(Now, I'm going to be doing things different for this. I will add "Diary Entries" that tell what the main character thinks. The landscape of Cradle's also changed drastically, as the title suggests, haven and the clockworks are underwater, after a chain of events involving the water in the cooling chamber to melt and cause a mega-tsunami that drowns cradle, killing 50% of the knights living on cradle, and causing portions of the ground to go up to the surface, causing "Islands", so this is like The Legend Of Zelda: The Wind Waker with it's setting.)
Back story
Diary Entry 1
"Cradle has become an aquatic planet.
After the cooling chamber disaster, half of the knights on cradle drowned, and haven has been buried beneath the waves. The survivors, including much of the order, built the artificial island known as "New Haven", and they've lived there ever since, and they created boats and ships to traverse the endless sea. I think that these changes could cause us to be stuck here forever!"
-Kinl
(Guess which Legend of Zelda character's name this is when spelled the right way!)
Kinl is a beginner knight, who was barely living in haven for one month before the disaster. He survived, and lives in New Haven. He's still in his proto set, with Spiral Sallet and Culet. He has a Proto sword, gun and bomb. This is the story of his adventure to save the knights who survived the disaster.
^He ish link!!
Good job so far and I think it will be interesting to have it written as journal entries.