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From the Skies {-Fanfiction-} [PT 5 COMING]

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Tue, 04/08/2014 - 23:20
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Feline-Grenadier

It's been questioned more than a few times. What if the Spiral Knights didn't land in Cradle? What if they hadn't met a world that was trying to kill them the first thing in the morning? What if the Knights didn't HAVE to fight? What would be life like if our characters, had they not touched Cradle yet, existed on another world entirely, one where selfish furry men didn't exist, but neither did the complex, awesome, terrible wonders that Cradle had?

In this fanfiction, I'll be creating an entire world to explore and experience, one not unlike Cradle, yet it brandishes its own problems. Violence would no longer be the prescription for the disease of conflict, but now words and thoughts would be the Knights' protection.

Welcome to Trovostria, a world parallel to Cradle. A world where the difficulties are not unlike the ones in our history, ones of not just power struggles, but struggles of morality.

Create your Knight down below, and see how well they can fare against eons of tradition, language barriers, clashing cultures, and the ideas of what "living" means for different peoples. See the Order not as a legion of freelance mercenaries, but as a diverse group of men and women, elders and youths, optimists and Machiavellians, purposeless husks and primarily...people.

~~~

{-[APPLICATION SHEET]-}

Name :

Gender :

All acceptable characters (for now) will be Knights. Changes will be made later.

Age :

Personality : (Don't give me words, but give me likes, dislikes, habits, political beliefs, etc. Tell me EVERYTHING about your character.)

~~~

Requesting for more varied characters! Geo Knights, Intel Officers, whatever you think would fit best to colonizing a planet! Let your creativity fly!

(Of course, you can still make a basic militant sort of Knight, but still, I need to get this moving...)

Considered Characters :

None at the moment.

Accepted Characters :

-Valvius by Edolas.

-Krell by Colray.

-Blight by Atgatg.

-Cain by Skye-Lightning

Wed, 04/09/2014 - 04:23
#1
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Viorayne
Up, Up, Down, Down, Left, Right, Left, Right, B, A.

I vote Natives

You dont see enough Points of View from things that arent Spirals in Fanfics...
Usually anywho.

Wed, 04/09/2014 - 13:28
#2
Valorai's picture
Valorai
HOV

ISORAN

Yes! Moar Fanfictions! I hate RPs only for the fact that I cannot participate in them. Good luck FG!

Wed, 04/09/2014 - 14:03
#3
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
I Feel so Democratic

Isoran

I don't think it will be that exciting if it was from a chromalisk or gremlin's POV...

Wed, 04/09/2014 - 14:25
#4
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Midnight-Dj
VOTE

NATIVE , too many story based on knights as it is.

Wed, 04/09/2014 - 14:29
#5
Darkwatck's picture
Darkwatck

Natives

Wed, 04/09/2014 - 14:34
#6
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart Of Valor

http://ts4.mm.bing.net/th?id=HN.607999590620465999&w=350&h=366&c=7&rs=1&...

@Midnight
He actually stated that the prologue would have no effect on the story.

Wed, 04/09/2014 - 16:31
#7
Feline-Grenadier's picture
Feline-Grenadier
Wait...

When did I say I was a he? O.o

Wed, 04/09/2014 - 16:37
#8
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Feline-Grenadier
Prologue.

Loriel, the servant boy, the decade-and-one-fifth old son of two of the greatest warriors of the now-destroyed country of Ithrim, could feel the tension in the air. His onyx-tinted hair was nothing more than a sign of obedience, for it was cut short according to the Servant's Mandate. His eyes, a pair of cloudy purple thunderheads, peered off into the distance, at the horizon, where the vast blue ocean, the All-Consuming, kissed the equally cerulean sky, the All-Giving. But even when it was a bright summer's day, ten degrees behind high-noon, no ray of light was ever able to ease the suspense in Loriel, as much as it eased the hunger of the sea of knee-high grass about him. Every fiber in his firm, stone-grey flesh refused to move until the tension passed.

At least his master, daughter and heiress to the Empire of Ulthir, did not notice. Her fair flesh, peach from the blood's absorption of the sun, only sucked in more and more sunlight, as a child suckles from its mother. Beneath two cherry blossom petals, a pair of amber orbs were probably flying through space and time, to worlds that Loriel would never dream of. Worlds, universes, like the innumerable microcosms hidden between the slightly bending branches of auburn hair, that were just waiting to collide and intermingle with one another...

He softly held her delicate hand, and pondered upon what sort of event was about to happen.

Then, he saw it. First one, then five, then a dozen, clustered in groups of four, pierced the cerulean veil in a fiery entrance. Their appendages - stubby, rounded, like bowls - spat flames that surpassed the speeds air resistance allowed. These projectiles passed overhead the two, their noises deaf to Loriel's ears.

They had come.

Author's Note : Yeah, most of you more or less have seen this already. Editing OP now...

Wed, 04/09/2014 - 18:10
#9
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Viorayne
App

Name : Valvius

Gender : Male

All acceptable characters (for now) will be Knights. Changes will be made later.

Age : 36

Personality : See below

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Likes: Diplomatic solutions, Following the Order's Code to a Tee, To be honour-bound to any promises.
Dislikes: Being sneaky or underhanded, keeping secrets, being double-crossed or lied to, dishonourable actions in any shape or form.
Habits: Spends long hours meditating, Talking to officers about any current events, Reading up on various subjects, from History to battle tactics, Practice dueling for sport and exercise. Is very punctual and precise when speaking to others, acting very chivalrous and as a gentleman.
Political Ideals: Would wish for the Order to be in a diplomatic agreement with all covilisations, but would prefer the Order to have the majority of power and final say on things. He wouldn't wish to serve under any other faction. On this point he's a bit of an Imperialist, and looks down to less developed factions as if they were of an inferior breed.
Notes: Although generally curteous in practice, he will occasionally try and flirt with any high-standing members of various factions. To most officials that question his motives about such actions, he would reply along the lines of strengthening bonds. However personally it's just to sate his boredom and keep in practice with the opposite gender.
More Notes: Upholds the code to a fault. He enforces the code to a standard of any marshal. He can be merciless to others if they break it and he sees them, or hears them admit or talk about the act.

Summary: A refined, well-mannered and familiar face within the order, who likes to dabble in high society styled life, amongst other things.

(That's about all).

Thu, 04/17/2014 - 15:41
#10
Feline-Grenadier's picture
Feline-Grenadier
CHARACTER SHEET!

Refer to this post to see if you're accepted!

Requesting for more varied characters! Geo Knights, Intel Officers, whatever you think would fit best to colonizing a planet! Let your creativity fly!

Considered Characters :

None at the moment.

Accepted Characters :

-Valvius by Edolas.

-Krell by Colray.

-Blight by Atgatg.

-Cain by

Thu, 04/10/2014 - 16:36
#11
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart Of Valor.

Her fair flesh, peach from the blood's absorption of the sun, only sucked in more and more sunlight, as a child suckles from its mother.

AGH! MY EYES! MY MENTAL EYES!

Name : Blight

Gender : Male

Age : 24

Personality : (Don't give me words, but give me likes, dislikes, habits, political beliefs, etc.)

He has an obsession with battle. Having a dark sense of humor, this rogue attacks the soft spots. Neck, knees, arteries.... *Cough* groin...

Blight doesn't associate with a large group of people due to his crudeness, and he loves that. Makes him feel special. He also has an affinity to poison. As you can probably tell, this knight does not play by the rules, making the common boot-licking, yes-sirring, by-the-book knights a harbor of great discontent. He is always at odds-end with his superiors, but is kept around due to his fighting abilities. A sad excuse for a lady's man, Blight has no luck with woman. Just ask his heavily abused cheek. No one seems to like him, but he pays no notice to them. You could say he's a BLIGHT to the Order. HA. HAHA. Ha.
He loves sharp swords, but nothing fancy. Fancy things are for fancy people, and Blight is not a fancy person, no sir.

(If you need me to add or remove something, let me know.)

Thu, 04/10/2014 - 16:08
#12
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Feline-Grenadier
Pft, not that way! XD

I know you're a "dude", Atgx2, but please, do think of the way how a child suckles. It's not without tenderness and delicacy that the mother must handle the child, and it is not without an instinctive, child-like need to fulfill oneself. In that same way, do compare the Sun and Loriel's master like so. I don't make metaphors for naught. ^-^

(Also forgot to say : Next chapter will be posted after one more app is accepted.)

Thu, 04/10/2014 - 16:39
#13
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart Of AAAAAGH

http://img4.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20120328010201/adventuretimewithfinna...

Thu, 04/10/2014 - 17:00
#14
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Feline-Grenadier
;p

You didn't check the sign-up sheet, did you?

Fri, 04/11/2014 - 23:37
#15
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Feline-Grenadier
Act I Part I : The Skylark.

"Captain."

A pair of amethyst eyes fluttered open in the dark.

"We're at the coordinates. Our next directive, sir?"

A hiss of air left a pair of old, worn-down lungs, resulting in a heaving sigh. An equally aged whisker flopped up and down as its owner smacked his chops together, and quivered as a chill shot up from the feet, to the spine, and finally up to the skull. The whiskers finally settled down as yet another respire wheezed into the quiet chamber.

"...sir?"

"Hm?" asked the subaqueous voice. Though old, its strength was still enough to carry an echo.

"We're here, Captain. I'm asking for our next course of action."

"...how long have I been out?"

"...2 hours, s-sir."

"No need to stutter; I've been later. For now, an Alpha Squad should be established..."

"What about the predetermined one two months ago, sir?"

"What about them?"

"Shouldn't they be sent first, sir?"

"...no. Euclid is far too valuable to put him out of storage. They're all too valuable to be allowed even a single second of release. Son, do you remember why I'm Captain?"

"..."

"Answer me, knight."

"B-because you're a good leader, sir?"

"A valid, intuitive guess, but quite the contrary. Under all circumstances, Euclid should have been the optimal commander of this craft. He was the perfect strategist, and his charisma was backed by his perfection. I, on the other hand, was 46th best in the Academy. That, and I was a misanthropist. I still am, though it's not synonymous with hopelessness.

But at the time, I was much younger than he was, and as an asset, he exceeded my value as a biological specimen by pure skill. Ergo, they decided to choose not the second, third, or the others. As for 30 of those who exceeded me, their corpses are still at home. 15 among the better are on-board, preserved until after we establish ourselves here. Those who are under me are also here."

"...th-that's a lot to say, sir."

"Ah, but that wasn't the only reason..."

"Sir?"

"What year were you born?"

"E-excuse me, sir?"

"Well?"

"U-um...the summer of '45."

"And I, the winter of '63."

"...sir, didn't the Skylark embark for its journey in the year of '59?"

"It did."

"Then were you the only one not in a pod?"

"I was born on board."

"...but the Academy isn't on board. How did you even get a placement?"

"100 tries. My first was 98th place. My last was 46th place. Comparative to the data of all Isoran cadets that will be used once we establish an HQ, I was 46th. The Academy exists here, the Court exists here, the entire world exists on the Skylark. And it is my responsibility to keep the world safe. So when I tell you to do something, do it not for my sake, or even for the Order's. Do it for the sake of our family still sleeping. Wake them."

"...yessir."

Fri, 04/11/2014 - 18:44
#16
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Colray
Lorecraft

Name : Krell Bethrad

Gender : Male

All acceptable characters (for now) will be Knights. Changes will be made later.

Age : 15

Personality : (Don't give me words, but give me likes, dislikes, habits, political

Likes: The darkness, he feels safe in it. Stealing, he loves the challenge of pickpocketing. Never keeps the stuff most of the time...

Dislikes: Open Space, Feels vulnerable. Officials, law enforcement... People in general, distrusts most people and isn't Social.

Habits: Tinkering, likes to figure out how things work. Observing how deep-pocketed people are in a market place.

Political Views: Politics are just Official ways of lying, cheating, and tricking enemies in debates...

Fri, 04/11/2014 - 20:59
#17
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart Of Valor

Good! I like your writing style, but I need moar!

Sat, 04/12/2014 - 05:54
#18
Hearthstone's picture
Hearthstone
Appy!

Name: Cain Blacklist

Gender: Male

Age: 29

Personality:

>Likes : Sadists, eating citrus fruits, being contracted for assassination, prefers going solo but grouping is okay.

>Dislike : People who are a bit Mr. Goody-two-shoes, government, zealotry to religion.

>Habits : Leaving crude sketches of his victim after a killing and writing on the back of that sketch: "Hello."

>Political Beliefs :(coincidentally, the same as Colray's app) Politics and anything relating to it is fraud to Cain.

EDIT :

(Background) - As part of his job as an assassin, he is often provided/provides prosthetic masks and believable fake I.D.s for contract killings that call for travel or on-board/on-ship assassination. His fakes are often on the ball, making gate securities believe he is the real deal.

This, I believe, is the shortest application I've written up.

Sat, 04/12/2014 - 01:05
#19
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Feline-Grenadier
Updated!

Check the acceptance post for your characters' statuses!

Sun, 04/13/2014 - 21:54
#20
Feline-Grenadier's picture
Feline-Grenadier
Act I Part II

BEEP.

"Don't hesitate to riposte. Again."

Two pairs of feet walked equidistant from one another until they were about three yards from the center of a metal lane. Clad in a rubber-like polyster suit, the feet could get easy grip with the ergonomic design, snug as the suits were. They spun about-face, and advanced towards each other a half step.

Commencing duel in 3...

Heels lifted themselves slightly above the ground, poised for a fast takeoff.

2...

A rapier-tip rose up to about mouth level. A gloved hand rested at the base of a sleek spine, slightly closed.

1...

On the other side, two sabre tips rested on the floor.

Begin.

The rapier user began the initiative as rubber feet squeaked against the cold cobalt alloy, and the air whistled as steel ripped through it. Its aim was straight and true; its target was the heart.

A sabre attempted slap away the tip, and in doing so coldly rejected the advance. The other sabre honed in from the side, aiming to impale the hand that wielded the thin blade. With a flick of a wrist, however, the riposte was to no avail when it met the hand-guard.

Both duelists took a step back, and launched forward simultaneously. When a sabre aimed to slash at the thigh, the rapier answered back smartly with a parry, and when the rapier attempted to impale exposed rubber, it was slapped off-course by either of the two sabres. Never for a brief moment did the duelists pause, and only in the brief respite of a retreat were they able to ready themselves once more.

The blades never locked even once; the rapier amounted to only one, and the sabres had no strength alone. So they were stuck in a seemingly endless skirmish with one another, always meeting each other in earnest gravity, yet neither reaching an ultimatum.

The rapier user, clad in a blue-hued suit, always appeared to struggle with an inquiry expressed via the blade, and as for the duelist with the dual sabres, there was no question worthy of an answer.

Suddenly, the rapier began to demand a little more. Almost passionately, it pummeled away at the sabres' retorts, and inch by inch, it came closer to the cross-guard...

BEEP.

And it was over, just like that. A sabre pressed firmly into a throat, though its edge was too blunt to draw any blood.

"...what was that?"

The same voice asked this question, tinged with disappointment. Its accent implied refinement and formality to its owner, and the delicacy in it hinted that its owner was female.

"What was what?"

This voice was more masculine, though its smoothed accent carried far less formality.

"Your advance. It was...angry. Passionate. Did I ever put you in spite?"

"No, what makes you think tha-"

"I didn't teach you how to murder. I thought I taught you how to kill, soldier. Your being too passionate opened up a hole in your defense. You wanted it to be done with, didn't you? You were tired of me, weren't you?!"

The lady's foot pressed forward, a step further into an inquisition. A step further into persecution.

"We weren't getting anywhere!"

The man's foot slid backwards. Steadfast, yet just as eager to make a hasty retreat.

"Has the Order ever taught us that violence was the answer, soldier? Has the Order ever taught us that we were allowed to be emotionally involved in battle? Did you just view your acceptance into the Order as something to get over with? The teachings of which we spent OUR WHOLE LIVES learning and trying to live each day?"

"...no."

"You make it seem that way, contrary to your words. And according to the Order's dogmas, we pertain to the oath tha-"

Her voice was cut off by a loud stomp. From the shadows of the room, a pair of amethyst irises glowered in scorn.

"That'll be enough, Sergeant Vaelyn."

The old man walked into the light of the sparring room, though his facial features were still hidden by the shadow of his cap.

"...C-captain Ozlo!"

Immediately, the lady raised a hand to her brow.

"At ease. Who's the boy you're training?"

Vaelyn licked her lips, but did not let go of her salute.

"He's not important, sir. Nothing that you shou-"

Another loud stomp made the young man and Vaelyn flinch.

"Sergeant, I'm asking for his name. Answer me straight."

"Corporal Rhendon, sir. His name is Rhendon."

She spoke quickly, as though Ozlo had a rifle to her head. His eyes were enough to cause her to stutter, but to Rhendon, they softened as they turned to him.

"And Rhendon, how do you feel right now? To be lectured by an officer like a child?"

"Embarrassed, sir," replied the young Knight. Vaelyn scowled, but made no other gesture to show her disapproval.

"That's alright. It would make sense for a man of your standing to be ashamed of yourself. After all, Knights are not without prestige and honor. To deprive you of that would mean that you would be another peon. The Order does not treat its members as peons."

As Ozlo said this, he turned to Vaelyn.

"Say, Rhendon, would you like to try using a gun?"

The red-eyed man paused, and looked nervously to Ozlo, and then to Vaelyn. The sergeant only looked towards the floor in defeat.

"...yessir. A firearm would be...incredible. Sir, I haven't got my hands on one si-"

"Alright, take this."

From his coat, Ozlo procured a handheld firearm, a sort of submachine gun outfitted with a revolving chamber. To Rhendon, he handed the weapon with a warm smile.

"A-An Autogun?!"

"Run along now. Use it well. They're low in stock."

"Th-thank you sir!"

Footsteps became more distanced and muted as Rhendon walked out of the sparring chambers, leaving Captain Ozlo and Vaelyn alone.

"Vaelyn?"

"Yes, Captain?"

"You're a Lieutenant now. Training recruits isn't your thing. Some more seasoned subordinates would be nice, wouldn't it?"

"...they would be, sir..."

"...and...?"

"O-oh, thank you, Captain!"

The old Ozlo nodded, and took off his long overcoat and cap. What was underneath was not an old man, but a freakshow of sheer muscle. Tissue at an impossibly high definition bulged against the rubber, and none of it complemented his old endearing face.

"Alright, fair enough. Now, can you help me get these muscles moving again? I haven't done much sparring since the last decade..."

Ozlo opened his right hand, and at first, a hilt formed in bits of pixels. However, the flurry of pixels began to build up past just that hilt, and around it, a massive mechanical blade sprouted.

"C-captain?! You're wielding a HATCHET?!"

"And forgoing a shield for dual-wielding is more justifiable? Come at me, then, with everything you have. No electronic scoring systems. First one to submit loses."

"At your age, Captain, I cannot feel comfo-"

Ozlo's amethyst eyes sharpened as he frowned, and he solidly grabbed the bottom part of the hilt with his other hand, and heaved the massive blade on his shoulder.

"And is it not one of the Order's dogmas that we do what is necessary for Isora, regardless of how we feel? You had trained Rhendon in a skill few can be ever comfortable with; you'd be a hypocrite to refuse my commands. Now, can we fight? I've heard that on Isora, your first Morai kill was when you were 8 years of age..."

Vaelyn raised a sabre at Ozlo, and met his eyes with her own harsher indigo irises. Though Ozlo had undergone aging outside of stasis, his eyes were still sparkling, still young; Vaelyn's eyes, on the other hand, indicated she came from an age before his, an age of hardships.

"Two. My first two kills."

Sun, 04/13/2014 - 19:25
#21
Feline-Grenadier's picture
Feline-Grenadier
Hm...

Should I polish these chapters by putting in more description and action before I start introducing player-made characters?

Sun, 04/13/2014 - 20:01
#22
Colray's picture
Colray
yes!

I personally love it when a story does that.

That was clever when you did the thing with Rhendon. I had no idea who either of them were.

/applaud

Tue, 04/15/2014 - 04:31
#23
Hearthstone's picture
Hearthstone
Haihaihai

All I can say is, I love it.

Fri, 04/18/2014 - 21:34
#24
Feline-Grenadier's picture
Feline-Grenadier
Act I Part III

Check post #10 for more information!

~~~~~

As Loriel watched the sun slowly sink into the sea, he sighed out a hot, arid puff of air. It had been several hours since he had first spotted the falling objects, and though he tried to compare them to the many astrological objects he had been taught through decades-old tomes, he could relate nothing to it. They were too finely made to be considered comets, meteors, or some other object, but he failed to entertain the thought of an extraterrestrial coming here. After all, the only supposed "extraterrestrials" were the Magius; even then, they came via a mass-teleporting exodus after their lands were being burned all to hell.

So were they from the heavens? Loriel's ear twitched as he pondered upon the thought, but in all practicality...the gods would make a more grand entry than that.

The firmament burned shades of scarlet, crimson, and orchid shades as the sun sank only further into the horizon; Loriel had ran out of time.

The young boy, only about 12 years of age, gently pressed his sterling-silver lips against his Master's forehead, which had now paled, and stood up facing inland. The sky was but now a fiery crown around his obsidian hair, rays of terrible magnificence silhouetting the already-dark features of his face. The last son of the warrior-kings of Ithrim no longer was he, but as one of the Emperor's Hands, and the personal guardian of the Heiress, he was now.

Not that this fact deterred his loyalty.

His hand reached down into a patch of grass at his feet, and from it, he produced an ornate, cylindrical container. As if he was exerting something, he grunted under the strain of an unknown force, and the container itself began to shake as though it were lightning just waiting to explode from his grasp.

But rupture and break it did not.

He released his grip from the object, and it hung to the very air as though it were holstered to it. From inside, a sphere of red particles began to dance outwards, and outwards it flew until it enveloped both him and the Heiress in a sphere of light. Warm as the sun's rays, yet painfully hot to whatever stood outside it, the sphere held its position.

Loriel gave one last look at his master and friend, and walked out of its radius, into darkness.

In the name of Ulthir, he had to secure this state before it would become compromised. The medium of such a liberation would be with blood. Those who had come From the Skies could wait.

Sun, 04/20/2014 - 03:57
#25
Hearthstone's picture
Hearthstone

Nice, nice.

Sun, 04/20/2014 - 22:14
#26
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart Of Valor

I like it! Looking forward to more!

Mon, 04/21/2014 - 23:04
#27
Feline-Grenadier's picture
Feline-Grenadier
Act I Part IV

"Care for a drink, pet of the Empire?"

Loriel sat cross-legged in the darkness, his eyes closed, his back prostrate, and his hands resting calmly at his knees. He sniffed the air. His tipped ears, usually so active and ever-twitching to the noise, were still even to the androgynous voice deriving from the darkness.

"It's been such a long journey for thee. I'm sure thy throat is rather parched from all that running. After all, Trovostria is quite a la-"

"Constantine," Loriel interrupted, "I am quite fine."

"Very well then, servant. What brings your dirty paws here?"

"I've a message from Lord Ulthir himself. A new directive for a select few governors, it is."

"...of what nature?"

"Of the nature your ilk would enjoy as sport. Brutality, unsanctioned orgies, torture and dominance, the list goes on."

"...and am I to be allowed such privileges?"

The darkness grew ever more saturated as a curtain of vines draped themselves over various little holes throughout the chamber.

Loriel then opened his eyes, a pair of sharp blood-red garnets, and answered coldly.

"The privileges are mine. Using them, I am to execute my newest directive. By Emperor Ulthir's order, you shall be subjected to injury to the best of my ability."

~~~

"Captain? I've detected a burst of energy signatures."

"Can they be pinpointed?"

"Yessir. Several key locations on a global scale have similar readings to one another. From there, though, it's a little more than fuzzy. The charts imply that they're being used in one large burst...and..."

"Pilot?"

"Any consumed energy is being restored at the North and South Poles of our target planet, sir. If we're going to take back Isora, perhaps going to these loca-

BIOLOGICAL SIGNATURES DETECTED CAPTAIN. THEY'RE THE ONES USING THE ENERGY. RAPID LOSS OF SMALLER ENERGY SIGNATURES DETECTED. READINGS DETECT A COORDINATED EFFORT ON A GLOBAL SCALE, PINPOINTED AT...FRAG, THE FLOW OF ENERGY IS TOO CONDENSED TO GET A CLEAR READING...

...and it's over, Captain. Energy levels returning to normal, sir. So...is it safe to say...?"

"Well...at least I have a reason to be selective about the Knights we send. Disturbing the natives is the last thing we want. Good work on sending the drones. That data's going to save our lives once we send Knights down."

"Do we have a Point Team established yet, sir?"

"No. We ran into a little something. Call it a fluke, but a few of the Knights the Order shipped onto here...are liabilities. We have a sadistic murderer called Cain on-board; his record says he almost made the Iron Wolves...but for obvious reasons, he never got the invite. Still, he'll be of some use. For now, he's going to be kept on stasis. Krell Berthrad, a registered felon at the age of 15, is also on-board. I'd like to train him myself, but not until we have a FOB established. We'll have...hm...ever heard of a man named Valvius?"

"...Valvius? I trained with him to become a Templar, but I haven't seen him after I left for piloting. I wasn't fond of him...but I don't remember why..."

"Records says he had some...disciplinary reprimands after a scuffle with a few other Knights."

"Ah, yes, that's what I remember. He had...his own views about the Order. I think that Templar training did something with him; personally, sir, I think it's just the Templar's Order that changes people. Makes them more zealous, closer to the Order's base teachings...

...to be honest, sir, the Templar Order is an entity you would not want as a first-contact force for people of another world. They'll try to build missions and convert people with whatever it takes."

"I'll consider it, pilot."

"Whatever it takes, Captain Ozlo. I implore that you look at their history before thinking about sending a Templar Knight down there."

Wed, 04/23/2014 - 13:58
#28
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart Of Valor.

Great! I loved it. Your writing style is very unique, and definitely engages the reader.

MOAR.

Wed, 04/23/2014 - 17:21
#29
Hearthstone's picture
Hearthstone

Why does this chapter's ability to draw me in feel familiar...?

Nice chapter :)

Tue, 06/10/2014 - 23:10
#30
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Feline-Grenadier
Act I Part V

Systems online.

Routine Damage Check...

...no damage.

Loading Start-Up Program...
Loading System Functions...
Loading Wireless Communications...

Loaded.

[I'll put in more by...a few days. Expect this post to be edited frequently. Of course, if you have any suggestions or comments that isn't like Malkalack's, feel free to drop in your two cents!]

Wed, 06/11/2014 - 05:50
#31
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Cobalterian
LOVE IT

Love this story, and your writing! More plz!

Skye. A word. Check your steam.

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