Ideas For my Fan-Fic! PLEASE RATE!
Wed, 04/03/2013 - 13:32
Well, this is my first post here. I like to write, and I also like this game. I'll be giving you guys my ideas and please rate them 1-10, and rate fairly.
Idea 1: During the crash of the Skylark, a squad of knights each launched off in individual pods. However, they were all knocked off course and instead of landing on Cradle's surface, they descend into it through a hole. All of them are separated and must find a way out. However, this place somehow negates radio waves, thus making communication with other knights impossible. The story is told from the POV of Officer Tristan Ergos. He is trying to regroup with his squad and find a way out. But this place holds many more secrets than one can see...
Idea 2: A group of explorers and researchers descend into the Clockworks. They find the ruins of a seemingly ancient, wiped-out and advanced civilization. They date back very long, longer than any gremlin-built structure. This disproves the theory that Gremlins built Cradle. Their interest piqued, the knights delve deeper into the ruins. However, the civilization is not entirely wiped-out... (Character can be applied for, comment and I'll see if you're good for it.)
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Wed, 04/03/2013 - 15:29
#2
Some critiques
Neither of your ideas is very appealing to me. If I had to choose one of them, it would be #2. However, I maintain that the Clockworks should still have been built by Gremlins. I recommend that said "ancient race" be either the Valkyries (angelic Knights), Almirians (ancient Knights), or Owlites (magical Knights).
Wed, 04/03/2013 - 15:31
#3
@Thinslayer
Thanks, always looking to write better.
Wed, 04/03/2013 - 15:50
#4
You're welcome.
I think I figured out what idea #1 was saying. I thought it was describing an alternate reality in which all the knights shot their pods through a wormhole, instead of onto Cradle.
At any rate, it kinda bypasses the exploration side of the Clockworks, and feels like a weird way to do it. Perhaps they travel down through the Clockworks as normal, but the return elevator jams and they can't go back up? If they landed in FSC or in a Shadow Lair, that would add to the tension considerably.
I don't plan on applying any of my valuable characters until I've seen the quality of your writing. I'll give you one of my lesser ones to start off with:
Name:Appearance: short height, determined eyes, green personal color
Costume: Fused Demo Helm w/ Military Helm Guards & Military Glasses; Military Spiral Flak Jacket w/ Military Canteen & Military Vitakit
Loadout: Fused Demo Helm/Suit, Plate Shield, Super Blast Bomb, Super Crystal Bomb
Personality: Jakk has a strong stutter, and often stumbles over rough-sounding syllables. He is a little shy around other people and socially awkward, but he is gentle and kind once you get to know him. He is very protective and loyal to those under his care, and often draws his courage from that.
Bio: He was one of the Skylark's helmsmen and technicians before the crash. The accident left a lasting impact on him, and he has never mentally recovered. He is currently unattached, and has few friends at the time of writing.
Wed, 04/03/2013 - 15:53
#5
Ok, thanks. I posted a
Ok, thanks. I posted a prologue on where they find the gate to the ruins. Later, Feron dispatches a team to recover the scientists, as they went missing.
Wed, 04/03/2013 - 16:53
#6
Hi
Idea 1 is a wee bit unclear, so if you were to elaborate or revise it, I'm sure it would be easier to understand and improve on. The second one is interesting, and personally, I love the idea, I mean, I never really liked the idea that the clockworks were built by gremlins, sure they impacted it, but a larger force makes it more exciting :3
But good ideas in general :)
I guess I'll decide myself then...-_-