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My life as a Snarbolax - The End. Sequel coming soon :D!

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Mon, 09/10/2012 - 16:27
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Dreathuxy

This is a little story I will make that will be if I was the Snarbolax. I would explain my backstory of how I became the Snarbolax and how I will act.

Enjoy!

List of Chapters

Chapter 1: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282#comment-528476

Chapter 2 Part 1: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282#comment-529623
Chapter 2 Part 2: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282#comment-533623

Chapter 3 Part 1: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282#comment-534983
Chapter 3 Part 2: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282#comment-536674

Chapter 4: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282#comment-539498

Chapter 5: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282#comment-541956

Chapter 6 Part 1: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=1#comment-544739
Chapter 6 Part 2: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=1#comment-546724

Chapter 7 Part One: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=1#comment-551193
Chapter 7 Part Two: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=1#comment-554701

Chapter 8: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=1#comment-561272

Chapter 9 Part One: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=1#comment-566454
Chapter 9 Part Two: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-584434

Chapter 10 Part One: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-590475
Chapter 10 Part Two: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-596579

Chapter 11 Part One: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-600036
Chapter 11 Part Two: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-607755

Chapter 12: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-614395

Chapter 13: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-622295

Chapter 14 Part One: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-626363
Chapter 14 Part Two: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-631282

Character applications must have:

Name:
Gender:
Personality:
Bio:
Special Skills:

All apps are for wolvers.
No more accepting apps.

Artwork: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/64282?page=2#comment-571227

Mon, 09/10/2012 - 17:03
#1
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Dreathuxy
Chapter 1

Aurora Isles

"Bye Mom! Got to go train!" I said to my alpha wolver mother. My family came from a line of famous alpha wolvers from all over the isles. I myself was starting to grow my brown hide longer and thicker, trait of alpha wolvers.

"Ok Snarby! Be careful!" Yes, my name hapens to be the most embarassing one in the world. All the other wolver pups had good names like Joe and Bob. I was stuck with this weird name that was popular when the clockworks was still being constructed A.K.A. 9 Billion Years ago.

Wolvers were one of the first speecies on Cradle, as the Knights call this land, we were sent by our leader, Lord Wolfenstein, on Cradle's moon, Thanier. We were sent to this planet to stop these red, two-legged creatures from destroying our society. We came in this metal tube thing that I dont know the proper name for. Since then, we lost our touch. We resorted to just living in dens made out of tree bark and natural ones made in caves.

Anyway, I headed for the hunting grounds. I waited for a beast to wander through my spot. A virulisk came out, picking at the feed I placed out earlier. With impecable skill, I snatched it in my jaw and started chewing the hell out of it.

A little fattier than before, I thought as I scurried away to the common grounds.

***

"A Deadly Virulisk?!?!? Snarby, you should be ashamed", my mother said as she washed out my mouth with salamander oil.

Typically, virulisks are a delicacy, with there almost endless supply of meat. But Deadly Virulisks have poison in their veins, which can cause serious mouth problems. You can tell the differece between them, by the green fumes the deadly ones spew out, but I was too excited, this being my first virulisk of the year.

"Time for the volcanic claw", she said.
"Oh no, NOT the volcanic claw, I wont be able to do anything for a week", I protested.

But before I could say anything more, she stabbed me with the claw and I fell asleep from the massive increase of temperature in my blood.

Tue, 09/11/2012 - 11:28
#2
Oroseira's picture
Oroseira
OUCH.

eee....

Wed, 09/12/2012 - 03:24
#3
Artistbma's picture
Artistbma
Interesting. I'll be keeping

Interesting. I'll be keeping an eye on this. ;)

Wed, 09/12/2012 - 03:44
#4
Metaalpha's picture
Metaalpha
I'm beginning to liek dis

This is great, I'll be watching over this thread, looks you have some competition, arti, wonder who can make the better fanfic/story.....

Wed, 09/12/2012 - 15:46
#5
Dreathuxy's picture
Dreathuxy
Chapter 2 Part One

As I dreamt...

I saw Virulisks, lots.

Oh wow! These will make me famous if I capture all of them! I thought.

I bit into each of them, their eyeballs exploding in my maw. Finally, I had all of them stuffed in my giant mouth, sure, I looked ridiculous, but I had all of them.

Suddenly, I smelled something coming up from my mouth.

OH ****! I thought. Deadly Virulisks! I should've known!

Its too late now, Im starting to feel woozy....*Bark* What???? Oh no, the poison...

The last thing my eyes say was a giant wolver standing tall, laughing manaically.

Thu, 09/13/2012 - 00:41
#6
Metaalpha's picture
Metaalpha
Nice chapter

Nice chapter

Sat, 09/15/2012 - 04:20
#7
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Dreathuxy
Side Note

If anyone is wondering what the Volcanic Claw is, its basically a claw from a Volcanic Salamander and it is used as an anesthetic.

Sat, 09/15/2012 - 15:28
#8
Metaalpha's picture
Metaalpha
Ok

Ok

Sun, 09/16/2012 - 09:06
#9
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Echo-Twothree
Me like.

Me like.

Mon, 09/17/2012 - 17:46
#10
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Dreathuxy
Another Side Note

My internet is currently down right now. I'm on a public computer. I hope to get Chapter 2 Part 2 in sometime tomorrow.

Thank you for your patience.

Tue, 09/18/2012 - 02:58
#11
Metaalpha's picture
Metaalpha
lol, your on a public

lol, your on a public computer, how funny, lol, it just makes me laugh for no apparent reason, lol, sad to know ur Internet is down, :(

Tue, 09/18/2012 - 14:46
#12
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Dreathuxy
YAY!

Internet is back up!

Wed, 09/19/2012 - 03:05
#13
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Artistbma
Woo!

Woo!

Wed, 09/19/2012 - 07:13
#14
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Dreathuxy
Chapter 2 Part 2

I woke up, sweating in my bed. Im breathing heavy, I finally realize that Im not dead, so I get up, and go look out the window to check on the time.

The big iron bars that held up the moon were almost invisible, and I could see the faint light of the sun just beginning to rise.

Well, I might as well make myself some breakfast. I took a dead chromalisk and put it on the table. Then, I got a silkwing from a jar and put it in the green, fermented creature.

The chromalisk came back to life, and I wolfed it down.

Suddenly, I heard something, like rustling bushes. I ran outside to see what was happening. It wasnt rustling bushes, it was bushes being cut down.

I had to move fast.

Fri, 09/21/2012 - 15:40
#15
Oroseira's picture
Oroseira
Yikes!

Spiral Knights are attacking! Everyone run!

And I think I predicted correctly with that.

Fri, 09/21/2012 - 16:34
#16
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Dreathuxy
Chapter 3 Part 1

I swerved around the bushes that were hiding me from anyones view. I peeked through a crack in the branches.

OH S**T, I thought.

I looked at the creature that made me want to hurl. It was red, with a light coat around it, and the thing was weilding an ax. I've read about these before. I think they're called thwakers. The thwaker growled at the bushes it was trying to cut down.

Heh heh, EVERYONE knows that you can cut down bushes with an ax! I thought. I barked at my own (crappy) joke.

Bad decision. The thwaker turned around, the light reflecting from its goggles. I rushed it. It dodged, tried to use this red and white round capsule, I caught it with my lower-left paw. It screeched as it tried to swing its ax at me.

I pounced on him, confusing the thwaker. Before it could recover, I bit out half of the poor things head.

The body was flinching for the slightest moment, then stopped.

I had to report this to the council.

Sat, 09/22/2012 - 06:39
#17
Oroseira's picture
Oroseira
Epic!

Pwning a thwacker like that...

:3

Sun, 09/23/2012 - 15:31
#18
Dreathuxy's picture
Dreathuxy
bump

chapter 3 part 2 will be out sometime tomorrow (or tuesday depending on my schedule).

Mon, 09/24/2012 - 03:25
#19
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Weegeeftws
Holy.

Have my Cheese. All of it! *throws Cheese at Dreathuxy*

~The Mighty Cheese Knight; WeeGee

Mon, 09/24/2012 - 12:40
#20
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Dreathuxy
CHEESE!

*om nom nom nom nom nom om nom murf snargle snarf nom num*

Mon, 09/24/2012 - 13:21
#21
Fallconn's picture
Fallconn
FALCON PUNCH!

I see a flaw....Snarbolax has poison resist >_>

Mon, 09/24/2012 - 15:33
#22
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The-Alt-Oftruth
At Fallcon

This is before Snarbolax becomes his current awesome self, he is currently just some wolver with some archaic name.

Mon, 09/24/2012 - 17:07
#23
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Dreathuxy
Chapter 3 Part 2

I laid the headless gremlin on the table.

"Snarby, how did you get this?" one member of the council said.

"Well, I saw it cutting down bushes, so I bit its head off" I said in reply.

The council broke out into murmur, and huddled together to keep any eavesdroppers from hearing. The head of the council, Lord Iric, or as I called him Lord Fatty, said their answer to the gremlin cutting down our bushes.

"It seems that we are trying to be attacked by the gremlin race", Fatty said. "We must build up a militia, each male wolver past the age of five winters must enlist".

CRAP

I didnt want to enlist. I had no fighting skills at all. All I knew how to do was use my claws to scratch other wolvers and bite chromalisks heads off. Okay, mabye I DID have fighting skills, but how would that stand up to the Great Colony? How would I fight? Would I die? Will I turn into a phsyco, craxy beast? Only time will tell.

Thu, 09/27/2012 - 16:52
#24
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Dreathuxy
Note

Mega Blockbuster Epic Long Chapter 4 will be out this weekend!

Fri, 09/28/2012 - 11:02
#25
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The-Alt-Oftruth
Glug Glug Glug

So long and so cool.

Sat, 09/29/2012 - 12:29
#26
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Dreathuxy
Chapter 4

There I stood in a line of disiplined wolvers.

"...AND YOU ARE GOING TO MARCH RIGHT INTO THE GREAT COLONY AND BITE TINKINZAR'S HEAD OFF OR ELSE IM TAKING AWAY ALL THE VIRULISKS FROM YOUR MEALS DO YOU GOT IT SOLDIERS?!?!?!?!"

We all barked in reply. General Tuitt walked over to me, examining my below-standard physical features.

"I expect better from you Snarby. Look at yourself! You're a discrace to alpha wolvers!"

Some wolvers giggled and barked at me. Tuitt started his yelling again.

"JOE! BOB! BILLY! DROP AND GIVE ME 20!"

Joe, Bob, and Billy let out sighs, and followed Tuitt's orders. Suddenly, a bell rung.

"OK LADIES, LETS SEE HOW YOU DO AT THE OBSTACLE COURSE!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!"

CRAP. I was terrible at obstacle courses. I had speed and power, but no agility, thats why I can almost never beat a wolver at wrestling. They all run circles around me.

This was going to be a long day.

***

I woke up to the sound of a horn. I sat up and yawned. I was tired. My standard issue military armor wasnt exactly comftorable. Oh well, mabye I'll feel better after a nice breakfast. I got out of my quarters, and looked out of the window. We were moving rather slowly today.

After Iric's order to build a militia, all wolvers started building a vehicle of some sort. We faltered at the beginning, but we slowly began to remember how to craft things out of metal. The end result was impressive. A huge crawler, the size of Fatty's mansion. All members of the militia boarded it, and began our long journey down to the Great Colony.

Oh yeah, breakfast. I slumped down to the lower deck, finally coming to the kitchen. The chef was busy right now, making a chromalisk cake for one soldier's birthday.

"Hey chef," I said contemply.

"Why hello soldier, I suppose that you're looking for a meal, arent you?" the chef said in reply.

"Yeah, do you have a chromalisk egg omlete?" I asked.

"Great timing! I just took one off the stove!" the chef said cheerfuly. He handed me a work of art. A perfectly cooked yellow and white omlete, with a side of silkwings. I ate it happily, enjoying every bite of it.

"Thanks chef," I said in a happier mood than before.

"You're welcome, and may I ask why aren't you out on the roof soldier?"

"Uhh...roof?"

"Yes Tuitt is giving the soldiers a presentation."

Why am I so stupid? Any wolver who missed a presentation got thrown off the crawler in a candlestick keep. I had to make sure that he didn't notice that I wasn't there.

I excused myself from the kitchen, and made my way to the roof. Tuitt was busy explaining something. I scurried swiftly and silently to the back row. I listened.

"...arriving at the Great Colony at nightfall. Give me some disipline. This is going to get ugly."

Tuitt is right. This is going to get ugly.

Sat, 09/29/2012 - 13:37
#27
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The-Alt-Oftruth
Not as long as expected.

Not so long as I expected, but tastier than a bull chromalisk cake with a side of kelpto salad, and a silkwing mousse.

Sat, 09/29/2012 - 14:13
#28
Dreathuxy's picture
Dreathuxy
Meh

I tried to make it as long as one of Art's chapters, but I dont think I made it.

Sat, 09/29/2012 - 16:24
#29
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Artistbma
Good job.

Nice chapter, looking forward to the next one.

Sat, 09/29/2012 - 18:29
#30
Metaalpha's picture
Metaalpha
@ artistbma Same here, can't

@ artistbma
Same here, can't wait!

Sat, 09/29/2012 - 18:40
#31
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Dreathuxy
@Artistbma

Thanks!

Sun, 09/30/2012 - 13:15
#32
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Arzar
Application.

Name: Zachariah.

Gender: Male.
Personality: A quirky and fun-loving Alpha Wolver, Zachariah is very timid and shy and was always teased about it. He could never find the strength to fight back and would always feel alone.

Bio: Zachariah was born a small Alpha Wolver, raised by his father to hunt. Zachariah was below average and his father constantly shunned him for it. He was, however smarter than the average Wolver and would lay traps to kill his prey instead of actually fighting them. He was raised in the same pack as Snarby and would always watch him get teased. He did talk to Snarby one or twice and tried to be his friend.

Zachariah was petrified when he heard he had to go into the militia. His Father was convinced it would whip him into shape so he was forced to go into the militia.

Special Skills: Being a smarter Wolver he can lay traps.

Sun, 09/30/2012 - 14:01
#33
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Dreathuxy
I love that guy

Hes in.

Sun, 09/30/2012 - 15:30
#34
Metaalpha's picture
Metaalpha
I went for something a little different

Name: Bradstone

Gender: male
Personality: Bradstone is quiet, he has a furious temper, although he is average intelligence, he can rip off a ghostmanes head as soon as it appears. Fast, strong, that's all in him, he is a tough neck wolver, but unlike others...

Bio: Bradstone wasn't always quiet and furious, when he was a little wolver, a group of gremlin thwackers invaded the village, they killed numerous wolvers, including his dad and best friend, he got furious, he killed every last gremlin and only left their eyes, he was still mad, so he destroyed the village, then he left, a walking lonely soul, he headed north, he soon came across a gate, no monsters, just a big guy selling pieces of paper and 4 weird looking gates, he killed the big guy and ate his papers ( he was that hungry! ) he continued on to look at the gates, he saw a key that looked like the gates, he used the key to go on the gate, he soon arrived in a cold palace, he fought his way through striking fear throughout his opponents, he even beat the big queen! As he stumbled upon the swarm, he felt a sudden urge to leave, when he tried to bite the swarm, it overtook him, and he left, now.... Bradstone is an alpha void wolver, he wanted to join the military so he joined up, since he had nothing else to do...they didn't accept him so he chopped off the lieutenants head then they accepted him...

Special skills: he is able to go into an anger mode, when he is severely hurt, he kills almost everything on his path and everything around him, he also has 3x the strength of a normal alpha wolver since he is void and will take orders from high ranks, he is Also two times faster then a normal alpha wolver and has a very good sense of smell

Tue, 10/02/2012 - 20:40
#35
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Deltira
Application.

Name: Elira

Gender: Female

Personality: Elira is one very moody Ash Tail, with her peers finding her to be rather quizzical and indecipherable. Elira's visage is usually covered with clouds of dust and ash which singes those who touch it. While she in general is seen as very strange, rumors claim that she is in fact, incredibly intelligent, and participates in the most dangerous and clandestine missions of the Ash Tail clan.

Bio: Born into a prestigious family of Ash Tails, Elira was put under extreme pressure and competition from her siblings as to who would be the next head of the family. Though the siblings all loved each other, they were put under pressure by each other's talents and skills, with Elira being the intelligent one. However, all that became useless when the her family was attacked by a mysterious assailant. Elira, with her skills managed to fight off the assailant until she was able to find an escape route. She wandered around the clockworks until she found Snarby, who, upon seeing her unkempt appearance and injuries, asked that she become part of his pack. While Elira remains safe, she has gone a little klutz over the fate of her siblings, which remain unknown.

Special Skills: Elira is able to manipulate dust and ash. She can use it to create a fog which can hide her, or create solid objects from it, like stairs and statues. (She can create clouds of dust to use as smokescreen, can create solid objects which allow her to create clones to distract the enemy, etc)

Mon, 10/01/2012 - 12:59
#36
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Oroseira
:D

Time to apply. Since I accepted you twice in Captured By Gremlins, now it's my turn to give you a double app. Also, because I noted that a city had vanished in the first one's bio, I'll give you some info on Electropolis:
Electropolis is a large city located close to emberlight. Populated only with voltails, it has a population of 30,000 and is known to be one of the largest wolver cities. However, it vanished a year before the swarm became known. Since then, it's obtained legendary status.

Name: Derelict

Gender: Female

Personality: Derelict is morally depressed over some mysterious incident, but is known to enjoy the spooky stuff. (Especially watching the Paranormal Activity movies at midnight.)

Bio: Derelict is a voltail who is fascinated about the paranormal. Most wolvers report her being around places that have been abandoned or decommissioned. She was quirky finding out about the ghosts who called those places home. But ever since the Electropolis incident that literally made the city of 30,000 voltails vanish she became depressed since her sister and parents disappeared with the city.

She still ponders over how Electropolis vanished. Some of her theories include gremlin activity, destruction of the biodome the city was built in, or the most strangest of all, theories involving the swarm. She has a bad memory and relies on something crashing onto her for her to remember. (This could be a referring plot joke where an apple falls on her head.)

Special Skills: Derelict can see the paranormal. Normal wolvers cannot see ghosts. It's rare for a wolver to be born with the ability to see the paranormal because it's a birth defect.

Name: Frosti

Gender: Male

Personality: Frosti is a kind, compassionate and caring frostifur. He searches for more new wolvers to be friends with, yet has a cold hatred for Maulos and what happened to his home.

Bio: Frosti belonged to a large family of frostifurs and lived in a large den before Maulos arrived. He fled the den as Maulos attacked. He is quite scarred over the incident and is willing to cause his end at any time, yet found himself being quite compassionate for other wolvers. His liking of everyone gave him the nickname "Everyone's Best Friend". Since then, Frosti has been willing to join the military so he can exact revenge on Maulos.

Special Skills: Frosti can turn water to ice with a special bite, (It's easy to notice because his teeth gain the texture of ice.) and can thaw it by making an "X" in the ice with his claws.

So there you go, Dreath. Two good characters to add, one with a silly plot gag that could be used.

Mon, 10/01/2012 - 14:26
#37
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Tevokkia
...

Just letting you know that if you still intend to use the whole story as an entry, it will be a collaboration if you accept apps, which would mean that you could only have two accepted characters and would have to work out with those character's creators whether or not they got a portion of any prize you won. If you just wanted to use the portion before you started doing apps, then that's fine.

Mon, 10/08/2012 - 07:24
#38
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Players-Guest
My app.

Name:Snorbi

Gender:Male

Personality:As a cousin to snarby,he is very happy at times,but can be angered easily{he has rage buffer}.

Bio:Snorbi is a ash tail,who liked to eat salamander instead of virulisk,but if he eats volcanic claw:he gets too fired up.
Special skills:He can easily burn ashes to ash tails,he can also set gremlins on fire:if you see the embers on his teeth,good bye...

[Note:Please don't make him eat deadly virulisk claw.

Yes,he is a Vog cub

Tue, 10/02/2012 - 13:17
#39
Dreathuxy's picture
Dreathuxy
responses

@Metaalpha - Accepted. Great app. love the idea of a void wolver.

@Blishtar - Accepted. Great varitey in the speecies of wolvers and for getting me an A+ in Vocabulary class.

@Phantom - Accepted. Didnt think that I would accept voltails and frostifurs, but you wowed me.

@Tev - Use Ch 1-4 for contest.

@Yruki - Put more detail into your application, sounds a bit like a vog cub to me. I look over it one more time after you have made the edit.

Tue, 10/02/2012 - 16:51
#40
Oroseira's picture
Oroseira
@Dreath

:D
Thanks! And I chose Voltails and Frostifurs because they have some OP statuses they give. Look out, gremlins.

Wed, 10/03/2012 - 04:11
#41
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Echo-Twothree
I may apply sometime later.

I may apply sometime later. This is interesting. Are you going to accept all species of wolvers?

Wed, 10/03/2012 - 04:29
#42
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Echo-Twothree
Application

Name: Arzaki

Gender: Male

Personality: Arzaki tends to be pretty funny and almost always in a good mood. Whenever someone he assumes can't take a hit, he tries to protect that person. This means back flipping over the weapon about to hit his (Arzaki's) comrade, dragging his comrade out of the way, flipping on the attacker's head, and then breaking the attacker's neck. Yep, kid's crazy.

Bio: Arzaki may be the strangest wolver you've ever seen. His father was an ash tail and his mother was a normal wolver, so Arzaki is basically a normal wolver mixed with ash tail. He has the abilities of his father and the colors of his mother. A normal looking wolver with fiery teeth and claws. Craziness.

Special Skills: Since Arzaki does have the abilities of an ash tail, his teeth and claws have a reddish tinge to them. When he gets really angry, his eyes start lightly glowing, his teeth warm up and let off heat and light like lava, his claws practically boil, his fur starts smoking and lets off extreme amounts of heat. Meet him like this, and you're dead.

Wed, 10/03/2012 - 16:27
#43
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Artistbma
Name: Morpheus Gender:

Name: Morpheus
Gender: Male
Personality: Slow, easy going. Doesn't talk unless he has to. He is the type that is underestimated, but get him mad and you aren't gonna be happy.
Bio: Morpheus has been alive for many years. His parents died long ago of natural causes. Morpheus is the last alive of his race. When Morpheus was young, he learned the wonders of Cradle. It has always been his mission to discover the true meaning of Cradle and its history.
Special Skills: Well, hes the last one of his race because he's the last sleep inducing wolver (Species: Sleptofur. Note I made this species up) in existence. Basically, his name gives you most of his info. ;)

Thu, 10/04/2012 - 17:33
#44
Dreathuxy's picture
Dreathuxy
Chapter 5

I layed awake in my bed, breathing heavily. The sounds of gears and steam inside the crawler made a makeshift lullaby, but not for me. I wanted to explore the ship more, but I dont want to be caught by Tuitt.

I had to go.

I quietly slid past the war room, deeper and deeper into the crawler, and soon I had found the lower deck. There was a small door at the end of a long hallway.

Whoosh

Did something just move?

Whoosh

The next thing I knew was that I was on the ground.

"Who are you and what is your business here?!?", A stern voice said.

"I...I was just exploring the crawler", I finally stammered.

"Well then, I guess this is a cause for celebration", said the voice.

Celebration? As soon as the word came into my head, the lights flickered on.

"Well, pleased to meet you. Im Bradstone, and this is my team: Elira, Derelict, Frosti, and Zachariah. Hey guys! We got a visitor!"

Immediately, A bunch of wolvers sprang up to greet me: A voltail, a frostifur, an ash tail, and Bradstone...what was he?

"Excuse me, Bradstone?", I said.

"Oh and what was your name?", Bradstone replied quickly.

"Uhh, Snarby", I answered, "and I wanted to ask you a question..."

"SNARBY, THE KING OF SHADOWS!", they all shouted.

So thats what my name meant. Sounded kind of cool.

"Oh, and Snarby, you wanted to ask me something?", Bradstone inquired.

"Oh yeah, what kind of wolver are you?", I questioned.

"Im Bradstone the void wolver, fresh from the shadow lair", he replied.

"Shadow liar?"

"Yes, a place deep down inside the planet, filled with all sorts of horrible creatures. I ran away to live with the true wolvers."

Oh wow, I've heard of horrible creatures, but not the ones that bradstone described in his later statement. When he was finished, I focused on Elira, who was staring as intently at me as I was staring at her.

"Snarby, I think we have met before", she stammered.

"We did? Oh yeah, how are you felling after that...um....incedint?", I said. My voice lost confidence a little bit after every word I said to her.

Suddenly, Frosti interjected.

"Well, I hope you like staying here, because its pitch black upstairs and youre going to have to stay the night. Tuitt and his Commanders are patrolling the crawler at this time of night", he said.

This was going good so far. I like these people. I think that were going to make a very good team.

Thu, 10/04/2012 - 13:30
#45
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Oroseira
@Chapter 5

I notice a few problems there.

-"Lair" is misspelled.

-"Frosti" is shown as "Frosty". It's meant to be the name Frosti, not Frosty! U_U

-Derelict doesn't have a speaking line in this chapter. She really shouldn't be mute.

Thu, 10/04/2012 - 17:30
#46
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Dreathuxy
responses

Echo - He sounds a bit OP to me. Sorry not accepted.

Art - In

Thu, 10/04/2012 - 17:32
#47
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Dreathuxy
@Phantom

Thanks for the errors. I will change that ASAP. I do plan for Derelict to have an important role in the story later on. BE PATIENT!!!

Fri, 10/05/2012 - 01:49
#48
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Deltira
Application - Another One! x3

Name: Nox
Gender: Male
Personality: Nox is the polar opposite of the typical wolver, who would be full of vigor. He is almost always found to be in a state solitude, and is considered by his peers to be extremely taciturn and introverted due to his quiet nature, and his almost unhealthy attachment to darkness. There are, however, rare occasions when he is seen with other Wolvers, and displays a sense of humor and intelligence, though most of this usually occurs only in the dark, hence it being a rare occasion. There are also rumors that he would kill for a biscuit.
Bio: Not much is known of Nox, as he rarely talks, and other Wolvers so far have found him too intimidating to dare talk to him. All that is known is that he is of a rare species : Nox is a Dusker. The Duskers were a race of wolvers living in seclusion in the darkness of the Gloaming Wildwoods, with only rumors passing around of the existence of these races. The day the Duskers were finally discovered by the other Wolver brethren, the Duskers were proven to be apathetic and indifferent to the occurrences in the clockworks, and very solitary. The Duskers never did like fighting, and only wanted to rest under the shadows, thus their ascension as creatures of rare sightings. However, the Duskers disappeared yet again one day from an unknown threat, and not much is known of the Duskers today, as Nox was only a baby when he was discovered left in the middle of the Gloaming Wildwoods, and no concrete Dusker sightings have been made up to date.
Special Skills: Nox can create dark fogs which is described by others as extremely Noxious fumes, and becomes sharper in Darkness.

* Spelling Error here : "We did? Oh yeah, how are you felling after that...um....incedint?"
It's incident. You switched e and i around :3

** Elira has clouds around her face so her stare shouldn't be able to be seen, unless you had it that she didn't have a cloud at that time, as I did say "Usually". :p

@ Artistbma : Wouldn't Hypnos be better if you were going for sleep? Morpheus is the god of dreams. :p

Fri, 10/05/2012 - 12:40
#49
Dreathuxy's picture
Dreathuxy
uhhh

In my story, The GLoaming Wildwoods do not exist yet.
Consider revising.

Fri, 10/05/2012 - 12:58
#50
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Artistbma
Meh. I just like the name Morpheus.

And also, if you're gonna describe him later on, I envision Morpheus as a purple alpha wolver, the light brown fur being purple, and the dark brown fur being indigo.

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