Spiral Knights - Almire,Renaissance Proluge

Almire,Renaissance Proluge

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Fri, 10/28/2011 - 19:04

Softhead

Blackstone Bridge.

The landmark is made out of an alloy of Maiden's Tear and an unknown rock that fell from the Heavens above.The warm stone glew raidiantly among its magificent soroundings. This bridge was special because of its unique defence mechanisim, the Spiked Wheel Launcher. It was able to flatten friend or foe alike. Normaly it should be quiet, peaceful,calm.Now there was a erie, paralizing silence going on there.
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The haggared warrior stood among a pile of mutilated corpses, his face full of glee and paranoia. He stood, his shadowed face was darkened by the fading light. His white armour was stained crimson red from the bloodshed. ''Who dares challenge me, Lord Vanaduke!!'' he bellowed. He had taken down most of the crusader army he once had control over. He new this had to do this. The stone told him about the upcoming future. He had to alter the future.His kingdom turning to ashes, his whole family(relatives and spouse alike) and people betrayed him, only before becoming one with the ashes.

''Uggh!'' a voice moaned in agonising pain.
He thought ''Someone hasn't died?''

He raised his ruined mace. The blade was chipping off at one side and rusted beyond recgonisison on the other. The mace once had an ivory ingraving that shined like a thousand suns, was now scratched out like a tiger mauled it. It felt heavier by the second, he struggled to stand with the mighty weight hindering him. The injured knight's blue eyes widened in shock as his former king was about to murder him in cold blood, like all the others. He pleaded, he begged but all of those words turned to a sharp, hollow screech of absolute pain and suffering as he felt his spine shatter like glass. Vanaduke felt the bones break and his fear and paranoia melted away to pure madness and happiness. As the maddened king lifted his cinderblock mace, panting, to finish the knight of Almire.

''For Almire,'' he whispered...
'' Stop half-brother!!!'' a stray voice shouted with demanding authority echoed causing Vanaduke to drop the mace, sparing the crippled knight's life.

A tall figure stood at the gates of the bridge, clad in a white armour. His mail had a patch of fur along his neck. There was robes along the top of his body, his legs looked like pegs. His helm had a vibrant grey stripe to match his aging eyes. He bore the Crest of Almire with a symbol of two queens of Vanes and the sheild was yellow like the sun.

''Duke Polonius of Vanes?'' The crippled knight questioned.
''Thats right kiddo!'' Polonius chanted. ''Whoa, my brother did a number on your back!''
Vanaduke's raged-infused crimson eyes narrowed to slits.''This does not consern you Polonius,'' he rasped.
''Oh yes it does. You went on a rampage killing everyone in the castle and was going to destroy Vanadin!''
''They're all traitors.''
''Hmm?''
''Including you!!!'' Vanaduke roared.
''Okay it true, I wanted the throne for the Polonius family, but I wanted you to die by warring with the Order of the Rose or the Scarlet Alliance. Never knew I had to kill you.''

Vanaduke picked up his mace and charged like a boar straight at Polonius! Polonius sidesteps and pulls out a flintlock pistol with a enlarged barrel. He shot slug shaped bullets that was enchanted to daze. Vanaduke stopped, dazed. Polonius took the chance and stabbed Vanaduke in the chest with a sword that glew white and yellow. Vanaduke coughed up blood.

''You shoulden't have killed the Gallium, Boronis and Neona lines, you gave me the easy way,'' Polonius taunted.'' How is Meridia and you child, Vanny!''
''Be quiet you insuffereble bastard!!'' Vanaduke sreeched in a deranged manner, groping the blade from his chest.
''Your lucky they weren't in the castle at the time, now the child has lost his rights to the throne. Are you happy!''

The mace clashed with the Sword of Polonius, sparks flying everywhere. Vanaduke twisted his wrist and the sword flew out of Polonius' grasp. The snake Polonius slid behind his half brother and grabbed on to his spiked shoulder plates and flipped. As fast as lightning, Polonius grabbed the mace and felt like he was sinking underwater.

''Come on, Macey!'' Polonius muttered. '' I know im not pure of heart, but so is my half-brother! Let me finish him of so that the murdered souls could have retribution!''

Immediatley, the mace unrusted slightly and Polonius lifted it up with ease. He whacked Vanaduke onto the floor. Unbeknownst to Polonius, the fallen king was charging up a metal ball that melted slightly and flames emitted from it. The azure-eyed knight saw this and crawled to the king. He grabbed him and knocked the bomb away, exploding in a blast of hellish fire.

''Kill him Duke!'' The knight ordered painfuly.

Polonius lifted the mace up and in one final move, he smacked down, caving the king's head in in one powerful smash.The king only had time to gasp before his demise. Polonius removed his helmet, exposing his pitch-black skin and his long, shaggy, brown now greying hair. He looked at the knight, who was lying down.

''What's your name kid?'' he asked
''My name is Vin of the 40th Vanadin defence unit. Or what's left of it,'' Vin muttered in spite.
''You helped me kid, thanks!''
''So what a..''Vin's reply was cut of from she shouting of the populace and the Almirian Crusader army arrived. Vin was put on a stretcher and taken into the city. Polonius felt dazed and nausious as he blacked out fom the battle.
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To be continued if this is good
P.S: The gun Polonius had was a magical version of a Iron Slug.
P.S.S: Almirian dukes and duchesses has modified shield that has their family crest on it and is coloures to suit their colour theme.
P.S.S.S: The bomb That Vanny had was a powerful version of a Firecracker.

Have a nice day!

Sat, 10/29/2011 - 07:55

Valorai

Nice. I liked it ^^

Sat, 10/29/2011 - 08:07

Softhead

Thank you!

I spent three hours on it. Ill do the rest soon. Some foresight into the series:
Some things are not as they seem(Vanaduke) and this leads to somthing in the future(Almire,Reneaissance) and the past(The origin of The Spiral Knights). The Order of the Rose along with the Scarlet Alliance(red armoured knights with a scarlet shield that has the shape of a Ageis and COA with Dragon Scale Armour) are the two other factions warring with Almire in Vanaduke's Lore. They become two castle eviroments in The Clockworks.

And I hope you finish A New Threat.

Sat, 10/29/2011 - 09:40

Softhead

New stuff

This is now finished, the continuation is in a new Topic.
Please post you views on this.

NOW ACCEPTING CHARACTERS FOR THE NEXT INSTALLMENT
These will be Vanaduke Royals excecuted for being family to Vanaduke. Each will have a status effect to kill them.

The sheet:
Name
Apperance
Personality(likes, Dislikes, Psyce)
Involvement in Massacre:(Not Killing the Crusaders or people in the castle)
Other
Relative status( Bro, Sis, Mother, Uncle, Aunt, Nepwew, Neice, Grandad/mum)

Need enough for each status effect.In order to post these characters, you must comment about the Fic!!

Thu, 11/10/2011 - 12:08

Softhead

Its one hour backwards in England..

But it is going to be one day since I posted this. Still remember that I am accepting new characters for the sequel. Here is a reminder of what's the way to post here.

Sat, 10/29/2011 - 19:26

Dirty-Harry

So the character we make

So the character we make isn't going to be a Knight I assume?
Do we add what status effect that kills them?
I feel like I need to know more about the massacre to know how they could be involved.

Sat, 10/29/2011 - 19:53

Softhead

Dirty-Harry

They are Almirians but I made them look similar to the Spiral Knights(in my Lore it shows the origin) and I pick the status effects, you people deal with their basic detals and have you read the fic, My next one is a continuation with the deaths of nobles. So create!

The massacre is when the King Vanaduke I(not the firestorm citadel one, His father) Went on the rampage, he invited members of the other royal family (Gallium, Neona and Boronius, Polonius is not invited) to the castle and killed most of them, reducing the families from hundreds to less than 10. The Vanadin family just watched and some cheered and helped to try not to get killed by Vanaduke. So they helped to save their skins.

(I put this a vauge for story purposes, but I was more Kindom Hearts mysterious than I wanted)

So then the 40 Vanadin defence Unit came and prevented Vanaduke I to getting to Vanadin and killing them all. This had all these casualties in the begining. So do you understand?

Mon, 10/31/2011 - 12:23

Psychodestroyer

K, me managed to read.

Nice. I won't be pedantic about spelling and grammar. All in all, it was a good story. Not too dark, and with some humor.

Think Vanaduke is Richard III...and Polonius is some Richmond replacement...
Sorry, with all the exams on, Shakespeare on the brain ><

You put a lot of thought into this story, didn't you? I can't come up with names to save a life, yet your names fit in pretty nicely. (Though they seem to be part of the periodic table...*cough**cough*Gallium*cough**cough**cough*Neon*cough*Boron*cough**cough**cough*...)
Still, it works :D

Need any ideas? I was thinking Mid-execution (perhaps when someone not really guilty is going to die) Vanaduke rises from the dead in a terrible fiery rage and the families have to band against his renewed fury? Or something, my thought trail ends there.

EDIT: Just realized, this is like an Intro. You probably already have plans for a return or something later, or a rise of a greater threat etcetc. My bad.

Tue, 11/01/2011 - 12:26

Softhead

Listen closely...

The Vanaduke here is the ruler before the Vanaduke we all know. This series is based on the Vanaduke(called Reneaissance for a reason because it means rebirth, fitting with Vanaduke's lore) gaining the throne of Almire and follows up to his transformation. The story here ends and has no continuation, despite what I said with the nobles. The first story is coming up soon!

Good luck on the exams!

Ps: Vanaduke's name is based on a element called Vanadium, the elements noticed here is based on that theme. The Richard idea is awsome, but I was more on the lines of Machbeth. It might get dark or humourous on some parts.

Tue, 11/08/2011 - 15:18

Travid

I'm in

Name: Travid
Appearance: Dusker Coat, Authentic Phantom Mask
Personality: nice and will almost do whatever it takes to finish a mission
Involvement in Massacre: Medic
Other: Has a pet wolver pup, tamed

Wed, 11/09/2011 - 00:27

#10

Firehate

Please ?

Name Firehate
Appearance Skolver Set, Leviathan Blade, Final Flourish, Valiance, Nitrome
Personality(likes, Dislikes, Psych) Loves Fighting,Revenge,Killing ,Clever ,Has An Unknown Emotional Side, Helps People...At A Price
Involvement in Massacre:(Not Killing the Crusaders or people in the castle) Vanguard
Other Coming Soon
Relative status( Bro, Sis, Mother, Uncle, Aunt, Nepwew, Neice, Grandad/mum) None

Thanks !

Wed, 11/09/2011 - 01:34

#11

Heavy-Duty

...

Also, did you notice the color of Vanadium? It is pretty dark in itself. that's why I thought of Lady Helia to be Vanaduke's opposite.. but that's another idea altogether....
Anyways, pretty dark, and Vana spitting up blood? Not to be intrusive here, but shouldn't this kinda be a tad more monstrous, comparing to Vana in the game? Maybe spitting up some kind of energy, or Magma? I don't know I've barely skimmed it. However, I like the history here, btu I am a little confused on how a Knight appeared during Vanaduke's battle. Is it a Spiral Order knight, or a knight of the age? Anyways, here are a few characters, if you don't mind:

-Rex (Female)
-Vog Cub armor, Emberbreak Helmet, Ascended Calibur
-On the tough side, but also does not like going on the search for the core, but rather "Tier 2" locations. She is inviting, but also holds high standards. She lost her friends on an expedition, leaving her constantly at the Training Hall, releasing anger on the Scuttles :(
-Never made it to the core, or so deep, ever since her friends perished.
-Tried to go anywhere near Vanaduke's location after first attempt, assists Warden.
-No known relations.

-Warden (Male)
-All Azure Guardian, Leviathan, Aegis
-Rather silent and only speaks to new knights to help. Besides such, he is a valiant fighter in terms of war. Wise, silent, and deadly, Warden stays among the proud. However, he was scarred since the massacre.
-He did absolutely nothing to stop the massacre. Knights that tried to enter came in vain, only to be pushed back by him.
-Secret friendship with those of Emberlight
-Sister presumably alive, but location is unknown.

-Chromon (Male)
-...Gremlin? He's a mender, wearing the Great Defender, a Wrench Wand, and a light version of Cobalt armor.
-Talkative, but shy from larger beings. Very poetic.
-Healed those who opposed the massacre, almost having himself killed in all chaos.
-Secretly friends with Warden, foresaw a mystical darkness in a dream (swarm anyone?)...
-Garchung and Punch are his brothers while the rest of his family died in midst of chaos.

-"Heavy-Duty" :D (Male)
-Full set of Boosted Plate Mail, Heavy Plate Shield, Khorovod (Not really me in-game, but a fictitious character by the nick-name Heavy-Duty)
-Rather cumbersome with all armor. Rather suspicious of Snipes. Freaked out by Kats. Rather strong when all is lost, but otherwise wimpy.
-Shielded fleeing individuals, also almost killing himself by blocking lava with body, then became a fleer too.
-Real name is Alkalen-Don, which translates to "Sturdy One" or "Heavy One" but ironically, it's the armor.
-Has a pet Wolver named Monomi to chase off Kats

Wed, 11/09/2011 - 21:50

#12

Nechrome

nice story. not bad at all.

nice story. not bad at all. Although the first chapter/prologue thing was sort of hard to follow.

there. i commented. now i can post my resume.

Name: Necro

Apperance: Cobalt Armor+Magic Hood, Khorovod and Jalovec seen sheathed in a specialy made double scabbard on his back, super blast bomb in a thing like the Pumkin Bomb Bandolier, Shockburst Brandish in sheath on his side, Bristling buckler always hanging on his left arm.

Personality: He keeps his shield always on his arm because he believes that something is hunting him and he needs to be prepared to defend himself. Has a profound interest in fiends, owns a pet greaver (a mix of the fire and shock greavers) called Scourge, enjoys smishing (yes, smishing) zombies with his heavy swords, hates noobs. Doesn't talk much. Solitary kind of guy.

Involvement in Massacre: Almirian Crusader

Other: Something is stalking him. Some kind of Phantom.

Relative status: None. All killed in the massacre.

Wed, 11/16/2011 - 13:32

#13

Softhead

Chapter 1 is moved

To Here! http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/33583

Thu, 11/10/2011 - 14:46

#14

Travid

who was the man?

Thu, 11/10/2011 - 15:55

#15

Kaou

Name: Kaou Appearance: Grey

Name: Kaou
Appearance: Grey Feather Mantle, Grey Feather Cowl, Crest of Almire, Gran Faust
Likes - Defending his allies, being on the front lines, and Cursing others with his sword
Dislikes - Talking, waiting, and having his face seen.
Involvement - Everything
Family status - Brother

I like how you're using Vanaduke before FSC's Vana, interested to see how this goes.

Thu, 11/10/2011 - 18:13

#16

Duskfinder

;)

Cool nice story

Wed, 11/16/2011 - 13:30

#17

Softhead

Hello

I need more characters!
Maybe this will show me my turmoil
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ABzWafwY20o&feature=related

Chapter 2 won't come out until I get more characters! I will select characters!
Chapter 1 has been moved to here as a seperate story. http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/33583

Thu, 03/29/2012 - 20:27

#18

Stayup

Ehh...

Decent. I am actually publishing books for a local library, as well as short stories in the Whittier Times(so I do know what I'm talking about...) Grammar errors became too noticeable, but it seems the characters' personalities were not fit for the serious and warring scene. Polonius was a complete juxtapoz to the whole scene and seemed to be some type of cowboy...? If you're looking for more advice, you can respond in game(:

Thu, 03/29/2012 - 23:06

#19

Softhead

Oh god...

I made this in OCTOBER 2011! I have went on to other things now.

Please don't dig this up as I have improved.

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