Breaking up the block of text?

A lot of people may not read it, myself included, because it is literally a wall of text.

Put in a double paragraph at each new idea and when someone speaks.

Here, I'll show you:
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After the big commotion in the Meeting Hall, it was uneasy for many knights to make it back home. Every step bringing back memories. For the many lost, it was a tragedy.

Robud and Lightkillermoth went to go see their new V.I.P bunk in the house district. As they opened the door, they could see a bundle of objects from pools to plasma screen T.V.s, it had everything.

"WOAH! THIS IS WAY OVERDONE!" Robud said in delight.

"Maybe, but I think it's PEERFECT!" Lightkillermoth replied.

They headed upstairs to see their bedrooms. They didn't ask for much so it turned out to be normal rooms with T.V.s.

"Well at least they didn't over-do the rooms." Robud said while laughing a little.

"Well it's 10:00 so I guess I'll see you tomorrow." Lightkillermoth said.

"G'night." The two went to their rooms and easily, fell asleep.
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Also, try to use other words than 'said'. Like you already used 'replied' but also use other words where appropriate.

Like when Robud says it's overdone, you could have used 'Squealed' or something.

Try rephrasing the speech sentences well. Like Lightkillermoth's last line, instead it could have been:

Lightkillermoth nodded in agreement. "Well, it's 10:00 so I guess I'll see you tomorrow."

Nice screenshots though. :)

And sorry to be a downer on your story :/