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Wed, 12/16/2015 - 05:59
Wed, 06/22/2016 - 10:20
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Fri, 03/11/2016 - 14:59
#3
*thumbs up* (Random Mini-Review)
Everything flowed pretty well, and the writing style is very nice.
I loved the end of the first chapter with Jay hiding under his bed. *laughs*
Also, it was interesting to see a "Knight" that probably wasn't one at the same time- just weird Swarm stuff.
The second chapter was a little slow. It just didn't feel like much time had passed through the whole thing...or maybe it's just me. *shrug*
The Gremlins were well written, and I could feel the tension between them and Lorraine (general Knight/Gremlin hatred) during the exchange. Nicely done!
Sat, 03/12/2016 - 01:01
#4
Thanks, input is always welcome. :D
Personally, I didn't feel too good about chapter 2. But I feel it helps explain what happened in chapter 1 and kicks the story in a direction I could work with. So, in the end, I guess it's okay, heh. Maybe it's because I haven't been writing any fanfiction for a long while that makes feel that way... oh well, hopefully I'll be able to write more soon.
Wed, 06/22/2016 - 10:21
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Wed, 06/22/2016 - 10:22
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Wed, 06/22/2016 - 10:22
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Wed, 06/22/2016 - 10:23
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[insert joke about the Undeads]
Not the best Story Title, but the story sounded nice. Keep up the good work.