And static comes after woorrrdddss.

*Mayday.

"Grammer was pretty good. It was just a little short."

I was about to question this post until I looked more closely at it. The grammAR was not good. There were no quotation marks used when someone was speaking, the spelling was off, other grammatical marks such as apostrophes were missing, and as usual it'd seem capitalization was missing. Another thing to add was the way that actions are added into the story. I can understand the effect trying to be played off but when you can't stay consistent it makes it all look messy. At certain points quotation marks denote action which is bad in more than one way since they should be used for dialogue while in the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs parentheses are used.

Apart from the action problem I just described I'm pretty sure all of this was relative in the last making of the fanfic.

Um... yeah. Anyway you're the one who said it was pretty good, I'm not really following here.

Encouraging someone to keep writing and lieing to them about the skill level of their grammar usage are two completely different things. With enough "encouragement" there will be no improvement and the poor kid won't understand why since people like yourself told him the grammar was good. Its funny that'd you'd act like you know what I would do when you can't even see that you were wrong despite us being now after the fact. I didn't criticize anyone or offer any input, I merely corrected your post. I had no intention of posing in here as I posted in his last story which, if you read closely, you'll see I mentioned in my last post while stating it had the same problems.

"keep it up. It's good to see more people writing." Halisi was writing before any of the authors with currently active topics have. Again, reading closely would show these things.

Finally yes I have quite a bit of knowledge about writing. Am I perfect? Of course not. There are plenty of times I don't know whether I should keep using commas, or to throw hyphens into the sentence, or if I should create a new sentence entirely. There are words I can't train myself to spell correctly because I've spelled them the way I do for so long ("college" was one of these as it lacks the "D" that similar sounding word "knowledge" has). I spell words in ways that may be classified as technically incorrect such as "judgement" (Doesn't need the first "E") and "theatre" (I believe this is the British spelling, should be spelled "theater"). Notice however I'm not commenting on anything like that when I try to help out the author to write their stories better. I will jump when the grammatical mistake is simple; capitalize the first word of a sentence, capitalize names, use quotations when someone is speaking, and so on and so forth. I'll also help when I notice something that isn't quite as simple such as a switch of PoV. I distinctly remember helping Halisi with There VS Their VS They're in the last story.

And just for the sake of responding to your post, I actually DO write. The other day I had counted and I think I had 11 different series of stories, some containing more than one book.

Well the hole here is that Gremlin Chatter is for "non-Spiral Knights" talk while this stil pertains to Spiral Knights, albeit barely. The only thing I really see odd about this topic is that it exists since it would make more sense to just put all of this into the thread where the story is posted. I don't quite understand why people don't just constantly update their first post with the chapters so that people can find them more easily. If there's a limit on space you can use its not hard to post 5-10 empty posts or so in your topic to use as reserved space.

Just let it go I guess since I'm sure someone would have seen it and moved it by now if it were too bothersome.

Ok you really need to get over yourself. Again, if you read ANYTHING closely you'd have been constantly hinted at the fact that Halisi originally wrote this story about a month ago. This is a restart of that story. Blacksword even commented in there yet seems to have magically forgotten. http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/13881 so um *ahem* get over yourself. Really, calm down. I'm really sick of playing mediator here and having to correct a bunch of conceited children.

In addition, yes its only you. Figuring out what was happening was insanely easy considering the use of the action thing that I keep mentioning. The only thing that may be confusing is the last lines of gibberish which will be explained in the next chapter.

@Yoshipatrol
It's not that I want to start arguing again but I am curious as to where you got the
idea that I have "magically forgotten" halisi's story came first?

If you're referring to when I said "It's good to see more people writing"
It was directed to everyone who's writing and I don't see how you think
that means he did or didn't start first.

Anyways, i'm really not in the mood for an argument (and have never been in the mood for one)
so I am very sorry for the confusion in my statements and I will try to make them
as clear as I possibly can.