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Sat, 01/18/2014 - 22:28
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Imowor

I'm going to try my hand at writing (or typing, I guess) a fan fiction. I'm not entirely sure what it will be about as of now, but I'll figure that out as I go.

The title means "mechanized world" in French, by the way. I'm not from France, but it has a nice ring to it.

So, the character apps: (Not currently accepting)
Include-

-Name
-profession (Swordsman, Gunslinger, Bomber, or Hybridist)
-weapons (These can be modified, within reason to suit your character's style and named, but don't overdo it. Four max. If modded, include a brief visual description.)
-Armor and Shield (List accessories, if applicable.)
-Personal color, height, eyes, etc...
-Character personality (to get a feel for how I should write for your character)
-background story of your character (optional)
-Battle Sprite (can make your own up, within reason)

I'll start with mine.

Name: Banszul

Profession: Hybridist

Weapons:
1) Venenatis- A modified Flourish-line weapon with a deadly poison tip. The charge attack consists of a hop and a thrust. The hop produces a weak poison wave on landing and the thrust can pierce multiple enemies. If an enemy is killed by the poison, they will release a toxic cloud on death, spreading the effects further. The sword is dull gray and dark green. Instead of the faux 'wings' on the guard, there are six small poison tanks.

2) Granizada- A modified Iron Slug with an extended barrel and a pistol stock. It has a clip size of a single round, and fires heavy ice projectiles with an arcing trajectory. Can cause both Freeze and stun. The charge attack fires a spread of three smaller hailstones at higher velocity. The charge does not launch the user back. The gun is light blue with white lights. Instead of an orange glow, icy air blows out of the two holes above and below the barrel.

3) Erdebeden- A modified Irontech Destroyer with a lesser radius and slightly lower damage. It causes tremors and fractures in the ground on detonation. It has minimal horizontal knockback but launches enemies in the air. There is a small chance of eruption, causing fire damage and increased knockback. It appears as a normal Irontech Destroyer, with a vibrating cylinder attached. The bomb is also partially encased in rock.

Armor and Shield:
Helmet: Chapeau of the Blue Rose with Cool Vented Visor and Prismatic Dapper Combo ( I know these two technically couldn't go together, but the visor covers the eyes and the combo covers the mouth, so whatever.)
Armor: Cool Spiral Brigandine with Prismatic Canteen
Shield: Darkfang Shield

Appearance:
Personal Color: Lake
Height: Normal
Eyes: Sleepy

Personality:
Banszul is a reckless but powerful Knight warrior. He knows how to get the job done, and have fun doing it. His casual demeanor annoys some, as does his questionable weapon modifications, but his skill is respected. He may mess around a lot on the outside but his time in the Clockworks has changed him greatly on the inside. He has a tendency to drag on when talking or thinking and thinks a bit too much when he has nothing to do.

Background:
Banszul was recently dispatched to investigate dubious Gremlin activity near depth nineteen of the Clockworks, but contact ceased not long after he arrived. Some suspect him of going rogue, but his squad has volunteered personally to find him and discover his fate. This is where our story begins.

Battle Sprite:
Banszul has a unique sprite that he calls a Banshee. Its name is Clamatis. From what he can tell, it was originally a peaceful, surface-dwelling snipe that took a nasty fall into the Clockworks. It unfortunately succumbed to the darkness within, and is now a pale, four-winged, blind creature with a large mouth. It uses echolocation to find its way, similarly to a bat. It wears an Elite Iron Harness, and its food is made from Moonstone. Banszul found it when he was fighting his way through a Fiendish City. It was initially hostile out of desperation but quickly became attracted to the Moonstone mineral he was carrying. Banszul helped the poor creature out of the city and back to the surface. It was too late to restore its vision, but it was tamed and nursed back to health with the help of Biotechs and now fights by Banszul's side.

Abilities:
1) Burst Shout- a low-frequency blast of sound that does very low damage but knocks over and knocks back all small enemies in a 180 degree radius in front of the user. Cannot knock over medium-sized enemies such as Lumbers, and is useless against anything larger than that.

2) Paralyzing Yell- Locks enemies' muscles in place, rendering all foes in a small 360 degree radius unable to move or attack. However, this slightly increases the defense of affected enemies and has little or no effect on constructs. The larger the enemy, the shorter the duration.

3) Piercing Scream- an extremely high frequency scream that deals very heavy damage to a single target. It pulls the targeted enemy towards the user. This pulling effect is present even on larger enemies, though to a slightly lesser degree.

Sat, 01/18/2014 - 22:58
#1
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Imowor
Prologue: Snarling Captors

The sound of hammers and machines fill the air. Scuttlebots wander, Gremlins work, and everyone's happy... as happy as a smelly, shaggy, subterranean mammal can be, anyway. A lone figure begins to stir among the commotion of the Deconstruction Zone. A knight of the Spiral Order, incarcerated by the Gremlins. His vision flickers and fades and he tries to move. The pain is too much, however, and he collapses again into unconsciousness as his captors cackle at his failure.

Minutes pass, then hours.

The ancient gears grind and creak, never allowing true silence to manifest. All is still, with only the ancient machine in eternal motion around the sleeping Gremlins. The knight comes to again. This time, he will not fail. There will be no one to laugh at his sad attempts. Soon, even the subtle breathing of the slumbering creatures will be still...

The knight's eyes shot open like they were spring-loaded. He reaches for his icy hand cannon, but finds only empty air.
"Where am I?" he whispered to himself.

That, he may never know. That gigantic Lumber he fought three days past might have knocked all knowledge of his mission right out of him. He though Ironwood Sentinels were a myth. He was wrong. One can be sure of nothing in The Clockworks. If it didn't exist before, the infernal machine will create it. For all his struggles, he is as much in the dark about his whereabouts as his unfortunate imprisoners are about their incoming deaths.

Banszul stood up straight in his cage.

This little operation was about to meet its untimely end.

Sat, 01/18/2014 - 23:21
#2
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Feline-Grenadier
Hm...

Name : Valda Lione

Prof : Hybridist

Weapons :

- Nyx - An Acheron-Type blade that seems a little bluer in hue than most others. Instead of being mounted with its sheath, the Acheron rests on Valda's back, exposed. Causes shock that chains with other enemies, causing them to flinch more than do actual damage. A pair of Force Dynamos are clamped onto the bottom of the hilt of the blade, allowing the blade to slash faster, at the cost of adding weight.

- Helios Vortex - A modified Electron Vortex that causes burns instead of shocks, and instead of having an eye look out, has a bright orb shining. Double the distance and two-thirds of the damage stock Electron Vortexes have.

- Mjolnr - A 5* Triglav crackling with electricity instead of snapping ice. Glows a bright teal-blue at the cracks.

Defensive Equipment :

Mighty Cobalt Helm + Divine Helm Guards + Prismatic Glow-Eyes

Ironmight Plate Mail + Divine Side Blade + Divine Parrying Blade + Hacked Aura

Ironmight Plate Shield

Appearance :

Personal Color : Amber

Height : Short

Eyes : Determined

[Optional] Appearance out of armor :

A rather short girl, whose build does not accurately describe her equipment, she stands at 5'3 and weighs...well, it's a girl thing, so...yeah...

Her hair is tied up into a ponytail, as it is when it becomes a plume on the Mighty Cobalt Helm. However, out of armor, her hair is a rich caramel color, as opposed to the glimmering, pale white. Her amber eyes add fiery gleam to her ever-frowning face, giving her more of a serious, battle-hardened appearance than even she would have liked. Her skin, having not met the real sun since the crash of the Skylark, is very pale. A scar runs down her left eye, like Desna, though whatever caused it doesn't appear to have been able to damage the eyeball itself...

Personality :

Valda has a speech complex. She was born unable to learn how to speak, and she grew up with classes by other Knights on how to speak. For whatever reason, she cannot, and thus, she resorts to actions or sign-language to communicate her thoughts and ideas to others. She can sigh, cry, scream, shout, laugh, and so forth, but when someone insists that she speaks, she's known to suddenly lash out at ignorant bigots who don't know a mute when they see one.

As the Guardian of her squad, she often takes it up to herself to handle any and all situations alone and together, and combat-wise is laser focused, regardless of the target or obstacles. Though not a leader, she's often the compliment to many a Knight, and often will put her teammate's honor, life, and fame above her own. Because of this, not many Knights know her insanely high record of honors and medals.

Overall, she may seem intimidating from the first, second, and third glances, but over time, a person willing to be her partner and teammate may find themselves with a companion for life. If she finds a Knight "worthy", she's probably saying she has a crush on that specified Knight.

And no, she does notdiscriminate on who she's cuddling with, especially if she likes them a lot.

Background :

Among the first of the Knights to wake up from the Skylark, Valda has been a key factor in many of the events leading up to the development of adapting to Cradle. The guardian of the third squad that had ventured down the Clockworks, she has first-hand faced many of the previously-unknown dangers Cradle has to offer, and though she has been dipped in the inkwell of death many times more than even Desna, her vital role as a scout and soldier today goes to little notice among the few dozens of other Knights that have done the same thing.

Banszul, a member of her previous "scramble squad" (a nickname for squads made of random members of the Order), has gone missing. Valda is there to investigate, and she only fears for his safety. Did he get captured like the other Knights? Is he even alive?

She'd have to find out for herself.

Tue, 01/28/2014 - 19:01
#3
Aekun
Name: Aekun

Name: Aekun Taheris

Profession: Swordsman

Weapons:

-Triglav: A Triglav with purple energy instead of blue energy.

-Winter Needle: An ice version of the Blitz Needle.

-Bomb of a Thousand Winters: A bomb that when exploded will cover everything within a ten foot radius with ice, excluding your party members.

Armor and Shield:

-Full Skolver Set

-Wyvern Scale Shield with purple spikes instead of ice blue spikes

Personal Color: Purple

Design Color: Purple

Eyes: Determined

Height: 6'3

Weight: 132

Appearance out of Armor: Ice Blue eyes, light skin, light, longish golden hair, muscles, and a scar from the top of his forehead to his lower jaw.

Character Personality: Aekun has what could only be described as bipolar, in the sense that he can sometimes be a very nice and caring guy, but then switch to cold and unfeeling. Also, he has a fondness for sweets, especially chocolate chip cookies, and can be found eating them at inappropriate times, and he often carries some in his pack.

Bio: Aekun is a Vanguard that has been on Cradle for some time now after the crash, helping many players. Now he has been given commands to find and save the missing knight Banzsul. However, he has also been given orders to kill Banzsul if he poses a threat.

Misc: Aekun has about a million fan-girls. Also, he has a white Drakon named Mekko that is leveled up all the way. The Drakon looks like the version with huge arms, except it has equally large wings.

Sun, 01/19/2014 - 08:50
#4
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Creeperlucario
...

-Name: Raven Meruru
-Profession Hybridist
-Weapons: Divine Faust: Deals a mixture of shadow and elemental damage, looks like a Divine Avenger but it covered in blue, Charge is 2 giant blades that don't curse. Dark Buster: Deals shadow damage and releases a dark aura which curses enemies, Looks like a shivermist except purple and has a dark aura around it.
-Armor and Shield: Wears Chaos Cloak and cowl. Wears Infernal Guardian costume armor with Tails Tails. Has a LVL 10 Swiftstrike Buckler, has a pet case with a Seraphynx in (Not bound).
-Personal color: Dark Blue
-Height: 5'1
-Eyes: Sad
-Appearance without armor: Has Light Blue eyes, has dome like hair and his clothes are white and blue.
-Personality: Calm, Bold, Shy to Valda (Would protect her if she was going to die) and can use hand language if required.
-Background: Raven Meruru was one of the few knights to wake up when they landed and was a strong striker and tactician for defeating the enemies. However, during the journeys, he saw a female guardian knight (Valda) and thought she looked cute. Thankfully, Raven was a master at hand language and could talk to her if he wasn't shy to ask.
Raven is currently looking for Banzuel and hoped to see that female knight again.

Mon, 01/20/2014 - 10:11
#5
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Colray
Um

Name: Ben
Profession: Gunner

Weapons: Modified Iron Slug: Has a shoulder-rest, extended barrel, and added scope on it, effectively turning it into a sniper rifle. Valiance, normal except the blade is strengthened in case Ben has to deal with close-range targets. Argent Peacemaker: normal. Umbra Driver: normal.

Armor+Shield: Shadowsun Stetson and Slicker, Swiftstrike Buckler.

Appearance:
Personal color: Cobalt
Height: Normal
Eyes: Almond eyes

Personality: Solitary, Calm, quiet when with a large group. Very good memory.
Background: Adapted easily to Cradle's Dangers and earned his way up to Vanguard. Is one of the knights sent to find Banzsul.

Mon, 01/20/2014 - 10:53
#6
Aekun
Revision

I just added some things to my character.

Tue, 01/21/2014 - 14:21
#7
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Imowor
Sorry

Terribly sorry not to have any chapters out... I've been busy but I should have time very soon to write.

Mon, 01/27/2014 - 13:51
#8
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Sonosuke
All shell will break loose.

Name: MechTeka
Profession: Swordsman (Striker)

Weapons:

*Gokai (Primary Weapon) - A Japanese Feudal-Era katana blade which deals pure normal damage and has a high chance of strong Fire. The charge is similar to a Cutter-line charge, except it sends out a Meteoric Firebolt on the last swing. The blade appears to be on fire, but this is just an illusion (and yet it still casts off light). When not in use, Gokai is held in a black sheath ornamented in steel that's attached to MechTeka's waist.

*Black Barrage - A darkened Leviathan Blade covered in shadowy energy, which allows it to deal shadow damage as well as normal. Damage is equivalent to Obsidian Edge, with a slight chance of minor curse on the charge for both the user and enemies alike, similar to Fang of Vog and Gran Faust.

*Combuster

*Final Flourish

Equipment:

*Chaos Cowl w/ Shock High + Fire High
*Vog Cub Coat
*Dragon Scale Shield
*Toasty Crescent Helm w/ Toasty Bolted Vee, Toasty Mecha Wings, and Shadow Glasses (Costume)
*Customized Flak Jacket (black jacket, grey gloves, red chest piece) w/ Proto Crest

Battle Sprite:
Shiki: Drakon with an abnormally dark-gray and black hue rather than maroon.
Attacks: Meteoric Firebolt, Scorching Barrier, Explosive Firestorm
Other Abilities: Can turn into a pair of dragon wings and attach to the back of MechTeka's jacket, allowing him to fly; has a neural link to MechTeka so he can use Shiki without shouting a command, as well as Shiki (in wing form) controlling his body if MechTeka is knocked unconscious

Appearance:
Personal Color: Red
Height: Normal
Eyes: Normal

What do the two look like?

Personality:
MechTeka has a very unstable mind. He acts all seerus in a mission or just when fighting enemies, then becomes laid back when in Haven or when the monsters are gone, and speaks in a passive-aggressive manner no matter the situation. He also can be very aggressive and violent, as during a recent mission he was noted for beating the gremlin corpses until the healer was down (he claimed to be preventing the healer from reviving them). Regardless of that, he values the lives of innocents and puts his teammates safety before his own.

Background:
During a routine Clockwork run (part of a custom schedule that he followed) he noticed a couple of knights in the area going towards some unknown source. He then followed after them, due to not currently being part of a squad.

Fri, 01/24/2014 - 10:31
#9
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Imowor
Chapter One: Deconstructed Zone

The Deconstruction Zone was silent. Not from the quiet of sleep, but from the emptiness of the void. Shriveled, gray Gremlin bodies lay strewn across the field, their mechanical pets in pieces around them. There were no Menders in sight. No one to breathe life back into the empty mechanical shell of this place. All was quiet.

Suddenly, an elevator roared to life far away.

Ben and Raven raised their heads at the sound.
"Looks like Valda and the others just arrived on the opposite side," said Raven.
"Took them long enough..." Ben mumbled.

The squad had been split in two and had take two different paths out of Emberlight to get here.They were here to find Banszul, their squadmate who had gone missing. He had been sent to investigate what was going on with the increased Gremlin activity right below Emberlight. Many in the Spiral Order feared they were planning to assault the nearby subtown. Others still believed they were working on a second-phase war machine to replace those that were destroyed in the Project R crisis. Banszul's final transmission mentioned seeing Gremlins and Devilites working together. However, all that his friends would find here were more questions.

Valda stepped off the elevator platform, Aekun in tow. Her foot crushed something as she passed, and she looked down. A Mecha Knight's head.
"Hmmph." she grunted, uncaring. Not like there was any shortage of those. Better than a Gremlin's, anyway.
"What a mess.... looks like a tornado hit this place. Well, if that was even possible in this sort of subterranean environment, anyway.." Aekun mused as he muched on a cookie.
Valda threw him a look that said 'Really, now?' That silenced him.

Raven and Ben sprinted through the ruins of the complex, dodging derelict machines as they went. No signs of Banszul yet. They stopped in a clearing. There were several computers, many still operational, throughout the area.
"Let's check the computers. It's likely they may have some useful data on them." Ben said.
"Got it."
They both took a separate computer and searched through the sea of dubious files found on them. Raven found a file with blueprints for some sort of power core on it. From the specs found on a printed version nearby, the core was about the size of a Knight and was powered by pure Dark Matter. The file was marked with a fiendish sigil. Another file showed a monstrous Retrode-like construct, with the Fiend-made power core at its heart.
"....you seeing this?" Raven mumbled to Ben.
"I have a lot of similar files..."
"I think we can agree this is pretty bad..."
"Yes... I think we can," said MechTeka, who had been watching over their shoulders.
"Who are you?!" they both yelled at the same time.
"Fellow knight," he responded, "I saw you guys coming through Emberlight and tried to get your attention, but I couldn't so I decided to follow. Need help?"
"Any assistance is welcome, comrade," Ben said.
"You're going to need it!" a gravelly voice yelled, accompanied by frenzied laughter.

They all spun around to see an orange haired gremlin with a heavy crimson mask. He carried dual Pulsars. Behind him were six Ghostmane Stalkers.
Heavy stomping drew their attention to the other end of they clearing, where they saw a troop of fiends marching with what appeared to be a mechanical Trojan behind them. The Pit Boss leading them was a dark magenta, and larger than normal. He wore Round Shades, and drew a Faust, waving it at the Knight trespassers.

"I am Nackal." said the Gremlin.
"And I am Neelnal," said the imposing Devilite.
They both spoke in unison.

"...and we cannot allow you to leave this place alive."

Fri, 01/24/2014 - 10:40
#10
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Creeperlucario
Nice

Good work, keep on going.

Fri, 01/24/2014 - 11:03
#11
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Robo-Drilldigger
App to help the knights

-Name: Egg Emperor
-Race: Construct (Not sure if it's allowed but it's an ally to the knights)
-Profession: Swordsman
-Weapons: Lance used to harm foes, if he slashes the air, a beam of light travels forward dealing piercing damage. Uses rocket packs to move around.
-Armor and Shield: Armor is extremely hard and can't damage the robot. Has a core in the chest area and is extremely weak. Shield is a stronger version of swiftstrike buckler minus the swirling, has 5 times more defense then regular shields.
-Personal color: Green
-Height: 6'9
-Eyes: Determined
-Appearance
-Character personality: Strong willed, won't give up, extremely aggressive if someone is trying to harm knights and bold.
-Background: The Egg Emperor is an ancient robot classified as a "myth" who was the only actual working construct who helped the knights, he was unique to the others because of his appearance and weapon.

Fri, 01/24/2014 - 20:15
#12
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Sonosuke
All shell will break loose.

Keep up the good work, Dynenth. I was wondering if we can have Battle Sprites as well?

EDIT: Oh my god, Drilldigger Really? Well maybe it was created by the same man who made the Metal Sonic set.

Tue, 01/28/2014 - 15:57
#13
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Imowor
Update #1

So, just to clarify some things....

@Robo-Drilldigger

I didn't originally think of constructs, but I will make an exception as Egg seems like a unique character. Also, could you provide a few more details on what the lance/armor looks like if possible? (EDIT: See update post #2)

@Sonosuke

I forgot about sprites. If anyone wants to have a sprite, you can add that to your character app. You can even make up your own sprite, assuming it is reasonable. (sort of like weapon mods)

@Feline-Grenadier

Valda didn't actually speak, she just looked at Aekun in a way that implied she wanted him to quiet down.

Fri, 01/24/2014 - 22:12
#14
Aekun
Ha! I love how you portrayed

Ha! I love how you portrayed my character!

Sat, 01/25/2014 - 00:13
#15
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Feline-Grenadier
Note :

Valda does not speak, as her character profile says :P

Sat, 01/25/2014 - 12:36
#16
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Imowor
Chapter Two: Showdown

The first Ghostmane hit the ground, a bullet hole in his forehead. Ben pulled the bolt on his Slug, and an empty cartridge clanged across the metal floor. Mech pulled Gokai from its sheath at lightning fast speed. Raven soon had the indigo-cloaked Divine Faust at the ready as well.

"Hehehe! They resist! All the more fun for me!" Nackal cackled.
"Don't overdo it..." mumbled Neelnal.
"Look, if anyone's gonna bite the dust here, it will be you, hell-thing!" Mech shouted at the fiend angrily.
"Shut up, or I'll have you turned into a Gorgo!" he retorted.

All three of them looked at each other and nodded.

Raven jumped suddenly towards the laughing Gremlin. Mech launched at the irate Pit Boss, and Ben took aim and the hulking iron Trojan. Nackal escaped using the recoil from his Pulsars, leaving his squad of Ghostmanes to fight. Raven's overhead sweep missed the fleeing Nackal, and his blade became stuck in the ground. It wouldn't budge.

Rounds upon rounds bounced off on the mecha-Trojan, but to no avail. Ben narrowly dodged as the mass of metal charged past him, grunting in rage. He taunted the Trojan again, which sent it barreling towards him, Gremlin hammer in hand. Ben jumped up to land on the construct's back as it passed, but it was too late and he took the full force of the Trojan's headbutt to his stomach. He flew backwards, sprawling across the cold tiles.

Shadow and flame clashed as Neelnal and MechTeka dueled. The fiend stared with a calculating gaze through his shades. Neither one of them spoke as they spun together in a deadly dance across the clearing. Neelnal struck Mech with the flat of his blade, stunning him. As he was about to deliver the final blow, Ben slid across the ground, reeling from the Trojan's impact. It was too late for the fiend to dodge, and the incapacitated Knight swept him off his feet.

Unable to free his sword, Raven fended off the Ghostmanes with his bare hands before escaping with a blast from the Dark Buster. Nackal saw his opportunity and jumped from his hiding spot to kill the disarmed Knight. he lunged, using the saw of a dead Ghostmane as a weapon. Raven rolled out of the way in time for the serrated edge to miss his heart, but the spinning blade cut deep into his shoulder. He cried out in pain. Nackal jabbed the blade deeper, pinning the injured Raven to the ground.

Ben got to his feet, staggering, head throbbing. The mechanized Trojan was still in one piece. If it remained that way for much longer, they would all surely be killed by it. Neelnal had since fled behind his troop of Devilite grunts. The ground shook as the enraged machine charged once more. Ben fired a charged shot from his Iron Slug. It the leg of the Trojan, and the metal beast dropped its hammer and fell to the ground. Mech saw his
chance and stabbed the fallen Trojan in the back, only to discover the lack of a weakpoint.

Raven desperately fended off the angry Nackal as he tried to wrench the bloodied saw from his body. Suddenly Nackal was struck by a wild bolt of electricity, and was knocked away, dead. Valda stood over Raven, Nyx in hand. Raven smiled. He was soon grimacing as Valda began to pull the Ghostmane's saw from his body. Once it was free, Raven crawled to his Divine Faust, and used it to push himself to his feet. After he was up, Valda removed it from the ground for him.

Meanwhile, Ben and MechTeka were desperately trying to fend off the mecha-Trojan's attacks. Mech was on its back, pounding on the bronze hatch below the construct's neck, it stood up, with the Knight still latched on, and continued to assault Ben. The gunslinger was reloading, unprepared to dash away from the charging machine. As he was about to be hit, Aekun flew in front of him in a blur, countering the Trojan with a powerful Triglav smash. The iron beast, staggered, fell backwards, Mech under it. He disengaged from the Trojan as it fell, rolling backwards. The force of the fall deformed the hatch on the machine's back, exposing its vulnerable inside. The Trojan stood up, unaware of the open weak point. Ben fired the full charge of his Argent Peacemaker into the Trojan's core. White light spilled from the construct's every orifice as it fractured into pieces.

It exploded with a fury they did not expect, knocking them all unconscious.

Neelnal stood over them, smirking. His fiends quickly bound the Knights, rendering them unable to move. A swarm of Greavers flew from under the Deconstruction Zone, whisking them all away, deeper into the Clockworks.

Deeper into madness.

Sat, 01/25/2014 - 12:26
#17
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Robo-Drilldigger
Responses...

@Dynenth: The lance has a golden shine base and the spear tip is silver. The shield has a slightly modified design of the swiftstrike shield. The shield has 2 bars connected to it and it's mainly for design. It has 5x durability as most shields.

@Sonosuke: The man was actually locked up by his own machine which you somewhat showed. The robot was created by the machine which locked up the man. So in logic, a machine created the machine I chose...

Sat, 01/25/2014 - 16:14
#18
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Sonosuke
All shell will break loose.

That was an awesome fight. Oh yeah, forgot to mention that Shiki can turn into a pair of dragon wings and attach to the back of MechTeka's jacket for flying purposes rather than aesthetics

@Robo-Drilldigger Oh yeah, I forgot about that.

Sat, 01/25/2014 - 13:56
#19
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Trolololololololoe
App

-Name: Gardy
-Profession: Sniper
-Weapons: Argent Sentenza: Is covered in a shiny blue cover, has a scope and bullets travel 2x as fast. Deals Normal damage.
-Armor and Shield: Wears full Shadowsun Slicker that is nearly broken (1 hit left before it falls apart.)
-Personal color:
-Height: 6'0
-Eyes: Shifty
-Appearance without armor: Wears a white dress that covers her whole body. Her body color is pure white and her hair is green which curves in at the ears and in between her eyes.
-Personality: Lonely, doesn't like getting too close to other knights, patient, calm, and smart
-Background: Gardy was the first knight to wake up and quickly rushed away from the knights because of her lonely nature. She often helped out the knights when she was randomly exploring for Banszul.
-Battle Sprite: Doesn't have one

Sat, 01/25/2014 - 19:10
#20
Aekun
*coughcough Aekun needs more

*coughcough Aekun needs more lines and maybe some action coughcough*

Sun, 01/26/2014 - 09:14
#21
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Feline-Grenadier
*cough*

*coughplzwatchSNKforgore*

Sun, 01/26/2014 - 11:39
#22
Aekun
What's SNK?

What's SNK?

Sun, 01/26/2014 - 16:59
#23
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
All shell will break loose.

Updated my character profile.

@Aekun I believe Grenadier is talking about Shingeki No Kyojin, or Attack on Titan in English.

Mon, 01/27/2014 - 13:53
#24
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Sonosuke
All shell will break loose.

I've made SpiralSpy models of each of the characters based off of what I interpreted from the applications.

Mon, 01/27/2014 - 16:20
#25
Aekun
Meep

Cool! But can you make the spikes purple instead? I edited my profile to match.

Mon, 01/27/2014 - 20:22
#26
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
All shell will break loose.

Alright, I'll try. I managed to do it with my Gokai, I can surely do it with you Wyvern shield.

Tue, 01/28/2014 - 15:33
#27
Imowor's picture
Imowor
Chapter Three: Banszul's Journal, Part 1

Sometimes I wonder if any of this will matter. But I write nonetheless. I bet they're searching for me up above. They have no idea of the coming storm. I don't think anyone has seen what I've seen. Regardless of what I believe, I have to inform the Spiral Order of the new Gremlin-Fiend alliance. It does not bode well for the Knights.

Entry One-
1/28/14
Depth 22
Clockworks

I fear the combined power of the legions of the Underworld and the warmongering Gremlins will be too powerful. I have yet to learn the details of their pact, or when and how it was agreed on. It perplexes me why both the Fiends and Gremlins hate us so much. I think that we're all just... missing something. Some clue as to why the so desperately want to expunge us from Cradle. I think sometimes is may be our fault. We invaded their planet, killed their people, destroyed their creations, and took their wealth. The Order is too stubborn, too controlling, and too concerned about meager things such as 'troop morale' to tell everyone the biggest truth about this crisis. We're not the heroes we think we are. The things we've done to the Clockworks' inhabitants just to survive are horrendous. We could've just stayed on the surface and minded our own business, just as everyone else stayed under and minded theirs. But we were so self-centered as to delve to the planet's core, razing everything in our path, and rob it of its very heart just to save ourselves. Except we couldn't. The path is sealed, and the murderous trail we had blazed meant nothing. And yet, we still go under, time and time again, killing and killing, trying to find the key to an eternally locked door. And I know we won't. And if we do, I'm not so sure the Core will be all we think it is. Trying to control the heart of this machine will only lead us to our own destruction. Three dozen monitors with locks on them in the Core Terminal can only tell us 'don't open it'. But we will. It will be our greatest moment, but also our downfall. I am no traitor, but I fear if I ponder this too far I will begin to realize things I am better off not knowing. So I will stop. For now.

Signed,

Vanguard Banszul

Tue, 01/28/2014 - 16:13
#28
Imowor's picture
Imowor
Update #2

@Robo-Drilldigger

If you're wondering why Egg hasn't shown up.... after seeing what he looks like and realizing it's pretty much straight out of Sonic, I've been reluctant to include him. I know OOO is owned by Sega, but...
I like the idea of an ancient friendly construct, but if you could make it something more original, I would like that. (name included) You can keep the general idea of him (Ex. his weapon can still be a lance and his chest can still be his weakpoint)
Sorry about the letdown/inconvenience. When you change him I'll find a way to implement him in an important role ASAP.

@Sonosuke

Wow, those are some nice Spiralspy models, thanks! It's much easier to envision the characters now. I heard you mentioned you changed the colors up on your weapon Gokai... does that mean you're making weapon models too? Or just characters? If you're not making weapon models don't feel pressed to unless you want to. I feel like making models for modified weapons would be difficult.

@Deadly-Sin-Revenge

You technically posted Gardy's app after I removed the application request from the title, but I might have not made it clear enough, as the original post still implied I wanted characters, sorry. :/ I will find your character a place in the story though. :D

Miscellaneous-
-Updated Banszul's 'personality' entry to reflect his sudden change to being very serious, err *cough* Seerus in the latest chapter. He's feeling a bit mixed up right now.

Tue, 01/28/2014 - 16:55
#29
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
All shell will break loose.

Maybe Gardy could be leading a rescue squad for Banszul. Also I may not be inclined to make all the weapons (since it's gonna be difficult to find scopes and stuff), but I will try. Most of them are basically just recolors of SK weapons in appearance, so it won't be too hard.

Tue, 01/28/2014 - 18:00
#30
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
Double post :|

EDIT: Just some things:

Dynenth: The tip of your Venenatis has dripping poison at the tip, right?
Feline-Grenadier: Do you want your Nyx to have a shock aura around it, the regular shadow aura, or no aura?
Aekun: Do you want your main weapon to be the Triglav, or the Winter Needle?
Creeperlucario: The Divine Faust's aura is blue, or the whole blade?
Colray: I'm not sure if I'm able to make the modified Iron Slug, but I'll try.
Deadly-Sin-Revenge: Same with Gardy's weapon, although I'll make at least the Argent Sentenza itself.

Wed, 01/29/2014 - 10:18
#31
Imowor's picture
Imowor
Venenatis

In response to your question about my weapon, yes it would be dripping poison at the tip. the blade would be gray and it would turn into green at the tip just like the Barbarous Thorn Blade does with black/red. I would like to note though that if you could make the green section shorter than normal, that would be great. I'd rather the poison patch be closer to the tip than half the length of the blade.

Also, if you haven't already thought of this, the poison tanks on the guard could be made using recolored versions of the cylinders found on alchemers.

Tue, 01/28/2014 - 18:58
#32
Aekun
Response

@Sonosuke: Triglav w/ purple instead of blue.

Tue, 01/28/2014 - 20:02
#33
Feline-Grenadier's picture
Feline-Grenadier
Eh?

Oh, Nyx would have a more shocking Aura, I guess.

Still thinking on how you're gonna remove the sheathe from the actual sword...

Tue, 01/28/2014 - 20:31
#34
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
All shell will break loose.

Oh you people are just trying to make it hard on me, huh? Well... guh.

Feline, I finished the Nyx. Dynenth, I'm working on the Venenatis. Aekun... I'll try.

Wed, 01/29/2014 - 00:21
#35
Creeperlucario's picture
Creeperlucario

The Divine Faust is blue, doesn't have an aura around it.

Wed, 01/29/2014 - 20:05
#36
Colray's picture
Colray
@Sonosuke If you can't do

@Sonosuke

If you can't do the Sniper Rifle then you can just have him holding his Valiance.

Sat, 02/01/2014 - 10:44
#37
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
All shell will break loose.

Alright I finished Venenatis. The poison tip started coming out weird if I allowed too much of a similar color to the one I set as a base, so let's just say some of the poison from the tip is slowly oozing down, and drying up on, the blade. Now I shall work on that purple Triglav, the Divine Faust, and the Sniper Slug. Also, I found a scope to use that would go perfectly with the Sniper Slug, so I'll use that.

EDIT: Wait, do you want the aura and the frozen part of the Triglav to be purple, or just the aura?
EDIT 2: nevermind

Sat, 02/01/2014 - 20:55
#38
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
Oh sweet jesus

I finally finished all the weapons I think. And I made a group shot of everyone (the knights, at least) right here.

Sat, 02/01/2014 - 23:10
#39
Aekun
:D

AWESOMENESS.

Mon, 02/03/2014 - 07:05
#40
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
Bump

I'm Sorry, Don't Hurt Me!!

Mon, 02/03/2014 - 07:53
#41
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart of Valor.

Don't worry your juices Sono. I'm the only one hurting you today.

Mon, 02/03/2014 - 19:15
#42
Colray's picture
Colray
Dat gun

@Sonosuke: Idk the sights are cool, but the extended barrel looks kinda small, especially for an Iron Slug

Sun, 02/16/2014 - 08:27
#43
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

Alright, I'll try and fix that. Also, did you stop with this fan fic Dynenth?

Sun, 02/16/2014 - 21:04
#44
Colray's picture
Colray
Derppity derp

Helloooo? Dyneth, you there? I want moar of thy story.

Sat, 02/22/2014 - 14:16
#45
Imowor's picture
Imowor
Derp.

I've been busy with several projects. There will be a chapter out tomorrow, 2/21/14.

EDIT: See Derp. (2)

Fri, 02/21/2014 - 00:00
#46
Colray's picture
Colray
:D

Yay I like this fanfic, the custom weapons sets it apart from the other stories. Mostly cuz everyone got one. +1

Sat, 02/22/2014 - 14:15
#47
Imowor's picture
Imowor
Derp. (2)

I'm wrestling with a dying computer, but I'll try to keep this fanfic afloat since you guys like it so much. C:

/sad

Sat, 02/22/2014 - 15:12
#48
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

NO, Not The Computer!

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