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Fri, 02/21/2014 - 12:06
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Tiraid

Chapter one

We live on Isora; it’s not the nicest planet in the universe, but its home to millions of us.
I am one of them.
I’ve wanted to be a knight my whole life. My parents finally gave me that chance.
I had packed all the things I needed. Food, maps, compass, and more food, my mother loves to cook. So as I was walking out the gate to our farm, my father runs out carrying a cloth-wrapped bundle. “Wait up! I’ve got something for you!” He yelled, finally catching up to me. He handed me the bundle and I began to unwrap it, before I finished, he grabbed my hand and said some words of encouragement. He was like that, especially during the winterfest. Always stopping people from opening their presents to give them little tidbits of advice. He finally lets go and I finished unwrapping it. It was a calibur, polished until it shone, with a pale scar along it when it had been re-forged. My father pointed to this, saying how that came from when he was waist deep in the water hacking at the retreating morai’s boats. He then gave me a massive hug with scarred hands that nearly enveloped me. Then I was on my way, tears running down my face as I left the only place I ever knew.

The trip to the recruitment center was uneventful, although I did see a Morai scouting party at one point. Needless to say, I hid under some trees until they passed. As I walked into the town I was astounded at the size of the recruitment center, it was barely bigger than the barn! I walked in and asked the secretary where I should sign up. She pointed me to a wall of computers, which I was never exposed to, so I had to ask her for help. She ended up complying after I stammered through my reasons, blushing the whole way. After I signed up she directed me toward a barracks down the road. “What about me getting accepted?” I asked her. She looked up from her computer and told me that they didn’t worry about whether I would be accepted or not. I went to the barracks without another word. Several of the residents there would mock me for being a useless country bumpkin, until I lost my temper at a particularly nasty insult and threw the offender out a window. Then I was left alone. Three weeks later a young sergeant came looking for me, I had been assigned to the Skylark. As I exited the recruitment center with my new Spiral brigandine and sallet, the latter under my arm I heard the secretary whoop with joy in perfect synchronization with the young sergeant. Who were both revealed to be leaning over the computer staring at it. When both of them ran outside yelling, again in perfect sync “We’ve won! We’ve won!” Repeatedly, I had no idea what they were talking about. “The war is over! We won!” They yelled now. I stopped the secretary from dancing with the sergeant who continued to whirl even without a partner and asked what was to become of me. She told me I would still serve on the Skylark. So I set out to the docks about three miles from where I was and walked at a brisk pace towards it.

Three Weeks Later

I dropped into my bed under my obnoxious roommates, exhausted from the seemingly endless work required to prepare the Skylark for her voyage. Since the heavy-lifting cranes were out of order due to a vicious Morai attack, most of the work had to be done by hand. I was assigned to help the cooks get the numerous supplies and cooking utensils into the kitchens, which of course were the farthest thing away from the cargo doors. Although the work was strenuous, it also had better benefits. There was always a bit more on my plate at dinner. My roommate walked into the room, as fresh as ever since he was assigned to the medics all he had to carry was rather light boxes of medicine and cloth for bandages. This is two days till departure.
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Two Days Later

As I watched the departure from my window in the cabin I was amazed at all the different things the takeoff crew had to do. First there was unhooking all the nearly 2-foot thick metal cords that kept her from falling over. Then attaching extra fuel tanks to get her out of the atmosphere, and finally backing slowly into the metal bunker in which they would be safe from the massive exhaust. As my father used to say: “Ten-thousand tons going up, ten thousands tons of air going down.” And we were off!

Arrival

When I was started out of my sleep by the evac order, I wondered why. Then I noticed that most of the hallway was on fire. My roommate would have already been out of the room, since he was working, so he was safe. Which was good. As for myself, well that was a different matter. I grabbed several personal belongings, including my sword and ran toward the escape pod launcher, after I exited the hallway and came around the corner I noticed a lot of other traffic going in that direction. I decided that adding myself to the throng would only slow them down more. So I took a shortcut through the vents. When I got into the hanger everyone was milling about and looking confused as they waited in line to get into a pod. I saw several knights I knew, such as my roommate. And finally I was in an escape pod. Right as it launched another blast hit the ship, throwing it askew and launching me off in a random direction into space, I blacked out.

Fri, 02/21/2014 - 16:43
#1
Colray's picture
Colray
Nice

Pretty good. I like reading about different knight's trip on the skylark. Keep it up, looking forward to next Chapter

Sat, 02/22/2014 - 09:36
#2
Tiraid's picture
Tiraid
Thank you :)

Always appreciate someone liking my noob writing style

Tue, 02/25/2014 - 08:43
#3
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Tiraid
Second chapter

Second chapter is done, forgot my sisters flash drive that i store it on.
Idiot...
Anyway, i have writers block, so third chapter might take awhile

Sun, 04/27/2014 - 13:25
#4
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Tiraid
Chapter 2

When I awoke there was smoke all around me, I coughed and hit the emergency open switch. The door broke open and I climbed out hacking all the way. Then noticed the danger I was in. Several wolf-like creatures were surrounding the pod, seemingly curious, but when they saw me they snarled and began to advance. I reached behind me and grabbed my sword. When they saw this they're eyes turned a reddish color and they charged. The first swing ended up to save my life, since I hit the largest of the bunch. Who seemed the alpha, so the rest backed of for the time being. As they retreated I grabbed the shield from the interior and ran to find a more defensible position.
In the forest I saw a cone shaped hill that looked better than my current prospects, when I got to the top there was a cave, when I began to walk inside there appeared to be a red glow at the back. I thought it might be another knight who had lit a fire, I started to run towards it, but when it started to rise of the ground, I stopped short and ran in the opposite direction in my peripheral vision I saw a massive shadow rise with the orbs. And the shadow chased me out of the cave.
I don't know how I outran the shadow that long, only that I did. And I found myself at a massive crater. I looked over the edge and saw hundreds of miles of machinery, seemingly moving at random. I heard a noise behind me and I jumped, turning around and drawing my sword in the same motion. Then I saw a sight I never thought Id see again, a spiral knight coming out of the trees, weapon drawn cocked and ready. My mouth was probably gaping open at the sight of a friendly face, but she just walked forward and offered a hand in greeting. "Hello there!" She said, as cheerily as if the crash never happened and we were just two strangers meeting in the street. She was armed much better than me, wearing a hood and cloak combo that I hadn't seen before, with a blast bomb and blaster dangling from her belt. Although she had no shield she seemed to carry herself with an air of experience that defied one of her stature, she was very short.
"Whats your name then? Mines Skyli! What sort of fantastic creatures have you discovered on your adventures so far? All I've gotten to see so far are a couple of dumb lizards." She talked so fast I could barely understand her. I tried to answer her questions as best I could, but she chunnered on for about five minutes or so, then she asked why I hadnt answered any of her questions yet. "My names Ashen, but my friends call me grayface, since my eyes are this color." I replied. "Well how ya doing Ashen?" She fired out. "And you said lizards?" I asked somewhat incredulously. "WHY ARE PEOPLE SO SURPRISED THAT I ATE LIZARDS?!?!" She yelled suddenly "THEY DONT TASTE THAT BAD!" She continued with her rant for several minutes, leaving me holding my sides trying not to laugh. After she was done she looked at me and asked if I had found a good position to camp. "No, and Im not going in that forest again." I told her. "Why is that?" She asked, seemingly curious. I shuddered; I wasnt quite ready to recall that shadow.She probably saw the look on my face and quieted down. "Well then, lets go exploring then, shall we?" She said as cheerily as ever. "Oh wait before we go." She started. "See that little guy down there about twenty feet? I call them gremlins." She stated more than asked, pointing to a furry creature that was working on a machine, about twice the distance away that she described. Yes, I do. I told her.
"Hullo there!" She yelled at it, making me jump. It looked at her and pulled out what appeared to be a flamethrower. I pulled her down just as he/it fired. She jumped back up right as the flames stopped and yelled "THAT WASNT VERY NICE!" then pulled out her blaster and gave it a good scorching on its furry rump, that made me laugh even more.
We didnt camp yet, but pushed on through nightfall. When daylight came we were out of the plains or forests that I was used to for scenery, instead, it was some sort of mechanical city of sorts, minus the buildings. I commented on this to Skyli and she chunnered on about it and her different theories on how this things had happened. One of the funniest was that this whole planet was the result of a star that exploded and devolved into a black hole that sucked all the planets nearby into it, then mysteriously disappeared and left all the planets behind. When we walked around a corner and saw a gate guarded by two gremlins and some sort of mechanical contraption, she whispered to me, as quietly as possible "I want whats behind that gate. "
"Why?" I asked. "Its guarded, why else?" She replied with a tone that said Youre an idiot. Then she walked around the corner in full view and stopped with an astonished look on her face. "LOOK OUT, THEYVE GOT A ROCKET PUPPY!" she screamed, diving for cover. I looked at her, with a look on my face that probably portrayed confusion. "What?" I asked. Then the machine convulsed and fired a long rocket straight at me. I spun around, narrowly missing it, then managed to draw my sword and block the first gremlins axe, I looked at Skyli. "How did I just do that?" I asked her. "I dont know." She remarked, then pulled out her blaster and shot the gremlin whose axe I had blocked. Then fired two shots in a row at the so-called rocket puppy. Immediately I felt a sharp pain in my stomach and fell over. I watched with fading eyes as Skyli grabbed the axe the second gremlin had swung into my stomach and rammed the handle into its own stomach, then swung it overhand into its neck, breaking it and killing it instantly. Then she ran over to me and yelled for me to hang on. Then all faded and the world went black.

Sun, 04/13/2014 - 18:07
#5
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Cinoa

Nice! I like it. But if it wouldn't cause too much trouble, Could you try putting in quotation marks for the speech?, as in "Hi!" she said. It would help a bit, But it's your Fanbook, Not mine :/

Sun, 04/27/2014 - 13:27
#6
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Tiraid
Hmmmm

Odd i couldve sworn i did that... ill work on that
Might have been that i was using a different computer that i did not realize had Word on it.

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