to the ultimate being! He will rule over all! The weak and the wicked will be purged and the strong will live as they see fit, he will rid of diseases and take this planet to a NEW century! My retribution is complete!”

[The culture tank is emptied and the entity inside blasts out of the glass tank with a beam of electricity. A tall, muscular Gremlin jumps out of the tank, he is dressed in a thick bomb suit and his right eye is severely scarred. Electricity surges around him, he looks at Desna and looks back at Herex. Herex’s face shows pride in his creations.]

Herex: “Type-991, carry out my instructions!”

[Type-991 glares at Herex, he shook his head and blasts Herex’s body with a beam of electricity bursts out of his right eye. Herex’s lab coat is fried and he could barely stand up after the attack. Desna, on the other side of the facility is pleased to see Herex finally got what is coming for him, but she is also worried about the new threat, Type-991. A living tank with a beam cannon for his right eye.]

Herex: *on the verge of death* “Why…”

Type-991:*in a deep voice* “I take no instructions from an inferior being, I shall destroy EVERYTHING.” *the sparks around him increased*

[Type-991 generates a beam of electric charge around him, the beam travels through the facility and sent the electronics to a meltdown, the circuits bursts into flame and the interfaces are shattered. In a flash of power, the entire facility is blown to oblivion. The roof is gone in the culture tank room and all of Herex’s work are destroyed. Type-991 walks away from the ruined unharmed. Desna and Lifeless however, are trapped in the debris.]

Desna: *tries to call spiral HQ* “Kora? Are you there?” *coughs*

Kora: *with statics* “Desna! What are you doing down at depth 26?”

Desna: “I will explain it later! For now, send some backup!”

Lifeless: *punches the concrete off his back* “Desna… are you injured…”

Desna: “I am not pretty, but I am tough!” *pushes her way out of the debris*

Lifeless: “Type-991 is free, he poses a threat… should I eliminate the threat?”

Desna: *pats the dust off her coat* “We don’t even know what he is up to!”

Lifeless: “He seems to have electro-kinesis of the highest calibre… Herex engineered him that way for a reason… with power like that, he could easily raze buildings…”

Desna: “Spiral HQ, this is Desna, we managed to eliminate two of the horsemen! But the third still remains large and he is planning on destroying the colony!”

Kora: “That is not our problem! Let Tinkinzar deal with it!”

Desna: “Listen! When he finished the Gremlins, he is going after us!”

Kora: *unease* “Ugh, what did you get yourself into this time Desna?”

[Suddenly, a series of scream can be heard from the dam in the distant, it has already begun. Type-991, after dispatching the security guards at the dam’s foundation, starts to blast away at the dam’s concrete wall. Cracks soon appear and water started to leak, the river is running directly to the great colony.]

Desna: *runs towards the dam*“What is he trying to do? Flood the colony? The dam won’t hold!”

Lifeless: *follows* “I can carry you to the dam within ten seconds, but I need you to beat Type-991, can you do that?”

Desna: *check her remaining ammo* “I still got a dozen of clips…”

Lifeless: *bends his back* “Get on my back…”

Desna: “Ok…” *gets onto Lifeless’s back*

[Lifeless, in a burst of fury, runs in the speed of sound across the cliff that severed the facility and the water damage, he lands near the upstream shore and instantly runs across the calm river. Desna shuts her eyes tightly as the wind is hammered against her face, Lifeless is insanely fast and comes to a grinding stop at the main structure of the dam.]

Desna: *jumps of Lifeless’s back* “Whoa, how did you do that?”

Lifeless: *breathing heavily* “I… used a lot of my energy, must recuperate…” *kneels* “The parasite on my heart send my body to an adrenalin overload… I can feel… it is replicating…”

Desna: “You stay here and try to catch up later!”

Lifeless: *coughs* “Go…”*coughs*

[Desna slides down the dam’s concrete slope while Type-991 blasted the dam to shreds. The structure of the dam is critically weaken and the water can break out at any time. Type-991 suddenly spots Desna and sends out a lightning blast at her direction. Desna jumps at the last second to evade the blast, she rolls and landed on the concrete floor at the bottom of the dam.]

Type-991: “I admire your tenacity, Miss Desna…”

Desna: “Okay, Herex’s favourite toy, what are you up to now? Man, you talk just like Lifeless!” *chuckles* “But he is better looking though…”

Type-991: “My appearance is irrelevant… You are right on time to see my great work…”

Desna: “???”

Type-991: “As soon as the water flooded the colony, I will apply 2 million volts of free electricity into the water, killing anyone and destroying any machine that were unlucky enough to be soaked.”

Desna: “You son of a-!”

Type-991:*interrupts* “-Then, the people of the colony will realize how pathetic their emperor is and anarchy shall reign… freedom will at last back on cradle, once I finished the colony, the Spiral order will be next…”

Desna: *draws her machine gun* “That is not freedom! That is madness! Millions will die!”

Type-991: “Madness?” *chuckles* “THIS IS JUSTICE!” *fires off a beam of lightning from his right eye*

[The beam scrapes Desna and she makes a quick dash before the beam melts her flesh away. Desna fires her machine gun and the bullets bounces of Type-991’s armour, few made through but Type-991 is clearly unaffected.]

Desna: “Damn! You are the worst of them all!”

Type-991: “You are lucky, few can bear witness to the marvel of Gremlin bio technology…”*charges up eight electric spheres*

[The eight electric spheres circled around Type-991, they formed an electric ring around him and Desna. Desna instinctively shoots for his head but the steel ring deflects the bullets while randomly rotates around type-991. Type-991 closes in on Desna, he slowly advances towards her while being protected by the constantly rotating ring. Desna tries to shoot whenever there was an opening, but every time the ring seems to be always right on time to block the bullets.]

Desna: *reloads* “There are freaks and then there are people like you, what the hell was Herex’s messing with? Fire of the Gods?!”

Type-991: “There are no gods, Miss Desna, only men, men with great dreams…” *gets a hold on the electric ring and turns it into a wimp* “And I have a DREAM-”

[Type-991 is not playing around anymore, he lashes the wimp at Desna’s direction, the concrete structure of the dam was caught in the attack, the electrical wimp melts through the concrete wall and the dam is damaged even further.]

Type-991: “-That one day, every men and women on this planet will have control over their OWN destiny!!!” *lashes his wimp at Desna*

Desna: *evades* “Rrr!!”

Type-991: “Our colony will no longer be flooded with colourful light and charitable act, every men can fight for himself and everyone can start their own war!!!” *lashes again*

Desna: *gets hit by the wimp and got electrocuted* “ARRRGH!!!” *backs away* “So you wanted to purge the weak and everyone you don’t like huh?
There is no justice in any of your ‘dreams’!!! You are just another sorry excuse for a living being!!! I will take you down or die trying!!!”

Type-991: “Then show me why you fight…” *lashes his wimp*

[Desna quickly backs away from the deadly attack and draws her blade, she is pushed into a corner with no way out. Desna’s heart almost bursts into bits by the pressure that Type-991 has put on, never have an opponent struck this much fear into her. “This is it, what would Lifeless do in this kind of situation?” Desna thoughts to herself, “that is right… a weakness…” She took one last glance at Type-991 before embracing him with her sword, “His right eyes… that is where the electricity is coming from… it must be destroyed…”.]

Type-991: *tangles Desna’s leviathan blade with his wimp* “… Sloppy…”

Desna: *chuckles* “Now that I left you in the open…” *takes a nitronome out of her back pocket*

[Desna pulls the pin with her teeth and pushes it straight into type-991’s right eye, Type-991 realizes the threat and blasts Desna away from him with a pulse of energy. The nitronome detonated in the mid-air and the shrapnel critically damaged type-991’s eyes, he is now completely blind. Desna, who is also shell shocked, seizes the opportunity and stabs Type-991 with her leviathan blade, the blade cuts through the bomb suit and Type-991 responds in agony. The fight might be over.]

Desna: “Your dream dies with you!”

Type-991: *laughs* “No, this… is… only… the BEGINNING! I am the conquest and I WILL TRIUMPH!”

[Type-991 grabs Desna by her throat before she could back away. He throws Desna 20 meters into the air and proceed to blasts her with two beams of lightning coming out of his eyes. His eyes are damaged but continued to produce a lethal amount of power. Desna lands on the slope of the dam and runs down toward type-991 for the finishing blow, she jumps and avoided the two lightning beams. Despite type-991's last ditch effort, his head was cut clean off by Desna’s blade. But just when she though the battle is over, Type-991’s body detonated in a violent explosion, the shock wave knocks Desna into a coma. The dam is infrastrure's almost on the vege of collapse, but it managed to hold.]

Kora: *calling Desna from the comlink* “Desna! I am losing your signal! Backup is coming! Desna? Can you read me? DEEEESSSSNAAAAAA!!!”

Lifeless: *oversaw the destruction from the top of the dam* “… It is not over… yet…”

Thu, 12/26/2013 - 23:21
#23
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Fshuolong
Ooh.

Me be lookin' forward for such story!

Fri, 01/03/2014 - 15:43
#24
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Midnight-Dj
:O ME be Looking forward for writting it.

Interval-09: Insurrection

Location: depth 26, Gremlin operated electric dam.

[Lifeless can feel the worms crawling beneath his skin, they are almost at the final stage of their life cycle. Hahn, arrived at the dam against Feron’s order, spots Lifeless succumbing to the parasite within. Hahn quickly takes a needle of antibiotic and injects them into Lifeless’s neck upon approaching him. Meanwhile at the bottom of the dam, Type-991’s husk is peeled off and a cocoon emerges out of his corpse.]

Lifeless: *recovers* “What was that? What was in the needle?”

Hahn: “It is an antibiotic I developed to counter the effect of the ‘rage worms’ inside your body.”

Lifeless: “Rage worm?”

Hahn: “yes, that is the name of the parasite, it sucks onto the host’s heart to extract nutrient from the blood stream, to ensure that the host can survive long enough to sustain its life cycle, they inject a substance similar to adrenaline into host’s blood, making them more aware and agitated when being threatened, hence I gave it the name.”

Lifeless: “What happens at the end of ‘rage worm’s lifecycle?”

Hahn: “… They will start bursting out of your body in seek of new hosts… In another word, you will die once when the parasites are mature…”

Lifeless: “I can’t die now…” *feels an acute pain in his chest* “Argh!!!”

Hahn: “What? Why? I thought it would be over when all four horsemen are dead…”

Lifeless: “… Herex made some kind of-” *coughs* “-back-up plan…” *points at a mysterious cocoon at the bottom of the dam, right next to Desna* “That… is his final work… Hahn, evacuate the area… this fight is going to get ugly…”

Hahn: *moves away* “Okay… you know what you are doing right?”

Lifeless: “Affirmative…”

[Desna starts to recover from the coma, next to her feet lies the cocoon. A dark silvery husk with a vile purple gas emitting out of the holes on its shell. Suddenly, her comlink ringed, it was from Herex.]

Herex:*from the comlink* “… Desna… you are still alive, how intriguing, your body would be a worthy specimen for my next experiment…”
Desna:*responds* “You are still alive?! Damn! I swear if I find you, I will rip your guts out!”

Herex: *from the comlink* “Oh, getting all angry now are we? Do you want to know what is inside that cocoon? I am sure ‘she’ will calm you down…”

Desna: “Another one of your experiments?” *chuckles* “Herex, you know what? Your experiments are nowhere as messed up as you! They had a life of their own and you ruined it for them! They were once people!”

Herex: *from the comlink* “And they joined me willingly…”

Desna: “-?”

Herex: *from the comlink* “That is right, all of them signed up voluntarily, all of them have the same vision as me, and we are here to rebuild this planet from scratch, but first it must be purged first. To do that, I created a new ruler for this planet, one that would surpass Tinkinzar! That was the true purpose of project retribution!”

Desna: *sees cracks on the cocoon* “What? What is inside that COCOON?!”*stands up and recaptures her machine gun*

Herex: *from the comlink* *laughs* “Long story short… 4000 years ago a group of celestials arrived on this planet, we call them the ‘Stargazers’… they taught us how to build, how to live, but now my fellow brethren have become misguided, they become too greedy and stargazers vanished before they could give out further instructions. But I managed to salvage a stargazer corpse deep beneath an ancient glacier, its DNA is severely damaged so I resorted to fill out the gaps with Gremlin DNA, the final product, Type-Ω, the ‘Queen’! Enjoy your last hour of freedom, Miss Desna… because after that, ‘she’ will rule over all…” *closes the Comlink*

Desna: “Herex! HEREX!” *smashes her comlink communicator against the concrete basement* “Alright, Miss butterfly, come out, come out!”

Lifeless: *jumps down to the bottom of the dam and lands next to Desna* “Desna…”

Desna: “Oh hey, you sure are a nice sight for my sore eye.” *sees that the ‘Queen’ is almost hatched* “Any idea what is inside?”

Lifeless: “It seems there is only one way to find out…”

[The cocoon bursts apart in a beam of bright light, Desna covers her vision for short while and when she moves away her hand from her eye, Desna’s jaw drops. Hovering in the air, is Type-Ω, she has a head of a Gremlin with goat horns on her head. In addition, a pair of butterfly wings on her back. Her body is disgustingly deformed, three sharp fingers for each hand and foot. She has four arms, two of the four arms are fixed onto where her breasts were supposed to be. But what makes Desna wants to cringe the most, is the fact that her skin is furless, hardened and bleached, with throbbing dark veins bursting out of the cracks on the skin. These veins are pulsing with dark, satanic red energy, Type-Ω casts an ominous glare at Lifeless and Desna. She inspects her hands and smiled.]

Type-Ω: *in a mechanical tone* “I am… I am… the QUEEN…”

Lifeless and Desna: “…”

Type-Ω: *sees the destruction around her* “So much death, so much pain, so much sorrow and so much despair… I am putting an END to this…”

[Type-Ω extends her wings and a blast of spores are secreted from the holes on her back. The spores fly across the sky and headed for the colony. She starts to take notice in Desna and Lifeless, seeing them as peons in her soon to be empire, she spoke.]

Type-Ω: “I know you want to stop me… Type-042… or what she would call you… Lifeless… but please, understand me, I am only here to prevent a bigger slaughter…”

Desna: “What slaughter?!”

Type-Ω: “See the dam behind me? It is nearly destroyed, one more blast and it is done for…”

Desna: “What about it?”

Type-Ω: “A knight like you, standing here with the dam crumbling down, you may have averted a disaster, but Gremlins can simply blame you for the destruction… you became an escape goat, a saboteur… the excuse Gremlins have been looking for to start a new war against Haven…”

Desna: *chuckles* “sure, but a few dead Gremlin security guards and a crumbling dam are tragedies. But nothing to start a war over!”

Type-Ω: “But it is a spark, the spark Tinkinzar needed to boost the war production after the fall of Grand arsenal. If you stop me now, Tinkinzar will raise a new army and desolation will ensue, I am here to prevent this slaughter… by using the spores…”

Desna: “Spores?”

Type-Ω: “Mind control fungus, upon inhalation I would have the minds of the entire colony population. Through me, they will understand love, unity, serenity and peace. I will oversee them, guide them to a better future… don’t turn against me… I am trying to undo the damage…”

Lifeless: “…No…”

Type-Ω: “Then my hammer of judgement will rain down upon you…”

Lifeless: “I was never engineered to fear termination, directive-01 made by Herex, my original commander instructed me to bring about the freedom of the entire planet. I initially did not understand the definition of freedom. However, that changed when Desna came to my aid. I now established my own understanding of freedom and a set of directives that I choose to obey.”

Type-Ω: “You do not fear death?”

Lifeless: “My biology tells me that it is necessary to pass on all genetic information to the next generation, but this counters the purpose of that directive, freedom and liberation must be attained at any cost, even if it means my termination.”

Desna: “You don’t have to do this!”

Lifeless: “It is too late, the parasites inside my body are almost at the end of their life cycle. My death is imminent, I must carry out my own directives, a sets of directives that I chose to obey.”

Desna: “Lifeless! As your commander I am ordering you to stand down! I will find a cure. I promise!”

Lifeless: “Negative, I am my own commander now…” *jumps towards Type-Ω*

Sat, 01/04/2014 - 21:04
#25
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Sandwich-Potato

It's pretty good. Basically like what Ultima said, this is more like a script than a story. Nevertheless, it's rather interesting, especially taking in your limited ability of English.

I would suggest leaving the dialogue as is, but to add a bit more description for the combat scenes, and character reactions.

Take your last line:

“Negative, I am my own commander now…” *jumps towards Type-Ω*

Instead, you could do:

"Negative," Lifeless responded in a monotone voice. "I am my own commander now." He stood upright, rallying to overcome his pain, and half-ran, half-limped to Type-Ω.

Of course, the more vocabulary you know, the more descriptive it could be:

Lifeless shook his head, causing specks of dust to fly from his mangy fur. He slowly stood upright, trying to stay the shocks of pain that rattled throughout his body, like a rattle shaken by a baby. He assessed the distance from Type-Ω, slowly assuming a battle position while Desna spoke. He turned his head back to her for a brief second, then looked back at his enemy. Gritting his teeth from the pain, he muttered, "Negative, I am my own commander now." His tone of voice was completely monotone, like that of a robot. He coughed, gobs of blood coagulating and dripping onto the ground. Desna stared at the sanguineous mess in an unexpected shock. Lifeless's feet echoed on the soon-to-be battlefield, claws extended, face in a gruesome combination of both abysmal pain and the uttermost display of mental fortitude.

Mon, 01/06/2014 - 03:03
#26
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Midnight-Dj
The best SK fanfic final boss ever?

Interval-10: OMEGA

Location: depth 26, Gremlin operated electric dam.

[Hahn’s antibiotics only worked half well, the rage worms erupt out of Lifeless’s body in the mid-air, but somehow, Lifeless can feel as if he can control the parasites. They twitched erratically outside his skin but seemed to be moving the same pattern as his muscle movement. He reaches out his left hand at Type-Ω and the worms reached out towards her as well, the worms act as tentacles, seized one of her upper arm. Type-Ω, unalarmed by the attack, delivered a deadly slash at Lifeless’s torso with her three claws. Lifeless’s suit was shredded into pieces but he continues the assault by grabbing the veins outside Type-Ω’s skin, he forcefully tears off some of the veins but Type-Ω is unaffected, as payback, she blasts Lifeless to the concrete basement with a beam of lightning. Renders Lifeless unconscious, Desna meanwhile, fired her last clip at Type-Ω’s exposed veins but had little effect as well.]

Type-Ω: “I am the ultimate being, you cannot destroy me…”

Desna: *empties her machine gun* “Damn! I am all out!”

Lifeless: *Stands back up* “That lightning? The same as the ones from Type-991, the mind control spores resembled similarity with Type-792’s maggots that can reanimate the dead, her hovering ability is taken from Type-013 and her combat instinct, it must be…”

Desna: *sweats with concern* “Taken from you? What, are you telling me that she is the combination of all four of the horsemen? How can we beat something like that?”

Type-Ω: *harnesses the mist energy around her, solidifies into the shape of a hammer* “Judgement awaits.” *slams the hammer at Lifeless and Desna*

[Desna certainly regretted discarding her shield when she was fighting Type-013, the hammer made of pure mist energy slams the concrete basement with great force, large chunks of concrete disintegrated upon impact. What is worse is that the hammer exploded upon impact and the mist energy was dispersed as a wave of extreme heat, Desna’s hound coat was badly burned during the explosion and she gasped when she saw Lifeless’s entire right torso was completely melted off.]

Lifeless: *coughs out a tremendous amount of blood* “Argh... Superficial damage…”

Desna: *gasps* “Are you insane? You are in no condition to fight!”

Type- Ω: *chuckles* “And that, is the difference, between a man, and a GOD…” *harnesses the mist energy and creates another hammer* “Your defiance will be your undoing!” *slams the hammer at Lifeless and Desna*

[Time pauses in front of Lifeless’s eyes, this is his end. The next hammer strike will no doubt wipe him and Desna out from face of this planet. He will cease to exist, but his heart remains beating even after receiving critical injuries, “Why am I still alive?” Lifeless asks himself, “Why did I remain even after all that have happened?” He looks back at Desna, who is about to draw her sword and meet her end, “Perhaps, I lived, for her… and for those who are too weak to protect themselves, this planet, it, it is worth fighting for… this is my choice, my own directive…”]

Lifeless: *worms started to emerge out of his missing right torso, the worms formed the shape of a savage claw, he shouts in a great anger* “ARGHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!” *eyes glowed red and breaths deeply* “This ends now…” *lunges himself towards Type- Ω*

[Type- Ω smiled as Lifeless throws himself at her for the second time, she swings the hammer at Lifeless, believing that it will crush him like a bug. But to Type- Ω’s surprise, Lifeless blasts himself through the solid energy of her hammer at the sacrifice of multiple severe burns and headed straight for her. Using his new right arm, Lifeless was capable of unleashing a deadly strike on Type- Ω’s chest, the claw rips off a large chunk of Type- Ω’s flesh and a red throbbing heart is revealed in the centre of her chest. Type- Ω, realizing that her weakness has been compromised, grabs Lifeless’s newly formed right arm with two of her hands and rips it clean off. Lifeless miraculously ignores the temporary pain and retaliates by ripping off one of Type- Ω’s two rigid horns with his still intact left arm, he breaks off the horn and jabs it into Type- Ω’s heart, her heart is instantly impaled by the horn and she loses her balance and falls to the ground. But Type- Ω wasn’t finished yet, she stands up and catches Lifeless while he is trying to land and uses all four of her arms in an attempt to break his neck, all four arms are locked tightly against Lifeless’s neck, like a python, strangling its prey.]

Lifeless: *struggles, tries to break free* “Argh!”

Desna: *intervenes but slashing Type- Ω’s arm with her blade* “Let go of him!”

Type- Ω: *releases Lifeless after her arm was cut deeply by the blade* “Argh!!! This… cannot... be!!!” *kneels due to exhaustion*

[Desna sees the pulsing heart of Type- Ω exposed out of her chest, she realizes that this is her opportunity to end this once and for all, she takes out the last three nitronomes in her back pocket and shoved them down into the open wound. The bombs erupts in Type- Ω’s chest and her heart was punctured through by the shrapnel. Lifeless, on the other hand, is slowly being taken over by the parasites, more and more rage worms crawled out of his skin. He is scared beyond recognition. The thickness of the worms increases as Lifeless slowly succumb to the pain, they begin to coil around what is left of his former body. Forming a layer of new purple flesh.]

Lifeless: *consciousness slowly fading away* “Desna… run…” *the purple worms now taken form of his left and right arms, his head and parts of his legs are all that is left of his former self.* “Argh! I will finish her…”

Desna: “But she is already dead!”

Type- Ω: *reawakens* “NO, you haven’t seen… anything… yet!!!” *heals her wound with the mist energy and lands onto the ground*

[Type- Ω discards her wings and replaces them with a sharp tail, she now shares striking similarity with the devil himself. Her body starts to glow red with crimson energy bubbling around her. Her arms are now more muscular and the claws are sharper even than before. Type- Ω isn’t playing around anymore. She teleports quickly between places to closing distance with Lifeless. She appears behind Lifeless and punches through his body with one of her left fist. Lifeless, unmoved by the pain, seizes the Type- Ω‘s left fist and body slams her to the ground. He then jumps onto Type- Ω’s stomach and unleashes a deadly beating on the demon’s face, punches after punches until Type- Ω’s face is completely covered in blood. Frustrated by her own incompetence, Type- Ω brushes Lifeless away with a red energy blast. She casts four fire balls into each of her hands and tosses them all at Desna, Type- Ω was cunning, she senses that the death of Desna will greatly disorientate Lifeless and she will soon gain the upper hand. Desna, didn’t stand around and get hit, evades the first three and deflects the fourth with her leviathan blade.]

Desna: “Hah! Is that all you got?”

Type- Ω: *rushes for Desna with her claws stretched wide* “DIE!”

Lifeless: *shouts* “Desna!!!” *tackles Type- Ω before her claw could reach Desna, ramming Type- Ω onto the dam’s foundation wall.*

Type- Ω: *breaks away from Lifeless* “Insolent! Fear my wrath!” *fires a beam of lightning at Lifeless, Lifeless is temporarily stunned* “When I am done with you… this world will be mine…” *stands before Lifeless, with blood dripping down her claws, ready to finish him off*

Lifeless: *twitching violently from the shock* “C-c-can’t continue… termination… eminent…”

Desna: *yells* “LIFELESS!!! Remember your directives!” *throws her leviathan blade at Type- Ω, the blade bounces off from her nearly indestructible skin*

[Lifeless, regained his consciousness at the last second, caught the sword before it fells to the ground and impaled Type- Ω’s chest with its sharp blade. He uses what is left of his strength to push the blade as deep as it can into Type- Ω’s chest, severing her heart in half. The mist energy from the heart starts to flood out of Type- Ω's body, her muscles begin to shrink and the hardened skin started to peel off, exposing red flesh, it is the end for the "Queen", but Lifeless can feel the uplifting energy in the air, as if new life could be born beneath this blood stained world...]

Type- Ω: *With blood vomiting out of her mouth* “H-how? …”

Lifeless: *smiled, his tone changed from mechanical back to normal* “…At last, I am free…” *closes his eyes*

Type- Ω: *in agony* “I am… I am… NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!”

Tue, 01/07/2014 - 23:03
#27
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Midnight-Dj
Epilouge....

Interval-11: Farewell

Location: ???

[It is finally over, Type- Ω screamed in agony as her body is set to self-destruct like the other horsemen. She lets out all of her remaining energy into a devastating blast, the blast brought down the concrete dam and the water on the other side flushed Desna and everything else downstream. Desna, caught by surprise, is chocked by a large volume of water when she tried to breath. Again, she fell unconscious. When she reopened her eye, she sees Lifeless, standing peacefully in a white empty space, the worms that were crawling on his body disappeared. Desna knows that she must be dreaming, but how, how can a dream be this beautiful and sincere?]

Desna: *walks towards Lifeless* “Lifeless? Or should I call you Type-042… who are you anyway? I never knew your real name…” *tears drips down her cheek*

Lifeless’s parting soul: *chuckles* “I never remembered my real name… not even when Type-013 brought my memories back… I was also known as ‘Lifeless’ when I was in the boxing ring, I guess that name made me who I am…”

Desna: “No… Lifeless, YOU made who you are… and nothing is going to change that…”

Lifeless’s parting soul: “Maybe, maybe not, who knows, maybe at the end of the day we are all the pawns of something greater… our souls, our genes or the memes we passed on…”

Desna: “But defeating type- Ω, was your personal choice right?”

Lifeless’s parting soul: “I did it for those that are still within the great colony, for me and for everyone else on this planet… this world would be better off without Kings and Queens, it is up to you now to decide what to do with the freedom and the limited amount of time you have on this planet…” *slowly dissolves into the white space* “The cause I set out to do with my life is now complete, I have no remorse left, but there is more favour I need to ask you before I leave…”

Desna: *on the verge of bursting into tears* “W-what is it?”

Lifeless’s parting soul:*a bitter smile on his face while being slowly broken down into particles from foot to head* “Go… live your life the way you see fit, make the choices you want to make. Believe in yourself... and I wish you well… thank you for liberating me from Herex and my own past…” *disappeared* “Wake up…”

Desna: “NO! Lifeless! NOOOO!!!” *chases Lifeless’s departing soul*

[The white space around her slowly disintegrates and all that is left of Lifeless’s departing soul is his face. Desna realized that all this is his attempt to say goodbye to her. She stops the pursuit and watched stilly as Lifeless vanished in front of her very eye. And then, her vision went black, in the darkness, she hears familiar voice, trying to wake her up.]

A voice: “Desna! Wake up!”

Desna: *wakes up from her coma, feeling soaked* “Lifeless! NO! After all we went through, you CAN’T!”

A voice: “Desna! Calm down, everything is fine…”

Desna: *came to her senses, sees Hahn is attending her wound at the bank of the stream* “Whoa… what happened, where are we?”

Hahn: *patches up the bandages on one Desna’s bruises* “You got washed down the stream after the dam is destroyed.”

Desna: *gasps* “Did the water flood the colony?!”

Hahn: “No, the Gremlins in the colony channelled the water away before the flooding became an issue, all the water went to the Jelly farms further down the stream, glad no one is hurt, the same can’t be said about your Gremlin boyfriend…”

Desna: *blushes* “GREMLIN BOYFRIEND?! No, we were partners! And that is that…”

Hahn: “He died during the explosion… type- Ω’s heart seems to be some kind of energy storage… the heat released upon severing the heart is certainly lethal at point blank range… nothing could have survived that. You are lucky that you are alive, Kora and Feron are worried about you!”

Desna: *slowly stands back up* “Okay Hahn, let’s report back home…” *turns her attentiond at the destroyed dam* “….” *sighs*

Hahn: *feeling slightly jealous* “…He meant something to you didn’t he?”

Desna: *shook her head and smiled* “He is that part of my memory, the part that I could never forget…”

[And so, Project retribution is pronounced a failure, Herex now retreated to the last of his hideout, trying to piece together the reasons why his final creation is flawed, but suddenly, beneath a pile of his old paper work, an old phone ringed. Herex picks up the phone and answered.]

Herex: *answering the phone* “…I know, Type- Ω the ‘Queen’ didn’t turn out like I promised and I am sorry for her incompetence… Oh? Did Tinkinzar declare war against Haven as soon as the water hit the colony bound? That old fool, he did not understand my work’s true purpose and he is now ruining everything! ... Ugh, yes… I managed to salvage the combat data from the four horsemen as well as Type-Ω’s, they will certainly come handy in my next project… of course, none of this would have happened without your funding… I will make sure next time to crush Tinkinzar’s colony… Yes, the revival of project ‘retribution’ can begin as soon as the new equipment arrive… Yes, thank you once again for your generous donation…Mister Ozlo…”

(Edit: cleared out some mistakes)

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