Spiral Knights - Spiral Knights RP: Broken ///// Discussion and App Submission Thread ///// ACCEPTING APPS!

Spiral Knights RP: Broken ///// Discussion and App Submission Thread ///// ACCEPTING APPS!

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Fri, 03/07/2014 - 16:24

Sho-Marufuji

-Okay, okay, okay. This is my first RP so don't judge, well, THAT much at least. So anyways my story takes place a few decades after the arrival of the first knights on cradle. Pretty much what's going on right now is that Haven has been overrun by Fiends and the Undead. Before this event happened though traces of different types of enemies were slowly decreasing and their threats were dulled while Offices and Graveyards increased, so what exactly happened? This RP pretty much shows the story of a group of Knights whom survived the attacks and continued to find the cause of this and why it happened. Though the question is.. will they ever find out and what will they have to do to get the answer? DUNDUNDUN.

-Ok, here is pretty much the formula for makin' an app.

Name:
Gender:
Species: (Try to keep them Knights but other species are also welcome if you can make them legit)
Appearance (As in armor):
Weapons:
Personality:
Bio:
Stats (You don't really have to do this if you've already shown their skills/abilities in the Bio):
Swordsmanship:
Marksmanship:
Demolition:
Speed and Agility:
Vitality and Defensive Capabilities:
Intelligence, Cunning, and Tactical Thinking:

-You have 30 points to use and each stat has a max of 10 and a minimum of 0, go crazy guys

Note 1: I see the story isn't as strong as I hoped but it'll make more sense later.
Edit 2: RP Thread up! Here's the link: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/98207
Note 2: Sorry for the procrastination, been busy lately.
Edit 3: FIRST CHAPTER IS UP FOR REAL. LIKE, FOR REAL REAL. REAL-EEE REAL.

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 09:52

Thinslayer

I'll throw one in.

Name: Gwenivere
Gender: female
Species: angelic
Appearance: Grey Feather Cloak & Cowl
Abilities:

dual psi-blades: energy-based weapons that can be spawned & dismissed at will. Normal damage, no status.
firebolt: a contained ball of fire that can be spawned, thrown, and guided. Elemental damage, stun & fire status, roughly equivalent to a Drakon's.
toxic quills: small, thin needles that are shot into a target. Spawned & thrown from between her fingers. Piercing damage & poison status.
aura shield: the psionic equivalent of a Shield Bracelet
energy burst: pure crystal energy is expended for a brief period (anywhere between 3secs to 15mins, depending on the amount of energy possessed). Usage varies.

Stats:

Swordsmanship: 5
Marksmanship: 5
Demolition: 0
Speed & Agility: 5
Vitality & Defensive Abilities: 5
Intelligence, Cunning & Tactical Reasoning: 10

Personality: If there was one word that could describe Gwen, it would be "playful." Add seriousness and it becomes "adventurous"; Add romance and it becomes "flirty"; Add a little wickedness and it becomes "teasing"; with stupidity, it becomes "impulsiveness". All of these words accurately describe her. But behind her playful nature is a more rational, introspective side that most people rarely see. She is a poet, grand schemer, and philosopher all rolled into one. Many plots both great and small have hatched in her mind countless years in advance. Things she has planned since before you were born often come to fruition long after you are dead.

It's a good thing she's on our side.

Biography: Gwenivere was born the daughter of Arthur Valentine and Lilith Sintaris. She was raised in a noble household, destined for greater things and bound for a life of power and glory. And unlike most people with such glamorous backgrounds, she did not fail to achieve those goals. She grew into a remarkable young woman, brimming with all the powers of her people and ready to take on the forces of evil with a vengeance.

But then something happened to her, something that irrevocably scarred her both physically and mentally for the rest of her life. No one alive knows what that was, and those who did are long dead. All that's left of it is a thin, crimson scar over her left eye.

Whatever it was, it did not quench her kind, generous spirit. She wanders the world alone, aiding the needy and the victimized while delivering fatal justice upon the wicked.

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 08:15

Malkalack

Swag IS a virtue

NAME: Malkalack
RACE: Knight
APPEARANCE: Skolver coat, Azure Guardian Armour, Aegis,
GEAR: Final Flourish, Valiance
PERSONALITY: Being a striker, this requires a constitution of steel and being cool in a crisis. He hates monsters with a passion unheard of even among the Spiral Knights. He had a good upbringing, with loving parents and two sisters and his family was all on the Skylark. He was the sole survivor among his family to survive the crash. This terrible loss has tempered him, and he has indomitable will.

--STATS--

Swordsmanship: 10
Demolition: 0 (a danger to himself and others)
Speed & Agility: 10
Vitality & Defence: 5
Smartsy stuff: 5
Shootin' and lootin': 0

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 19:00

Malkalack

Double Post

Im so ashamed

Fri, 03/07/2014 - 23:52

Hexlash

Just because I can.

Name: Spark
Gender: Male
Species: Wolver
Appearance (As in armor): Um... Generic tan coloured fur coat, like in my forum avatar. But things could change later on... But to specify, his fur is really, really soft. Also, his eyes are golden yellow and vibrant. As well, the darker fur spots on his back are curiously spiral in shape.
Weapons: His claws and teeth? Um, not much else he can use lol.

Personality: Incredibly social, Spark often tries to gain as much attention as he can, finding even the slightest notice gratifying. He is non-hostile by nature, but was gifted with a slight edge of superiority to other Wolvers, being given the traits of an Alpha, but not the size of one. He is most relaxed and happy when he is around other living creatures, but despises being alone. He is also quite curious and playful, and is easily entertained.

Bio: Spark was a special Wolver, right when he was born. With the strengths of a soon to be Alpha, he never actually attained that position for peculiarly not ever growing up to match the size that was required to be one. Spark never minded anyways, he solely enjoyed hanging around the other Wolvers. However, this changed drastically once the Devilites and Undead began to overtake the Clockworks. His pack was obliterated, leaving him the only survivor. He struggled, amongst the loss of his close companion, his family, being the alone, and against the forces that pushed him out. He managed to escape to Haven, which was already on the brink of collapse, unbeknownst to him. Nearly killed by some knights, his pitiful condition and cheery disposition to see something that didn't want to kill him persuaded them to take him in.

Swordsmanship: 0
Marksmanship: 0
Demolition: 0
Speed and Agility: 15
Vitality and Defensive Capabilities: 10
Intelligence, Cunning, and Tactical Thinking: 5

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 08:10

Sho-Marufuji

Oh, um.. Uh.. Oh, there's my app.

Whoa, so many apps. Thanks a lot guys.

@Thinslayer: Is Angelic pretty much a Knight with Angelic Wings? Or will I find out with the picture?
@Malkalack: I swear I've seen that app before, but you have my apologies for double-posting. Also if you could fix your app because in this RP pretty much all Gremlins/Cons/Beasts/Jells have been wiped out by Undeads and Fiends.
@Hexlash: I could really use Spark as a character's companion in the story.

Time for my App.

Name: Sho Marufuji (Goes by Sho)
Species: Knight
Gender: Male
Appearance: Wears a Deadshot Mantle and a Kat Eye Cowl with Almond Eyes and a Red personal color.
Weapons: His arsenal consists of an AP, Callahan, Blitz, ALL Alchemers, Valiance, and a Neutralizer.
Personality: Has a good priority of what to do with almost little to no care for his own group, or so it seems. He really has a deep care for them and often keeps this attitude because he's already lost so many.
Bio: As a young Knight Sho gunned mostly because he liked supporting his team. That soon changed. After Haven was overrun and Knights retreated to the Clockworks and split into their own sort of factions Sho desperately searched to join one. After being rejected from a multitude because of his choice to be a gunner (Guns don't deal much damage so you can see why) Sho stalked the Clockworks trying his best to die. But he didn't. Instead he became a killer, fabled by Knights who catch a glimpse of him. Though as the depths progressed Sho found Knights and himself having to extort more strength and he eventually found himself leading an in-experienced group of knights through the Clockworks, doing his best to keep them alive and find the secret of how Haven and the Order was overrun.

Swordsmanship: 0
Marksmanship: 10
Demolition: 0
Speed and Agility: 7.5
Vitality and Defensive Capabilities: 2.5
Intelligence, Cunning, and Tactical Thinking: 10

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 08:14

Malkalack

@ Sho

Dude he's a Knight. Not a gremlin/con/beast/jelly

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 09:42

Thinslayer

@Sho-Marufuji

I've posted the picture now.

An "angel" is a humanoid who is capable of summoning or dismissing their wings at will. To put it another way, angels can have wings. Gwenivere has wings, but she deliberately chooses not to display or use them.

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 09:51

Sho-Marufuji

@People-o's

@Malk: Sorry, I don't think I was clear, I wasn't referring to your species but rather the part 'bout hating Gremlins. I see you changed that so gratitude.

@Thinslayer: Thanks, the picture gives me a much better understanding!

I'll probably write the first chapter starting off the RP tomorrow morning, after that be free to post your own characters' parts of the story okay? :D

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 13:53

Colray

App

Name: Kale
Species: Knight
Gender: Male
Appearance: Ironmight Plate set, Ancient Plate Shield, Determined Eyes, Cobalt Personal Color
Weapons: Sudaruska, Leviathan Blade, Iron Slug,
Personality: Kale is very protective of his comrades and will put himself in danger to save a friend. On a personal journey deep into the clockworks he found what looked like a fallen soldier, with moss growing on the armor. Retrieving the shield of the dead warrior, he found more to his liking than his Ironmight shield, and used it instead. He may not be the smartest but he makes up for it in loyalty. Kale is very formidable in battle, but outside of battle he is very caring to animals and knights alike, as long as they don't try and attack him.
Bio: Kale was trainer as a guardian and had just finished his training when the Devillites and Undead attacked. Fighting on the front line, Kale was one of the last knights to retreat into the clockworks. Joining a smaller faction of knights, Kale continued to fight as a guardian. Then one day he came back to the faction headquarters to find it ravaged by undead. Shocked to the core, Make retreated to the clockworks and wandered around, protecting anyone or thing that is innocent.

Stats
Swordsmanship: 10
Marksmanship: 5
Demolition: 0
Speed/Agility: 0
Vitality/defensive capability: 10
Intelligence, cunning, tactical thinking: 5 (better at tactical situations, not the best intelligence, cunning is a no.)

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 12:07

#10

Sho-Marufuji

@Colray

Accepted.

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 12:37

#11

Malkalack

Swag IS a virtue

Did mine get accepted?

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 13:48

#12

Colray

derp

Oopsie forgot the statistics

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 09:17

#13

Pipipipipi

The 4th wall shall be shattered!!!

Name: Rasfie
Gender: Male
Species: Knight
Appearance: Gray Feather Mantle and Divine Veil, along with a robotic left arm
Weapons: A argent peacemaker built in his robotic arm, along with a Biohazard just in case
Personality: Friendly but brave, very daring
Bio: Rasfie was abandon by his parents during a chase by evil gremlins, so he was raised by Emberlight Gremlins. Due to a accident when creating his first robot at five years of age, Rasfie had lost his left arm, which he replaced with a robotic arm. He eventually instaled a gun in his arm, as he was bad at everything else. When he was 18, he left home to haven, which he was only able to stay in for a year until the fiends and undead attacked Haven, which he survived. He enjoys making robots as a hobby and is one of the fastest mecha-knight constructors.
Stats:
Swordsmanship: 0
Marksmanship: 10
Demolition: 1
Speed and Agility: 10
Vitality and Defensive Capabilities: 3
Intelligence, Cunning, and Tactical Thinking: 6

Finish it later :P

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 15:07

#14

Sho-Marufuji

...It's beautiful!

So many apps, thank you so much! :D

@Malk: So far all apps (Besides Pi because he needs to finish it) including yours have been accepted.

So, what order should this RP go in?

What I was thinking:
-Me
-Malk
-Col
-Thin
-Hex
-Pi once finished with the app.
-Meh, other people?

Any objections? Feel free to post your thoughts guys.

Sat, 03/08/2014 - 16:33

#15

Thinslayer

@Sho-Marufuji

A successful posting order is highly dependent on time zones. I live in a Mountain Standard Time zone, GMT-7 I think. I tend to post in the afternoons (like now, for example). If you don't account for time zones, this RP will probably move along EXTREMELY slowly. And by that I mean, like, 1 post every day, at best.

Otherwise, you're better off allowing the posting order to be random. You could make a rule that no one gets to post until everyone else has posted, but that'll still keep the game slow (albeit faster than the above option).

Allowing players to post as often as they want keeps the game running quickly, but at a moderate risk of leaving people behind. And it's not a low risk, either - I've seen it happen to someone at least once (if not more) in every RP I've played in. It's usually Kaijuhunter. xD

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 09:57

#16

Aekun

App

Name: Andre De Thamel

Gender: Male

Species: Knight

Appearance: Full Azure Guardian Set

Weapons: Aegis, Leviathan Blade, Two tiny knives

Personality: Andre is true to the order's name. He is chivalrous, and treats everyone but his enemies with respect. He is mostly cheerful, but in some situations he will get depressed or angry. Depressed if the mission is not going well, angry if one of his teammates is severely injured.

Bio: Andre was raised into a wealthy Isoran family, and desired to become a Knight ever since he could walk. His parents were completely ok with this, and even agreed to train him. They decided, with his consent, to mostly train with swords. However, at the academy, he was teased for his poor marksmanship skills, so he challenged one of his bullies to a duel, sword against gun. The bully laughed in Adre's face. But that was a grave mistake.

The minute a shot rang out, Andre deflected it and sliced his opponent's Proto Gun in half. Noone ever teased him again.

When he finally got aboard the Skylark, he made friends with one of the older veterans, who taught him even more sword skills. The two were inseperable, until the Skylark crashed. The two were in pod together, but only Andre survived. He took his friend's armor, sword, and shield as a memento to his friend.

Stats (You don't really have to do this if you've already shown their skills/abilities in the Bio):

Swordsmanship: 10

Marksmanship: 1

Demolition: 0

Speed and Agility: 5

Vitality and Defensive Capabilities: 5

Intelligence, Cunning, and Tactical Thinking: 9

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 08:42

#17

Sho-Marufuji

@Thin

Like I said, this is my first RP so I totally forgot that. ouo

So, um, uh.. Alright, tell me (Wait no, that sounds too forceful and stalker-like). I mean "do you mind supplying me" with your guys' timezones so I can make a better schedule for the sake of the RP?

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 09:18

#18

Pipipipipi

The 4th wall shall be shattered!!!

Finished with my App

Tell me if it is accepted

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 09:58

#19

Aekun

Epic

Finished Andre.

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 10:00

#20

Hexlash

You stalker...

I am currently on MDT-6.

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 10:07

#21

Aekun

Epic

(UTC-08:00) Pacific Time (US & Canada)

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 10:18

#22

Sho-Marufuji

OuO

Yep, so far all've been accepted.

Thanks for the timezones so far guys. Looks like I need: Pi, Colray, Thin, and Malk. Tell me if I missed any.

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 10:22

#23

Malkalack

/creeped out

EST....
(eastern standard time)
US and Canada eh?

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 10:23

#24

Malkalack

/ashamed

Double post. :(

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 11:10

#25

Pipipipipi

The 4th wall shall be shattered!!!

CST (US and Canada)

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 11:21

#26

Colray

uhhhhhhh derp

Pacific Standard time

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 11:27

#27

Hexlash

Wait, I think I misinterpreted the website.... I am MDT, or UTC-6... Something like that lol.

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 11:50

#28

Thinslayer

I already told you my time zone.

MST, GMT-7

Sun, 03/09/2014 - 13:02

#29

Sho-Marufuji

Alright, I'll have the

Alright, I'll have the schedule up by tomorrow ALONG with my first chapter! :D

Tue, 03/11/2014 - 09:16

#30

Hexlash

I know you can't rush genius...

And that you only missed one day, but don't write off more than you can read? That was bad lol

Tue, 03/11/2014 - 10:27

#31

Thinslayer

Helloooo?

Sho-Marufuji? You still there?
*waves hand in front of your face*
I still want to play!

Wed, 03/12/2014 - 21:23

#32

Colray

hellooo..... helloooo.... hellooooo............

Sho, i didn't make a character just to have this RP ended! C'mon where tis thou?

Wed, 03/12/2014 - 22:29

#33

Hexlash

Helloooo? hellooo..... HELLO!?

What is dis liez? Don't bail on us!

Hope everything is good with you though, Sho...

Thu, 03/13/2014 - 13:10

#34

Sho-Marufuji

/cry

SORR-EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE. DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD:

I got the first "chapter" up on the story thread. I hope this gives a good sense of what Cradle is now. I like your concern for me, everything is good though. Just the regular barriers, schoolwork and little time.

Here's the schedule:

I mostly go on around 4:00-5:30 PM Central Time (I'm assuming we all live in North America).

For Mountain Timezone people-o's: 5:00-6:30
Pacific: 6:00-7:30
Eastern: 3:00-4:30

These times are when the most intense RP'ing sessions will be. But you can also feel free to post at other times, also on the weekends I'll be on quite alot also.

Thu, 03/13/2014 - 13:15

#35

Malkalack

Swag IS a virtue

Sorry, that doesn't work AT ALL for me.

Thu, 03/13/2014 - 13:57

#36

Sho-Marufuji

This is 'bout time right?

Like I said Malk, you can also feel free to post at other times and on the weekends so if the current schedule doesn't work for you, you can use other time slots that I broadly listed.

Thu, 03/13/2014 - 15:53

#37

Colray

I'm good with it, might not be perfectly in there but you said that's fine I'll be waiting!

Thu, 03/13/2014 - 17:11

#38

Hexlash

@Sho-Marufuji

I have no idea what to do or where to start, so please just place me wherever. :)

Thu, 03/13/2014 - 17:24

#39

Sho-Marufuji

Need Help?

Your either start with other NPC's or by yourself. OR with another player whom you've already checked in with. Once you've decided that you write about your character's current actions or thoughts of the character. That's really what you'll be doing, how creative these actions or thoughts are or what they are about is up to you. I.e: Running a depth, re-visiting the now dead Haven, discussing tactics for an upcoming battle, etc.

Thu, 03/13/2014 - 19:35

#40

Hexlash

@Sho-Marufuji

Well, keeping in mind that my character does not go anywhere alone as is his nature, and that I stated in his bio that he was taken in before the utter collapse of Haven, I was assuming he would be paired up with another Knight or something.

Also, I'm just a bit confused about general locations, where exactly is everyone? Are we all together in your group you mentioned in your story post? Are we scattered ambiguously?

Fri, 03/14/2014 - 06:59

#41

Sho-Marufuji

Okie.

Hmm, I think I know where to put you Hexlash, but before I put up another post on the Story Thread CAN EVERYONE ELSE POST BECAUSE I'M NOT VERY BIG ON PLAYING ALONE IN AN RP.

Fri, 03/14/2014 - 09:04

#42

Hexlash

@Colray

Once again, well written, though some criticism. First off, though I see why you perhaps didn't, try spacing out your writing more. I can see how the action might be interrupted by breaks in the text, but it's far more easy on the eyes.

One major thing. The part where the two stopped fighting and he was waiting for the phantom to strike was THE BEST moment to build tension, describe character thoughts and to convey mood.

With the immediate jump between him just holding his shield up and then the phantom attacking, you lose the purpose of even having that in there in the first place. You don't allow the brief moment to take hold and give the reader just a second to breath.

Fri, 03/14/2014 - 16:43

#43

Colray

hm ok

That's nice to know, maybe I should a done something like this?

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Drawing his Leviathan, Kale advanced slowly waiting for an attack. He circled around the phantom, trying to goad the ghost into an attack. Suddenly Kale feinted forward, the phantom recoiled slightly, then hissed as it realized the trick.

The ghostly warrior closed its eyes and lowered its cursed blade. After a few seconds, the jagged blade started to glow a little. Kale realised what the phantom was about to do and backpedaled, gaining distance. Almost stumbling on a rock, he looked down to regain his balance. He looked up to see the phantom swinging an overhead cut.

Swinging around his shield, Kale felt the impact push him back a couple spaces. He lowered the shield, then sidestepped quickly as he saw a shadowy orb flying at him. Advancing more quickly, Kale parryed an upward thrust and stabbed the phantom in its midsection, ripping outwards.

As he watched the Phantom dissolved from the hole in its chest outwards, an unholy scream ripped from its mouth. Kale didn't move until the monster had dissolved completely into just a glowing red dot floating a meter off the ground.

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I don't really see the difference spacing makes, but I can see the tension mounting as Kale waits for the next attack.

Fri, 03/14/2014 - 16:56

#44

Thinslayer

Maybe it should be more like this

Drawing his Leviathan, Kale advanced slowly, waiting for an attack. He circled around the phantom, trying to goad it into an attack. Suddenly, Kale feinted forward. The phantom recoiled slightly, then hissed as it realized the trick.

The ghostly warrior closed its eyes and lowered its cursed blade. After a few seconds, the jagged blade started to glow a little. Wait, what's it doing? Kale realized what the phantom was about to do and backpedaled, gaining distance. Almost stumbling on a rock, he looked down to regain his balance.

Note: this pause allows the following paragraph to have more of an impact, essentially "surprising" the player almost as much as Kale was.

He looked up to see the phantom swinging an overhead cut. Crud! Swinging around his shield, Kale felt the impact push him back a few feet. He lowered the shield, then sidestepped quickly as he saw a shadowy orb flying toward him. Then Kale lunged, parried an upward thrust and stabbed the phantom in its midsection.

Note: again, a pause for effect. In an action flick, this space would probably be filled with an eerie silence as the magnitude of the victory and the tense wait for the results dawns upon the audience.

He ripped out his sword and watched the Phantom dissolve from the hole in its chest outwards, an unholy scream erupting from its mouth. Kale didn't move until the monster had completely dissolved into a mere glowing red dot floating above the ground.

Fri, 03/14/2014 - 21:39

#45

Colray

hmm, that makes sense.

OK, thanks for the advice.
Also, when kale ripped the sword out of the phantom, he was actually slicing outwards as in left or right. Leaving a jagged hole in the phantom tracing all the way to one side of its midsection.
I wasn't sure how to describe that,

Fri, 03/14/2014 - 21:49

#46

Thinslayer

@Colray

I know it was meant to be a sideways slice, but if you think about it, it doesn't make a whole lot of difference to the readers when you use the word "ripped" to describe it. It'll be gory either way, and it's better to keep it short and simple.

EDIT: Consider the contrast between "withdrawing" your sword and "ripping" it out. The first sounds like it belongs in a Victorian-era duel. The second looks more at home in a zombie story.

Fri, 03/14/2014 - 21:51

#47

Colray

zombie movie,

Anyways, I guess I shoulda chose a different word, oh well. I'll remember that when posting in da future.

Sat, 03/15/2014 - 06:32

#48

Sho-Marufuji

Hey, I don't mean to nag but

Hey, I don't mean to nag but do you know when others'll be joining in as well? Oh, also I created a diagram to show how singular Knights will interact. Look below;

oooooooo All Knights are quite scattered.
ooooooo Some begin to make Alliances.
oooooo Factions are created.
ooooo Alliances between Factions.
oooo Order.

Quite cruddy but I sorta wanted to give the general idea of how it'll start scattered then keep becoming more close together.

Sat, 03/15/2014 - 06:32

#49

Sho-Marufuji

/cry

I double posted, my own thread!

Sat, 03/15/2014 - 06:44

#50

Thinslayer

Me?

I'm still figuring out how to introduce Hex. His entrance needs to be surprising and (relatively) important.

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