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Thu, 08/08/2013 - 20:45
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Prologue

Core Terminal

Lt. Vaelyn looked at the computer screens in front of her, her fingers drumming a Mug of Misery absentmindedly. A group of Tech Knights and scientists had ventured down onto the metal surface of the Core (by means of an elevator that had been recently installed) and were inspecting the strange instruments and machinery that could be found all over it. She was currently looking at a listing of the various objects they had documented so far, with the list being added to every few minutes.

The screen briefly flickered, a sign that the list had just been updated. Vaelyn lifted the Mug of Misery and took a sip from it, before setting it down. She had acquired an affinity for the Fiendish drink a while ago, as it reminded her of some rather fine alien cuisine that she had sampled before, when the Skylark was still operational and journeyed all around the universe. She had been taking some well deserved R&R after a series of heavy-duty action, and was spending some time with her family on an allied planet. It was all still so clear in her mind. Her parents had been so proud. Their little girl, who had fought at and survived the Liberation of Ilsola and become a hero. Her little sister, squeaking with excitement and begging her to tell her what had happened that day, for the fifth time in less than an hour...

Vaelyn tore herself away from her memories and shook her head. That was decades ago. Her life was now one on Cradle, as the second-in-command of the Spiral Order. Cradle was all that mattered at the moment. Everything else was a thing of the past.

Her wrist comlink suddenly buzzed, signaling that someone wanted to talk to her. She pressed a button on it and brought it up to her mouth. "Yes?" she said.

The Knight on the other end spoke quickly and bluntly, skipping the pleasantries altogether. "Ma'am, we have a bit of a situation on our hands here. If you could come over to the Energy Lab in the East Wing?..." Without waiting for a response, the speaker terminated the call.

Vaelyn frowned and dropped her arm. How rude.

She got out of the chair and exited the room she was currently in, passing through a Mist Gate that acted as a door. She entered a hallway that led into a large atrium filled with other Knights going their own separate ways. The Order had created a proper research center at the Core Terminal, after Vaelyn and the rest of her team of Technicians had filed several complaints stating that the previous Terminal was nothing but a long pathway leading to a platform with piles of computers and a single Elevator (Which was a rather precise description, in fact). Entering the atrium, she headed into another passageway that led to the East Wing.

Soon reaching the Energy Lab, she entered the room, her rank granting her access to go through the room's high clearance-level Mist Gate. Inside, there was a small group of Technicians clustered around a set of computers.

"What seems to be the problem here?" Vaelyn asked, as she walked towards the group. The Technicians turned to face her.

"Come have a look for yourself." One of them said. They all stepped aside to allow Vaelyn to easily see the computers. One of them had a map of the section of the Core's surface that the other group of Technicians were currently exploring. The map showed the varying amounts of energy scattered around the area. There was a group of small blobs in the middle of the screen, indicating the energy readings of the Technicians. The far left side of the map, however, was completely covered in one massive energy signature, which was moving closer and closer to the Technicians.

"That is one big energy signature." Vaelyn said. She turned to the Technicians surrounding her. "You guys have any idea what it is?"

One of them sighed. "Honestly, ma'am, we don't even know what type of energy it is. It's nothing like we've ever encountered before."

Vaelyn frowned. "Does it pose a danger to the Technicians who are down there?"

"Like we said, we've never encountered anything like this before. We don't know."

Vaelyn nodded. "All right. I'm not taking any chances, though. I want those guys out of there, right now."

Looking at the map, she realized that they were already on it. The Technicians' were already heading towards the Elevator that would bring them up to the Terminal. However, she noted that one lone energy signature was heading towards the mysterious advancing cloud of energy. Not good.

Vaelyn pointed at the energy signature. "Can you identify who that Knight is?"

One of the Technicians typed something into another computer. "Um, yes ma'am. That is Technician Rolan."

"I want you to open a com-link channel so we can speak with him."

"Yes ma'am."

After the pressing of some buttons, a channel was open. A voice spoke out from a computer speaker.

"Hello?"

Rolan's energy signature was right up against the energy cloud.

Vaelyn brought her wrist arm up to her mouth. "Technician Rolan, I'm afraid I'm going to have to ask you to head towards the Elevator immediately. We-"

Before she could go any further, a loud shriek tore through the speakers, causing several Technicians to cover their ears. It was immediately followed by the sound of something very much like what one would hear during a nasty storm, and then static.

Rolan's energy signature had disappeared off the map.

Wide-eyed, Vaelyn spoke into her com-link again. "Rolan? Are you there? Are you all right?" But she heard nothing but static. She spun around to look at the Technicians.

"What in the name of Isora just happened there!?"

The Technicians all looked as shocked and confused as she did. None of them spoke. Grumbling, Vaelyn turned back to the map, hoping that Rolan's energy signature had reappeared. They hadn't. But something else had changed. The energy cloud was now dashing towards the group of evacuating Technicians, rapidly chewing up the distance between the two. Within seconds, it had nearly engulfed the entire map, and was just about to close in on the Technicians when-

The computer turned off. As did all the other computers. And the lights. The whole room was plunged into darkness.

Vaelyn swore loudly. The Terminal had just lost power.

Nobody spoke for several moments. They were all too confused, too stunned at the sudden events to put a single sentence together. They all just waited for the emergency generators to kick in. They didn't.

Vaelyn quickly assessed the situation.

A strange mass of energy none of these guys recognizes appears. Rolan's energy signature is wiped off the map after he gets too close to it. Something happened to him, or why would he scream? Right afterwards, the energy cloud speeds towards the other Technicians, and we lose all power right when it reaches the Elevator. Even the emergency generators.

Something is not right here.

Vaelyn's thoughts were interrupted by the computers flaring back to life. A menacing purple light spread through the room, casting strange shadows.

On the screen was a large purple eye, surrounded by a background of static.

Vaelyn slammed her hands down on the computer top, and stormed out of the room, leaving behind an utterly perplexed and frightened team of Technicians. She was going to get to the bottom of this. She took a Fire Crystal out of a pouch on her belt to illuminate the way back to the Atrium.

The Atrium was decently lit, due to the fact that most of the Knights had also taken out their own Fire Crystals. All of the screens and computers in the Atrium showed the same strange image; a purple eye. Vaelyn headed through a non-functioning Mist Gate that lead to an observation deck, showing a view of the Core. It was also where the Elevator that lead down to the Core's surface was located, where any Technicians who had made it up should be.

She saw no Technicians. Apparently none of them had gotten back up before the energy cloud had overtaken them. But that barely registered in Vaelyn's mind, after seeing something else far more important.

The whole of the Core was surrounded in a pulsing, flickering cloud of dark purple. It appeared to be some type of gas or mist, from what Vaelyn could see. Wisps of the stuff trailed away from the Core, and whirled in the air. Purple lightning flashed from the cloud, casting parts of the Terminal in frightening shadow.

Other Knights were beginning to walk onto the observation deck, pointing and the purple mass and shouting. As more and more Knights came out, a portion of the purple mass, the part facing the Terminal, began to shift and flash. A few shouts of alarm were yelled out, but most of the Knights were silent, wondering what was about to happen.

As they watched, the gaseous material took the form of a massive, purple eye, just like what had appeared on all of the computer screens, albeit somewhat blurry due to being composed of gas. It suddenly lost its blurry shape, the image sharpening like it had just become a solid image.

The pupil in the middle slowly began to move around, as if belonging to some giant creature. Everyone was deathly silent. It suddenly focused on the crowd of Knights standing on the observation deck. Several people screamed.

The eye was still for several moments. Suddenly, a loud, booming noise was heard, a dark and evil-sounding laugh coming out of nowhere. The laughter increased in volume, continuing on and on as more Knights began to scream.

As the laughter became hysterical, a bolt of purple shot out from the mass, and completely obliterated the West Wing of the Terminal.

Pandemonium ensued. The screaming reached an all-time high, as Knights rushed back inside the facility. Vaelyn simply stood there, watching in utter shock as another blast took out the East Wing. The general evacuation alarm began to sound, which meant that power had returned to the facility, and the Elevators would be functional. However, Vaelyn didn't know if there were enough Elevators and enough time for everyone to get back to Haven.

As a third bolt destroyed the storage level of the Terminal, Vaelyn, in an impossible state of calmness, pressed a few buttons on her com-link, and brought it up to her mouth. As the screams and terrible laughter continued, Vaelyn spoke a few words. And for the first time in years, she let fear seep into her voice.

"Captain Ozlo? This is Lieutenant Vaelyn. We have a problem."

Fri, 08/09/2013 - 18:22
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Blindshot
:O :D

I...
LIKE IT. It's suspenseful and such. Even though I haven't read the old/original Core Wars and this is the "revised" version, it sounds interesting. Keep going, I wanna see what happen next. :D

Fri, 08/09/2013 - 18:51
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Nechrome

Not so much 'revised' as 'scrap almost everything I wrote in the previous version and start again.'

Sat, 08/10/2013 - 13:52
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Dewca
This is goooood.

Keep going!

Sun, 08/11/2013 - 19:46
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Valorai
...

Hm. Let me quote:

Vaelyn lifted the Mug of Misery and took a sip from it, before setting it down. She had acquired an affinity for the Fiendish drink a while ago, as it reminded her of some rather fine alien cuisine that she had sampled before, when the Skylark was still operational and journeyed all around the universe.

Now, read it again with this in mind: I like to say "Mug of Misery" by it's initials, or "M.O.M."

...Yeah.

Sat, 09/28/2013 - 09:05
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Nechrome
Personally, I think this is a pretty epic chapter :D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Chapter 1

Mountains of Shadow Fire, just outside the Citadel, capital of Almire
Minutes before the Core Incident

Spiral HQ had noticed an influx of Undead activity recently. Graveyards were completely devoid of Zombies, tears in the earth showing that they had been awakened and disappeared. Massive crypts lay smashed open, indicating that something very large had forced its way out. Moorcroft Manor's resident Zombies had all left on the Spectral Train; even the bellboy had abandoned his post. Recon Rangers were also reporting large groups of Zombies making their way down through the Clockworks, heading towards the remains of Almire, their ancient kingdom and home.

It was obvious that something big was coming down, and Desna, captain of the Recon Rangers, had been sent to figure out what.

Desna lay on a rocky outcropping in the Mountains of Shadow Fire, a binocular visor on her face. She was currently looking at the Firestorm Citadel, taking in the strange events that were taking place. Legions of Zombies, Deadnaughts, and Crusaders had been through into the borders of Almire and into the Citadel* since before Desna had even gotten there. No matter what they had evolved into in order to survive in their new homes after leaving Almire (i.e. Frozen Shamblers, Drouls, etc.), as they crossed the into Almire they would ignite in flames and take on the semblance of a Slag. They would organize themselves into blocks of warriors, the companies that they had belonged to when they had still lived. Weapons and gear were handed out to the Slags, which mildly surprised Desna. She'd always thought that the Zombies simply swiped using their claws because they couldn't hold on to actual weapons.

At the same time, defensive structures were being put up. Lines of Spiked Wheel Launchers seemed to encircle the whole of the Citadel, along with layers upon layers upon layers of barricades. Howlitzers had been placed on guard towers, their heads swiveling back and forth as they looked down on the other Undead scurrying around. It seemed that they were preparing for a siege of some kind.

The last of the Undead seemed to be entering Almire. As the final Zombies passed through the border, the flames of the city momentarily flared, as if sensing the final return of her ancient warriors.

Desna continued to silently observe the mustering of troops, soon turning her gaze upon the castle that lay right in the middle of the Citadel. A massive fortress with towers, walls, and multiple levels, it would be a good place to fall back to if whatever the Almirians were preparing for broke through. Scanning one of the high towers, Desna spotted Lord Vanaduke gazing over the city from a balcony.

Adjusting the settings on her binoculars, she peered closer at the Almirian king. He looked rather weary and somber, very much different from the fierce warrior that the Spiral Knights knew. Desna would even go as far as to say that he looked defeated. Whatever was about to happen seemed to be weighing heavily on Vanaduke's mind.

As she watched, a second figure walked onto the balcony. Intrigued at who it could be, Desna focused her gaze on the figure. At first glance, it seemed to be a Spiral Knight wearing a Valkyrie set. But as she looked closer, Desna noticed that the being's armor looked very different compared to the Valkyrie set; this armor was a mix of pure white and shining gold metals, that glimmered brightly in the light of Almire's fires. Intricate designs were etched into the armor, which also glowed with a slight golden aura. A golden halo circled the being's helmet, also covered in patterns and designs.

There seemed to be something attacked to the figure's back. Are those wings? Desna thought. Looking closer, they indeed were. Large white wings, unaffected and unchanged by the soot and ashes that should have turned them completely black.

Desna, still looking at the being, frowned. She didn't know what kind of creature that was, but it seemed very much like an actual Valkyrie. But that couldn't be right. Valkyrie were creatures of Clockworks myth and lore, not real beings. She didn't know much about the legends, but there were supposed to be six Valkyrie, who guarded a mystical realm where an ancient kingdom was located. There was something about The Fallen, a Valkyrie who had gone bad and tried to do something forbidden, and ended up getting shunned by the others and losing much of its power.

But that was all utter baloney. The being was most likely just a Knight wearing a customized Valkyrie set and a pair of Valk wings, who'd somehow managed to befriend Vanaduke, Desna concluded.

The... Knight began to converse with Vanaduke. Desna obviously couldn't hear a thing they were saying, but judging by their flailing of hands and agitated movements, they were probably talking about something important.

The conversation was a short one. Soon after, the Knight nodded, and saluted Vanaduke. Then he was suddenly gone, a golden streak in the sky showing that he had flown and zoomed away, leaving behind a spectral trail.

Waaaaaaaiiiiiiiitaminute. Desna's suddenly thought.

Knights don't fly.

Although, she had heard talk of Spiral HQ working on some jetpacks using Gremlin technology. Perhaps the Knight had been using some kind of prototype?

The ground shook. Desna's thoughts were interrupted. Before she could even start to think about what had just caused the tremor, she heard a booming laugh emanating from underground. As she listened closely, Desna realized that it wasn't coming from underground; it was coming from the next Depth, at the Core Terminal.

"What in the?..."

Then there was a mighty explosion, the ground shaking again. Rocks fell down around Desna as they were shaken loose from above her. She turned her view back to Vanaduke, to see if he was causing whatever was going on. Laughter continued to sound, battering Desna's ears as it grew.

Apparently not. Vanaduke looked extremely panicked at the moment, his eyes wide and hands clutching the balcony rails. Desna could see them cracking under his tremendous strength. But his expression slowly turned from one of fear and confusion to one of hate and rage. He roared loudly, flames exploding on his body, then quickly turned around and rushed back into his castle. Within moments, he had somehow made it to the ground level floor and came out of the massive front gates. Orbs of fire orbiting him, he was holding his iconic mace, and flames blazed off his body, giving him the impression that he was standing over an active Fire Grate. His eyes were a deathly shade of dark red that Desna had never seen before; just looking at them made her shiver. He began to tromp towards the main gate that led out of the city, his fiery aura causing any troops he passed to be engulfed in the same unholy aura as his.

Several more explosions rocked the ground, the horrid laughter growing ever louder and hysterical. Desna noticed the ground around the Citadel's defenses begin to darken and bubble, turning pure black within a matter of seconds. Then it suddenly flattened, becoming as smooth as glass, although it still bubbled. It seemed to Desna that it was a portal of sorts, like a tiny hyperspace window.

Almirian troops began to rush into position, forming walls of warriors behind the barricades and Wheel Launchers. Almirian Crusaders created a front wall of shields and bristling lances, with massive Slag Guards bunched behind them. Behind all of them was a ridiculously large army on Slag Walkers, Blackened Crests and Fangs of Vog at the ready.

From Desna's point of view, the Citadel looked like a small pinpoint of red light, encircled by an ever-growing void. She estimated that there was about 2,000,000 troops (hey, Almire was know for her great military, right?) in total surrounding the great wall of the Citadel. In comparison, the Spiral Knights only had about 150,000 aboard the Skylark when it crashed. Their numbers had fluxed as some perished in the Clockworks and some were born, but it had stayed roughly the same. If Lord Vanaduke had ever decided to launch a full-out counterattack against the Spiral Order for invading his kingdom so often, they would have completely crushed the Knights.

As the laughter reached an all-time hysterical pitch, several things happened at once.

The black ground seemed to burst open.

The earth beneath the Almirians troops and defenses exploded in Shadow Fire.

Creatures of the darkest shade of black possible erupted out of the portal, instantly destroying almost all of the barricades and Wheel Launchers with the sheer force created by their appearance, leaving the soldiers surrounded and exposed.

The Almirian troops yelled a battle cry in a foreign language(Desna had no idea that they still retained the ability to speak, as all she had ever heard from Zombies were moans and growls), and were all engulfed in blazing auras as fierce as Vanaduke's. Entire lines of the creatures from the portal instantly exploded into a black mist or dust. Desna herself could feel a blast of intense heat wash over her, and she was quite a distance away from the action.

The monsters recklessly charged the Almirians, with no heed to their personal safety. Desna could make out Wolvers, Gremlins, Lichens, and all types of Clockworks inhabitants. She spotted large behemoths towering over the others. They seemed to be Lumbers, but with huge axes as arms. Ironwood Sentinels, an incredibly deadly Lumber species that had fortunately only ever been encountered by the very first Knights delving into the Clockworks before seemingly disappearing. They moved far more swiftly than any Lumber; heck, anything in the Clockworks, seeming to glide over the ground faster than Greavers, and swung their axes with an efficiency that rivaled even the most proficient fencer in the Spiral order. They hadn't been spotted for years. But apparently they were back now, to put it simply. And deadlier than ever.

The incoming wave of monsters was only a bit away from the Almirian troops, having cleared over a hundred yards of Shadow Fire within a few seconds. Some of them were obliterated by the fiery hazard at random intervals, some dissolving and some not as they ran over. At any rate, it was obvious that the Shadow Fire would not stop them.

The line of Crusaders suddenly lifted their spears up and brought then down hard, as if there were a sword they were bringing down for an overhead smash. As the spears fell, the Crusaders loosened their grip on them so the spears slid forward in their hands, being caught at the very end of the shaft. The spearheads now extended by several feet, they came slashing down on the front wave of the incoming creatures like halberds, turning the front line into black ooze that disappeared into the fiery ground. The Crusaders then quickly thrust their spears backwards in their hands so that they had a better grip on them, and thrust them forward, also destroying another line of the creatures.

Then the creatures swarmed over them.

Desna watched as a black Gremlin tacked an Almirian Crusader to the ground and ripped him open with a glowing purple blade, turning him into dust and ashes before succumbing to the Shadow Fire. An Ironwood Sentinel swung its axe and took out an entire section of the Crusader line, then smashed its way past multiple Slag Guards before being taken down by the combined efforts of a mass of Slag Walkers. Several of the Lichens spun and threw spikes that flew over the first flew lines to rain into the Slag Walkers behind. But the Almirians would not be defeated to easily.

Howlitzers howled as they spewed bullets at the attackers, blowing away entire sections in the advancing army. Deadnaughts rushed through gaps in the Crusader line, smashing enemies into oblivion with their shields and driving them back. The Slags Walkers advanced where they could and swung their swords, blades of fire extinguishing the darkness they cut through.

And Vanaduke? The Lord of Almire had pushed his way through his troops in front of the main gate and was roaring incoherent curses, his massive mace creating colossal swaths in the mass of dark monsters. He was killing them by the dozens, each of Vanaduke's swings taking out masses. The orbs of fire circling him dissolved any creature who got hit by them. And all around him, his loyal subjects fought with him, refusing to give ground as the onslaught grew.

Desna had seen something similar to this before, when she had once seen the Morai harvest a star's essence to use it to power their Typhoon Fire weaponry. The light of a fading star, pushing back against the endless darkness that threatened to consume it forever.

It was horrible.

It was beautiful.

It was war.

And the whole time, Desna was watching it all with her one good eye. She was utterly horrified yet amazed at what was going on. The last time she had seen this level of carnage and destruction was during the Liberation of Ilsola. She was so focused that she never noticed the hiss behind her as a patch of black appeared in the ground and the dark creatures began to pour out, until it was too late. Hearing several growls and rapid footsteps, Desna turned, her eye widening in shock and surprise. She reached for a weapon, any weapon, but they were upon her...

Without warning, the Ironwood Sentinel that had been about to cut her in half disappeared and melted into the ground. A Wolver that had been about to rip her arm off dissolved with a yelp. Several other monsters were suddenly killed, without any sign as to how.

Then Desna heard the flutter of fabric and the ringing of steel. She saw a small glint as light flashed off a dagger. A bolt of purple shot out from the crowd of monsters and obliterated a group of black Lichens. Another blot flew through the air and ripped through several creatures, turning each one into a black mist.

As more and more of the dark monsters were rapidly cleared away, Desna caught a glimpse of her savior. A hooded figure, face obscured, wrapped in a black cloak that was inscribed with purple runes, holding a glowing dagger in each hand. The figure leapt and twirled, moving with impossible speed, cloak fluttering as an entire swath was cut through the group of creatures.

The figure threw its daggers at another Ironwood Sentinel, turning it into nothingness. It dashed forward, catching the daggers in one hand before they fell, and slashed backwards at a black Gremlin who had his purple sword raised high. The Gremlin dissolved, the sword falling to the ground.

Only a couple monsters remained. The figure finished them off with a blast of purple fire from its free hand, their remains sinking into the black portal. Then the figure stood back and blasted the portal with even more purple fire, making it shrink and shudder until it disappeared completely.

The entire combat sequence took less than five seconds.

Desna continued to lay there, her brain trying to process what had just happened. It was only when the figure suddenly dashed away a moment later that she began to react. She jumped to her feet and yelled after the figure.

"Hey! Get back here!"

But before she could say anymore, the figure slunk into a patch of shadows under an overhang, becoming lost from sight. Desna ran over and reached into the shadows.

"Just hold on a second, you! I-"

Her fingers grasped empty air. Desna, utterly stunned, looked around to see if there was a hidden alcove or something where the figure could have gone and hid in. But there were none. It was as if the figure had just melted into the shadows.

Desna slowly backed away. Everything had just gone crazy in the past few minutes. A winged figure who might very well be a creature of legend, the beginning of a devastating battle between an undead kingdom and creatures the Spiral Order had never seen the likes of, and now a being who had just saved her life, dispatching those ghastly monsters with ease before disappearing into the shadows as if it was made of the same substance. Her mind was reeling and racing, trying to think of rational reasons for everything that was happening.

She could think of none.

Looking over her shoulder to make sure no more of the dark monsters were creeping up on her, Desna saw patches of black beginning to spread along the Mountains as well, the creatures already on the loose and racing towards the Citadel. If she was to ever make any sense of what had just happened, she would need to make it back to Haven alive first.

Desna walked over to the sword the black Gremlin had dropped. She would bring it back to Haven and to the Laboratory to see in the scientists there could make any sense of it. It resembled a Cutter-line sword, except it was purple and black with a purple aura. Picking it up carefully, Desna could feel a buzz of energy coming from it that she did not like. She quickly opened a satchel on her belt and dropped the sword in, not wanting to hold on to it any longer than she had to.

Hearing the sound of warfare behind her, Desna raced back the way she had come. The Elevator was still quite a distance away, and she would have to be swift to avoid being detected and taken down by the monsters that were beginning to spawn in the Mountains. Remembering her wrist com-link, she decided to quickly call Spiral HQ and brief them on what was happening on her way back. After pressing a few buttons, she lifted the com-link to her mouth, running the whole time.

Speaking into the com-link, she unknowingly echoed almost the same words Lieutenant Vaelyn had just spoken a minute ago.

"Lieutenant Barrus? This is Ranger Desna. We have a problem."

~~~

*The Citadel is right at the edge of Almire, bordering what used to be the Owlites' kingdom. This is how they manage to pass through Almire and enter the Citadel at the same time.

So, those of you who have read the original core wars may or may not be able to figure out something in this chapter...

Thu, 08/22/2013 - 21:46
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Valorai
...

...YAY!

Fri, 08/23/2013 - 22:09
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Nechrome

Well, I was gonna post something of some importance in this post, but I completely forgot what it was when I began to type. Maybe I'll remember it later. But for now, I'll use this post as a bump as not to waste a post :O.

Oh yeah, I remember now. I'm thinking of maybe doing a thing that's sorta like accepting character apps, but not really. Like people post ideas for characters, and if I like them, I make them part of my story. But they're not really a character. Although they are. But they're not really a character app even though you guys make the character so it's sorta like an app. AUGHAUGHAUGHU I'm horrible at explaining things.

I give up trying to explain. If any of you actually manage to figure out what I'm trying to say here, kudos to you.

Sat, 09/28/2013 - 08:51
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Nechrome

Has it really been over a month since I posted the last chapter? Seems a lot shorter.

Chapter 3

The Crimson Lab
Several Days after the Core Incident

King Tinkinzar stood on a large balcony overlooking a massive field. It was part of the Lord Mechron's Crimson Lab, which was a mix of a laboratory, factory, and training camp that stretched down several Depths. He was viewing a large army training, several thousand soldiers clad in crimson armor out on the field. All around, there was combat. Individual sparring matches and full-blown group battles dotted the place; some soldiers were rapidly climbing horizontally along the walls, which were pocketed with small blast craters that made excellent hand and foot-holds, before jumping off and launching themselves at others in mock combat. Many were flying around on jetpacks, one of Seerus' newer creations. At the far end of the field, Tinkinzar could even make out soldiers diving off the edge of the Depth, presumably to some deeper part of the Lab. He couldn't make out any that had parachutes or jetpacks on, though, so that confused him.

A soldier with a jetpack suddenly flew past his face, followed close behind by another. Wind buffeted Tinkinzar's fur. They were evidently involved in some kind of aerial sparring match. The soldier giving chase caught up to the first soldier and swung his arm, a glowing sword having appeared out of thin air in his hand. It must have cut through whatever was keeping the jetpack attached to the first soldier, because he began to fall, limbs barely flailing. Tinkinzar mentally winced as he smashed into the ground seconds later. He had landed in a strange position, crouched down on one knee with his fists pressing against the ground to support himself. He seemed miraculously unhurt; there wasn't even the slightest scratch or dent in his armor. Even as Tinkinzar watched, the soldier got up from the ground and shook his fist at the soldier who had cut off his jetpack, who was busy gliding down to his fallen opponent.

"You have no idea how long it took to create shock absorbers and armor capable of letting them do that." Tinkinzar heard someone mutter. Having made up his mind, King Tinkinzar turned to face Lord Mechron and Warmaster Seerus, who were standing beside him. They were twiddling their thumbs nervously. He decided to use a kingly attitude for what he was going to say, rather than his normal voice and manner.

"Well, you two," King Tinkinzar began in a grand voice. He spoke slowly as to keep the two Schemers on their toes, as well as allow him more time to think of what to say. "Today, you asked for my presence here, so that I could witness the fruits of your labors. Operation Crimson Guard was ready to be revealed, you said. Months of secrecy and whispering, about to be thrown away at last."

He turned to view the field again, and turned back to the Gremlins.

"A new generation of warriors, you said. Powerful soldiers with the speed of a Greaver, agility of a Devilite, and power of a Trojan, was what you said. With all of those Fiend similes, I thought you'd created something with the help of Achilles." Tinkinzar added a bit jokingly. Seerus took it literally, however.

"Oh, not at all, my liege. These were-" Seerus began. Tinkinzar cut him off with a wave of his hand.

"It seems you were not lying. Speed, agility, power, all things I have seen on this field today. What you both have done is... well, I..."

He paused for dramatic effect, wearing an very kingly expression he had been practicing for moments like this. Mechron and Seerus seemed deceptively calm, but Tinkinzar knew that inside, they were dying to hear their king's opinion.

Tinkinzar dropped his expression and spoke in a flat tone. "I don't get it."

Mechron and Seerus stared at Tinkinzar.

"So you guys constructed a new army of Mecha Knights. We already have thousands of them. What's so special about these?" Tinkinzar asked them. He wasn't mad at all, but more like very confused. "I've seen that they are certainly a level above the ones we have right now, in terms of movement and fighting power, but that seems about it. What was the point? Our current models can already fight Swarm's forces effectively. The Spiral Knights will still be able to easily tear through these ones as they already do with our current ones. I understand progress and all, but if all you're doing is creating the next generation, there was no need for such secrecy. You both know that."

Mechron and Seerus turned to look at each other, and then turned back to Tinkinzar.

"Well, you see, it's like this." Mechron began, gesturing randomly with his hands. "The Crimson Guard is a special group of Mecha Knights. They have, well-" After a brief pause, he quickly turned to Seerus, whispering in his ear.

"How do we say this? Inartificial intelligence? A conscious? A conscience?"

"Personally, I think inartificial intelligence works the best." Seerus whispered back.

Mechron snapped back to facing Tinkinzar and continued "-inartificial intelligences," bringing up a finger. Tinkinzar, still confused, frowned.

Seerus began to speak, his voice slightly muffled by his mask. "Normal Constructs are programmed what to do. They don't really have a mind of their own. Sure, they can make some simple decisions; kill or capture, advance or regroup, that kind of stuff. The Crimson Guard, however, they have minds of their own."

"In a way," Mechron continued, "You could say that they are, well, alive."

"The Almirians have minds of their own and are considered dead." Tinkinzar pointed out, folding his arms. "But that's beside the point. So you say this Crimson Guard can think by themselves. No programming or anything influencing their behavior?"

"That's absolutely correct." Mechron replied.

"Well, I'm interested as to how you managed that in the first place, but I have more pressing questions. How is this inartificial intelligence useful?" Tinkinzar had already thought of a few ways how it would be rather useful, but he wanted to hear from the creators.

Seerus spoke up. "Well, for one, they can make their own choices and judgments as to what to do. They can operate without someone having to make the ultimate decisions for them, freeing up lots of Gremlins. They have morals. They know when to leave an enemy alive when said enemy is too injured to pronounce defeat, and when to surrender themselves as to not sacrifice the lives of any of their surviving comrades. They even have emotions, which you might have inferred from that Crimson Guard who lost his Jetpack. Did you notice how he shook his fist at the one who cut off his Jetpack? That was a sign of frustration. But what we think if the most important is that they can learn and adapt."

"As we said earlier, these Constructs have had no programming at all. When they were first activated, they didn't know how to do anything. Literally anything. They couldn't even walk. But they learned. When they began combat training, they weren't simply programmed how to fight. They watched instructors, and they learned the simple basics. Blocking, parrying, swinging a sword. Then they were left alone and they built their own way up from there. They have developed their own techniques, their own methods, their own strategies." Seerus pointed at the field, where the crimson Mecha Knights trained. "There are ten thousand Crimson Guards out there. None of them move the same way. None of them fight the same way. None of them react the same way. They are all unique, untainted by our programming."

Mechron cut in. "What my colleague is trying to say here is, since we did not program them and let them teach themselves, they have not implemented any of our own combat strategies into their own; the kind we program into all other Constructs and as a result make them predictable and easy for the Knights to defeat. The Crimson Guard is therefore completely unpredictable, which is something the Spiral Knights will not be used to nor understand. The Guard will be able to adapt to any situation, formulate brilliant plans of their own, anything at all. Great for fighting the Knights and Swarm."

Tinkinzar nodded his head thoughtfully. The Crimson Guard really would be a great addition to their army. But there was still some things he wanted to know.

"What about their armor and gear? From what I've seen, their armor seems to be extremely durable, and they're using weapons and equipment I haven't seen before."

Mechron looked thoughtful for a moment. "Long story short, all of their gear is made of a ridiculously durable, lightweight, and shock absorbent alloy of Sun Silver and Volcanic Iron. We can tell you the details later. But first, there's something else we want to show you." He turned and gestured for Seerus and Tinkinzar to follow him.

After a bit of walking, they reached an Elevator. Going down to the next Depth of the Lab, the Elevator let them out in a rather messy room filled with computer screens and cables snaking around.

"Apologies for the mess, my liege." Seerus sad, careful stepping over a length of cable as thick as his arm. We had a bit of trouble setting thing all up, and haven't had time to organize it all yet.

Tinkinzar nodded absentmindedly, gazing at the computer screens. All of them showed a different view of a large group of unarmed Crimson Guards, maybe about a hundred in total. They were all standing around several large holes in a Deconstruction Zone.

Mechron cleared his throat. "Now, to business. We called you here today not just to show you our finished project, but to show them in action. We actually completed the entire project about a month ago, and have spent the time since then preparing for a... an attack."

Tinkinzar raised an eyebrow. "An attack?"

Mechron nodded, continuing. "We have known the location of one of the Spiral Order's outposts in a Frostifur Den on Depth 25 for some time now. We've left it alone so far, but no longer. We have been planning an attack on it, using the Crimson Guard. This is their first field test, and we wanted you to be here to see it. We're hoping that it will show you just how powerful the Guard is."

Tinkinzar blinked. "Um... Okay..."

Seerus spoke. "We've arranged it so that right now, the Outpost is directly underneath the Decon Zone these Guards are on." He pointed to the screens. "We are sending exactly a hundred of them to invade and conquer the outpost."

"Two things. Exactly how many Knights are in that outpost? And how are they going to get down there? I don't see any Elevators around on the screens." Tinkinzar asked.

Seerus pressed a few keyboard keys, apparently issuing commands to the Guard. They gathered up around the holes. Tinkinzar suddenly realized what they were going to do.

"First off, by our estimates, a bit over a thousand Knights are occupying that outpost..."

"Okay, so only a thou.... wait, what?"

"...And second, they jump."

The Guard jumped.
~~~~~~
The rest of this chapter shall be in the POV of Commander 360, the Crimson Guard who is leading the attack.
~~~~~~
The command had been issued. Chatter quieted down all across the Hive-Channel.

All right, troops, this is it. Commander 360 broadcasted.

5... 4... 3... 2... 1... 0

We jumped.

Diving through the holes in the ground, they fell headfirst towards the next depth. Clouds and fog flew past them, obscuring their vision. Chatter erupted once more in the Hive-Channel.

Remember, when we hit the ground, we hit it running. Give them as little time as possible to react.

They passed through the clouds, now in a light snowfall. Flecks of snow began to dot Commander 360's photoreceptors.

Remember how we planned this guys. Just muscle through them.

The outpost began to come into view. It was a large mass of buildings, surrounded by a courtyard which in turn was surrounded by a tall wall.

Heh. Lots of good that wall'll do them.

The figures of individual Knights walking around the courtyard came into focus. None of them were looking up, not expected a crimson death to rain upon them. A few of the Guard maneuvered themselves around in the air.

Well, this is it. We're about to fight once more.

There was about 10 seconds left before impact.

Revenge...

Hey, remember, our mission is not to kill. It is to conquer.

5 seconds.

Let's show these Knights who we are!

Right before impact, a roar sounded across the channel.

WE ARE THE CRIMSON GUARD!

Impact.

The members of the Guard who had been moving themselves around in midair slammed into the Knights meandering around the court yard more than enough force to shatter the Knights' spines and necks and kill them instantly. In a flash, they were on their feet, dashing across the courtyard.

That was some great stuff. Very impressive.

The others, including Commander 360, hit the ground rolling in an explosion of snow, getting up to their feet in a fraction of a second and rushing at the main building without showing any sign that they had just fallen several hundred feet. There must have been security cameras showing what was going on outside because at that point, an alarm began to wail and Knights started to pour out, wielding their weapons and shields. They seemed rather surprised and confused, that an attack had happened so suddenly with little warning.

The Guard, still dashing at the Knights, leaned forward so that it seemed like they would head-butt them. Their arms trailed behind them, still devoid of any weapons. The Knights spread out and brought up their shields.

Suddenly, a flash of light appeared in many of the Guards' hands. A glowing golden sword appeared in their rights, and a white shield with a crimson border, bearing a Gremlin insignia in their lefts.

You gotta love that Mecha Knight teleportation tech.

The Crimson Guards furthest ahead of the group smashed into the Spiral Knights, swinging their shield and knocking the Knights they hit over. They twirled and spun, their blades glittering as they cut through armor and flesh. The Knights seemed really discombobulated right now. Those Mecha Knights must be crazy, to attack a group as large as theirs. But they moved and fought like no Mecha Knight they had ever seen before.

The rest of the Guard caught up. Some of them spun as they hit the defenders, their swords cutting entire swaths around them. Some of them leapt up and into the midst of the Knights, ducking and weaving and stabbing. Knights coming out on higher levels of the outpost fired down on them with guns. Some of the Guard latched onto the wall and started climbing the smooth metal surface, dodging bullets with ease as they did so. Rapidly reaching the top of that layer, swords and shields appeared in their hands and they quickly cut down the Knights. A few of the Guard dashed inside the building the way the Knights had come out, while the others continued to climb to high levels.

Whoo! Fun stuff!

Commander 360 had thrown his shield as he neared the Knights, catching one of them in the throat and breaking his neck. He began to spin his sword in circles in his hand, cutting into the Knights while ducking backwards under their sword swings and gun blasts. Four Knights fell into the snow, dead. Picking up his shield, Commander 360 smashed it upward into a Knight's face, then quickly stabbed him through the chest.

A Nitronome flew through the air, aimed at the back of the mass of Guards. Commander 360 swung his sword at the Bomb, causing it to detonate prematurely. None of the Guard was even fazed by the massive neon explosion. However, it did blow up a dozen or so Knights.

The survivors began to back into the building, desperately trying to block the storm of blows the Guard was raining down on them. Once they had all made it back it, the solid metal doors slammed shut in the Guards' faces (the doors are sorta like those automatic doors at the entrances to like Safeway and Target and Walmart and stuff). A Guard pulled them open, easily breaking the locking mechanism that was supposed to have kept the door closer. A hail of bullets began to blast out of the entryway, simply pinging off the Guards' armor, and the doors closed again. He pulled it open again. More bullets as the doors closed. The Guard turned to face his comrades, with a sense of exasperation.

Honestly! The nerve of these Knights, not letting us in!

I know, right?

There was a flash of light, and a grenade of sorts appeared in the Guard's hand. He chucked it casually at the door. The door exploded.

Then the Guard ducked and rolled through the entry, swinging his sword as he snapped back up. A semicircle of gunners that had been shooting fell to the ground, clutching fatal wounds.

The rest of the Knights began to spread out more inside the large building, while the rest of the Guard dashing in. Single combat began to break out, as members of the Guard found individual opponents to duel. Most of the duels ended rather quickly, always in the Guards' favor.

Commander 360 faced down a Knight wearing a bulky Ironmight Plate set, wielding a Sudaruska. The Knight, with amazing speed, swung his massive sword horizontally, aiming for Commander 360's head. He ducked, the blade passing over his face, and drew his sword arm back for a stab. Suddenly, the Knight rotated his wrists and brought the Sudaruska slamming down on Commander 360 with unimaginable amounts of blunt force.

Ouch.

Commander 360 simply pushed the sword off on himself, got off of the shattered ground, dusted himself off, and promptly stabbed the Knight, his blade shearing through several layers of plate mail. As the bewildered Knight crumpled to the ground, Commander 360 inspected himself. Only the tiniest hint of a scratch on his armor.

This stuff our armor is made off... Loving it!

Some of the Knights ran for the lifts in the back of the room, meaning to retreat to a higher level of the outpost. The doors opened, revealing members of the Guard, who bashed the Knights back with their shields. Apparently the climbers had already cleared the top levels.

The Knights were herded into the center of the room, the Crimson Guard surrounding and advancing on them slowly. There was no escape for them.

"Stop! We surrender!" A lone Knight cried out as he threw his sword and shield down on the ground and raised his arms. The Guard stopped moving, several of them about to plunge their blades into wide-eyed Knights. Yells of agreement and more of surrender began to burst out. The sound of metal clanging on the ground filled the room. Soon, all of the Knights had their arms up in the air. Gesturing with their swords, the Crimson Guard began to herd the Knights outside the outpost, where a convoy of Gremlins in cargo transporters was just arriving to take the Knights away. They had known it would be a quick success, and so hadn't waited for the Guard to tell them that the battle was over and won to start heading over. Quickly leaping out of their vehicles, they became to bind the Knight's wrists with cord.

Commander 360 called for a battle report. It took a while for the cheering and yelling going on in the Hive Channel to subside.

That was quick. Only... six minutes and thirty-four seconds.

That long? Tsk.

So, guys, how many did we lose?

None, although I do have a rather nasty dent in my breastplate. Those Rocket Hammers seem to be the only things powerful enough to damage us. Gremlin tech and all, you know?

Thieves. Those are property of The Order.

Quiet down, guys. Now, how many did we get?

286.

So 714 Knights are surrendering to a hundred of us? Hah!

I'd say this mission was a success.

The bound Knights, staring at the silent Mecha Knights as they were prodded by sneering Gremlins into the vehicles, would never have known that they were busy causing a ruckus in their communications channel. The cheering slowly quieted down again.

C'mon guys. Let's go find an Elevator and get back to the Lab. I'm sure Mechron and Seerus will be happy to see us.

They're due for a promotion now, wouldn't you say?

Yup. It's all thanks to them that the fallen fight again.

BONUS SCENE

The four Gremlins rushed through the Depth, panting with exertion and armor damp with sweat. They kept stealing glances behind them at random intervals, eyes wide with fear as they searched the empty space behind them. The others had already been lost, falling to the ground with bloody gashes in their neck as they ran, or simply vanishing into thin air, their mutilated bodies appearing later on. Eight Gremlins, dead without a clue as to what was stalking them.

The survivors were exhausted and worn out, but sheer terror gave them strength. That, and the fact that they knew they were carrying information that was vital to the survival of the The Nine, The Twelve, and King Tinkinzar.

As they ran, a red banner, fluttering gently in the breeze, could be seen in the distance. It marked the area where their camp was.

"Almost there guys." One of the Gremlins panted. "We can take a bit of a breather once we reach camp."

The others nodded their agreement. Rapidly covering the final stretch between them and their camp, the group collapsed on a mound of sandbags and lay there, panting heavily. One of them seemed to have a sudden thought and rushed towards a small terminal. A few seconds later, gates closed off the camp from the rest of the Depth, providing a barricade between them and their pursuer.

"I'm going to send a message back to the Colony, guys." The Gremlin who had activated the gates spoke. "They need to know this. "

The others, having a recovered a bit, weakly nodded their heads. After a while, they got up and moved a few mortars that were lying around, positioning them along with the sandbags to create a more defensive position.

The Gremlin pushed a few buttons on the terminal, trying to establish a connection with the Great Colony, the Grand Arsenal, anywhere. "This is Squad 306. We are carrying very important information that we must relay to Warmaster Seerus immediately. Is anyone there? I repeat, this is Squad 306. We-"

He heard the sound of steel behind him. Turning around, he saw his comrades fall to the ground with a dull thump. Blood was pouring out of their necks. The gates around the camp had a gaping hole cut in one of them.

The poor Gremlin didn't even have time to feel fear before everything went dark.

~~~

The Ghostmane Stalker uncloaked and stood over the bodies of his most recent kills. He had been tailing Seerus' minions for hours, slowly killing them off one by one. They had been great sport for the Stalker. He could feel the fear that was radiating off of them as he chased them through the Clockworks.

His master would be pleased. Word would not get out to the rest of the Order and Tinkinzar about what was happening. Word would not get out to anyone in on Cradle at all. They would all remain ignorant until the time arrived, and then they would be dead.

He heard the sounds of a group of Knights coming his way. As much as the Ghostmane Stalker would like to kill them, it would cause complications. He didn't want the Spiral Knights to get involved in this affair. As he slipped away from the camp, a slip of paper fell out of one of his pockets.

~~~

The group of Knights observed the Gremlin camp, looking at the dead bodies. Blood covered much of the ground, and they had to walk on their toes to avoid stepping in the red liquid.

"Poor saps." One of the Knights muttered. "I wonder what happened here?" He had knelt down over a dead Gremlin by a terminal, heedless of the blood staining his greaves. "These bodies are still warm, and the blood is still flowing. They died really recently; maybe a few minutes before we got here."

A Knight snorted. "They're only Gremlins. Who cares about them?"

Most of the others nodded their agreement. The one inspecting the bodies stayed silent.

He was about to get up when something white caught his eye. It was lying on a puddle of blood, stained red. He picked it up. There was some writing on it. Most of it was unintelligible, due to the blood, but there were a few words at the end that were legible. However, the Knight didn't read Gremlin, so none of it made sense to him. He shoved it into a pocket. Maybe he could show Spiral HQ later, and get some Emberlight Gremlins to translate it.

"Can't find anything much here. Let's go." The Knight said.

The Knights continued on their adventuring. Some of them would perish to a swarm of Greavers later on in the day, their comrades scattering and leaving the bodies behind. Among the dead would be the Knight who had pocketed the slip of paper, the writing now completely illegible, soaked red with the Gremlin's and the Knight's blood. If any had managed to translate the writing that the Knight had seen, they would have discovered a plot that would have affected everyone on Cradle; Clockworks inhabitants, Strangers, and Knights alike.

The others must never know. Silence them. -H

~~~

Yes, a lot of things in the chapter at vague on purpose. They will be revealed eventually.

Also, concept art on the Crimson Guard.

EDIT: Apparently editing posts to fix typos bumps the thread .-.

Thu, 09/26/2013 - 18:27
#9
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Blitzhawk
Hi Necro c: I'm too lazy to

Hi Necro c:
I'm too lazy to read this right now, but I'll get to it eventually.
PLAY MOAR SK, I haven't seen you on in like a month or two :l

Thu, 09/26/2013 - 20:48
#10
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Snakemittens
This story is great! Nao MOAR

This story is great! Nao MOAR

Thu, 09/26/2013 - 21:31
#11
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Battlegrinder
Awesome story! (also some nitpicks)

First off, let me say that this one of (if not the) best spiral knights fanfics I've ever read. Its amazing, and I hope you continue to work on it. That said, I have a few questions/comments.

1. Desna said their were 5000 knights in the order. So did the mecha knights just taken down 1/5 of the order?

2. How did the spiral knights not notice the swarm? It's not exactly subtle.

3. The new mecha knights seem a little too much like people. They're robots, they shouldn't really have thought processes that mirror our own.

4. Having your army fight in a way that the enemy can't predict is a good idea. Having them fight in way that also won't them predict their comrades actions isn't, especially since mecha knights communicate at a rather human pace (and any kind of distributed communications system would still be slow. The Borg have a hive mind set up like that, are a hardly quick to react).

5. At 10 to one odds, the mecha knights should have been overwhelmed by the spiral knights, despite having a faint technological edge (gremlin tech can't be much more advanced than spiral tech, otherwise the two groups wouldn't have compatible tech). They'd need a massive edge to pull off something like that (like Roman army vs WW2 level gap), and if the gap was that wide, the order would have been wiped out ages ago.

6. If the mecha knights hit the ground at 200 mph, that means they hit with about 8940 N of force (assuming each knight weighs around 100 kilos). That would mean they hit the ground with sixteen times more kenetic energy than tank shells. Tough armor or not, anything would be pulverised if you hit it with that much force.

Sat, 09/28/2013 - 09:06
#12
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Nechrome

DISCLAIMER: I am horrible at explaining stuff.

You have been warned.

"Its amazing, and I hope you continue to work on it."

Why thank you! :D And I must say the same about your own writing.

I actually started this like over a year ago and then sorta quit last October, cause too many character apps and school and stuff. Then I decided to start writing it again, but the story had been inactive for so long I just decided to restart it. I really hope I don't end up abandoning this story, like I did so many stories... This is like the 10th story I've written. Only 2-3 of the other ones I actually finished. Half have been abandoned, rest are still in progress.

"1. Desna said their were 5000 knights in the order. So did the mecha knights just taken down 1/5 of the order?"

._.

.-.

/derp

I have some numbers I need to change later. :P Thanks for pointing that out. Massive fail on my part.

"2. How did the spiral knights not notice the swarm? It's not exactly subtle."

Are you talking about how the SK did not know about the Swarm till the Core incident? If so, let's just say he's decided to reveal himself to the Knight now. Cause as a story writer, I can create my own set of events and stuff that happens and doesn't happen. And I say that Swarm decided to give the Knights a little surprise :D

"3. The new mecha knights seem a little too much like people. They're robots, they shouldn't really have thought processes that mirror our own."

;) Ah, I see you're starting to get it. Don't worry. Everything shall be explained later on. I've put little subtle hints inside that chapter, though.

If you don't want to wait, though, the answers can be found in the original Core Wars, if you can find it...

"4. Having your army fight in a way that the enemy can't predict is a good idea. Having them fight in way that also won't let them predict their comrades actions isn't, especially since mecha knights communicate at a rather human pace (and any kind of distributed communications system would still be slow. The Borg have a hive mind set up like that, are a hardly quick to react)."

/shrug

The Guard fight as individuals. Sometimes in formations, but rarely. Dunno if that solves anything, but it was enough for me :P

"5. At 10 to one odds, the mecha knights should have been overwhelmed by the spiral knights, despite having a faint technological edge (gremlin tech can't be much more advanced than spiral tech, otherwise the two groups wouldn't have compatible tech). They'd need a massive edge to pull off something like that (like Roman army vs WW2 level gap), and if the gap was that wide, the order would have been wiped out ages ago."

Hmm. First off, the Crimson Guard have very durable armor and stuff. Commander 360 took a Suda smash to the chest and only got a scratch. I don't think that that's a 'faint' technological edge. Second off, due to the SK threat, the Gremlins have begun... how do you say this? Basically, they're trying to advance their technology really quickly and stuff to combat against the SK more effectively. Cause, the SK is already pulverizing them. Also because of other factors that'll be shown in the next chapter or two.

Their tech is relatively compatible cause... SCIENCE.

In honesty though, I just wanted to have some OP characters that could pwnzer the Knights. :P Although the Guard has been an idea for a year or two now, I've only decided to make them legitely OP very recently. But don't worry; I will find a legit reason how and why they're so powerful!

"6. If the mecha knights hit the ground at 200 mph, that means they hit with about 8940 N of force (assuming each knight weighs around 100 kilos). That would mean they hit the ground with sixteen times more kenetic energy than tank shells. Tough armor or not, anything would be pulverised if you hit it with that much force."

Eh. Didn't do much research on that, although I did suspect that they were going a bit too fast :P Originally, I had them going at 500mph, then 300, then 200. Still feels too fast. Although you should factor in that they landed on snow. And some of them broke their fall by landing on Knights :D

100 kilos... I haven't actually thought about how heavy the Guard weighs. Thinking about the type of technology that the Guard is made out of...

Eh, I dunno. I'll change the speed later to something more reasonable.

So, as you can tell there may or may not be a bunch of plot holes in my story.

EDIT: OK, changed some of the #s and stuff. Dunno if it helps or makes things worse, but...?

Tue, 10/22/2013 - 22:08
#13
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Nechrome

Random Interlude 1

Eugene the Devilite was busy dusting out his coffee shop, the Underworld Drip. Recently, a group of rowdy Knights had come over to the Dark City and caused quite a ruckus. Poor Eugene could do little as Devilite and Knight duked it out in his shop. Furniture had been thrown and broken, windows had been smashed, and much of his staff had been killed, their essence sent back to the Underworld where they would have to spend centuries filling out the paperwork required for their revival. He had hid behind the counter, gorging himself on pastries while his livelihood was being destroyed.

Brushing out a pile of metal (the remains of some mean [and dead] Knight's armor), Eugene leaned against the door jamb and wiped his forehead with his stubby arms. This was hard work. He wondered where his surviving employees had run off to; last he'd seen of them, he had sent them to pick up a package that arrived for him at the nearby post office. Apparently it was a rather large delivery, so it required multiple Devilite to lug it all the way back to his shop. However, this had been several hours ago, so Eugene was beginning to suspect that his workers had ditched him and taken an early break.

Straightening himself, Eugene continued to brush the scrap metal into a dustbin, which he promptly emptied into a trash can. Shaking the dust pan, the armor clanged as it bounced around the trash can. There was one stubborn piece of metal that wouldn't leave the dust pan; a piece of fabric attached to the armor was snagged on the pan. Shaking it harder, Eugene frowned as it refused to come loose. He began to bang it against the trash can, when he heard loud footsteps behind him. Turning around, Eugene saw a pair of Knightmares straining to pull a large platform on wheels behind them. On top of the platform was the largest box he had ever seen before. It was larger than the Trojans, even. He dropped the dust bin into the trash can in surprise. A large cardboard box, with Fiendish stamps and purple tape, and staples all over it. As they drew closer, Eugene could make out another pair of Knightmares behind the transport, pushing it. His missing employees were also jogging behind, their short legs making it hard to keep up even with the slow Trojans. The box's contents must have been remarkable heavy if it required four Knightmares to move it. Now he realized what his workers had probably been doing for the past few hours.

The Trojans stopped a few feet away, snorting. The Devilites finally caught up, and one of them, wearing a green visor and glasses, walked up to Eugene. Eugene recognized him a member of the UPS (Underworld Postage Service). The UPS Devilite handed him a clipboard and pen. On the clipboard was a packet of papers.

"Sign here, here, here, here, here, here, here, here, and here. Oh, and over here." The Devilite said, flipping through the pages and pointing at several sections. Not bothering to read any of it, Eugene signed where the UPS Devilite had indicated,.

"What's in that package? And who's it from" Eugene asked him as he handed the clipboard and pen back. The other Devilite shrugged.

"No idea. I just work here." Checking the papers, the Devilite gave a satisfied nod. "Very good. Well, enjoy your mail, whatever it is." And he walked off.

Eugene's employees took this time to walk up to him. "We got you your package, boss!" One of them said.

"I can see that." Eugene looked at it thoughtfully.

"We had to get some Trojans to move it for us, since it was too large and heavy." Another explained. "Sorry it took so long; there was another group of Knights down by the post station, and there was some trouble."

"Mmh hmm." Eugene looked at the Trojans who were still standing next to the package and staring darkly at Eugene. He didn't take it personally; Trojans didn't like anyone.

"You big fellas mind helping me open this thing?" He called out to them. One of them lifted a sword that had seemingly come out of nowhere, and professionally cut the box to pieces. Eugene let out a low whistle, impressed.

The object inside seemed to be roughly spherical, judging by the shape of the packaging around it. Motioning to his workers, Eugene and the other Devilite tore away the packaging paper, wondering what was underneath it all.

His hand made contact with something cold and stony feeling. Quickly ripping away the rest of the packaging, the group of Devilite were astonished by what they saw. Even the Trojans seemed rather surprised.

"What is the Underworld is this?" Eugene cried out. Behind all the packaging was a massive stone shell, covered in dirt and moss. Strange carvings that resembled eyes made out a pattern on the shell, and there were a few orange protrusions with gaping holes in the middle. Peering into the holes, Eugene could make out what seemed to be large shards of some kind of material, surrounded by strange machinery.

Next to the shells were long cylindrical objects that seemed to resemble limbs yet also cannons. The objects were lines with strange carvings and patters. At the end of each of arm/cannon, there were three shard stone talons surrounding once again an orange disk with another gaping hole. The holes in the arms/cannons also seemed to be filled with the same stuff that had been found inside the shell's protrusions.

Finally, there was a massive skull lying in front of the shell and limbs. Half the size of a Trojan, the skull was smooth and grey, like polished stone. Dents in its mouth marked where teeth had once been. It seemed to belong to a prehistoric monster of sorts.

Eugene lightly tapped the shell. There was a small vibration and echo, indication that it was partially hollow. He guessed it was filled with machinery. Did that mean that it was a Gremlin creation then? Another Construct that they had enlisted the help of the Fiends to create? No matter what it was, Eugene couldn't fathom why it had been sent to him.

Eugene tapped it lightly again. Looking at him, his workers began to do the same, mimicking their boss in the hopes that they were doing something that would gain them a promotion. Knocks and taps sounded down the street, as the Trojans looked on the Devilites with a sense of something like amusement.

One Devilite tapped a part of the shell that sank in a bit. Before he could wonder what had just happened. the eyes on the shell flashed and turned red, pulsing with a strange energy. Loud blasts sounded as multiple somethings shot out of the orange protrusions. Flying into the sky, the Fiends flinched as they rained down around them.

The patterns on the arms/cannons also glowed red, and fired off several somethings as well. The force of them made them roll and jerk around askew, and several projectiles smashed through the window of The Underworld Drip and collapsed the far wall as they impacted against them, much to Eugene's horror. A group of corporate Devilites on the other side of the wall looked at it in comical surprise.

The firing of projectiles ended as quickly as it had begun. At least a dozen of the projectiles (Eugene identified them to be the shards of material he had seen earlier inside the protrusions) had stuck themselves into the street and the surrounding buildings, flashing yellow-green while bolts of energy shot around them. One of the braver Devilites crept up to one of the shards and lightly touched it, only to jerk back and fall to the ground writhing as energy flashed around him. He had been effected by the Status Element of Shock.

Busy staring at The Underworld Drip (he would have to fix everything ALL over again!), Eugene's despair was interrupted by one of his workers who was not busy pointing and laughing at the Shocked Devilite like his co-workers.

"Boss? This was next to the shell." The Devilite handed him a thick book, ragged and torn with age. It seemed to be an Owlite grimoire. Eugene had seen quite a few of them before in his day.

"Hmm... Thank you. A promotion for you, I think." Eugene said absentmindedly. The Devilite beamed with pride, and turned to his still-laughing co-workers to brag. Looking at the cover, Eugene could barely make out its title.

"Dark Beasts Most Malevolent: An Encyclopedia of the Creatures that Come Forth from the Shadows" it read. Intrigued, Eugene opened it to its first page. Wrinkled and crumbling with old age, what it showed made Eugene understand what was going on. He looked at the shell and skull, then back at the page.

He quickly shut the book shut and turned to his employees. "I will be inside, in my... er, office. Do not disturb me." He told them. The Devilites paused in their continued mocking to nod at him and say "Yes boss," and then resumed laughing. Eugene turned, then, after a second thought, turned back and looked at the Trojans. "You can go now, by the way." They only continued to stare at him. Eugene blinked, and turned away.

Carefully stepping over the shattered glass, Eugene rushed inside The Underworld Drip and into his office. He closed and locked the door before sitting into a swivel chair and reopening the grimoire to the first page.

On it was paragraphs of archaic writing, pictures and runes scribbled all over. There was a list of materials needed to create the subject of interest on the page (and of the next several pages as well). Reading with an interest that only a Devilite had, Eugene devoured the text on the page, and stared at the images.

"My... Oh my..."

The images showed a mighty shelled behemoth, glowing purple and with purple fire coming out of its eyes. Sharp, jagged teeth protruded out of its mouth, and it glowed with an unholy aura. Runes were carved on its shell, rough and violent as if some had used a carving knife to do so. Underneath the picture was a list of materials and objects needed to bring the terrifying creature into existence.

TORTOMEGA: The Great Hammer of the Underworld

~~~

I typed this all up after a moment of inspiration in an hour :D

YUS hammer of the Underworld like in LotR Grond, you know? :D

I can't find any pics of the Scenario rooms with the Tortodrones stuffed with Dark Matter :U

You can find a pic of the Corrupted Tortodrone on the interwebz. I didn't link here cause I figured that it would be considered a spoiler ;)

Wed, 10/23/2013 - 04:57
#14
Grittle's picture
Grittle
"9.9/10 because I wasn't

"9.9/10 because I wasn't bribe to do a 10/10"
-IGN

Wed, 10/23/2013 - 15:42
#15
Nechrome's picture
Nechrome

:D Heya Grittle I actually do have a bribe for you. I'll tell you about it later in game...

This new Apocrea stuff... It just murdered all of my lore that I was planning to do with the Harvester.

But heeeey, lots of new lore stuff :D

I think I shall begin work on celebratory chapters due to the Apocrea and the DH.

Sat, 10/26/2013 - 16:09
#16
Nechrome's picture
Nechrome
In honor of the Apocrea

An excerpt from "Dark Beasts Most Malevolent"

HARVESTER: The Reaper of Souls, Master of Apocrea

The first recorded encounter with Harvester was during the first years of the banishment of the Fiends. What follows is an account of said encounter, as dictated by a traveling merchant.

~~~

I was walking across a field of grass with my younger brother Dahse... It was nighttime, and we had lost our way traveling to a trading center... It was a new moon that night, so it was very dark... Our lanterns had burned out long before... While walking, we noticed a faint flash of purple light nearby... Looking for the source, we spotted the silhouette of a tall figure standing still... Abnormally long arms, wearing a shawl that covered its head... Darkness seemed to radiant from it... Against my warnings, Dahse walked towards the figure, believing it to be a local... Dahse had always been rather thick-headed... He figured that it could give us some directions... I reluctantly followed...

The figure turned to us, and I saw three glowing purple eyes beneath the shawl... Other than that, I could make out no features... However, there was something else beneath the shawl, causing it to ripple and move... I realized something was wrong, and called out to Dahse, who ignored me... All of a sudden, the figure's arms began to extend, as if they were growing... I could see them somehow, although Dahse couldn't... They covered the distance between it and Dahse quickly, who did not see the limbs in the darkness that grew as he drew nearer... It grabbed Dahse around the legs... He tripped and realized what was happening... He began to scream for my help in horror... Yet I was paralyzed with fear... It and dragged him back, screaming all the way, until the arms were back to their original length and Dahse was hanging upside down in front of the figure... Tendrils spilled out from beneath its shawl, writhing like serpents... Dahse's screaming grew and the figure lifted Dahse into its face... It blasted him with a cone of purple light, and I saw a great white orb slowly draw out of Dahse's body, and become absorbed into the being's tendrils... He was screaming the entire time, this time not in horror but in great pain... The light disappeared... Then it seemed to devour him, his body disappearing into the mass of tentacles along with his screams... It turned its face to me... Great masses of black tentacles burst out of the ground and dove at me... Only then was my spell of terror broken... I ran back the way I came, screaming and yelling... It did not pursue me...

It was only the following morning that I discovered that the trading center we had been looking for was just a quarter mile behind the being... Its bright lights blocked from our vision by the dark aura that surrounded the being... As if they had been absorbed by the shadows... I told the folks in the trading center about what had happened... They did not believe be, and called me a fool... I ran across the field, looking for proof of our encounter... There was nothing, except for a shard of black crystal where the figure had stood... It pulsed with a strange energy that made my mind reel... I pocketed it and showed it the those who had ridiculed me, but they identified it as a shard of obsidian... The energy had disappeared from it... I do not know what became of it...

It has been 30 long years since that happened... My friends called me mad... My family suspected me of doing away with Dahse myself, when they never saw him again... All shunned me... Until now... But from that day forward, my sleep was plagued... My dreaming eye drowned in a vast sea of nothingness... And I dreamed... Dreamed of cities where geometry and madness shared meaning... Cities where buildings grew and fell with my each thought... Built from the teeming filth of ages... Where dark machines and engines roared across the universe, powered by the harvested souls of the lost... Where the strange being that had taken Dahse ruled supreme, with a boundless reach... Dahse's screams still remain fresh in my mind... I sometimes think I can hear them echoing through the night, across distant stars... I fear I will not be rid of them as long as I live...

~~~

The merchant who told this story disappeared shortly afterwards, leaving nothing but a note behind.

~~~

Awakened by my story, finally come to light... The souls of the lost haunt my restless nights... They come forth in my dreams, my nightmares... Seeking refuge from the blinding gaze of the Apocrea, from their relentless scythe... They steal sanctuary in the cracks and corners of their terrible realm, yet it is ever fleeting... Fleeting, like the whispered screams of my brother... Obsidian is a weapon there, in the deep dark beyond... Beyond the space where time wakens and yawns... Beyond the shadows cast by the great leviathan of eternity... A great and horrible weapon... One that keeps them bound to that distant plane... Obsidian... I am off on a journey... The wails of the lost call to me... I do not suspect that I shall return...

~~~

Thu, 10/24/2013 - 16:18
#17
Valorai's picture
Valorai
GTLEH

Hi Neccy.

Thu, 10/24/2013 - 22:43
#18
Nechrome's picture
Nechrome

Introducing..... :D:D:D:D:D:D:D Special Characters. This calls for a special chapter! (with a sorta silly intro paragraph :D)

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The Distant Planet of Bekadann

The forests of Bekadann... Ancient and thick, their leaves and foliage smother sound. It was generally always quiet in the peaceful forest... But of course, there were exceptions. Today, for example. The sounds of many running feet and the blasts of gunfire, the cries of the wounded and the yells of pursuers shattered the silence. Alarms ringing, explosives detonating, and massive booms from high up in the cosmos, as titanic spaceships open fire on each other...

~~~

Cronus clutched his Valiance with both hands, holding it upright. He was hiding behind a tree, forcing himself to breath more quietly. Around him, other members of his crew were ducking behind bushes, trees, rocks; anything that might hide them. For behind them all, a group of Morai was in hot pursuit.
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Cronus heard them crashing through the foliage, shouting commands. Several other Isorans ran past Cronus' hiding space, looking for their own. There was the sound of blaster fire, and one of the runners tumbled to the ground not five feet from Cronus, a smoking crater burnt through their armor.

The Morai were almost upon them. Cronus shot out from behind the tree and moved his gun, aiming and shooting without second thoughts. Bolts of blue shot out from his gun, and he hit two Morai troopers head on; one in the... well, head, and the other in the shoulder. Both collapsed to the ground, only one writhing in pain. His crew fired suit, coming out from their cover to fire upon the Morai. The Morai began to seek their own cover, and fired back with their Typhoon Fire pistols, dubbed 'Spitfires'. Cronus quickly ducked back behind the tree, splinters flying as Morai shot at him.

As energy and plasma flew through the air, Cronus brought his wrist up to his mouth and spoke into the com-link that circled it. "Boswick, I could really use that support fire right about now!" There was a moment of silence before static crackled and a voice spoke back.

"Apologies, captain. We're having a bit of trouble up here in space ourselves. A Morai cruiser's up here with us, and it brought friends. We've lost our main cannons.

Cronus swore. He peeked around the tree and fired a few more shots before hiding again. "What about secondary cannons?"

"Half are also out, and the rest are pounding away at the cruisers. I don't think we'll be able to help you, captain."

"Very well. I suppose it's up to us to get back to the transport ourselves..."

An Isoran threw a Nitronome in the air, tossing it at the Morai. It exploded in a great neon blast, and blew multiple Morai into the air. While the enemy was in a state of chaos, Cronus decided to take advantage of it.

"All right guys, let's move!"

They began to run again, periodically firing their guns over their shoulders. After a few minutes, they reached a clearing, where their ship was awaiting. The pilots inside spotted the running Isorans, and quickly lowered the boarding ramp. The engines roared to life, blue light flaring through their exhaust vents.

"Move, move, move!" One of the pilots shouted over the sound of the roaring engines, holding his own Valiance. Seeing more movement in the forest behind the Isorans, he fired in the general direction, stalling the Morai a bit.

Cronus was the last to get on, making sure his crew got to safety first. "Everyone on, captain?" A pilot asked him as he stepped onto the ramp.

"Seems so. Everyone still alive, anyway." Cronus answered. The pilot flinched as a blast of Typhoon Fire shot past his head and melted part of carrier's interior. He grabbed Cronus and pulled him further into the ship as the ramp folded up and the hatch closed, Typhoon Fire pounding against the outside of the transport.

The pilot ran back to the cockpit, where his colleague was flipping switches and pulling levers. "Let's get out of here, before they bring in the big guns!" He yelled, quickly sitting down. The cockpit window blazed with light as the HUD activated, figures and data flying across the screen. The transport shook slightly as it left the ground.

Then they were flying. The view of tree trunks and bushes rapidly turned into a view of leaves, and then of open air. A pale purple sky filled the entirety of the window, with occasional streaks of fiery colors as Typhoon Fire shot past. The rescued Isorans sat down, many of the panting and taking off their helmets. Seven of them, including Cronus. They had lost five good soldiers down there.

"We're not out of the woods yet, if you'll pardon the pun." Cronus said. "Boswick said there were some cruisers up there exchanging fire with him. Any when there are cruisers, there are Blades."

"Perfectly aware of that." One of the pilots replied.

The ship flew through Bekadann's atmosphere and into the void of space. There was a great battle going on, with bolts of blue and red flying everywhere. Three Morai cruisers had engaged the Isoran cruiser the Equinox in heavy combat , while individual fighter craft dueled. Morai Blades, named for their sleek and sharp looks, darted all around, firing Typhoon Fire from their twin cannons. Several of them spotted the transport and broke off from a swarm of Blades, streaking towards the carrier while opening fire.

Although the carrier had no weapons other than a few light turrets, it did have powerful shields, built in for situations like this. The Typhoon Fire impacted against the bubble of energy that had suddenly appeared around the ship, which flashed with each bolt it absorbed. Although glowing a steady blue at first, it slowly turned into a shade of green, indicating the shield's loss of power from the constant pounding.

The Blades, so far unable to break the transport's shields, flew past the transport. They began a wide curve, turning back to make another pass at it. The transport continued to make steady progress towards the Equinox. As they drew nearer, more Blades took notice of them, and opened fire on them as well.

"This is not going to end well." One of Cronus' crew mates muttered. The ship shook as a heavy volley of Typhoon Fire turned the shield from green to orange, 50% of the shield instantly depleted. One of the pilots swore loudly, and yanked hard on the controls. The ship swerved to the right, out of the path of some more Typhoon Fire as the Blades shot past.

Meanwhile, the first wave of Blades that had attacked had opened fire once again. They were all being really unrelenting in their assault. The shield flashed red for a moment, and alarms began to sound. The pilots continued to swerve, dodging as much Typhoon Fire as he could, but it was not enough.

The shield shattered, wisps of red energy dissipating into space. Typhoon Fire battered against the transport, not shaking wildly. Several of the Isorans fell over while swearing.

"Almost there!" One of the pilots shouted, twisting and turning the controls. Multiple alarms and bells were ringing now, and the entire HUD was flashing red and with warming sign across the enter thing.

Then the barrage stopped as sudden as it had begun. A blast from the Equinox had wiped out half of the swarm of Blades, and the survivors had scattered, leaving the transport be. The second wave saw what happened to the first and scattered as well, in order to prevent that from happening again. It had likely been another great shot from Eurydice, the Equinox's quartermaster and weapons-master as well. She was a crack shot with the ship's powerful cannons (as well as any other gun, for that matter).

The transport passed through the energy screens of the cruiser's hangars, and skidded across the floor several dozen yards before coming to a halt. Everyone inside had fallen onto the ground in a tangle of limbs, save for the pilots who were strapped tight into their seats. One of them took off his helmet and wiped his brow, exhaling.

"That was too close a call for comfort." Cronus said, picking himself up. He stumbled over to the exit hatch which was opening. He tripped and fell out of the ship before the boarding hatch had extended out, but to his embarrassment. Several others also accidentally followed suit.

Getting off the ground once more, Cronus leaned against the smoking side of the ship for support. There were great blast craters in it, still sizzling. He spoke into his wrist com-link, opening a channel to the bridge.

"This is your captain speaking. We've made it back. Recall the fighters and get us out of here."

~~~

Several minutes later, Cronus was back in the bridge of the Equinox, the great blue and white streaks of hyperspace shown through the massive windows. He had finally managed to shoo away the medics, insisting that he was not hurt. He was lying a bit, obviously. He was covered with several lovely bruises that he suspected would plague him for the next week or two.

The Isoran fighters that had been outside had quickly flown back into the hangar, and the Equinox had shot into hyperspace instantly afterwards, away with important intel on the Morai war effort. That had been the nature of Cronus' expedition onto Bekadann. There had been a Morai outpost there, which most definitely meant lots of information. Against the wishes of his inner circle of crew members, Cronus had led a party down into the outpost to secure what intel they could. It was one of those things he did that the Isoran Council did not really approve of (leaving his ship and risking his life, to be clear; they certainly approved of espionage and the such like).

Of course, it had not gone that well. They had been unavoidably detected, and had to escape with what little information they had. In total, five of the twelve members of the expedition (not including the pilots of the carrier) had been lost; three had died, and the other two were captured. Fortunately, it was a well known fact that the Morai did treat their prisoners humanely, contrary to the horror stories that Isoran children would tell each other, so there was hope for them.

Cronus, ignoring the stares from the crew on the bridge, walked over to his chair, where he was able to control the Equinox (Fun fact: His ship was named after the Isoran general Equinox, a very successful commander who had led the Isoran troops to victory during the Liberation of Ilsola). His 1st lieutenant, Boswick, was sitting in the chair, arms on the armrests; his fingers on his right hand around on the touchpad that controlled the ship's direction and velocity; and the fingers on his left were tap-dancing on a pad of buttons and switches that hadd multiple other functions. Not that anything he was doing would affect the course of the Equinox, since she was in hyperspace.

Cronus stood next to the chair for several moments, waiting for Boswick to leave the seat. However, Boswick apparently didn't notice Cronus, as he continued to play around with the controls. After a while, Cronus finally spoke up.

"Hullo, Boswick," Cronus said dryly. "You can get out of my chair now." Boswick looked up at Cronus in surprise.

"Hmm? Oh, hello captain. Sorry to keep you waiting." He lifted himself out of the chair, which Cronus promptly sat down into.

"Thank you, Boswick."

There was a great sense of informality on Cronus' ship. He didn't really care for the formalities of rank and protocol and all that; he allowed his entire crew to speak and act as casually as they liked, as long as it wasn't offensive and didn't cause any trouble.

Cronus sighed and relaxed his muscles, the familiar feel of his chair behind his back. It had been a rough day. He turned to Boswick. "Any casualties from the battle with the cruisers?"

Boswick looked thoughtful. "Four pilots were lost; five are heavily injured, but the medics say they'll pull through; three or four personnel were mildly injured when some stuff exploded... I do believe that's it."

Cronus nodded. All things considered, they were lucky to not have lost more. The Morai were tough fighters, and their pilots were especially proficient in flying their Blades.

"I hope that the ship is set on a course bad to Isora?"

"Yup... You know how it works. Any captured intel, report directly back to the Council immediately. In person." Boswick frowned. "Good way to waste time, if you ask me."

"Ah, you know politicians." Cronus sighed again. "They want to get their hands in everything. Anyway, it'll be interesting to see what stuff we've gotten... It's all encrypted. I've got Hyperion and his Biotech guys working on it."

~~~

End Part 1 of 2 of Chapter 3 Cause this is gonna be a sorta long chapter kind sorta in a way ish? Also, I don't have time to keep working but I want to post what I've written already cause I'm very impatient :U

Sat, 10/26/2013 - 20:50
#19
Nechrome's picture
Nechrome

http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/91899 Shrine of SLumber is back! this calls for another celebratory filler!

Sat, 03/05/2016 - 14:35
#20
Angel-Girl's picture
Angel-Girl
You have some SERIOUS skills

I've only gotten to the second (or first? *shrug*) chapter and I am HOOKED, HOOKED I tell you.
The writing style was nearly flawless, and I felt like I was reading an actual book!
I also wanted to note that you wrote Desna really well (from what I've seen so far.). She felt natural and flowed perfectly! And the description of what's probably the Swarm was AMAZI-ING.

Mon, 03/07/2016 - 01:16
#21
Nechrome's picture
Nechrome
holy bajeezus this is old

Ok first off I'm quite impressed that you managed to dig this out of the ancient archives of this subforum here. It's been two and a half years since I've written anything for this story, although I do think about it frequently.

Secondly, thank you so much for the kind words! I am rather proud of my writing in this story, even if what I did create is rather short. And I do think that chapter in particular is one of my favorite pieces that I've ever written. Honestly I'm amazed that I was ever that good at descriptions and all. Nowadays it seems to be something I struggle with, even though it used to come naturally to me.

Sometimes I come back and reread what I've written here and feel so disappointed in myself for not seeing it all the way through. Not even close to all the way through. So much world building, so much lore, never to see the light of day because I can't find the motivation to put it into words. Not even my encyclopedia has seen much action, and I started that project in the first place because I figured I wouldn't be able to show all of my creativity through this story alone.

Mmmmhhhhh. The nostalgia is real.

Well at any rate I've moved on to other writing projects. The experience provided by Spiral Knights was great.

I do think I actually have Part 2 of Chapter 3 stashed away somewhere, although I never posted it. Or maybe that was a chapter from the original Core Wars and I'm just getting things mixed up. Hmm.

Ahhhh please excuse the ramblings of a nostalgic nerd.

Mon, 03/07/2016 - 20:45
#22
Angel-Girl's picture
Angel-Girl
NOSTALGIA!!!!

Memory lane is bittersweet, that's for sure. *Sigh* Probably gonna look back on these forums (if they'll even still be here)...read a bunch of stuff (including this!)...get my heartstrings pulled...then wander around on things that remind me of SK...

...Anyway, you're welcome about the compliment thingy! I can see why the chapter was fun to write. ^^

I also noticed that you mentioned Valkyries in your story...and maybe even showed one. I kind of went "Oh hey look at that"/chuckled, because, well...they're pretty much in mine as well! XD I didn't think anyone else would've thought of including Valkyries in their fan fics, with all of the other storyline elements everywhere, but you actually got that nailed before I did...WAAAAY before I did...*nervous giggle*

Tue, 03/08/2016 - 21:19
#23
Nechrome's picture
Nechrome

Hah, believe it or not, Valkyries are actually one of the more common story elements that pops up in people's stories and RPs. I guess there's just something about those wings they have that really appeals to people. There's basically no lore on them ingame, so they're one of those things that people like to expand on and all that. That being said, most people go with the traditional angelic warriors that purge the world of evil. Sort of overdone imo, but I'm not judging.

I do personally think I have a rather unique take on them, although you wouldn't know what it is just from the bit above. Hehe.

Thu, 03/10/2016 - 21:46
#24
Angel-Girl's picture
Angel-Girl
*Very slow clap*

Oh. My. Gosh.

The second (Crimson Guard) chapter made me tear up a little.

I guess I'm just not used to seeing the Gremlins maul the Knights, I've done the other way around so much. Maybe I had too much fangirling locked up inside and had to get it out. *shrug* But whatever happened, THIS IS AWESOME.

Loved- well, everything. Most stories don't touch my emotions like that, but it may just be that I love SK so much that it made em more sensitive...but, it doesn't matter. It was GOOD.

*Growls* I SHOULD HAVE READ IT SOONER.

XD Yeah, too much fangirling inside.

Fri, 02/17/2017 - 17:55
#25
Lordcalvinheins's picture
Lordcalvinheins
wow

howly crap what is this amazingness???
also, found this on the fan fic list

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