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Sat, 02/01/2014 - 15:34
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Malkalack

The warden stumbled blearily through Haven, tripping irrationally. He had felt disorientated ever since.... ever since... he couldn't remember. It seemed all his life was stumbling, vomiting and forgetfulness. He thought he had friends and who was the woman appearing in his head. Or was it real? He had a hard time remembering these days. He tumbled into the... Arcade he thinks it's called. He stumbled into the old mine, sheltering from the sun. The woman who kept appearing in his head stepped in front of him, standing on tiptoes and starting to move her face to his. He pushed her off, confused. He continued stumbling, toward the elevator. He wasn't sure what compelled him to do so, but he selected depth seventeen when the panel popped up.

Nik hit the ground. She had been shoved down by the person she thought loved her, but had forgotten everything in a seemingly drunken stupor after returning from a fiendish city on... depth seventeen. She watched him enter the elevator an turn, and gasped in horror at the purple spike sprouting from the Warden's back.

Her friends immediately hauled her to her feet, but she was too busy thinking of an old story she had once heard. About the destruction of Troy.

Sat, 02/01/2014 - 16:54
#1
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Psychnade
Well Now!

That looks promising…Can't wait to hear more! Also, does this have something to do with the origin of Trojans?

Sat, 02/01/2014 - 17:09
#2
Malkalack's picture
Malkalack
Swag IS a virtue

Not the origin... oh,

PS did you catch the end of "Enter The Core"?

Sat, 02/01/2014 - 18:45
#3
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Unfortunately

Unfortunately, no. I have yet to be gifted the ending. Still waiting for more votes on my story, and between that and work, art, and violin, thats a lot. I'll read it now though!

Sat, 02/01/2014 - 18:50
#4
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Malkalack
Chapter 2

Nik slammed down against the hard floor of the Arcade. Almost immediateley, her friends were upon her, hauling her to her feet with a mixture of:
"He didn't mean it"
"He doesn't know his own strength"
"You can do better then him"
But she would have none of it. Immidiately after the elevator descended, she deduced that he must be going to depth seventeen. Existing in the Order, there were horror stories of Wardens being corrupted and returning to the fiendish cities that they had been cursed in. She strode out, looking for the one knight who cared enough about Troy to help. She exited the arcade, sunlight glistening of off her obsessively polished Mighty Cobalt armour, and a pair of Master Blasters hanging opposite of each other off her slanted belt. A Leviathan Blade hung across her back, the relic firmly sheathed inside it's scabbard

Ran-Shey sat in his "Ready Room", three bottles of spent beer laying on the ground. He broke open a forth one, and slumped backward. He had turned to the drink after his older brother, brave, dauntless Troy had become corrupted. He had heard about the episode in the Arcade, something about him slapping his girlfriend or something. His memory was shaky, the drink was more powerful then most gave it credit for. He began to chug down the beverage, when he heard a smashing at the exterior of his pod. He staggered to the entrance and swung it open, wincing as the noon sun flooded his four foot-by-four foot chamber. He stumbled forward, about to fall when a woman caught him. It was his brother's... whatever she was.

"And what is a pretty lady like you doing outside my pod? Don't you have better things to do then associate with a drunkard, miss high society... dating wardens and such" Ran-Shey said, cruelty unmistakeable in his tone.

"Look, moron. I'm going to help your brother whether you come or not. But if you are not a complete piece of crap idiot you will meet me at five, Iron Titan gate tomorrow morning".

Ran-Shey was about to open his mouth to respond, when the pod door slammed in his face. He sat down in the chair and set it to "sleep" mode. It immediately shifted so that it lay horizontal, and the terminal shifted so that it lay over him. He closed his eyes and began to sleep.

Nik stalked away from the pod, irritated at herself. She regretted her harsh words to the Knight but decided not to apologize. She hiked over to her Ready Room and tried to send a private text message to Troy but kept getting the same response.

"This Knight's communication array is offline. Please try again later or contact your nearest Tech-Knight..." A robotic voice droned in her ear. She slammed a fist down on her communicator, and spent the rest of the day trying to contact him.

After four hours, she finally broke down and tears began to glisten and slide down her face.

Mon, 02/03/2014 - 05:58
#5
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Malkalack
Chapter 3

Nik looked around almost nervously, as the elevator descended to Tier Three. Her and Bran-Shey had met at five o'clock, as per agreed and were now descending to Emberlight.

The elevator touched the metal with a clang, the frontal railing lowering to allow access. A bastion of knights stood in the centre , lazing around. Nik approached one, Brand-Shey following her, his Ironmight plate armour and Sudaruska creating an imposing figure compared to her polished frame.

"Have you seen a Warden, stumbling around recently? Maybe bound to depth seventeen?" Nik inquired, doing a poor job of masking her apprehension.

"Wait, you KNOW that bastard!?" A knight in Recon Ranger armour demanded. "Yeah, I saw him, and he left me a parting gift" The knight gestured to a strip of bloody Miracloth wrapped around his torso.

"Well, I'm sure when he gets back in his right mind he will be sorry" Nik apologized on Troy's behalf..

"Sorry, right mind? Look, princess: He is mostly Trojan by now. He was turning black and purple already when we met him. We decided not to kill him, but he is a DANGER. You should put him down when you see him, It's only fair for him- whoever he is." The angry Knight said.

Nik sighed and kept walking. As the duo reached the elevator, Bran-Shey shot a warning look over his shoulder at the Garrison of Knights.

The elevator descended, as elevators do. Bran-Shey laid a hand on Nik's shoulder. She looked up, about to fervently be faithful to Troy when she stopped herself. Troy could be DEAD, or a Trojan and Bran-Shey really cared about her. She allowed his hand to stay, inching a bit closer to the Guardian. She eased herself into his embrace, and stayed their until the elevator stopped.

Mon, 02/03/2014 - 14:26
#6
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Malkalack
...

Anyone paying attention to this? Anything to improve? Anything I'm doing well?

Mon, 02/03/2014 - 14:55
#7
Malkalack's picture
Malkalack
Swag IS a virtue

The elevator pressed down into soft, desecrated earth. The duo stepped off and immediately drew their weapons. They were in a fiendish city, and heard chanting coming from a turn along the road. The two Knights walked forward wearily, Nik training her Master Blasters into the knight, and Bran-Shey gripping his sword tightly in two hands.

When they rounded the bend, Nik leaped backward and Bran-Shey stepped in front of her, silently lamenting.

There stood a large clearing, filled with chanting Devilites. They were all charged with fire in their eyes, nicknamed: "Overtimers" by Spiral Knight HQ. In the midst of the horde, stood three Wardens. They were being handed weapons, and painted with sigils. Becoming Trojans. They continued chanting, then suddenly stopped. A purple mist filled the clearing, and seven Trojans stood, fully armed. Troy was one of them.

"Now!" Bran-Shey hissed, leaping into the horde. Nik followed him, blasting away at the Devilites. A Trojan swung at Bran-Shey, but he rolled nimbly underneath and the sailing blade lodged itself into another Trojan's head. He sliced it's arm off while it frantically tried to retrieve the weapon and the monster fell to the dust. Another combatant swung it's heavy blade at Nik, who had now charged in, fighting bravely. She rolled under the swing and prepared to blast it's head off with two charged Master Blasters. Not even a Trojan could survive that ridiculous amount of trauma to the brain. She stopped dead, as she saw the pendant on it's neck. She had given it to Troy for their first year anniversary. This shock made on of her shots missed, and the remaining one hit it's armoured chest with a ding. The creature turned, and in one movement, slashed her across the midsection. She gasped as she sailed through the air, landing amidst a crowd of panicked Devilites. She landed hard, and immediately passed out, unconscious. Bran-Shey decapitated the last remaining Trojan when he saw Troy, lumbering over to Nik. He threw himself in front and a parried it's swing. He swung his sword at it's head, forgetting what a skilled fighter Troy had been, and the monster used it's shield to deflect the blow. It kicked him aside.

Nik woke up as the Trojan approached him. She had a thought, Bran-Shey had a perfect angle to blow it's crystal apart. She slid a Master Blaster across the floor, and he caught it. He sighted, and fired into the back of the monster. It staggered, he continued to blast away, tears filling his eyes. At last, it sunk to a knee and turned to dust. He grabbed his Sudaruska and used it as a makeshift cane, staggering over to Nik.

Nik felt dizzy and numb. She saw blood all over the ground, and realized this was the end of her life. As he staggered over she said:

"I, always... loved... you...."

He said nothing, and crouched next to her. For a brief moment, their lips met in a kiss, then she fell to the ground, dead. He took a Master Blaster from her cold hands and pressed it to his forehead.

A single, solitary shot echoed throughout the level, and his corpse tumbled over the edge and into the churning gears of the Clockworks.

THE END

Tue, 02/04/2014 - 04:18
#8
Fshuolong's picture
Fshuolong
*slow clap*

Nice story..Though..Short..And I'm slightly don't get the Chapter 4 though...

Tue, 02/04/2014 - 05:32
#9
Malkalack's picture
Malkalack
Swag IS a virtue

Yeah, it was just a little project I wipped out of my butt. "Into the core" was my favorite so far. And the Guardian dude, having lost the woman he loved AND his brother shot himself in the head.

Sat, 03/05/2016 - 10:50
#10
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Angel-Girl
O-O

Even though the last comment was from over two years ago, this story is just too good not to comment on.

I absolutely LOVED the writing style! Everything had this feeling of sadness and hope, but the last chapter ending is what REALLY popped with desperation. So sad! T_T *cries*

There was one confusing thing at the end. Why does Bran-Shey comes over to Nik and kiss her? It doesn't exactly make sense for him to fall in love with Nik when he didn't really show any signs of being attracted before...

But still, awesome awesome awesome job!

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