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Gremlin Legends and Knights Tales

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Sat, 05/12/2012 - 03:55
Epotech's picture
Epotech

Gremlin Legends and Knights Tales

Dear Reader,
In case you are wondering, I am remotely entering this into a digitalized diary through my radio unit.

I am writing this so that you may be able to know of the dangers that await you and of the history and truth about this place. I hope that you will be able to find out what has happened to me in your adventures and not make the same mistakes I have. I was an explorer of the clockworks a brave adventurer, one day I was fighting a horde of Gremlins, after defeating them I was walking away when I noticed a strange slip of paper that was being held by the leader. You might think a slip of paper is nothing to worry about but this piece of paper had intricate wiring around it, as I touched it, it changed, into a electronic book, I was entranced. Upon it were the words: Maintain the infection…

I arrived at Emberlight shortly after, when I asked the gremlins there they all seemed to be hiding something and all said they didn’t know what it meant. Except for one, the old gate keeper, they say he was the first to be banished from the great colony, he is the oldest of them. I asked him, at first he was unwilling to speak, then I offered him a snipe egg (Gremlins seem to like keeping baby snipes as pets) he agreed to tell me what it meant, but instead of telling me, he brought me to an abandoned chained up gate. There he gave me a shadow key something that I used to think was a legend, and he unlocked the gate. Before I went down to explore he warned me: Do not be consumed by them, never give in to them and never think of them as real they are the infected.

To be continued…

Sat, 05/12/2012 - 14:11
#1
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Supermetalmario
Awesome!

The way you tell this is epic, but needs more characters and some more dialog. Like, I said, "Tell me what 'Maintain the infection' means." Other than that this is truly epic! The way you tell the story is suspenseful and amazing.

Sun, 05/13/2012 - 02:24
#2
Epotech's picture
Epotech
Gee thanks...

I'm still working on it, lolz. I'm gonna be like releasing something every 2 days so next part is tomorrow. Hope you enjoy it.

Sun, 05/13/2012 - 04:22
#3
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Metaalpha
So..... Cool!!!!!

I am luving it, I'm speechless.........
It's so EPIC in the way you tell it!!!!

Btw can u show me a pic of a snipe egg?

EDIT: if you do a VERY good job with this I might have some cr for u.....

Sun, 05/13/2012 - 06:23
#4
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Angelic-Tear
Ecin

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Thing down here: that's just a compliment. I'm a bit crazy and was bored so i typed it weirdly. I think your stories petty cool. sorry!

Sun, 05/13/2012 - 23:12
#5
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Epotech
Gremlin Legends and Knights tales (continued)

At first it seemed like a normal ride down, then there was a loud screech, the gate stopped. Above me, wires snapped and sparks suddenly began to fly. The lift began to free fall. I did the only thing I could think of, using my Sentenza I charged my gun up and caught onto the foot of my owl. I was lucky, I landed on a clockwork platform not far from where the lift smashed down. I looked at my map, nothing, it was all static, strange I thought something is blocking my signal. I wandered along the pathways, hoping to find an exit.

I entered a room, smashing open some treasure boxes I heard a moan. I turned around and saw, a knight sprawled out on the ground at deaths door. I ran towards him, then around him I noticed a strange black oily substance, suddenly he began to stand, his skin became black oily and rotten, a sword appeared in his hand and his eyes turned blood red. He charged toward me, I used my shield just in time the monster was knocked back, frustrated it began to change shape until it was a half knight half zombie thing. Black ooze dripped of the bones of the rib cage and a new sword appeared in it’s hand. A shield in the other and it attacked. This time my shield broke. I was thrown back onto the ground dust flew everywhere. I picked up my sword just in time and parried his blows. I hit his head, the strange ooze flew everywhere. Some of it got onto me, and I began to hear strange thoughts in my head.
“Give in, give in. Join the swarm defeat the outlanders, those that fell from the sky, free the great swarm. Destroy the sanctuary burn this world and everything, free us…”

I fought hard against the voice my head began to ache then I felt as if it was burning, finally I managed to pull it off and shake it away from me. Horrified I ran through the rest of the levels, I didn’t encounter anymore of these monsters. Finding a lift I stepped into it, and noticed there weren’t any buttons to the surface.

To be continued…

Mon, 05/14/2012 - 02:31
#6
Metaalpha's picture
Metaalpha
It's getting heaps more

It's getting heaps more interesting, keep it up

btw I noticed u changed ur avatar thing

Mon, 05/14/2012 - 02:40
#7
Epotech's picture
Epotech
Yes I know

Yes I know, I prefer to think of myself as an office minion working to bring the story to life. That pic u wanted, is gonna be hand drawn and I'm also working on one of the thing that attacked the character ( funny we don't know his name).
Hand drawn no colour (maybe)
Enjoy
PS. New part coming out in 2 days
one day for drawing one day for writing.
plus I got homework to do.

Mon, 05/14/2012 - 03:14
#8
Metaalpha's picture
Metaalpha
If u don't have time u don't

If u don't have time u don't need to draw the pic but it would be cool.

Mon, 05/14/2012 - 03:49
#9
Epotech's picture
Epotech
I got tons of the stuff

I got tons of time not to worry the picture is looking great!

Mon, 05/14/2012 - 16:55
#10
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Epotech
Part 3

The lift began to go down, strangely there wasn’t a need for energy to be used. Hopefully I was going to a good place. The lift arrived on a strange level, it was a single platform, the grass was white and green, but it glowed! It radiated a white light, I don’t know how to explain it, it was so peaceful and calm there I thought I could stay there forever. I walked along until I came across a strange statue like object, inspecting it I noticed a button very much like the ones on the alchemy machines in Haven. I pressed it. A panel slid out revealing a screen and the name of the machine, the sanctuary alchemy machine, strange I thought. “How is this place called a sanctuary? Is it a place that is safe from something that is not meant to be, maybe the monsters above?” I took a note to return to this place and to tell others about it, the machine held recipes unseen before to anyone!

I continued on my journey until I reached a lift, the lift took me back up to the surface. As I stepped out of the gate, a few knights clamored around me, asking me what I had seen and what was happening to me, I didn’t understand, I had only been on a journey, how could they know of the wonderful ad horrible things I saw? Then I noticed, on my helmet, a mark had been branded from where the black ooze had been. The mark was a single pink and black eye. Then I noticed something more! My shield had been half eaten away!

Sitting down I told them of my adventure in the clockworks, some said I was making it up, others were unsure, but three of them believed me. Marsca, Bulido and Veriets joined with me, Fulgur as a team to discover and find out what was meant by, “maintain the infection”.

To be continued...

PS. I might be writing a bit more from time to time so check back regularly.

Tue, 05/15/2012 - 19:07
#11
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Epotech
so what do u think?

I really want to know what people think about my writing because I wanna improve it or know the good points. Please read the story and I'm gonna be adding a new part today.
Thanks!
Epotech

Sun, 05/20/2012 - 11:13
#12
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Angelic-Tear
Love it.

shame nobody has posted. I'm sure everybody who has looked liked it. Well, you have one very good fan!

Mon, 05/21/2012 - 14:24
#13
Metaalpha's picture
Metaalpha
That very good fan is

That very good fan is meeee!!!!!!!!!

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