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Sun, 08/19/2012 - 20:46
Fireherat's picture
Fireherat

As Knight name firenight try to get to safety from his race ship Skylark before it crashed in cradle. he try to run for his family members before they dont make it . his mom told him that his brother airart was lose then he went to find him and then he find the doctor who was helping knight get to safety like firenight. they team up and went to find airart. then firenight ask the doctor this: " why are you here"? doctor: im here to find my fiend amy. then fire said "ok" . then all of the sudden doctor told fire that " fire it there monster and people from other places that somehow made it to this world. Someone name steve is trying to find someone name herobrine" "if he dont that evil guys could kill the whole knight race and take over the unveruse" but fire wasnt ready to hear that . so he said " cant you do that ?" but he said he cant " herobrinne is to hard for one man job. "ok then just fine airart " so then they did they found herobine with him. herbrine:" Tell me where is the hanger" !?!?!?!?!?!?!!? . "airart it it that way" . "plz dont hurt me". then fire said HEY! leave him alone! kick herobrine in the head did not do a thing. "mmmm i got what i need " leaves the area. "Airart you ok? " yeah just shock that all let get out of here!" so the use his time travel box to teleport on too cradle and the 2 knight use the lifepod to rench the planet. when they land they find fire friend and air friends darkice and nexon. they went to resure camp and then went to haven they went someay and lay down in beds they went like "man we need to do something and FAST!" then the phone ring fire pick it up and said "hello? ..... yeah ...... SIR........ ok i understand sir........ ok goodbye". the dark ask " what happend? "that was feron the phone he ask us and the doctor to form a group a big group and take on this evil!

The info: a knight name firenight team up with a person name The doctor to stop a evil person from a another part of the unriverse which team up other evil people some made a spaceship to follow the knight ship Skylark to Cradle and use some type of enighe failure beam to make the ship crashed into the planet. now he and the doctor must use all the help they can get to stop evil person before it too late. (in real world ) ( it somewhat like Level up ) ( which In-game monsters get in the real world and 4 kids and the game maker that made the game that monster come from must work together to stop the monsters and Save the world

Yes i know it not my best i use my best spelling to make the story better.

so this is the groups ( Will update)

#1 HAPESFD! (herobrine a person eat souls for dinner) <-- ( code name)

Leader:firenight

the know it all: The Doctor

the fighter and mini leader: airart

the recon:darkice

The Healer: ?

the tracker: nexon

info on the members of HAPESFD

Leader firenight Airart older brother. The best swordmen in the group. Gear: warnmaster hammer. silent nightblade, blazebrand, Vog set, star 5 heart pented, sliver six , Grand Flourish, Fierce Flameberge, Levlathan Blade, Biltz needle.

the know it all : The doctor is not knight or human, His race is Time lord, a race who can go back or to the furture in time. they have a curse to be a alone. The doctor is the last of his kind and he can make anyone vanished from time forever. The doctor has a power to if get hurt and dies . he goes in a new body.

The fighter and Minl leader: airart is firenight little brother .

im still not done i but i hope this helps alot

make new knights or someone to add to the story and allow stuff from other games

Sun, 08/19/2012 - 20:55
#1
Shue-Donnym's picture
Shue-Donnym
...what is this

I have no idea what you are saying. Green carrot december tables fly submarine zebras geese.

Mon, 08/20/2012 - 19:37
#2
Artistbma's picture
Artistbma
Lol, High-Five, Plad! Eh...

Lol, High-Five, Plad! Eh... Eh Ehe?

Mon, 08/20/2012 - 21:40
#3
Fireherat's picture
Fireherat
.......

that good or bad thing.

Mon, 08/20/2012 - 21:47
#4
Thunderbog's picture
Thunderbog
la laaaaa... la

la laaaaa... la laaa.....aahhhhhaaa.....

Tue, 08/21/2012 - 03:31
#5
Myqpalzm's picture
Myqpalzm
Ehhh

I thought you hate Herobrine....

Tue, 08/21/2012 - 12:55
#6
Kaijuhunter's picture
Kaijuhunter
@This story: No.... Just no.

@This story: No.... Just no.

Fri, 08/24/2012 - 14:49
#7
Fireherat's picture
Fireherat
Hey no body perfect

im still editing it guys.

Fri, 08/24/2012 - 15:45
#8
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Learn some grammar.

Use punctuation and paragraph. Heck, periods.

Why post a unchecked, unfinished product? Use spell check.

Adverbs, adjectives, better tier of wording.

This is remimiscent to Killrot's threads.

Now, onto story.

There's a ship we can go onto in Haven to explore the galaxy!? Screw the game's story then!

The thing goes too quick. It's like a recount. Atleast put in a couple of chapters about their travel to Haven and their Rescue Camp escapades.

Characters are bland. No backstory, no personallity. Just there to be there.

What is this "EVIL"?

The story is so unoriginal. Even if it was used in others, it was actually made more original. The story also seems confusing! I mean first ti's about knights, then it goes to be about the real world.

I'm sorry, but you need A LOT of work.

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