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Fanfic: The Team. Currently rolecasting

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Tue, 01/13/2015 - 15:17
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Saucce

You may recognize Scorpio from Outnumbered and for Carbonjinxmesa I applied Scorpio to your fanfic. This will have some elements from Outnumbered (I.E. Creos)

Scorpio woke up, laying in his foster mother’s fur.

“GROWR” ‘said’ the fifteen year old. His mother just looked at him with her bright red eyes, and suddenly threw three bright red and black barbs at an approaching wolver and two mischievous chromalisk.

“Rowr” said the Snarbolax, quietly. Scorpio understand what this meant. It was time to leave the den. He shrugged on the coat that his mother had made for him and the hat made to make him look like her. Finally, he picked up the sword that he had fashioned from one of his foster mother’s barbs and the bomb that he had modified from the one that his parents had came with and several more of his foster mother’s barbs. Finally, Scorpio wiggled on the shield that he had made with, once again, some of his mother’s barbs He exited through the looming gate.
Scorpio pressed a button, and after entering, he saw several green boxes along with some of those glowing crystals he recalled from when he had been a baby. Ahead of him, he saw the thing he had been waiting his whole life to ride. It was the elevator. The young teen had barely been able to see it through the gate, even with his mother pointing it out. He kicked one of the boxes, to see what it would yield. A small coin popped out. Scorpio decided to pocket it, and after a lot of box breaking, had several of these strange coins in addition to the coins his parents had owned before death and a hexagonal coin that had a leaf symbol on it, as well as five of his mother’s fangs, to remember her. Finally, he slowly trudged onto the elevator. It shot upward with insane force. Suddenly, he was in a huge place. A city. Many people walked up to him and started looking at his cap and coat.

One said “Wow, he’s got the full Snarbolax set. But he’s not even a soldier yet, see? Does anybody recognize him from anywhere?” Scorpio didn’t understand a word any of them had said. He realized they must distinctively look like he did. Scorpio’s mother always told him what he looked like, with his big red eyes and strange brownish hue. He had never thought about what he would say when he finally took the elevator.

“Rawrg?” Scorpio noted, concerned.

“Hey, use your words, it’s not like the Snarbolax raised you.” Said one of the figures in the crowd. “Oh my god! The Snarbolax raised you didn’t it? That is the elevator you came out of, right?” Scorpio turned his head quizzically.

“Someone get this guy to HQ. He can’t talk!” Scorpio was puzzled. The same person grabbed his arm. “This is gonna be a loooooooong day.”

Well, I'd like no mercy on critique and yeah, role casting. Copy this. I really need antagonists. So, yeah....

Name:
Gender:
Age:
Color(only for knights and monsters):
Race:
Good or evil?
Personality:
Armor:
Shield(optional):
Weapons:
Bio/history:
Relations:

For those of you who actually read this, I'm gonna come back to this later.

Tue, 01/13/2015 - 15:19
#1
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Saucce
SIDENOTE

SIDENOTE: I can only really post on the weekend

Wed, 01/14/2015 - 10:44
#2
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Saucce
Gawd I have to bump myself

Gawd I have to bump myself

Wed, 01/14/2015 - 14:19
#3
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Ember-Break
Hrm...

The story doesn't look bad. But I don't even know what the goal of this story will be. Seeing as Scorpio somehow deveolopes into who he is in Outnumbered... I have no idea what he did in the meantime. For now, this just seems like an exposition.

Before I make some sort of App for you to use, I'm going to need to know what Scorpio will be doing. Will he go through training with the Knights? Will he wander the clockworks? Will he find a Gremlin factory nearby who aims to destroy all of cradle? Without this information, all I can really do is make a regular Knight application to accompany Scorpio...
But you said you really needed antagonists.

Anyways. Some elaboration via OOC or through more storyline-action to reveal what the purpose of this tale is would be greatly appreciated.

Tue, 01/20/2015 - 13:56
#4
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Saucce
DAMMIT I'M FREAKING OUT

Yeah training. Damn I didn't really expect anyone to post and now since this is my first fanfic and I only have another tiny bit written I'm freaking out

Tue, 01/20/2015 - 14:28
#5
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Ember-Break
There IS a "simple" solution.

No need to freak out. Remember, this is a Fan-Fic; you can keep the storyline in Exposition without any applications for as long as you'd like. If you write out good details that could be integrated into Character Apps and/or people see more of your writing and say "Hey! This is some good writing, I wanna join in!" then, naturally, you will receive applications for characters.

That being said, most people like Apps before even beginning. Giving some events which are transpiring in the world around Scorpio will broaden the scope of Applications -- because, right now, I have no idea what I could possibly put into a Bio other than "This is a basic knight" because I have no idea whether Bios incorporating other elements would be allowed.

Anyways. If the barriers to start up the Fan-Fic seem to high, you could always drop the idea, wrestle with it, then come back later with it in a more polished form.

Tue, 01/20/2015 - 16:55
#6
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Saucce
I think thats what I

I think thats what I partially want to do. Thanks Ember.

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