I'm new at this, so no negative comments please.
Chapter 1: The Battle Begins
The battle started so quickly, Supermetalmario didn't have time to think. He was having a party with some guildees and goofing off in the arcade when these terrible beasts invaded Haven. They were faster than any other beast in the Clockworks. They were stronger than anything else, even Darkfire Vanaduke. They invaded The Arcade and Supermetalmario attacked them faster than any other member of Spiral Peace Keepers. He started hacking enemies with his Silent Nightblade, and shooting with his Silversix. Of course, he was joined in battle with his friend and Officer Megaorder. Their attacks seemed useless against these terrible beasts.
Megaorder began shouting to the others, "Run now, Supermetalmario and I have this, but we don't have the ability to fight these monsters off AND protect you! Please get on the elevator now!"
Many knights got on the elevators and ran while some stayed to fight. The next knight in the battle was Officer Lordvalkar. He began slashing and hacking at the new monsters. Then more knights joined him and protected others so they could get on the elevator.
Supermetalmario caught up with his old friend, Ember-Knight. Ember-Knight and he had been pals on Skylark before the crash and had bested many beasts together, and yet, they could do nothing to these beasts. New knights and experienced ones alike were on the floor, but all the knights in Town Square or The Arcade were safe or on the floor. The beasts came from The Bazzar so Supermetalmario assumed there was no one left there. Supermetalmario looked at Ember-Knight and said, "I hope you can keep up with me." They began running around the room distracting the beasts, but to no avail.
Then, the worst thing that could have happened did. A new yellow knight ,Fiery-Death, who was wearing a Cyclops Cap and a Spiral Brigandine came in. He drew his Hot Edge and shouted, "Come and get me! I can take all of you and survive without a scratch!" Then the beasts took off after him.
Supermetalmario felt bad instantly. Fiery-Death gave himself up for them. Then he realized that a knight died while holding a Hot Edge. 'Ironic Fiery-Death would go out and die using a Hot Edge.' Supermetalmario gathered the few survivors and told them to hurry and look for any other living knights. Supermetalmario looked around and saw Lordvalkar was okay, but he couldn't see Megaorder. "Please let Megaorder be okay, he was an amazing friend and officer. Please!" Supermetalmario's shout echoed around the guildhall.
Megaorder was against the wall next to a knight he never even knew. He was wearing a full Snarbolax set, and had the shield and weapons to match. Megaorder tried to scream for help but is sounded like gibberish. Luckily, his guildee, Ladyaurora, a new player came and helped him to the elevator, and then helped him to the elevator, near Supermetalmario. "Thang you" Megaorder said. 'I really wish I could speak correctly' Megaorder thought.
Lordvalkar walked over to Hydro-Tanker who was merely KO'ed. Lordvalkar had seen the accident and helped him up. A monster had slammed him against the wall and then nearly threw him over the edge of the arcade, when Supermetalmario amd Ember-Knight stepped in and saved poor Hydro-Tanker. "Glad to see someone's okay." Lordvalkar dragged Hydro-Tanker to the elevator. He kept searching for survivors, yet found no more.
Supermetalmario took a quick head-count. There was Megaorder, Ladyaurora, Lordvalkar, Ember-Knight, Hydro-Tanker (a member of Spiral Peace Keepers, like everyone else) and himself. He surveyed everyones injuries. Ladyaurora had a huge gash in the back of her armor. Megaorder could barely speak and had an injured leg. Lordvalkar's helm was dented, but other than that he looked fine. Ember-Knight didn't have hardly a scratch on him and Hydro-Tanker was KO'ed, but alive. Supermetalmario himself seemed pretty well off with only a gash in the arm he didn't need for fighting. "Looks like we're doing well already. Oh well come on." That was six knights in total and the rest had already got on the elevators. Supermetalmario tried to reach other knights, yet it seemed nobody would answer. He looked around and was glad to have the six of them and yet, couldn't shake the feeling they couldn't take these new enemies alone. Then they all got on the elevator and headed to see what terrors lie below.
That's all and please give me only POSITVE feedback, because I'm very new to this.
If you want feedback, then I'd suggest shortening the names to some kind of nickname...
Ex: Supermetalmario=Mario
Also, Atgatg owns these forums...and I still don't really know where the whole guildwar thing is at...
but I still get a bit annoyed everytime I see a 'Spiral Peace Keeper', considering how lame us regular 'Peacekeepers' are. ;D