HELLOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO? NEW CHAPTER! READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
EVERYONE GO AWAY. THIS STORY IS DEAD.
Fri, 10/21/2011 - 15:32
#102
D:
Fri, 10/21/2011 - 18:10
#103
I like new chapters ._. Good
I like new chapters ._. Good work
Fri, 10/21/2011 - 18:26
#104
;_;
I'm not in story?
/cry
Fri, 10/21/2011 - 21:28
#105
o, sorry. i'll try to include
o, sorry. i'll try to include u next chpt.
Sat, 10/22/2011 - 10:37
#106
yes! new chapter! and its on
yes! new chapter! and its on page 3!
Sat, 04/28/2012 - 10:51
#107
double post.
double post.
Sat, 10/22/2011 - 11:58
#108
love the story
i really like the story
Sat, 10/22/2011 - 12:25
#109
btw
btw how come in the story it sounds like nexon and alamar dont know eachother but in chapter 2 it shows that there freinds
Sun, 10/23/2011 - 14:02
#110
@Mentro
changed taht.
Sun, 10/23/2011 - 14:09
#111
D:
uh-oh....
uh, Atgatg? i just realized taht i put u as a guy in the story, not a gall. i would hate to change all that, so is taht oaky with u?
Sun, 10/23/2011 - 14:30
#112
Heres what happened, when i
Heres what happened, when i started i was male, but unfortunetly, my sister has acess to this account, so she must have changed it, thats why if you look at different fanfics with my character in it, it might be male or female, so keep it male
Sun, 10/23/2011 - 17:55
#113
:O
ah...
so, are u a boy, or a girl in real life? its kinda confusing.
Sun, 10/23/2011 - 18:36
#114
AGH. Im a boy, and a have a
AGH. Im a boy, and a have a SISTER who uses this account too. So some posts i might make are from my sister
Tue, 10/25/2011 - 15:14
#115
lol
lol!sucks for u.luckily my sister doesnt have acess to MY account otherwise i would be screwed 50 times over.
Tue, 10/25/2011 - 19:36
#116
I think I told u that I
I think I told u that I wanted in... u know, genius nutjob? Anyways, http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/23652 This is a link to my fic, Letters, and feel free to comment guys!
Tue, 10/25/2011 - 19:40
#117
how are these threads being
how are these threads being moved to Treasure Vault? Shadow didn't do it, because he's sleeping right now.
Maybe a GM did it?
o yeah.
new chapter in my Rise of Necropolis. take that, shadow! i didn't give up on my story! haha!
Wed, 10/26/2011 - 12:27
#118
i bet a GM did it.
i bet a GM did it.
Wed, 10/26/2011 - 13:02
#119
A wizard did it. <.<
A wizard did it. <.<
Wed, 10/26/2011 - 15:04
#121
GM wizards
GM wizards
Wed, 10/26/2011 - 19:24
#122
Nice story! I'm definitely
Nice story! I'm definitely going to check out the rest of how this plays out. Waiting for more to come :)
Thu, 10/27/2011 - 17:00
#123
you're probably going to have
you're probably going to have to wait 5 years for the next chapter.
Fri, 10/28/2011 - 08:03
#124
Oops.
Agh sorry, only skipped to the long posts with the chapters on page 2.
Didn't see your question whether I wanted Will or Ranger or whatever.
To tell you the truth, I simply prefer Will. Cool chapters! I enjoy readin em! =D
Cheers.
Sun, 10/30/2011 - 21:48
#125
@Rangerwill
ah, kk. i'll change ur names in the past chapters to will. anything for the customer! :D
Sun, 10/30/2011 - 22:39
#126
Hey Shadow
Updated myself on your story. Nice work. :D
I haven't seen you on in ages. I won't be playing till Mid NOV. Exams and all -_-...
You have a Leviathan!?!? I WANT ONE!!!! Mines only Tempered...foey.
But seriously, good story. Funny too. 'OMG Chomps gonna b crushed!....No worries, Nothing serious. Sure all the bones in his body are smashed to powder, but nothing that can't be fixed with years of excruciating pain :D "
What do you think of mine? : http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/26939
Mon, 10/31/2011 - 13:34
#127
NO!!CHOMP IS INVINCEABLE!!!!
D:
Mon, 10/31/2011 - 18:17
#128
He/she probably is :D
It's like ol' Jack Harkness from Torchwood. Kill him, maim him, break his bones etcetc, but he still won't die :D
Nothing time and pain can't fix. Like flesh wounds. Nobody cares about them. Just like flesh wounds, Chomp's injuries aren't serious.
Mon, 10/31/2011 - 20:08
#129
charater
if i can still submit a character in your story heres mine:
Name for story:stormer
Color:dark blue
Gender:girl
Personality:not afraid of anything.if something is a threat to her she kills it,even knights.the strong and silent type.
Equipment:Heavenly Iron Set,Dread Skelly Shield,Dark Briar Barrage,Sentenza,Acheron.
Description:she was always the odd one in a group.she wasn't afraid to push a knight to their limits,nor she didnt mind about getting into trouble. she is just a little strange.thats what the others say at least.
Other:she has a pet Greaver named spore.
Tue, 11/01/2011 - 15:39
#130
like i said atgatg or
like i said atgatg or atgatg's sister,chomp will be sliced in 2 then used as bait for a snarlbox : D
Tue, 11/01/2011 - 17:29
#131
@Psychodestroyer
O.o
thats gotta hurt.... i saw his arm on the ground. and blood is like POURING out of his arm!
Tue, 11/01/2011 - 17:31
#132
D: :(
D: :(
Tue, 11/01/2011 - 17:44
#133
dont worry, i wont let chomp
dont worry, i wont let chomp die. well, maybe... >:D
Tue, 11/01/2011 - 18:01
#134
@Rangerwill
there, i think i changed them all. tell me if i missed one.
Tue, 11/01/2011 - 18:03
#135
When will next chapter be?
When will next chapter be?
Tue, 11/01/2011 - 20:23
#136
New character
Name Zephyr
Gender Male
Equipment Nitronome Shivermist Volcanic demo helm and armour and wise owlite shield
Color Royal Blue
Description Little Kid who became a knight after threatening to blow up a recruiters house
He hates when people underestimate him and even though he,s a weakling, he kills from a distance with bombs
has a deep rooted hatred for jellies
Tue, 11/01/2011 - 20:23
#137
hmmm, i'm working on it, it
hmmm, i'm working on it, it should be finished by the end of the week.
Tue, 11/01/2011 - 22:27
#138
underestimated
i just want to say, i think most fan fiction is dumb, but i like this story, and i was inspired to write my own, which i have decided to call underestimated.
http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/31904
i hope you will read it and tell me what you think of it so far
Sat, 11/12/2011 - 10:07
#139
When will the next chapter
When will the next chapter be?
Sun, 11/13/2011 - 08:26
#140
what will happen? will chomp
what will happen? will chomp die? will chomp kill revan thus giving them a reason to kill chomp?will chomp die of starvation because revan doesnt know what they eat?find out in the next chapter! coming to a forum near you.in 5 years...
Sun, 11/13/2011 - 11:09
#141
>:(
>:(
Mon, 11/14/2011 - 02:05
#142
Oh yeah
Just remembered. Hey Shadow? Can you try to break up the big blok of text thing?
Where you paragraph is about good enough, just use a double paragraphing. It's a little easier on the eyes.
If you're already halfway through your next chapter, don't bother. Just do it with the chapter after.
And if you can't be bothered, don't bother as well. Your story after all :D
Tue, 11/15/2011 - 16:11
#143
okay atgatg or atgatg's
okay atgatg or atgatg's sister.i'll stop it. maybe. >: D
Tue, 11/15/2011 - 19:43
#144
See my fiction at:
See my fiction at: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/23652
Tue, 11/15/2011 - 19:43
#145
See my fiction at:
See my fiction at: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/23652
Tue, 11/15/2011 - 19:49
#146
@Psychodestroyer
i do make paragraphs. it just makes it like that when i post for some reason.
Tue, 11/15/2011 - 19:55
#147
That's odd...
:/
Ah well, don't go through too much trouble.
Just write good stuff and I'll get over it ><
Tue, 11/15/2011 - 20:03
#148
deal. XD
deal. XD
Tue, 11/15/2011 - 20:07
#149
Oh yeah
And Shadow, can you read my latest fic series and tell me what you think?
It's been up here for a few days already, and I can actually COUNT how many people posted. :/
Thu, 11/24/2011 - 18:07
#150
DONE! :D
Chapter 7
As the sun rose slowly over the mountains, the morning sunlight seeped into the cracks in the destroyed escape pod. Will groaned, and sat up. Dazed, he looked about his surroundings. He had a vague recollection of the events of the other day, when it all hit him. The Skylark had crashed, millions dead, and now he and three other knights were stranded on a planet with no knowledge of their whereabouts, no idea what the natives of the planet were, with their kind scattered across the planet.
Will sighed, and leaned back. He reached for his Avenger, and spun it around in his hand. The golden glow hummed with energy, and vibrated his hand. It glowed brightly, and flickered on and off.
“Hey, sleepy head. C’mon. We’re heading off to explore the planet today. Hurry up, or we’ll leave you here.” Nexon poked his head into the opening. “Ready? The rest of us woke up several hours ago. We’re all ready.
“Okay, geez, I’ll be ready in a moment.” Will sighed and stood up. “Okay, we’ll be waiting for you. You have twenty minutes to pack. We also left you some breakfast. You can eat it on the trail.” Nexon retreated out of the pod. Will picked up a bag and started to stuff his stuff in. “Let’s see, Avenger, Grey Owlite Shield, first-aid kit, food….”
A couple minutes later, and the quad was on the trail, with Nexon in the lead, Alamar, in the rear, and Will and Revan in between. And, of course, with Chomp. Chomp followed behind Revan, running between his legs, and tripping him.
Alamar glanced at Chomp. “You actually got that thing to obey you?” Chomp stopped in his tracks and growled at Alamar, baring his teeth.
“Yes, in fact, I did.” Revan said proudly. “In case you didn’t know, Chomp and I have been practicing how to fight together.” Chomp growled again, this time more loudly. “And put away that Khorovod of yours. It’s scaring Chomp, with you swinging it all around like that.” Chomp darted around Revan’s legs, branding his fangs at Alamar, as if to say, Back off, or your lunch.
Alamar scoffed. “I could take that thing and beat it in a second. And it doesn’t look like you and Chomp are doing very good at teamwork”, he replied as Chomp ripped of a piece of Revan’s armor and began chewing it up.
“Guys, knock it off. I’m sure that Revan and Chomp are doing fine, and Alamar, stop swinging your sword around. You almost lopped my head off”, Nexon ordered.
Alamar snorted. “Whatever.” He swung it around and slid it into a hidden sheath on his back.
Will looked up at the sun above. It shone brightly, and gave him a warm feeling. “Lets rest here for now. We can eat a bit of lunch, and keep going later.” Will dropped his stuff down on the ground. “We’re running out of food. Alamar, if you don’t mind, I would like you too go out to find something we can eat. Revan can search for water. Nexon, why don’t you go scan the area ahead? You might find something of interest. I can go gather some firewood.”
Alamar grunted. “Fine.” He lumbered off. Nexon and Revan also agreed, and soon the camp was cleared except for Will and Chomp who was busy sleeping on a fallen log.
Will got up from the log and went to get the firewood. After collecting quite a big bundle. He headed back to the camping area. There, he found Nexon talking to Revan and Alamar. “Hey guys. I’m back.”
“And about time, too.” Alamar seized to firewood from Will and made a neat pile. He then lit it, and set about cooking several small bird-like creatures with complex bone structures. Will sat down next to Revan. “So…what news?”
Nexon shrugged. “Not much. The forest clears out a couple more miles north and then comes a giant valley. It’s very plain, and there isn’t much there except for a few of those things Alamar caught.”
Will’s stomach grumbled uncomfortably. “Speaking of which, Alamar, are you done cooking those things yet?” The smell of roasted meat and several different spices wafted into the air, and Revan, Nexon, and Will all turned to face Alamar expectantly.
“Hmmm? Oh, yes, about the birds-BURRP. Excuse me. Anyways, they were quite-.”
“What do you mean ‘were’,” accused Will. Revan and Nexon also looked at him angrily. Alamar looked at them guiltily. “Well, no one came to get them-so I ate them all. No biggie. Right?” He laughed uncertainly for a few seconds. The other three continued to glare at him angrily. He looked at the other three nervously for a few more seconds. Then he scowled. “Alright, alright, I get the idea! But you guys weren’t eating it and it looked really good so…” He looked at them again. They were still glaring at him. “ALRIGHT! I HAVE NO EXCUSE! BUT TOO BAD CAUSE THE CHICKEN’S ALREADY GONE SO YOU CAN’T DO ANYTHING ABOUT IT!!”
They continued to glare at him, with Alamar glaring at them back, daring any of them to challenge him. Nexon grunted. “Hmph. Next time, we are NOT sending you out to hunt, much less cook. Anyways, we better get moving. We have wasted to much time already.” The sun was high in the sky, so it looked about noon.
“It will be hard, after all, with our very HUNGRY stomachs,” Nexon emphasized. He glanced at Alamar, who was sitting on the log indignantly. “but,” he said, “we can do it. So get your stuff together. We’re moving out in a few minutes.”
A few minutes later, the quad moved out once again. They headed north for about thirty minutes, until they reached the clearing that Nexon had talked about. “Wow,” Revan murmured. “It’s beautiful.” And it was. For miles around, green, lush grass covered the ground. Birds such as the ones that Alamar had caught flew around. The sky was clear, and the sun was bright. Big trees surrounded the clearing. Flowers of various colors were scattered among the ground. In the middle of it all, it fell steeply in a gigantic valley.
“Well, I guess it is,” replied Nexon. “It’s pretty cool. You kno-hey! Look! I see a switch over there!”
They walked over to it. It was a small, red device. “I wonder what it does…” muttered Will. He stepped on it, and suddenly, the vines started to move. “What the…” Will took out his Avenger while Revan held Chomp close to him. Nexon also took out his Ascended Calibur, and Alamar took out his Khorovod. Suddenly, a gate revealed itself, and it slid down. An opening stood in front of them.
Will glanced at the other three. “Should we?” Alamar looked around cautiously. “It could be a trap…we better be on our guard.”
The four of them moved through the undergrowth and past the gate. They continued walking for several minutes, until they met another gate. Will stepped on another switch in front of it. It opened, and they walked forward. Suddenly, a giant figure loomed over them. “What the-,” Will shouted. All four of them pulled out their weapons. The gigantic figure came into view. He was dressed in heavy robes, with a big hat on his head with several of those little birds perched on it. “Easy, easy there. I am a Stranger, a native of this planet. You will also have noticed the snipes, I presume.” He indicated the small birds. “They help me with my work.”
Nexon boldly stepped forward. “Who are you?” he asked. The Stranger raised an eyebrow, looking quite amused. “Why, I am Hailoh, guardian of Haven.” “And, what exactly is Haven?” inquired Nexon. “Oh.” smiled Hailoh. “This,” he indicated the area behind him. “is Haven.” He stepped back to let the four of them see. “Oh my god…” Will gasped. It was beautiful. Hundreds of snipes fluttered around, and hundreds more knights swarmed around, asking the Strangers for help, and exploring. Most dazzling, was the giant, sparkling, fountain, shooting water high into the air.
Hailoh smiled again. “Welcome to Haven.”
longest chapter yet!
WOOT! THREE PAGES!! and the new chapter! two in one! :D
Chapter 6
A twig snapped. That was all Alamar needed to know to pull out his Khorovod. He snapped around and saw another one of those tree thingies. He leaned back, and using all the power his arms could muster, threw his sword. It flung through the air, and struck the lumber in the middle, the long blade sticking out the other end. Gears popped off, sparks flew, and the monster finally fell to the ground. He picked up a few gears that looked useful, and pulled his sword out.
Alamar sighed, and sat down. He had been searching the forest already for a few hours, and still saw no signs of civilization. He had also encountered quite a few of the native monsters, and his arsenal was full of gears, fur, bones, and other stuff. He had tried to attract people instead of searching for them various ways, such as making a forest fire with his fiery vaporizer, to no avail. In the process, he had lost his pack of bombs, and was now bomb-less.
Alamar thought over the past events. In less then a day, his life had been critically changed. First, he got stuck in a pod with a bunch of morons after some other moron made the ship go boom. After that, they had ditched him when he was still unconscious, proving his point of them being morons. Now, it was already sunset and he still could not find anybody.
Suddenly, he heard some barking. It was muffled, but yes, it was certainly barking. It came from underneath the body of the fallen creature. He got up and walked over to it and looked under. Underneath, was a small, wolf-like creature that he had encountered countless times before. The tree thing was probably carrying it. He grunted, and walked over to where his sword was. He picked it up, and was about to lop of the head of the creature when he noticed something shiny on it’s fur. He dropped the sword and inspected it. It was a piece of armor, from a knight!
Alamar immediately sprang to action, grabbing his gear and leaving the creature behind. He knew that someone might be nearby, and he also knew it was important to be with someone, no matter how moronic they were, especially if u were on a planet that u had no idea about and the natives that lived there. He ran through the forest, tearing away any foliage away with his massive sword. He continued running until he saw a small speck in the distance. It also appeared to be running. He had no idea what it was, but Alamar kept running himself. The other thing kept running too. Now, they were much closer. He looked like someone he knew, when he suddenly got it! A knight!
Alamar suddenly stopped and his Khorovod flung forward. The other person, seeing the blade coming towards him, ducked, so that the blade hit a clump of bushes behind him, which were immediately obliterated.
Alamar ran towards the knight, ignoring his horrified face. “Finally! Another knight! Are there any others? If so, where are they? Who are? Oh, yeah, I forgot the important question. Are u a moron?”
He continued to look at Alamar, with a horrified expression, which soon melted into a confused expression. “What?”
Alamar stared and slapped his forehead, answering his own question. “Of course you’re a moron…”
Now, the knight looked at him with irritation. “Well, who said anything about morons? I’ll have you know that my name is Revan, medical unit of squad, 782394, second-in-command.”
Alamar continued to listen to him blabber for a full 5 minutes before he finally screamed, “I GET IT! ALL RIGHT?! I GET IT! YOUR NAME IS REVAN AND YOU’RE THE MEDICAL UNIT OF SQUAD 782394, SECOND-IN-COMMAND, YOU HAVE A LEVIATHAN BLADE, AND A BUNCH OF OTHER STUFF! I GET IT!!!!”
Revan looked strangely at him for a couple seconds, when he finally said, “Well, I now know a couple things about you. First, you have anger issues. Second, you have a loud voice. And, third, you have a good memory.”
Alamar was about to scream at him for a bit more, just for the heck of it, when he heard a voice behind Revan. “Revan, what are you doing? And how did you get here? And who is that guy your talking to?
Alamar looked behind Revan to see two other knights standing there. Great, he thought. More morons. He was starting to regret wanting to find other knights.
The two knights came forward, and introduced themselves, while the one called Revan was standing there anxiously, as if he really, really, REALLY, needed to go pee.
“Hey, you know…. You look kinda familiar…”, said Nexon. “Oh yeah! You’re my friend! I can’t believe I forgot that… Must have been the crash…” Nexon walked away and leaned on a tree, muttering. Alamar suddenly remembered Nexon too. He was sure that he hadn't FORGOTTEN him... he just had a lot on his mind.
After the introductions were done, and Alamar described his encounter with Revan, Will said, “That brings us to him.” He pointed to Revan.
“Why are you out here when it’s already dark? And please don’t pee your armor. That’s going to look real disgusting…”
Revan sighed. “Chomp escaped and I was chasing after him when a lumber picked him up and ran away with him. I have been trying to find him since.”
Alamar gasped. “I killed a tree thing back there and there was a wolf thing underneath it. I was gonna kill it when I heard you.”
Revan’s eyes bugged out. “Well, then, lets go!” He rushed forward and the others had no other choice but to follow him.
When they got back to where Alamar had killed to lumber (Alamar decided to call them that since they looked like a good source of lumber), Revan was already there, prying Chomp loose. The wolver, the name the other guy, Nexon, called them, was struggling and trying to get loose, but could not. Finally, Revan got it loose.
“Whew. That was close. I almost thought I was gonna loose that guy. He has some broken bones and several of his ribs are shattered, but it’ll heal.” He gently cradled it and got up. “Best be getting back to camp now. Getting dark.” He walked up the path and left the other 3 behind.
“Almost dark… it’s already dark! Geez…” Alamar heard the other two mumbling as they trudged up the hill. There was now a light sprinkle, and the moon was out. The light shone through the forest and gazed upon the forest.
Alamar looked at the beautiful sight and sighed. It had been a long day, and right now, he was just tired and hungry, and didn’t even care about morons anymore. As he gazed at the forest around him, and listened to the strange sounds, Alamar could already tell his new life was going to be a strange one.