The Battle for Haven! Chapters 1-14 out! [Role-casting now closed] one chapter left!

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Isekuube's picture
Isekuube
Wow...

*blinks twice* is that pow? I'm starting to question my own judgement, cause that's a reasonable and helpfull comment...

Little-Cloud's picture
Little-Cloud
BfH Imgur Album

http://imgur.com/a/kSiEF
An Imgur album I made for the sole purpose of this.
Yes, I DO have Chapter 5 on my PC.

Mindspark's picture
Mindspark
Time to put aside luxuries

Time to put aside luxuries and reveal the dirt that lies underneath the story. In my opinion, this is a good concept (albeit overused,) and excellent characterization. But there are several problems I find with the story. Personally, I would go with paragraphs rather than stanzas as it is rather awkward to cut a sentence off with a new stanza. But now the actual problems that are not opinions, but facts. You seem to have dropped several storylines throughout the story, or perhaps didn't explain well enough. Two of these storylines would include the Dreaded Docks with Ice and Necro, the Mayist-visits-human-camp storyline (We understand that someone died, but you didn't explain what had happened to Mayist), and the creature in the Wildwoods (It was a creature. Can't remember its name. Kind of expected it to play a larger role.) Perhaps thoroughly explain what happens in most scenes, as we only know about the character's actions and dialogue and it leaves the reader to imagine what's it like.

Krispycake's picture
Krispycake
Yes

I agree with Mindspark here. This story itself could have been a lot longer and interesting if you added more storylines to it.

Isekuube's picture
Isekuube
Ditto

Mindspark hit it straight on with that one.

Shelrok's picture
Shelrok
Umm...

You still never replied to my comment. Shall I take that as a rejection of my idea?

Changonanak's picture
Changonanak
2 year Necrobump

I hate Necrobumping, but really, what happened to this story?

Feline-Grenadier's picture
Feline-Grenadier
*sigh*

Well, if you had the common sense to look up Kaijuhunter's activity on forums.spiralknights.com, you'd find that our brilliant author here has often been off and on-line for random amounts of time without bothering to tell why. That being said, the last post was TWO YEARS ago, long enough for any one person to forget about Spiral Knights.

So I don't know why you even bothered to post here. Kaiju's made plenty of other great stories even after this, so why this?

Kaijuhunter's picture
Kaijuhunter
E-Eh?

@Feline-Grenadier: Great story? You really think so, Feline? Thanks! I'm sad to say I won't be continuing this fic or starting a new one, I'll try to join one of the RP's though!