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-[Fan-Fic]-Cradle: Two Paths Chapter 11(Interactive Story)VOTING ENDS WITH 10 VOTES

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Tue, 03/04/2014 - 16:27
#301
Pipipipipi's picture
Pipipipipi
The 4th wall shall be shattered!!!

I think that everyone thinks that Psych is going to make something happen to save Nick and Eve in the story so Will wins without consiquence

Besides, the cultist is probably going to try to kill Eve and Nick anyway if Will tells them their secrets :P

Tue, 03/04/2014 - 16:38
#302
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Good Stories...

Good stories never have a truly happy ending. Adults and teens know that the villain is always smarter than that.

Tue, 03/04/2014 - 17:03
#303
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

It's not that we don't like him. We're (possibly) sacrificing Eve as well if B is chosen. It's that we don't want the Cult to learn the secrets of the Order. Not everyone can be saved.

"Sometimes, by taking a life, others can be preserved." -Raiden 2018
Just don't take that literally, Psych. I do not want to see any of the main characters or even one of the commanders die just yet.

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 13:36
#304
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Votes...Eh?

Two more votes? Anyone?

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 13:38
#305
Creeperlucario's picture
Creeperlucario
No... point...

Psych... there is... no point... in delaying... B won... 6 is... an instant... win, 2... more votes... won't change... anything...

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 13:38
#306
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Sigh

Very well, commence writing.

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 13:43
#307
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

Creeper, what's wrong?

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 13:49
#308
Robo-Drilldigger's picture
Robo-Drilldigger
Well...

I know what's wrong with Creeper. It happened in her RP which she put in the graveyard because Creeper got the lore wrong. Someone told Creeper which made her enter this currently lonely state. Creeper will return to normal soon. (This usually lasts between 2 days to a full week.) If you want to check, look for "The Swarm's Final Stand" for proof.

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 13:52
#309
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart of Repetition

*Starts to bring out pitchfork*

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 13:58
#310
Robo-Drilldigger's picture
Robo-Drilldigger
@Valorai

Seriously? You are bringing out a pitchfork on me? Why? It if was Psychnade, you should have mentioned that...

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 14:00
#311
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Patience man!

It's only been a day or two since the last chapter was released! >:l
You make chapters in like 5 days or longer.

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 14:40
#312
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart of Valor.

*Licks pitchfork*

Wed, 03/05/2014 - 16:58
#313
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

Oh right, I remember that.

*takes out torch*

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 13:49
#314
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Before I Go On...

I need to know who to kill in this chapter. Eve? Or Nick? I'm sorry...You guys chose this.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 13:52
#315
Creeperlucario's picture
Creeperlucario
Eurgh...

Nick... please don't... harm... Eve...

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 13:54
#316
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
How about...

One of the new bosses in the app thread?

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 13:54
#317
Trolololololololoe's picture
Trolololololololoe
Who to chose...

Well, that's obvious! Nick, sorry about this but we can't let the lady die.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 13:57
#318
Robo-Drilldigger's picture
Robo-Drilldigger
It's like an unavoidable trap...

I don't want any to die but in this case, Nick, you have to die I am afraid.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 14:07
#319
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart of Valor.

No regrets. Kill nick.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 14:41
#320
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

I'm serious. Introduce either my boss or Robo's boss instead of killing one of them. How would that work, I'm assuming like a rumble that interrupts Nick's execution and then the boss bursting through the wall or the Cultists go out to check the cause, either way giving the heroes chance to escape.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 14:43
#321
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Bosses

Vilitra will come, but I'm afraid at least one of our honored companions will die*.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 14:47
#322
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

Okay. I really just wanted to delay their deaths for as long as possible, but as I said, sometimes we gotta sacrifice someone for the greater good.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 14:49
#323
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
I know it's hard.

I know it's hard to let go of someone sometimes, but I'm afraid one of them will just die*.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 14:56
#324
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

Why are you putting a * right after "die" and before the "."?

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 15:06
#325
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
I Dun't Knowwe Whatchur Turkin Abutte

idk :)

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 15:13
#326
Robo-Drilldigger's picture
Robo-Drilldigger
Oh no...

Psychnade, I have a bad feeling what you are thinking! I am thinking that you are going to kill Nick first then kill Eve no matter what or you are going to create a diversion so no-one dies... Doubt the second one...

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 15:18
#327
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

Don't kill Eve. I'd prefer if Creeper doesn't go into an even worse state than ze already is.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 20:16
#328
Aekun
Aekun can sacrifice himself,

Aekun can sacrifice himself, if ya like.

Otherwise, Nick.

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 23:09
#329
Colray's picture
Colray
well....

........….............................................................................bye.........Nick.......…..............):...................I...........like.........my........gunner...........but............Eve.......is.........more............important............to..........the..............story.............Might.......make........Cario...........feel........better...............tho............if...........she............didn't.............die...........................at least make Nick go out in a good way............

Thu, 03/06/2014 - 23:11
#330
Colray's picture
Colray
ps

@Valorai: what do you have against my characters :(

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 06:25
#331
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart of Murder

•_•)
( •_•)>⌐■-■
(⌐■_■)

Good night, Nick.

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 06:48
#332
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

*sarcastic clap*

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 07:18
#333
Aekun
Why not just have Aekun

Why not just have Aekun heroically sacrifice himself?

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 07:55
#334
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart of Valor.

•_•)
( •_•)>⌐■-■
(⌐■_■)

How about no?

Nick needs to die.

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 11:24
#335
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

How would he sacrifice himself? He's tied up with Mech and Doomskull somewhere else.

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 11:37
#336
Hazardous-Anomaly's picture
Hazardous-Anomaly
Uhh huh

Meanwhile, Six is apparently at home, cooking up some bacon pancakes

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 13:12
#337
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Nick's Last Stand

Nick won't die like scum. He gets a hero's sendoff, a grand last stand against enemy forces, shooting them down one by one, until his ammo runs out and his fists become bloody and bruised, until he draws last breath, until the blade comes down, just for his teammates.

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 14:51
#338
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Chapter 10: When the Pieces Begin to Fall Pt. 1

Will looked at the broken forms of his teammates tied and beaten all around him. He saw fire in their eyes, and it sent a message to Will:

'Tell them anything and I'll kill you.' He heard them all say in unison, whispering into his mind. He know what he had to do. He mustered up all the courage left in his soul, and uttered, with complete conviction:

"I'll never talk." Will said. "I'll never betray the Order." Rodric chuckled.

"But you would be as so quick to betray your friends?" Rodric mused. "That, is extraordinary." He took out his long ebony case, and opened it. It revealed an array of scalpels, knives, and saws. Will cringed.

"You've put your friend's lives in my hands, Mr. Soran. Not wise." A deranged smile spread across his face, and he put a pair of crusty red gloves on.

"These gloves used to be black." He laughed to himself. "Now, we'll start with the Gunner. Lets see if he can still shoot without any fingers." He spun a knife in his hand, but just before he could finish bringing it down, a titanic explosion shook the whole room, maybe even the whole city. Rodric dropped his knife, and swore.

"What the hell?!" A disciple ran into the room.

"The containment field is failing, something is upsetting the balance!" She cried. "It's going to break free!" Another explosion shook the whole compound once more, and Will chain broke. He instantly rushed at Rodric, and got him in a headlock. Will picked up one of the knives scattered about the floor, and lifted it to the old man's eye.

"Alright, you old fool." Will seethed. "Where did you put our weapons, and how the hell do we get out of here?" Rodric laughed, and pointed to the incinerator to the left.

"Your weapons are there." Rodric laughed, gasping for breath. Will tightened his grip, rendering the old man unconscious. He took the weapon he found strapped to his belt, a hulking shadowy sword, and an Obsidian Carbine. The sword was too heavy for his liking, so he gave it to Doomskull.

"I can't fight as well now, you know that, right?" He looked at the bloody lump of flesh covered in bandages that used to be Doomskull's right hand.

"Neither can I," Will replied. "My head still hurts from that concussion." As he cut the rest of his teammates down from their restraints, he gave them the obsidian weapons he found laying about the room.

"Make do with these," Will said. "I don't know what the hell made these weapons, but it's the best we've got right now. Move!" They ran through the dark halls, as the explosions got more frequent and violent. When they finally got back to the city surface, what they saw was unimaginably horrifying. They were at the gate of one of the giant castles found throughout the city. The cave walls were cracking and pouring fire and lava. Buildings were crumbling and getting swallowed by waves of fire pumping steadily from the ground. Will looked around for a way through the fiery tempest, but found no clear way to the staircase.

Sheogorath marched out of the dark hallway behind them, and the knight actually roared at them. Like he was more beast than man, if there was any man left at all. The knight clad in black rushed at them with speed astounding for his size, and swung his Jalovec at them. Doomskull blocked the hulking blade, pushing with all his might. Their attacker did not falter, and kicked Doomskull in the chest, throwing him backwards. Will fired a few mags at Sheogorath, to avail.

Sheogorath brought his sword into the air, and it narrowly missed Will's head, striking his arm instead. He could feel the bones in his left arm snap, and fell to one knee. As the killing blow was about to be delivered, Will rolled to one side, the Jalovec now stuck in the dirt. Will brought the knight's face down on his knee, and stunned Sheogorath with a heavy right haymaker. Sheogorath, now recovering, put up his own fists, ready to take on the knight commander and his teammates. Sheogorath has fought tougher things.

____________

The Father sat patiently on his obsidian throne, the tremors of the earth did not trouble him. He spoke to the empty air:

"Why do you stand in the shadows, my child?" He crooned. "Shadow is where Sight is the strongest."

A tall woman stepped out of the darkness, her tainted Valkyrie Mail were as soundless as her steps. A black Hood of Devotion sat on her head.

"Forgive me," She said. "I only wished to stay unseen should any attacker come to harm you. Not that they could even get close."

"Vigilant as always, aren't we Praetoria? Then I have a job for you."

____________

Will was wearing down, his fists now raw from punching. Sheogorath on the other hand, did not tire. And soon, Will would fall, he knew that. Eve tried to land a sword strike on him, but she was knocked to the side like a rag doll. Will narrowed his gaze, and punched harder than usual, at the enemy's stomach. Sheogorath staggered back, the lights in his hood flaring red. Blood seeped from his hood.

A column of fire erupted from the ground, separating them from the cultist. On the rooftop, Praetoria watched. The wings on her back fluttering in anxiety to kill. But instead she took out an obsidian obelisk, and called something forth. Something vile. A shadowy portal appeared in the ground, and a tall slender shadow came out. It was a shadow with hands, and and three purple lights for eyes.

"Oh, scrap..."

It was a squadron of Harvesters. More Apocrean cultists showed up on the scene, and they were surrounded.

"We can't fight them all!" Doomskul yelled.

"You don't have to." Said a new voice. They were unsure of who the voice came from, but then it soon became clear.

"Nick, you don't have to do this, we'll fight them together!" Aekun yelled. MechTeka nodded in agreement. Nick shook his head.

"I'm not new to holding off astounding forces alone. You guys are more valuable to the Order than I am, go now!" He barked at them.

They slowly backed off, while Nick loaded his two Carbines.

"Alright. Let's dance."

No choice here, just wait for Pt. 2. Nick's final stand.

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 14:58
#339
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Praetoria

Well, she seemed to just appear, but she will have lots of importance from now to the end. Just you wait till I tell you who The Father, Praetoria, Sheogorath, and Rodric really are!

Name: Praetoria
Appearance: Hood of Devotion and a black/purple Valkyrie Mail.
Gear: A modified, tainted version of Final Flourish. Shows how deep the corruption has gone.
Powers:
Summoning-Can summon a Harvester or Harvesters
Flight- Self explanatory.
Mark of the Fallen- A huge Apocrean Sigil will appear in the ground, and columns of fire will erupt everywhere.
History: Unknown, is The Father's second in command. Some say she reminds them of P{Redacted}, but eh, who knows >:D
Personality: Loyal as hell, merciless, cynical, and clever. She will not hesitate to cut down those who get in her day or try to stop the Cult or The Father.

EDIT: This wasn't my best chapter either :l

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 15:55
#340
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
Bump

New Chapter? *Koff koff*

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 16:41
#341
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
Oooh Man....

Vlitra has arrived....

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 17:33
#342
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Heart of Valor.

*Stares at pitchfork*

Great chapter!

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 19:41
#343
Colray's picture
Colray
"Allright, Let's dance"

O.o dis chapter was awesome. That last line sounds like another ending line of another SK Writer's most recent post...

*coughpsychodestroyercough*

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 22:00
#344
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Colray

You mean this?

:'(

...I know you didn't... *sniff*

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 14:35
#345
Colray's picture
Colray
close...

Not really, I'm talking bout this amazing guy. the very last words on page 2. In case I screwed up the link

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 16:41
#346
Sonosuke's picture
Sonosuke
#Sonosuks

"Shut up and dance with me."

Best chapter end ever.

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 11:25
#347
Colray's picture
Colray
Codename=epic

Yeah Psycho did an amazing job... Wait Psychnade? Do you know Psychodestroyer....

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 14:00
#348
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
No...

I don't, sorry...But his writing does look pretty awesome, I should say.

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 14:37
#349
Feline-Grenadier's picture
Feline-Grenadier
'Tis true!

In the days when I was but a young la(d/ss), there were the great leviathans of literature and writing, powerhouses far beyond our levels (well, maybe Vivideus might be on par with them)! They were the great writers of old renown, sons and daughters of literate people.

Anyhow, with that old tlak aside, I will say that the Treasure Vault back then was slower-paced, but they had quantity over quality. Besides the horrid grammar-cancer fanfict that came by on occasion, this place was for a lot of literature!

A LOT!

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 14:55
#350
Psychnade's picture
Psychnade
The Glory!

Man, I wish I had come on earlier...back then I was Arcsolus, but I hardly posted on my fan-fic and even then I was not the writer I am now...

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