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I am starting a new fan fiction but i wont be putting in punctuations except the comma , question mark and fullstop so srry ok !

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Tue, 04/17/2012 - 05:51
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Shadowdarkest

Episode 1 - The Lost Snarbolax
shadowdarkest was the only remaining snarbolax/knightfrom here his story begins:-

I was a snarbolax pup on my own my brothers and sisters were destroyed by constructs and gremlins as they were too powerful when they growed up. i was the only snarbolax left i was a new generation i owent to some geo knights and told them to help me become more powerful i was the first ever half sanrbolax half knight.i started to call myself shadowdarkest because my nature was dark and shadowy the other knights feared me but a close group was formed with me it seems other species of wolvers had also gone through some of this trauma and one of the most prominent was the vog he and i were like brothers . he was half vog half knight we were both hunted by the same kind gremlins and thier servants constructs. we explored the clockworks like no other team wherever we went dead gremlins and menders would be found in our wake or mine atleast vog would countlessly slaughter through hundred of constructs while i did the same for gremlins with my barbarous thorn blade and his fang of vog we would engage in a bloodbath. spiral society accepted us after we helped them but i sensed spiral society would need much more for the upcoming darkness.one day engaging in our usual fury of destruction one small gremlin caught our eye he was like no other we expected he was royalty. he hated the life of grmlins and wanted to help spiral society we took him back along with us but spiral socirty neglected him but after a while when he started giving out secrets spiral society looked as if they found a crown jewel....

TO Be Continued ........

Now i want chaeracter ideas and i want them based on certain combinations and they need to have a back story so if you want to be a charcter i suggest you write down your details and post them below

And FYI Shadowdarkest:
Armour-Snarbolax Coat
Helm-Crown of the fallen (this was given to him by a knight who had helped him defend himself Later Known as masterkohli)
Shield-Barbarous thorn shield
Weapons-Barbarous thorn blade and dark briar barrage

The Vog (true name revealed in next edition):

Armour-vog cub coat
helm-vog cub cap
shield-crest of almire (given to him long ago by a worthy knight of almire as their kingdom was being destroyed)
weapons-fang of vog,combuster (given to him by basil as a reward for attaing greatness)

Tue, 04/17/2012 - 22:27
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Shadowdarkest
Episode 2 The gun puppy Knight

It was a bright summer morning but for shadowdarkest and the vog it was construct time every morning. It had been a routine they would kill until they were tired and gremlins on that particular depth were no more. But this time during their adventures they were joined by another figure shrouded in mystery but whom shadowdarkest remembered very well. It was masterkohli - upon full inspection it was revealed he was now the possessor of immense power he had a bombastic demo suit an ice-queen crown and for some reason wielded all of the spiral socities original and most powerful weapons the leviathan blade,the nitronome,the valiance,and the fastest sword which is only matched by the barbarous thorn blade (a.k.a my sword)the final flourish.

from the moment he appeared the vog seemed agitated he always kept his DA and AP handy only cradle knew why ? I however was really happy to see him, and was informed of his progress after the level me ,him and the vog were sitting in haven when all of a sudden the vog tried to attack him !! He responded but the vog came to no harm i tried to keep them apart and then asked the vog why he attacked ? He replied that masterkohli was half- construct !!?? i looked to masterkohli for some explanation but found none i had a private chat with him in which he revealed he knew the vog and his real name was VITE (the vog's)

he started to explain ,"I was a gun puppy at one time but nobody could defeat me no attacks worked on me and i was thought to be the ironclaw munitions factory's best support weapon but was taken away to spiral society labs for examination they found i posseced superior armour and weaponry compared to other gun puppies they fitted a positronic brain into an artificial body, gave me emotions and real thoughts and used my gun puppy armour as a basic design for all the armour now it was light hard and durable but it was meant for combat i was told to unleash my wrath on the red roarmulus twins the ultimate weapon designed to seige haven and wreak havoc upon it i used my skill and armour to gun,bomb,slash,parry my way to victory but before i could go to the red roarmulis twins i had to pass through the realm of the ice queen this is where i obtained my crown from and then he was unleashed upon the clockworks and this was how i came to meet you as you can see we are not much alike we are meant to be brothers !!!"

EDIT- Added the paragraphs On this ose pls tell me it looks ok now

Tue, 04/17/2012 - 09:52
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Shadowdarkest
Episode 3 The evil twin

One day masterkohli disappeared without a trace vite was excite at this news but i was worried we dug our way through the clockworks but found no trace of him but at the starting of tier 3 he appeared claiming he had to do some errands when we inquired about these errands he didn't reply day by day his behavior got weirder and weirder and by the end of the 7th day he would disappear every day at the exact same time we didn't know and when we inquired again he wouldn't reveal to us why he was doing it. One day we didn't see him at all and never aging saw a trace of him for a few months but then we were travelling through the clockworks a voice whispered inside my and vite's head it whispered "hello warrior i have come to claim your and your friend vite's lives you are unnatural creatures who do not belong on this planet he said and at that same moment a crushing darkness came over me when i woke up i was in a realm i had never seen before it was as shiny and golden as what was once vanaduke's old castle in front of me i saw masterkohli in a lass tube like contraption i was outraged sure he was a construct but nobody deserved to die like this i looked ahead and their on a throne sat a knight like figure wearing black robes which positively seeped with darkness and despair in it we saw thousands of souls of knights and monster alike weeping and in despair was angry and when i looked back saw vite in chains i looked at this figure and whispered it cannot be you cannot be Silent Death ? the figure replied you are a knight who is not easily mistaken yes i am silent death the bringer of eternal darkness but tell me knight are you not afraid i answered no i am not ! because i shall fight you for the release of my friends he said you yourself no no no i shall let you use your friends help and in that moment vite and masterkohli were beside me i beckoned them forward and we all took out identical divine avenger's with ASI:Vh and Damage bonus vs undead very high we proceeded to fight but every time we landed a hit on the god he landed two we were wearing down and were getting exhausted but then for the first time ever Vite spoke you shall not take me and charge at silent death silent death was shaken apart we continued our assault on him and now we were winning slowly one by one his weapons of elemental, energy failed and we began winning and then we saw some shield lying in the corner we ran as the wind and say 3 particular shields a giant shield with spikes on it which vite put on a small shield with a contraption on it which master put on and a small control with a rocket strapped to your back which i put on when we fought vite activated his shield and it raised an enormous shield which healed us as we fought all the scars marks bruises and cuts healed one by one when vites shield was exhausted by the continuous onslaught master put his shield up for a moment his shape quivered and then he disappeared and did an onslaught on silent death and it was my turn now i went up to silent death and started my onslaught whenever he attacked i pressed the controller and an indigo flame appeared d me which boosted me to incredible speed like this we wore silent death down and in the end finished it with divine avenger charges all at the same time , silent death was no more . we then returned to our bodies and woke up with a start and found masterkohli beside us we all checked our arsenals and found 3 new items in each of them when we equipped them we found out that were waving and golden versions of our previous Armour and by golden i mean the Armour had golden carvings and runes all over them my snarbolax coat was black with golden highlights the flame on vite's Armour was pure golden and master kohli's suit was also now shimmering golden we found a note in my arsenal it stated that the equipment we were wearing had once belonged to the greatest spiral knights the gods had acted and put a little bit of power in each masterkohli's suit was tempered by pyras the god of fire and explosions he would now be able to bomb wing and slash much faster , vite's Armour had been modified by celesta the goddess of energy and life his Armour would now not succumb to any attacks and would remain as good as new forever ' and lastly my Armour had been acted upon by silent death himself he had imbued the amour with many spells which would allow me to face the stumbling hordes of he abyss with particular ease and with it would be able to defeat them all with a maximum of 3 slashes we all used our new found powers to their maximum in each of our adventures and journeys to the clockworks but when we inquired what masterkohli had been doing he said he had been in silent deaths palace or 5 weeks but we saw him yesterday !!?? this could be turning out to be more sinister than it seems to be !!

Tue, 04/17/2012 - 11:01
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Nechrome
MY EYES ARE BLEEDING.

MY EYES ARE BLEEDING.

Tue, 04/17/2012 - 12:49
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Happyapathy
Advice

Just been honest here but if your looking to make your story feel like one continuous story, cutting out the use of proper punctuation and paragraphs is not the way to do it, no one is going to read the huge wall of text you have here so I suggest you rethink the whole 'no period' thing and break it up into paragraphs cause it's just painful to look at right now regardless of the quality of the story.

Tue, 04/17/2012 - 12:55
#5
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Ariasky
May I rip my eyes out?

May I rip my eyes out?

Tue, 04/17/2012 - 14:06
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Shadowdarkest
troll

ok ill fix that from the next edition onwards and pls tell me some character bios and ariasky yes yes you may :D

Tue, 04/17/2012 - 14:23
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Valorai
AGGGGGGGGGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

AGGGGGGGGGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
......

*Dies of blood loss)

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