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Mon, 03/25/2013 - 18:35
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer

Some of my other RPs are going pretty slowly, so I'm going to try a completely different kind of RP. I will mix different methods of storytelling, but I will usually be the mover and shaker. Here's how it works: I will first need a main character. You guys can all apply your characters and recommended story for him, and I will pick the one I like best. Your character must be male, a protagonist, and must be capable of female romance (i.e., not gay or celibate). This isn't exactly a romance story, but the main character's attachment to another is integral to the plot.

After the main character has been selected, you guys will then get the opportunity to recommend plot additions and vote on the main character's next action. But here's the catch: your choice of options will be limited to what is appropriate for the character, and will change based off your previous choices. For instance, if you repeatedly try to make friends with your enemies instead of killing them, killing will eventually cease to be an option.

I will edit the entire story into comment #1, and I will try to link you to the latest edit at all times (which will also be how you know what is new and what isn't).

By the way, the title has two meanings. See if you can find them. ;)

Until/unless the character's info is voted on, his defaults are as follows:

Name: Jimm
Gender: Male (mandatory)
Knightly Appearance: normal height, normal eyes, cobalt color
Physical Appearance: light skin, short & straight brown hair, brown eyes, average build
Costume: Hunter Scale Helm, Hunter Flak Jacket
Loadout: Omega Shell, Wild Hunting Blade, Callahan, Dragon Scale Helm, Dragon Scale Mail

Sat, 03/30/2013 - 21:19
#1
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
So it begins!

You are a hunter of the highest caliber. Monsters fear you, knights respect you, and girls adore you. You are the Guild Master of "Beast Hunters," a guild that is renowned for its might in Lockdown and in the Clockworks. Your girlfriend is a very powerful supermodel magician of the dark arts. She's stunningly...ditzy. Sigh. This is the life of a hero. Yep. Aren't you awesome?

In fact, you're so awesome that Feron has called for you specifically to meet with him in his top-secret situation room. You prance down there, get patted down in a humiliating fashion, and allowed in. "Good to see you again, soldier." You salute Feron, he salutes back, and you both take your seats.

"We've got a problem. The beasts of the Clockworks have had a serious buff. Wolvers have re-learned how to track while biting, Vog Cubs have reappeared, non-status Chromalisks are turning into Kleptolisks, and small dragons have made an appearance. This has got to stop, and I need you to get to the bottom of this. You up for the job, soldier?"

You salute him and say, "I sure am, Feron. You can count on me!" Feron smiled and saluted. "Thanks, Jimm. I'm glad we have you on the job." Feron shuffles some papers. "So here's what you're gonna do. You're going to take the Jade Rook gate and head down to D14. There have been reports that the beasts have made a den down there, so you can start your investigation from there." You both stand up and salute. You head down the elevator to Moorcroft and get to D14 without incident.

Suddenly, a pack of 20 Alpha Wolvers ambushes you. You throw them a biscuit, which they messily devour and fight over, and you try to escape while they're distracted. Unfortunately, you seem to have sprung a trap, and you are stunned by a haze bomb. The wolvers maul you, and the last thing you remember is a wild howl that sends the wolvers packing.

You return to consciousness with a searing pain in your legs and gut, and something moist is actively touching your forehead. You open your eyes just a little bit, and you see a hand holding a cloth to your forehead. You then open your eyes all the way to see who it is.

It's a girl! She looks strikingly plain and ordinary, considering the supermodel world you live in. Her brown hair is done up in a low ponytail with a couple bangs hanging in front, she maintains a healthy weight, and her face conveys kindness and intelligence. She wears a dusty and worn-out Magic Cloak and Hood (thrown back), and has a rope sack sitting nearby. She's got some physical flaws, but nothing a supermodel touch-up can't fix.

"I saw that! You opened your eyes! Good to know you're not dead. You were nearly a goner back there." Her voice sounds kind and mature. It's a delightfully pleasant change from that grating, high-pitched valley-girl screeching that your girlfriend is known for. You sit up and rub your eyes. "What was that haze stuff?" you ask. She laughs. "It was a Haze Bomb. You sprung my Wolver trap, you derp."

"I coulda handled them, y'know. I'm a legendary hunter of-"
"I know."
"I'm an expert at hunting-"
"Wolvers. I know that too."
"I'm- wait, how do you know all that?"
"Like you said yourself, you're 'legendary.' Have you ever heard of an unknown legend?"
"Uh, no, not really."
"Well, there you go."
"But I could still have handled them."
"Show me."
"Okay! I'll do that!"

You try to get up, then instantly regret it as your injured legs protest. You fall back to the ground. "Darn!" you exclaim in frustration. The woman crosses her arms. "I'm waiting." You sigh in frustration and sit down. "I can't do it." She uncrossed her arms and says, "Are you done feeding your ego yet?" You are about to contradict her, but you realize she's right, and you know by now that you can't pull the wool over her eyes.

You both sit in awkward silence for a moment. Darn, she really is kinda pretty. You decide to compliment her. "You know, you're not too bad-looking. Just touch up a few flaws and-"
"I was flattered right up until your next sentence. What flaws?"
"Well, your skin has a few freckles on it."
"So a 'few freckles' makes me flawed?"
"No, I didn't mean it 'that' way..."
"Then how did you mean it?"
"I was just saying that you're pretty, but could use some-"
"I know what you were saying."
"Then why-"
"You were telling me that I'd meet your expectations of feminine beauty if I put on some makeup."
"Well, I- yeah, I suppose that's about the gist of it."
"That's not flattering."

Darn! Your compliment went all wrong. You're about to apologize when she bursts out laughing.
"What's so funny?" you ask. She gives you a playful punch in the shoulder. Ow. "I was just messing with you. I was raised to be content with my appearance from a young age, so I wasn't as insulted as I was making it out to be. But vanity is a very feminine weakness, and I could do without that temptation, so don't push it, okay?" You smile sheepishly and nod. She gets up and slings her rope sack over her shoulder. "It's getting dark, and the Wolvers will be coming out in force soon. We'd better get going. Coming with?" You grimace. "Do I have a choice?" She chuckles and helps you up.

It's soon nightfall, and the Wolvers are howling by the time you reach her hideout. Wow, she has a really nice place here. She even seems to have a working terminal up and running. She must be a technician. She sets you up on a makeshift bed inside her tent and begins cooking a supper outside. You are startled by a ringing in your ears. Darn comm units. You touch it to activate it. "Who is this?"
"It's Lt. Feron, soldier."
"Oh! Uh, hi Feron! What's up?"
"That's 'Lieutenant' to you."
"Sorry, yes sir."
"Anyways, are you okay?"
"Yes sir, got a few scratches, but nothing serious."
"Good. I have an update. While you're down there, I need you to bring in a criminal."
"Criminal, sir?"
"Yes. She has brown hair, hazel eyes, normal height, and wears the Magic set. We recently found that she is responsible for Wolver buff."
"I'll see what I can do, sir."
"You're a good man. Feron out."

You process what you've just heard. Could this woman really be a criminal on the run? Well, maybe. You decide to arrest her once you're healed, but until then, you'll try to keep it all under wraps. She comes back into the tent, and you decide to make conversation to get your mind off it. "What's your name, anyways?"
"Joy."
"Why were you named that?"
"Well, as my father would say, true joy is unobtainable by an ordinary person. It has the double meaning that an ordinary person cannot have me. He thinks that only an extraordinary person should be allowed to win my hand."
"That sounds pretty lofty. He should loosen up a bit!"
"No, I agree with my father."
"Yeah, I know, righ- wait, what?"
"I agree with my father."
"But...why? You seem so very...very..."
"Ordinary?"

Drat, you just insulted her again, and now she looks like she's about to cry. So much for making conversation. What is wrong with you? You decide to change the subject. "So, what's a woman like you doing down here?" She looks like she's about to berate you, but visibly calms down. "I came here to escape the Spiral Order." This is interesting. Maybe you can get her to confess. You covertly and "absent-mindedly" brush your comm unit.
"The Spiral Order thinks I'm a criminal."
"Oh? What is it they think you did?"
"They think I'm responsible for the Wolver attacks. It's nonsense!"
"Huh, you bet! Why would they think that?"
"Well...admittedly, I was a geneticist before I ran away..."
"...so...?"
"...I was the only one researching the beasts in this area."
"That does make you sound guilty."
"Except that it doesn't explain the increase in Wolver violence. Their behaviors are, to put it simply, sick. They're practically eating each other. There's no genetic way to influence how animals think, which makes the Order's accusation against me ridiculous."
"I'll just have to take your word for it."

She looks at you curiously. "Are you...interrogating me?" You put up your hands. "No! No, I'm not interrogating you at all! What makes you think that?" She frowns. "Your excessive reaction to that question. You're a terrible liar." You turn off your comm unit, and she shakes her head in dismay. "...don't know why I trusted you..." she mutters as she walks out of the tent. You fear that she is going for a weapon, and you nervously handle your Proto Sword. She comes back in with...medical equipment!? She begins tending to your injured legs. You're now very confused by her behavior. "What are you doing?" you ask. Without looking up, she says, "What does it look like? I'm fixing your legs."
"Why?"
"So you can leave sooner."
"But then I can arrest you sooner."
"I know. I'm not stupid."
"Then...why are you still doing it?"

She buries her head in her hands for a moment. "Because...it's the right thing to do." You're kinda dumbstruck. Those aren't the words of a criminal...are they?

She whips up a healing potion (often stored in health capsules) and tenderly applies it to your leg. The bones, muscles, and skin heal up in mere moments. She steps back, and you test your legs. They're like good as new! But now you gotta do the dirty work. You find your handcuffs and approach Joy. Wordlessly, she extends her hands and bows her head. Is she crying?

But instead of cuffing her hands like she expected you to, you take her hands and hold them. "For some crazy reason, I believe you," you say. She wipes her eyes on her shoulders and looks up at you. "Really?" You nod and smile. She suddenly hugs you tightly, and once you get back into your skin, you hug her back.

It's time to get moving, and after you've helped her pack up, you hear conversational noises. You look at Joy; she seems to have heard them too. Suddenly, a Recon knight pops out of nowhere and fires a blaster at her. She narrowly misses it, and you tackle the Recon to the ground. You punch him in the face, but he just sits there smirking at you. You're gonna wipe that smile off his fa- WHOA! Where'd Feron come from?

"WHAT ARE YOU DOING, SOLDIER!?!" Feron shouts at you. You immediately get off the Recon and stand to attention. "This Recon was attacking an innocent woman, sir." Feron clearly isn't satisfied with that answer. "That woman is the convict I was telling you about. Are you so dim-witted that you couldn't recognize her!?" You were about to object to being called dim-witted, but you realize you have a more appropriate answer. "She is not the convict, sir. My gut intuition tells me that something else is responsible." Feron then gives you a strong punch in the chest, and you double over. He says, "What is your 'gut' telling you now, sonny? It'd better be telling you to shut up so it doesn't get punched again." You shake your head. That moron doesn't know- "It's not telling you that? Guess I'd better fix that." Feron punches you again, and you collapse to your knees and clutch your chest. You hear Joy protesting in the distance. "Let me go! I didn't do anything!" No! They've got Joy! You struggle to get to your feet, but you run into Feron again. "Going somewhere, boy?" The last thing you see for the next six hours is a gloved fist flying into your face.

You wake up where you were punched out. It is now night time. You rub your face, rinse it in a nearby creek, and decide what to do next. You still have your weapons with you; thank goodness for the binding system. Joy's stuff is still here, all packed up the way you left it. You race to Haven as fast as your legs can carry you. While you're running, you contact your guild via comm unit. "Hey guys, I need your help with something." Someone replies on the other end. It's your trusty officer, Joey. "What can I do ya fer, Jimm?" "I need you to find a young lady named 'Joy' somewhere in the Spiral prisons." "Okay...what do you want me to do when I get there?" "Make sure no one tries to hurt her." Silence. You nearly trip over a log. He finally finds his voice again. "Whatever you say, boss." "Thanks Joey!" "Uh huh..." The line closes down.

After nearly an hour of jogging, going up elevators, and solving frustrating puzzles, you finally get back to Haven. You reach the prison, but of course, it's very heavily guarded. Getting in there and getting out again is going to be very, very tough. Joey manages to spot you, and covertly darts to your side. "What's the plan?" You think for a bit. "We'll pretend to be visitors." "Then?" "We use a bunch of Haze Bombs and get the heck outta there." "Sounds like a plan."

Joey then notices something. "Dude, the guards are wearing Ironmight."
"So?"
"Our Haze Bombs won't work."
"They work on everyth- oh yeah, I see what you mean."
"Should we grab a recon module?"
"Those things are expensive. Why do guards gotta wear Ironmight?"
"Because it defends against the stuff prisoners make most, dude."

You think for a bit, then realize that you spotted a recon cloak among Joy's equipment. Luckily, you have it with you. "I know what we're gonna do! We will need a wooden dummy and a Magic cloak and hood."

Before long, the two of you have created a very convincing replica of Joy, then attached the recon cloak to it. You carry it on your back, and hope nobody bumps into your cloaked dummy. You get out your cane and pretend to have a bad back, and the two of you make your way through to Joy's cell without incident. She is sitting on a bench, reading a rather thick book. She sees you, and immediately gets up to greet you. "Jimm! I'm so happy to see you! What are you doing here?" You explain to her that you're going to bust her out. Improbably and miraculously, none of the prison guards or prisoners hear you. You covertly unlock her cell with a lockpick, put the dummy into the cell and transfer the cloak to Joy, then carry Joy on your back.

You manage to walk right out of the prison, but...well, not without incident this time. Apparently, it didn't take long for the prison guards to figure out that the thing in Joy's cell was a dummy, and put the prison into lockdown. They also deduced that you were the one who helped Joy escape, and they have plastered your name all over the media. Great, now you're a criminal. You put Joy down, and she uncloaks. She takes your hands and says earnestly, "I'm so, so sorry for getting you into this mess." Joey starts grinning uncontrollably.

You don't want her to take blame that isn't hers. "No, it's not your fault. I was the one who contacted Spiral HQ to begin with, and I was the one who decided to come rescue you. Nobody asked me to. Don't be sorry." She gives you another hug, appreciative of your reassuring words. Just then, police start pouring out of the prison. "We gotta go," you tell Joy. She nods, and the three of you secretly make your way back to the main road.

[more to come; got any suggestions for me?]

Do you...
[no options yet]

Mon, 03/25/2013 - 21:11
#2
Hearthstone's picture
Hearthstone
Two meanings...

Criminals that hunt and Hunters that hunt for Criminals...? That's what I understood.

Mon, 03/25/2013 - 21:32
#3
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
Precisely!

That's it exactly, Skye-Lightning! The main character is both of those at some points in the plot.

Tue, 03/26/2013 - 10:20
#4
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer

Option A is chosen!

Mon, 03/25/2013 - 23:36
#5
Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
Ahem...

First of all, what's the protagonist's name, and what does he even look like? (unless of course you're waiting on suggestions XD)

Secondly, I choose option "A". Considering our character has already saluted Feron before the briefing meaning that, despite his high rank, he still considers the Spiral Order above him... somewhat.

Tue, 03/26/2013 - 00:04
#6
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Azure-Orbit

Hey Azure! Great to have you on board.

Option A is noted. I plan to wait 'til tomorrow to count the votes.

The name and appearance of the character should be voted on, but I will list the defaults in the OP.

Tue, 03/26/2013 - 20:19
#7
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer

Option A is chosen!

Tue, 03/26/2013 - 18:37
#8
Dmatter's picture
Dmatter
C. everyone knows wolvers

C. everyone knows wolvers like biscuits.

Tue, 03/26/2013 - 19:35
#9
Infernus-Dragneel's picture
Infernus-Dragneel
C

wolvers loooove biscuits!

Tue, 03/26/2013 - 22:23
#10
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer

Option C is chosen!

Tue, 03/26/2013 - 20:46
#11
Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
The decision!

Well, that biscuit certainly went better than expected XD.

"C" will make Jimm look paranoid, and "A" sounds like a stupid idea ("close your eyes and the monster will go away"... Yeah... you're gonna be lunch buddy). So, I choose option "B".

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 09:58
#12
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer

Options B & C are chosen!

Strangely, after some intensive research, Lady Morgana seems to bear the closest resemblance to the new girl I had in mind. She's a good bit plainer than Morgana, though.

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 05:31
#13
Dmatter's picture
Dmatter
C

C

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 07:02
#14
Infernus-Dragneel's picture
Infernus-Dragneel
B..

I uh.... I'm not so sure with the other two.... so... err.... at least... I don't know what to say .-.

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 09:19
#15
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
It's a tie!

Since it's a tie, I'll do both.

This'll be fun. >:D

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 09:26
#16
Tohru-Adachi's picture
Tohru-Adachi
C

.....

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 14:51
#17
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Tohru-Adachi

Was that for the previous vote? I'm sorry. Would you like me to change the outcome?

New

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 10:40
#18
Tohru-Adachi's picture
Tohru-Adachi
No.

Tis fine.

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 10:51
#19
Tohru-Adachi's picture
Tohru-Adachi
I say C.

...

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 15:32
#20
Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
Well ain't this one a tough decision

I'd say "A". There's no use trying to confront her now, since you're hurt and all, but it'd be a bad idea to ignore Feron altogether. Before Jimm arrests her however, he should try to confirm how true Feron's story is. If that's not an option however, then let's just see how it goes :)

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 18:04
#21
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
Time for more.

Well, it's been many hours, and no further votes. I think I will combine A and C; the character will pretend nothing has happened until he is healed, and then he will arrest the girl.

Darn, he hasn't even gotten her name yet.

New

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 18:13
#22
Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
Once more...

Before the trolls come in here and pick another choice, I'm going with "A" XD.

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 18:51
#23
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
Thx Azure!

I like how you reason your responses out loud; it actually helps me develop the story. Thanks!

@Everyone: WARNING! The current choice is a critical turning point in the story. The attitude of the characters towards each other and the happiness of the ending will depend *heavily* and *mostly* upon which option is chosen.

Choose wisely.

Wed, 03/27/2013 - 19:26
#24
Liminori's picture
Liminori
Sigh. . .

My main choice would usually be either a or b, but I'd bet some people just simply can't control their rage.
{Invisible poster is invisible.}

Thu, 03/28/2013 - 08:59
#25
Keyboard-Crusher's picture
Keyboard-Crusher
A

A :p

Thu, 03/28/2013 - 11:00
#26
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
So impatient!

Goshdarnit, why do I have to be so impatient?
C'mon Azure-Orbit & Dmatter! :D

Thu, 03/28/2013 - 13:41
#27
Dmatter's picture
Dmatter
I was busy.

It depends on how the legal system works. If she WILL get a trial, B, but back her up. if not, A.

Thu, 03/28/2013 - 14:46
#28
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Dmatter

I hadn't thought about her trial, to be honest. But the evidence stacks against her, so I doubt she'll go free. She is 1) the only known person with the required expertise 2) who was there 3) when the problem started. And she *does* have enemies. So she might get a trial, but...it likely won't end well.

So in that case, I suppose your choice is A?

New

Thu, 03/28/2013 - 16:00
#29
Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
What to do... What to do...

Hmm... The next choice will depend on how quickly the Isoran legal system works. Jimm has been out for six hours, what could have happened to Joy in that span of time? Secondly, where does a guildie's loyalty lie? to the guildmaster, or to the Spiral Order?

If Jimm has good friends in his guild, then he'd be a derp not to call for back-up. However, he should be careful not to reveal too much of his plans, in case his guild is loyal to the Spiral Order, and use that information against him. If they agree to assist, Jimm should only say as little as possible, while getting them to help.

So, if not much can happen to Joy (eg. Joy wont be sentenced to execution anytime soon) then I pick "D". If Joy should already be in immediate danger, then I pick "C".

Thu, 03/28/2013 - 16:21
#30
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Azure-Orbit

I like your thinking.

At this point in the story, the Spiral Order has become a large, faceless organization, so it's harder for the newer generations to find loyalty to it. Conspiracy theories about the Order have also been floating around for years now, so nobody completely trusts it anymore. Thus, knights are much more likely to be loyal to their guilds, rather than to the Order.

The Spiral Order is still benevolent; it's just too large to be appreciated. Joy will get a fair trial, but like I said, the evidence will stack against her. They might let her go due to the lack of factual evidence (since they mostly have circumstantial evidence), but we shouldn't count on it.

That, and the story would end too quickly if she got off scot-free. xD

She's probably had her trial already by the time our hero wakes up, and she will likely be imprisoned by the time he gets to Haven. The Order doesn't have enough evidence to put her to death, so she won't die by the Order's hands.

But she might die by someone else's.

Thu, 03/28/2013 - 16:43
#31
Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
If that's the case...

Then "C" It is!

Thu, 03/28/2013 - 17:40
#32
Dmatter's picture
Dmatter
C. your wounds will be fine,

C. your wounds will be fine, since you have had 6 whole hours of rest to heal. Just be careful with wolvers and be somewhat vague to your guildies.

Thu, 03/28/2013 - 20:52
#33
Softhead's picture
Softhead
A

Your guildies don't want to screw around, you have not much time.

Fri, 03/29/2013 - 08:50
#34
Shotjeer's picture
Shotjeer
I like these choose ur adventure stuvs

Ill chose A.

Sat, 03/30/2013 - 00:05
#35
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
Tie settled!

New

Sat, 03/30/2013 - 07:13
#36
Shotjeer's picture
Shotjeer
me post first vote

B. Just cuz«Its the right thing to do»

Sat, 03/30/2013 - 08:05
#37
Dmatter's picture
Dmatter
B

B

Sat, 03/30/2013 - 08:48
#38
Liminori's picture
Liminori
The choice is B.

Period.
I'm sure everyone's going to pick B.

Sat, 03/30/2013 - 15:13
#39
Softhead's picture
Softhead
B

...

Sat, 03/30/2013 - 15:37
#40
Azure-Orbit's picture
Azure-Orbit
Is this even a choice?

"B"... No explanation needed.

Sat, 03/30/2013 - 21:22
#41
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
Yes, actually a choice.

It is, actually, a choice. B certainly seems the most obvious, but don't dismiss the possibility that you are, in fact, being manipulated.

But nonetheless, B has been chosen and accounted for. However, I'm clean out of ideas; got any suggestions for me? They need to find out who is responsible for the wolver buff without getting caught by the authorities.

Wed, 06/04/2014 - 16:02
#42
Liminori's picture
Liminori
Bump.

I think this is something that needs to be continued. It's... UNIQUE.
Also, I have no ideas.
I'm bumping this to help with community giving ideas.

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