Mysteries of the abyss (S.K. Fan-fiction)

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Azure-Orbit

Greeting Spiral knights forums. My name is Azure-Orbit and what you are reading is my first forum post and first S.K. fan-fiction. This story will be updated irregularly since I write better when I do it for leisure.

I will post the prologue of the story first to get me in the feel of writing. This story will be based of off the game itself, but there will be some real life elements put into play as well (e.g: no respawn within the clockworks). I'm just an amateur writer if you ask about my skills, but I hope you will enjoy reading it all the same.

Now without further ado, enter the "Mysteries of the abyss"

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Prologue: Isolation

Darkness, as far as I could see. Only the twinkling of distant stars gifted me with sight. How long have I been in this pod? How long ever since the destruction of The Skylark? We're there still Spiralians alive? Have they found a place to stay or do they remain in these metallic cocoons; forced to spend an eternity within the vacuum of space?

So many questions, and no answers. I don't know how much longer I can survive this ordeal. The loneliness was driving me to the brink of insanity. I would've given anything to see another face, to talk, to smile, to laugh. Nothing else mattered to me.

The power of my pod had run out long ago.

I followed some star charts in the hopes of getting within a living planet's gravitational pull and perhaps start a new life. It was not to be. I had run out of power before I could even see a planet. I couldn't help but think if this was the end. I was wrong again.

Suddenly, a large object had blocked some stars from view. [what is that?] I thought. It had been so long since I saw something like it, that I had forgotten what it was. It had taken months to forget, but only minutes to remember.

It was a planet.

It was a planet that actually looked inhabitable. I could've sung with joy at that moment, but I knew that there was work to do. I had to drive my pod close to the planet, get within it's gravitational pull, and land slowly enough to avoid any fatal accidents. I quickly opened the pod's power unit and attached it to my armor.

My armor was the only thing keeping me alive, but my pod needed power; I would not let this opportunity of escaping the isolation of space slip past me.

I redirected the power of my armor into the pod's main reactor and began the delicate job of driving the pod into the planet's gravity. I was going to land this cocoon, or die trying.
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Chapter 1: Landing and hatching

"Energy levels at 90%" The pod computer announced. I was trying to make my way to the planet using the least amount of energy possible. Fortunately the planet was already very close. My only problem now was landing it safely, for I did not know how powerful the gravity of this planet was. Well I was about to find out.

"Energy levels at 85%"

I carefully moved the pod towards the planet; I did not want to go too fast the moment I hit its gravitational range lest I crash too quickly and end up destroying myself and the pod.

"Energy levels at 80%"

Things were going well. I might be able to land this and still have at least 50% of my energy levels. If I could just gauge the strength of this planet's gravity...

*Smash*

An asteroid! My pod has been pushed closer to the planet, closer than I would have liked. I had entered it's gravitational range; at high speed.

I had to think quickly otherwise I was going to die in a fire the moment this thing landed. I activated the emergency landing thrusters to slow down my descent. However, the pull of gravity was too strong. I redirected as much energy as possible to the thrusters; it was the only way I was going to make a landing alive.

"Energy levels at 45%"

How far was I from the surface? If I don't land soon my energy levels will deplete and the situation will become critical.

"Energy levels at 35%"

The thrusters strained under the pressure. My helmet's Heads-Up-Display was starting to go static. I shut it off to allow more power to the pod.

"Energy levels at 25%: WARNING, armor re-charge is recommended"

I could almost see the surface. I just needed a little more time...

"Energy levels at 15%: Comm systems offline, Radar offiline"

Just a little more. I passed the peak of a snow-capped mountain and saw a lush forest below me as my pod continued it's dangerous descent.

"Energy levels 10%: Main engines offline, Life-support systems failing"

I was minutes away from hitting the surface...

"Energy levels 5%: Life-support systems critical"

*Boom*

It was the last sound I heard before I smashed into the pod walls. I was knocked dizzy, but thankfully awake. I was happy at the thought that I had survived the landing; but then I began coughing.

My air filters had gone offline, and I was suffocating.

I hurried to the pod door and tried to open it; it was locked. I continued running out of air as I reached into my pack and pulled out a Punch Gun, loaded it, and aimed it at the door. I was seconds from fainting as I shot the door open and fresh air rushed into the pod's metallic hull. I crawled out of my cocoon and looked around. I had successfully hatched.
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Chapter 2: A whole new world

A splitting headache took me over and I fell, kneeling on the grass. The pain from the crash was finally kicking in. I re-activated my HUD and checked the energy reading:

It was at 2%

No wonder I was so tired. After laying in the grass for a few minutes, the headache wore off. I stood up and once again examined my surroundings. I didn't have anything better to do, so I decided to look around and find out what sort of alien planet this was. I walked around slowly and tried to investigate the forest, but I had to remain near the pod. If there were any Spiralians on this planet then the only way they would find me is through my pod. But were there Spiralians here? Another question that I could not answer, for now at least.

As I continued examining the forest I saw what appeared to be four-legged, fur-coated, creatures. They were unlike anything I had seen before. 3 of them ran past me, not minding the crash at all. [That's strange, I thought that they would've taken more notice of an event like this. Could it be a regular thing for them? If so, then there may be Spiralians here] I thought. It was a hopeful idea; Perhaps we could start a new colony on this planet, or better yet, find a way to return to planet Spiral.

As I continued pondering about what I could do if there were Spiralians here, darkness began falling. I decided to spend the night outside next to my pod. The grass would be a lot more comfortable then the pod seat. I tucked my hands behind my head and looked skyward.

I saw the most beautiful sight I had ever seen in my entire life. Millions of stars lit up the vast emptyness of space. I was surprised that I did not notice them with my time inside the pod, but then again I was too occupied with the loneliness to take any notice.

A sight like this was rare on Spiral. The lights of the capital blotted out any view of the stars so you would have to travel far out into uninhabited territory to see the constellations. I could still remember the constellations taught to me when I was a child. Calibur the brave, Flourish the chivalrous, and Brandish the strong. the ancient heroes of planet Spiral. On this planet however, the constellations were completely different.

I could not recognize any pattern in the stars. [Looks like I'll need to be re-educated by a local] I thought jokingly.But wait, was there intelligent life on new world? Perhaps there were; this place certainly seems to have the ability to house intelligent life, and if there were Spiralians here then all the better.

Eventually, I could no longer fight slumber and fell asleep on the starlit landscape. Once I had regained my energy the next day, I would find out as much as I could about this planet. Hopefully, the locals would be friendly. If not, then I always keep my sword handy and my gun loaded.
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Chapter 3: Local wildlife (coming soon)

Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
Mysteries of the abyss

Reserved, just in case

Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
All feedback is appreciated

What do you guys think of the story so far?

Give me some feedback, good or bad, I need to know what I have to improve and if this story is worth continuing.

Firehate's picture
Firehate
+100

Awesome !!! Can I Join ?

Firehate's picture
Firehate
+100

Awesome !!! Can I Join ?

Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
Some characters could be nice...

Well, I could use some character ideas for the story. Post the following.

Name:
Race: (Spiralians for knights. You can also be Cradle inhabitants if you wish e.g. Strangers, Gremlins, etc.)
Armor:(Disregard if you are not a Spiralian)
Equipment:
Gender:
Personality:
Alignment: (Is your character good or bad?)
Bio: (Either his/her life on Cradle, or what happened after the destruction of The Skylark)

Keep in mind that this is pretty much in the same timeline as the current Spiral knights. The protagonist just arrived a lot later than the other spiral knights. This means that Haven and The Clockworks already exist and have been discovered.

I will decide if your character is acceptable

Firehate's picture
Firehate
Thanks !

Ok...Here Goes...

Name: Firehate
Armor: Skolver Set
Gender: Male
Personality: Aggressive, Loves Fighting, Loves Killing, Clever, Loves Revenge, Has An Unknown Emotional Side, Helps People...At A Price
Bio: (Either his/her life on Cradle, or what happened during the destruction of The Skylark)
Coming Soon

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Firehate
Thanks !

Ok...Here Goes...

Name: Firehate
Race: (Spiralians for knights. You can also be Cradle inhabitants if you wish e.g. Strangers, Gremlins, etc.) Spiralian
Armor:(Disregard if you are not a Spiralian) Skolver Set
Equipment:(Once again, disregard if you are not a Spiralian) Leviathan Blade,Final Flourish,Valiance,Nitrome
Gender: Male
Personality: Aggressive, Loves Fighting, Loves Killing, Clever, Loves Revenge, Has An Unknown Emotional Side, Helps People...At A Price
Alignment: (Is your character good or bad?) Good, May Sometimes Seem Bad
Bio: (Either his/her life on Cradle, or what happened after the destruction of The Skylark) Coming Soon

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Azure-Orbit
What's going on with the posting?

Why do you keep double posting firehate? It's a little annoying. Also, I have added some extra stuff to the app so just modify it a bit.

Duskfinder's picture
Duskfinder
:-)

Name: dusk
Gender: male
Race: knight
Armor: divine veil , grey owlite shield , grey feather mantle
Weapons : acheron, boltbrand, plasma cap. , gigawatt pulsar , daring rigadoon
Personality: nice
Alignment: Friendly
Other: rich, expert fighter, trained medical
Bio: Dusk crashed four months earlier than the rest of the knights.
After being recruited to the Spiral Order he quickly rose up in the ranks and became a well known figure. Ocassionaly he visits the crash landing spots to help out new knights.

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Firehate
Sorry

Sorry

Nechrome's picture
Nechrome
Name: NecroRace: A surviving

Name: Necro
Race: A surviving Almirian Crusader who secretly joined the Knights when they landed
Armor: CObalt helm, cobalt armor, magic hood
Equipment: Bristling buckler, jalovec, khorovod, shockburst brandish, super blast bomb, noobie stuff
Gender: Male
Personality: Shadowly, not very social. no one know that he is not a true Sk. Has a profound interest in fiends, and has a secret cave in the Gloaming WIldwoods where he mix-breeds greavers.
Alignment: He's... complicated. fights for the knights, though.
Bio: Back in the days of the Almire, Necro was a fierce and powerful Crusader. But when Vanaduke exiled himself, Necro left the Empire to look for a new place to inhabitat. He eventually stumbled upon an elevator, and straveled to the surface of Cradle. He spent many, many years as a nomad, every now and them going down the Clockworks to explore. He eventually went back down to Almire to see what had become of it after all those years, and discovered a razed, destroyed world. he went back to the surface, where he stayed until the Sk arrived. Scrapping his Almirian Crusader armor and stealing new stuff from the KNights, he posed as one of their own.

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Azure-Orbit
Update

New chapter released. I appreciate the character apps you guys have made but I could also use some criticism. Also, not all characters will be included in the story so don't be upset if you're not chosen. I am the writer of the story so I have the power to do what I will with it.

Firehate and Necro. You're characters seem acceptable, but they will probably appear later into the story because of the powerful equipment they have/ Probably within the Clockworks or at Haven.

Dusk, finish up your app. I added a few extra things to it.

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Valorai
Can i join? Name: Blue Race:

Can i join?

Name: Blue
Race: Skolver
Armor: Fur
Weapons: Claws fangs
Personality: Does NOT TALK. Loyal, mischievous.
Alignment: Does not trust the knights. Although in this I want it to be FORCED to help them

Bio: Ever since Blue was a pup, she has hated the knights. They killed the rest of her pack, and family. She has only ever trusted one knight. The one who stopped the other knights from killing her when she was a pup. That knight died. The only thing she has to remember him by is the gold necklace one her neck that says: BLUE. Ever since the knight died, shes been on her own. After the destruction of the skylark, her legs have been broken from parts that fell on her.

(Also I would like her to be caged up by someone, in.. guess what? A cage.):)

I hope this is acceptable. :) If it isn't please tell me.

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Azure-Orbit
Blue

I guess that's acceptable. Also, the skylark was destroyed BEFORE the knights landed on Cradle. So I will probably have to modify your bio a bit. Other than that, your app is ok.

I'm debating whether you will appear in an auction at Haven or in the hands of a poacher in the wild.

Duskfinder's picture
Duskfinder
What am I forgetting ? Also

What am I forgetting ? Also the bio isn't great , was in a rush so just wrote some stuff down

Za-Ck's picture
Za-Ck
I'll try joining/my thoughts

Overall, very well thought-out and you do pay very good attention to detail, I like that. From what I can see so far, you have a solid start to a fanfic here and I would like to see more. The chapters are a little short, but that isn't a bad thing since each seems to be well written so far. Keep up the good work!

Now for a character submission. I'm gonna try to go with something new this time.

Name: Sprocket
Race: Gremlin
Armor: standard Ironclaw clothing
Equipment: Thwack Hammer
Gender: Male
Personality: A bit gruff and on the serious side but friendly enough if you actually try to talk him. He has a bit of a stubborn streak and is known for his sarcasm. He is also quite a skilled mechanic and repairman.
Alignment: Technically bad, but still reluctantly helpful when possible

Bio: Was found heavily injured after a raid on the Ironclaw Munitions Factory after the other Gremlins had fled, and was brought to Haven to be interrogated on the Gremlins' secrets and plans. While they were unfruitful in obtaining any serious information, Sprocket reluctantly helps maintain Haven and its various facilities due to the feeling he owes the knights at least for nursing him back to health. He is forbidden from ever entering the Arcade (due to it being the entrance to the Clockworks), and is closely monitored wherever he goes. It doesn't stop him from trying now and again from escaping though, which often involves explosions of some sort.
However, even though he wouldn't admit it out loud, he is starting to grow fond of the knights and their society. He is rather conflicted between these developing feelings and his fierce loyalty to King Tinkinzar.
In his spare time, he runs a small shop in the Bazaar for repairing damaged equipment and armor for a small fee.

Littlerbit's picture
Littlerbit
I be joinink.

Name: Amazeltoa
Race: Gremlin
Weapons: Magic (*snort snort*) and A large sledgehammer he usually carries around.
Armor: A black tanktop and tan shorts, along with purple goggles on his forehead.
Alignment: For the Strangers
Personality: Kind of sad sometimes, very defensive, hospitable and mostly friendly to anyone.
Bio: Outlawed for discovering the secret to magic, Amazeltoa now assists the Strangers with creating and repairing gates, and accompanies Basil on his trips in the Clockworks to test out recipes Amazeltoa creates himself, as he is also an Alchemist. In his free time, he creates tokens. These tokens tell him things about the Clockworks because of a unique power he has. He lives in an abandoned treasure vault far under Haven, and has called that place home since he was a child.

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Littlerbit
Also, great story!

I think it's a wonderful story, and the imagery you use to show the Knight's time in the pod is vivid and quite beautiful. At least better than mine (hehe).

Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
I'm such a forum newbie! (Also, regarding the characters)

I just realized that you could update the main post >.< forgive my ignorance.

Also, all characters are acceptable. However, firehate and dusk; your characters could use some work. Keep in mind that not all characters will appear in the same time and the order in which they appear does not mean that I favor one character over the other. It's just the way I think they will fit best to the story.

I could also use some more feedback.

Duskfinder's picture
Duskfinder
still not enough?

Fine forget about my character

Echo's picture
Echo
Sign up

Name: Bakants

Race: Spiralians

Armor: Chroma(Later upgrades to arcane salamander?)

Equipment: Cold Iron Vanquisher, Proto Gun

Gender: M

Personality: Losing interest in the Spiral Knights mission, desires destroying all dark creatures from this world. Not to talkative. Prefers being alone.

Alignment: Good

Bio: His friends were killed by phantoms, they haunt his dreams every night, he has a strong lust for revenge.

Travid's picture
Travid
I'm in

Name: Travid
Race: Spiralians
Armor: Dusker
Equipment: tempered calibur, sealed sword, blast bomb, and a Cryotech Alchemer
Gender: male
Personality: nice and likes to help
Alignment: Good
Bio: Ever sense his friends were killed in front of him and had a surviving friend die in his arms, he vowed to do his best to save the lives of any person in his squad or in war.

(edit: hope that helps, it also kinda confused me too.)

Echo's picture
Echo
Can't wait for the next

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
Regarding the characters

Dusk you're character is in, but I would prefer my character not running into another knight this early. Forgive my reply, I wrote it when I saw your un-edited app. I may need to tweak your personality a bit though.

Echo, you're in too.

Travid, your character's personality is a little, confusing. How can he be nice but will do anything to get a mission done, seems a bit contradictory.

NOTE: Any unaccepted characters may appear in the story, but they will have a rather short life-span or will play only a very minor role.

*New chapter will be up in a few more days. I write this in my free time so updates will range from long to short. Please do not rush me, I write better when I don't consider this work or an obligation.

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Isisdelltion
I'm in

Name: Tari
Race: Gremlin
Armor: Ironclaw Mender Stuff
Equipment: Mender Wrench and a Proto Gun he picked up from a fallen knight.
Gender: Male
Personality: Irritable, but always willing to help out. Is a friend with Sprocket.
Alignment: Good, but very grouchy.
Bio: He got lost in the clockworks after a mob of Zombies picked off his squad. He found an old abandoned elevator shaft and took it to Emberlight, where the Crimson Order found him. He was being brought to King Tinkinzar when a group of Spiral Knights stumbled upon them. Although they didn’t last long, the knights gave Tari a chance to escape. For that he fells indebted to the Knights, and a strong resentment toward his own kind. Sometimes he guides knights into the Clockworks, for all the scrap metal they get, of course.

Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
Update

New chapter is up, sorry for the delay. It's not very long so I don't know if you'll find it worth the wait.

Also, your character is accepted Isisdelltion. I probably wont be accepting anymore characters at this time, since there seem to be way too many already.

Valorai's picture
Valorai
I think it was good. Took a

I think it was good. Took a little long though.

Firehate's picture
Firehate
BUMPITY BUMP BUMP BUMP

BUMPITY BUMP BUMP BUMP

Echo's picture
Echo
Bump?

Are you still writing this? Good so far.

Tevokkia's picture
Tevokkia
I didn't realize that you had

I didn't realize that you had started a fanfic, but I see that it's rather old. I know you're very busy, but if you ever pick this up again, it looks like it will be a good read. I like your development of the intensity of the situation as his pod was going down, and of both the history and sense of wonder he's experiencing in a new place.

Isisdelltion's picture
Isisdelltion
Wow, it's been awhile

Yeah, this was made when I was new here and just had joined the 'Gades.
However much it'd be awesome if he continued, I know Azure has a lot on his plate. Looking back at this is quite the treat anyways. :D