Hw 2 describe da scene lik a pr0
We'll start with the basics. This is how I write.
BASICS
First, you must learn how to describe an OBJECT, before you describe a scene. For instance, let's say you want to describe a remote. You can start off by saying how the remote looks like, while you 'pick' it up. Describe how it feels like, and try and add how it connects to you. Here's an example:
As I bent over to pick the remote up, I realized that the remote was of a sickly, faded grey, with its small buttons organized in military looking lines. Picking it up with my left hand, I found that it was quite cool to the touch, presumably due to the fact that it was left in an air-conditioned room for quite some time, bringing back memories of a distant past.
ADVANCED STUFF
Now that you've got that covered, you'll want to know how to describe a scene. You don't just randomly describe loads of objects in a scene with loads of info. No; that would be boring. What you do, is that you want to find where your attention is focused on. Say your attention is focused on a pencil laying on a table in the room. You'll want to describe the pencil, yes, but you also need to describe the other things in the room slightly vaguely. You also can also state what the pencil is on to paint more of a picture in the reader's mind. Try to add where the light is shining on, and where it's coming from. Here's another example:
Gazing around the small room, it would seem that everything was somber except for where a pool of light enlightened a dark wooden desk that sat in the middle of the room. Immediately my attention was focused onto it. Atop the wooden table stood a white striped pencil, its background a faded yellow. Its outer lead was very blunt, as if it was used to scribble notes onto the beige-colored paper that perched a few centimeters to the right of it. Looking up, you could spot a blinking light that was filled with the emotion of its surroundings: Melancholiness. Looking back down, I noticed that the dull grey walls were lined with incomprehensible words in a very elegant manner, that were colored a very subtle purple.
STUFF
You don't necessarily have to describe everything in detail, even when you are not examining it. Unless something grabs your attention, you don't describe it in great detail. Since you probably will only glance shortly at it, try shortening down your description.
From this:
The greasy, blood red rose emblazoned tiled windows let in a very dim, yet pale light that shone like a spotlight upon a black-striped pencil.
To this:
The foggy windows let in faint light.
You can see that even though the first description is more vivid, you don't really examine everything in a room unless you really want to. The second one is more realistic, as you usually only glance at your surroundings for a second or so before concentrating on what you really want to do.
END
START
Alright. This is going to differ quite a lot from descriptive scenes, so to start with the basics, you need to know how fight scenes work.
Downward Slash
This is basically the character swinging his/her weapon downwards.
Upwards Slash
This is the character swinging his/her weapon upwards.
Sideway Slash
This is a slash to the side. Now, this can be quite confusing. Slashing to the left would be slashing to the OPPONENT'S left, and slashing to the right would be slashing to the opponent's right.
Thrust
This is a thrust, typically used by fencers. It's when they plunge forward with their sword.
And there's parrying as well.
Upwards Parry
This parries the downwards slash.
Downwards Parry
This parries the upwards slash.
Sideways Parry
This parries sideways attacks. Remember, when the opponent is slashing to your left, you parry to the left, because he is slashing YOUR left, not to be confused with the sideways slash.
These are the basics for swords. As for taijutsu....
Jab
A simple forward punch. Try to say something like: I jabbed at him with my right hand.
Hook
A curved punch. You normally say you 'threw a hook at him'.
Uppercut
An upwards punch. You normally say: 'I shoryukened him'.
And blocking:
Block
A block.
Now that we've got all these covered, we can now move on to the next stage.
FINISH
Now you've got to put all that together, with the exception that you describe the slashes a bit more. Here's an example:
John grabbed his sword and thrusted at my chest, his hands gripping the sword so tightly you could hear the sound of leather being torn. I moved to the right in a fast motion, and turned around to slash at his neck with my left hand. He blocked the slash with his claymore, and pushed my sword aside, leaving me immobile for a few seconds, which was all he needed to run towards me as I was staggering. He kicked me in the stomach, only adding to the pain that I had already felt, and kicked me again. I fell to the ground in pain.
Here you add some of that description into the battle, as well as describing the battle. Here's a taijutsu one:
Bob took a stance as I dashed towards him, my blood-stained feet running across the soft, wet grass. He immediately threw a hook at me as soon as I was within range, but instinctively reacting, I ducked underneath and managed to land an uppercut on his chin, sending him into the air for a second or so, before he landed back down onto the ground in a loud thump. I kicked his body, and he rolled to the side so his back was facing me.
Yeah.
MO STUFF
But in RPs, you can't powerplay unless someone gives you permission, and so it can be quite troublesome trying to write for them. Here's what you do:
You shorten it down. You write what you do, but not what they do. In some cases, you can write what they do, but you can't make your character utterly kill them. Their character has to land some hits on you too.
Player A:
I ran towards him, sword in my right hand, gun in the other. I fired a few shots at his feet to get him startled, but he did not flinch one bit. I jumped up and slashed at him just as he was within sword range, but he swiftly dodged the attack and kicked me in the back, leaving me immobile for a few seconds.
END
It's important that you focus a lot more on the battle rather than the scene if you're trying to describe a battle scene. Also, guns are relatively easy to write about. Just say you shot at some part in the opponents body, and dodging is like dodging with melee weapons.