Spiral Knights - EVERYONE GO AWAY. THIS STORY IS DEAD.

EVERYONE GO AWAY. THIS STORY IS DEAD.

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Thu, 07/28/2011 - 16:50

Shadownox

Hey everybody. Since my brother started writing stories, i really liked them. But then i got the idea: why not make my own story? this story is wil be connected to my brother's with the same general story. Planet is dying, taking off on Skylark, crashing,etc. But mine will be in a different point of view. very different. So please don't think that i copied off my brother. I took the general part from his story but mine is very differnt as it is from a very different point of view and it is completely 100% my work. Hope you guys like it.

Its called: Rise of the Heroes
Chapter 1

Nexon was having a great day. In fact, an awesome day. He was on the verge of beating his record. So far, his record was 53 wins in a row before his friend Kozma who had knocked his sword out of his hand and had defeated him had forced him to surrender. Both of them were part of the Spiral Order, an organization created thousands of years ago by his ancestors to maintain peace on their home planet Spirulus Prime. It was their job to make sure that everyone on the planet was safe from who-knows-what kind of monsters lurking in the shadows. Everyday, they sword-practiced to fine-tune their skills and this was one of those days when Nexon kept beating and beating the other members of the Spiral Order. He had gotten 52 wins in a row so far.
“2 more, and I’ve got a new record!” Nexon said to himself. He quickly charged up his Ascended Calibur and gave it a 360-twirl, sending his opponent 5 feet away, crashing into the dirt. Nexon walked over to the knight and said, “Surrender”. The other knight threw up his arms and Nexon walked away.
“All right, you weaklings”, he smirked. “Who’s up next?” The other knights just stared at each other until a familiar voice spoke up behind him. “I am”. Nexon gave a sigh and looked behind him at his next opponent. It was Kozma. Of course, he thought. Kozma would do anything to keep him from his old record. They were friends, yes, but they were also old-school rivals. From the day they had looked upon each other in training school, they had competed against each other in almost everything. They competed so much, they even tried to see who could finish 10 energy bars first. Nexon had won but he had a stomachache for the rest of the entire day. Nexon’s mentor said that he was the best knight he had ever trained when he had graduated to the Spiral Order. Compared to the other knights, anyone would say he was better. Nexon hated to admit this, but when compared to Kozma, Kozma was better. Only a bit better, but still better to be noticeable. Nexon had never beat Kozma before, but this time, he was determined that he could. “Okay Kozma. Let’s do this”. The other knights smiled. They knew that Nexon had never defeated Kozma before and they were looking forward to seeing her beat him again.
They got into fighting position and one of the knights rang the bell. The fight had begun. Kozma took out her Leviathan Blade (yes, she even had the better sword) and swung a blow at Nexon. Nexon dodged and parried the blow. Kozma tried to knock his sword away, but she had done this so many times, Nexon was ready for it. He shielded the blow this time and felt as his Wise Owlite Shield was crushed under the blow. Kozma was surprised at this as she expected Nexon to try to parry the blow like always. She hesitated for a moment and Nexon saw that as a chance. He kicked Kozma in the stomach and knocked her blade away. Everyone who had been watching had been cheering for Kozma but they stopped cheering and as they saw her hesitate. A couple of people winced as they saw Nexon kick her and the knock her blade away. The crowd had gone silent. Kozma was on her knees puking up what looked like her morning’s breakfast as Nexon slowly placed his sword under her chin. “Surrender”. He said quietly. A smile slowly lit up on his face as he said those words. “You cheated!” she said with a snarl. “There are no rules when fighting, Kozma. I thought you learned that in training school”. Nexon said to Kozma. Kozma just glared at him. Wow, Nexon thought. This really is an awesome day. He had defeated Kozma and his reputation had probably just gone up a couple of notches. He had even defeated his old record. As for Kozma’s reputation, it had probably gone down a couple of notches. Kozma had never been defeated, until now.
The crowd watched, most of them walking away, probably to spread the word. Nexon’s smile brightened. “Nexon, you cheating bastard!” Kozma shouted at me. Nexon was about to explain what he had said earlier about the “there are no rules while fighting” concept to her when he felt his feet give away. The remaining crowd who were still watching looked in dismay as Kozma kicked Nexon’s feet out from under him. She stood up and went to get her sword. Then suddenly, she slipped too! Nexon looked at her feet and saw that she had slipped on her own puke. The crowd looked in disgust but a couple started cheering for me.
“Go Nexon!”
“Nexon, you can do it!
“Show her who’s the real master!”
“Yeah, c’mon!”
Kozma snarled “SHUT UP!!!” at the crowd. She lunged for her sword but Nexon hit her on the head with his shield, which knocked her out. “Take her away”. He said. The crowd had been drawn back to the fight, including even more people. A couple people dragged her away while Nexon sat down. He sighed. Now everyone would know her as a ruthless cheater. After the fight is over, there is no fighting back unless the opponent challenges you again. Kozma hadn’t challenged him again and from the look in her eyes, Nexon thought that she was actually going to try to kill her. Nexon was glad that she was gone, but he didn’t want her to be known as the “bad guy”.
Suddenly, Nexon’s old friend Feron ran up to Nexon. “Nexon!” he panted, “I have something very urgent to tell you.” Nexon looked at Feron. “What is it?” Nexon asked Feron. Feron was still catching his breath. Nexon heard him say something but he didn’t quite catch it. “Here, drink this”. Nexon reached into his bag and gave him a water bottle. Feron drank deeply, drinking almost half the bottle. “Thanks” he said. “No problem” Nexon said. “Now what is this news that you’re bursting to tell me?” Feron stared at Nexon. “The Skylark is taking off”.

So what do you people thinkg? pretty good, huh? im a beginner too. Comments and critisim encouraged. very encouraged. very, very, very encouraged. :D

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 16:53

Grittle

hmm

i might as well made a documentary about lichens, but still good!

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 16:57

Nechrome

... I don't recall giving you

...

I don't recall giving you permission to do this...
Bu I guess you don't need any.
Keep up the semi-goodish work!

LORD EXODIUS, SIGNING OFF... FOR NOW
READ MAI STORYS.
LET THE FLAMES BEGIN
http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/17487
THE SPIRAL EMPIRE: THE RISE OF NECROPOLIS
http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/18095
READ THEM.
OR DIE.
FIND THEM NOW IN THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE GENERAL DISCUSSION FORUMS.
PURCHASE NOW WHILE SUPPLIES LAST.
.

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 17:00

Shadownox

HEY!

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 17:13

Prisega

Well there's plenty of

Well there's plenty of grammatical errors as well as the random switch from 3rd person to 1st person (I guess it runs in the family?) but its not all that bad. I definitely could have done without a certain substance in the story but it wasn't too bad of a story, pretty strong start with suspense tied into the ending. There are some pieces of plot that don't really make sense though being the first chapter I'd hope they would be filled in later. I could actually make an interesting plot for the situation so I'm interested in seeing what you do for it. I was actually engaged while reading this story so its got better appeal than others on here.

BTW I don't think the whole, planet dieing thing is really that much of a unique concept for anyone to consider it copying. As far as I was concerned I thought thats what the SK story pretty much was. Without a continuing storyline in the game my memory of everything I read as far as story goes back in May is no longer with me.

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 17:19

Shadownox

thanks for the comments.

thanks for the comments. except i dont really see the switch. i mean, its all nexon did this, nexon did taht

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 17:48

Prisega

I read it again and think I

I read it again and think I imagined it. I'm not seeing the switch anymore I may have just read a piece wrong (I can't even find the sentence I thought was in there) so yeah disregard the PoV comment.

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 19:10

Rangerwillx

WTF!

HEY. I need to be in this! I shall annihilate you, and your poor 2* cobalt armor!! DIE, for not asking me to be in this story! Mwahahahaohmystomach. And, OMG you kicked a girl!

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 19:13

Shadownox

hey, who siad i was nexon? i

hey, who siad i was nexon? i just said this is a random story with made up characters.

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 19:21

Prisega

In the story he even said

In the story he even said there were no rules in fighting... Don't even get me started on the feminism debate. I just really hate comments like that, it bugs me.

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 19:21

#10

Rangerwillx

Weeeell..

Of course, it would be difficult to fight you when I'm a ranged guy, with my Light bow ya know, but my knives should make quick work of you anyway. Disregarded. But lemme be in, say Will, Or Ranger. :D, let people in like yer brother. Of course, you don't have to if you don't want too. This sounds like a demeand it isn't.

The one Ranger, Will Treaty signing off.

Thu, 07/28/2011 - 21:04

#11

Shadownox

Well, maybe i am Nexon. I

Well, maybe i am Nexon. I might let people in. you'll see. o, and when people sya, "u cant hit girls" it really bugs me. If women want rights, they should have the right to get hit. lol

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 13:21

#12

Nechrome

Okay people, im gonna let 3

Okay people, im gonna let 3 people be in my story right now. they will be some of the main characters in my story, but i will let some other people be in the story later

Heres the character sheet:

Name for story:
Color:
Gender:
Personality:
Equipment:
Description:
Other:

I thinks that i it tell me if ther is anything else

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 13:25

#13

Shadownox

whoops. sorry people that was

whoops. sorry people that was supposed to be on my account. it was logged on to my bothers

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 13:36

#14

Nechrome

...why not?Character:

...

why not?

Character: Alamar
Color: Red with green
Gender: You already know
Personalaty: Hates everyone
Equipment: You already know that too
Description: Hates, everyone, likes explosion, basically your semistrong-and-silent tyype.
Other: Enjoys blowing people who insult him up with his bombs.
Likes: Himself, killing things, bombs, swords.
Dislikes: Everything except the above.

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 13:33

#15

Shadownox

oh yeah. add your likes and

oh yeah. add your likes and dislikes

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 14:30

#16

Green-Onion

Potential Character?

Name for story: David

Color: Green

Gender: Male

Personality: Very strong willed, never backs down from an argument or debate. David is smart and studious, yet retains a modest temperament.

Equipment: All Cobalt (armor, helm, defender, calibur)

Description: Graduated from the Spiral Academy (or generic institution for the story) near the top of the class. David is a prominent figure who has won many awards and gained much recognition for his competitions. However, he has never been in a real fight outside of the rules and sanctions of an organized competition, and thus lacks field experience. David also has a tendency to become competitive over seemingly frivolous things.
*Imagine a very smart, hardworking classmate/peer you knew who somehow didn't have much common sense in spite of outstanding grades.*

Likes: Solving complex problems, thought provoking questions, giving speeches

Dislikes: Rejection, receiving 2nd place in a contest, Fraud

Wed, 10/12/2011 - 14:13

#17

Valorai

Awesome

name:Revan

color:dark green

Gender:female

Personality: Loves helping others, always carries a medical pack with her. Always trys to cheer up everyone in bad times. Hates fighting. Not to smart. Hopes that one day he will be the one everyone looks up to in times of need.

Equipment: Mighty cobalt helm, Vog cub coat, ascended calicur, boosted plate shield shield.

Likes: Angel pizza. People. Wolvers ( So cute!!!)

Dislikes: Devil Pizza. Slimy Slimes.

This sounds like a good story i want to be part of it!!

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 19:04

#18

Rangerwillx

Well, the limit has been

Well, the limit has been passed but just in case you need 1 more..
Name: Rangerwill.
Gender: Male.
Likes: FSC and killing stuff in general.
Dislikes: People bumping monster's into me and me dying.
Color: Dark blue.
Personality: Strong willed, always help the nice guy, good guy at heart. I'm mostly a swords guy, but I like all weps, I usually take my Avenger, Silent nightblade, Gigawatt pulsar, and my Freezing atomizer on a run.
Weps: Vile striker Avenger, Silent nightblade, Killowatt pulsar, Toxic catalyzer, Freezing atomizer
Set: Ash tail set, I wear a solid cobalt helm as my costume helm though. Sometimes a magic hood.
:) As your friend love the story and hope it it gets even better!

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 19:48

#19

Shadownox

Well actually, iwas looking

Well actually, iwas looking for people with good equipment... but you guys will al end up in the story dont worry. o and i take back the part abou the first 3 people being some of the main people. im gonna mix it up to give everyoe a fair chance.

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 19:50

#20

Shadownox

expect chapter 2 sometime

expect chapter 2 sometime today!

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 21:12

#21

Shadownox

well, maybe not. sorry for

well, maybe not. sorry for the delay people. my brother keeps hogging the computer.

Fri, 07/29/2011 - 22:23

#22

Shadownox

bump

Sat, 07/30/2011 - 12:47

#23

Whitelancer

Why bumb if theres no next

Why bumb if theres no next chapter?

Sat, 07/30/2011 - 13:30

#24

Valorai

MOAR!!!

Im dying out here!! Need moar chapters!!!!!

Sat, 07/30/2011 - 15:47

#25

Shadownox

sorry. i will try to make

sorry. i will try to make finish the next one today and post it.

Sat, 07/30/2011 - 16:34

#26

Valorai

(whimper)

(Whimper) :D

Sun, 07/31/2011 - 21:00

#27

Valorai

MOAR!MOAR!

MOAR!MOAR!MOAR!MOAR!MOAR!MAOR!MOAR!MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sun, 07/31/2011 - 21:00

#28

Shadownox

finally! im done! this

finally! im done! this cahpter totally sucks in my opinion though so feel free to criticize. after all, im only a beginner.

Chapter 2

“C’mon people, lets move it!” Alamar shouted. “We don’t have all day you know! Go, go, go!” Alamar pushed a couple of people onto the Skylark
Alamar sighed. He hated his job. He really, really heated it. Well actually, he hated everything. Everything except his bombs. He smiled at the thought of blowing up all his enemies. And he had quite a lot of enemies.
Alamar was a member of the Spiral Order. He hated everyone. Almost anyone would take him as a person to stay away from. His worst enemies were known to perish from his various bombs. He was the strong, silent type. Even the best warriors would be cautious around him. But despite his behavior, he did have a few friends such as Nexon and Feron. They had learned how not to flare up his quick temper.
A person in the crowd had the courage to stand up for himself.
“Hey, what gives?! Don’t you know…” He slowly stopped talking as he noticed Alamar was glaring at him.
“Don’t. You. Ever. Talk to me like that again.”
The person found a Nightblade at the side of his neck before he even registered what had even happened.
“Y-yes sir. R-right a-away sir.”
Alamar sheathed his sword and pushed him onto the Skylark. “Move it”, he growled.
The person he was talking to quickly nodded his head and ran away.
“Idiot” Alamar mumbled. The people who had just witnessed this quickly ran onto the Skylark in fear of encountering a similar confrontation.
Alamar looked at the huge crowd of people who still needed to get into the Skylark. “Ughh” Alamar said to himself. “This is going to be a long day”.
After 5 more hours of shouting and threatening, everyone was aboard the Skylark. Everyone inside the gigantic ship was at the same time, excited yet scared. In the entire history of the people of Spirulus Prime, never had they left their home planet. But the day had come and they would never see it again.
Alamar was threatening a group of people with his Fiery Vaporizer when Nexon came up to him.
“Hi, Alamar” Nexon said. “How goes business?”
Alamar sighed. “The same. Stupid people, stupid people, and more stupid people. You’d think they’d learn something by now…” Alamar walked away grumbling about stupid people.
Nexon smiled. Something about Alamar threatening people always made him warm inside. Or maybe that was just his heat generators. Nexon frowned and walked away muttering something.
The engineers who were doing a last minute check on the engines gave a thumbs-up sign to the pilot. The pilot turned the engines on and the engineers jumped on right after the doors closed.
As the Skylark took off, the citizens of Spirulus Prime looked down on it as they left the planet. They could all hear the sounds of the distant rumbling of the energy storms. As the Skylark left the atmosphere, they thought of their life on Spirulus Prime and their new life ahead.

see? i told you it sucks. o, and i am gonna rotate around all of the characters so expect the next chapter to be in a defferent point of view.

Sun, 07/31/2011 - 21:04

#29

Valorai

YES!!!!

I dont care if it sucks or not!(and it rocks) i just need my dose of chapters! That was cool!!

Sun, 07/31/2011 - 23:34

#30

Shadownox

lol. thanks.

Mon, 08/01/2011 - 00:29

#31

pikachupower

Legacy Username

Its pretty good

Actually, your story is pretty good. Like Rick Riordan and other authors who use other characters and their point of view, I see how you incorporated this guy's personality. I like how stories like yours just let me relax and just read, and actually, I think your story can really compete against your brother's.

In fact, has your brother made any more chapters? I only see critism and assumption/arguing

Anyway, nice story!(And keep going)

Mon, 08/01/2011 - 13:31

#32

Shadownox

ummm, i only see argung too.

ummm, i only see argung too. but he made a new chaptr for necropolis ysterday

Mon, 08/01/2011 - 22:59

#33

Shadownox

hey ranger, do you want your

hey ranger, do you want your name to be rangerwill or something else in the story?
cuz no offense, but rangerwill sounds kinda weird. maybe something else. but if you dont wanna cahnge, you dont have to.

Tue, 08/02/2011 - 01:43

#34

Bonta_Kun

Legacy Username

Are there going to be anymore space soon? If so here:

Name for character in story: Emerlite
Color of armor: Turquoise
Equipment (armor, weapons): Wolver gear, Brute Jelly Shield, Faust, Leviathan, Snarble Barb and Antigua.
Personality: Friendly, shy, generous
Gender: Male
Likes: Wolvers
Dislikes: Anything that is going to try and kill him
Other: Like to help out others in fights and revives everyone he can.

Hope there are some spaces coming soon.. Please tell me when there are and if I am in. Thanks. :3

Tue, 08/02/2011 - 12:50

#35

Valorai

MOAR!MOAR!

............................................................................................................................................................moar...............................................................................................moar.............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................moar....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................moar...........................................................moar..........................................................................................moar.............................................................................................................moar.............................MOAR!.................................MOAR!..............................................MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1!

Wed, 08/03/2011 - 10:13

#36

Valorai

Ug.

We are on page three this will help. And by the way.......please day when you are making the next chapter. If i were you i would TRY to make 1 chapter a day.

Wed, 08/03/2011 - 11:36

#37

Shadownox

me too. sorry. my brother

me too. sorry. my brother keeps playing SK on the computer i save my stories on. I think i will be able to finish today. i hope.

Wed, 08/03/2011 - 12:17

#38

Valorai

Yah

Thats the best news i've heard Today!!!

Wed, 08/03/2011 - 23:52

#39

Bonta_Kun

Legacy Username

..........

Are there going to be anymore spaces soon? I have put up the thing about my character already in an earlier post.

Thu, 08/04/2011 - 01:42

#40

Psychorazer

Ranger will...

OMG!!! U read ranger's apprentice!? I LOVE THAT SERIES!!!

Copikat. Ranger Will, Will treaty...u just copied that...bt nice knowing SOMEONE reads it ^^

And Shadow? Nice story. It actually DOESN'T suck! Not that I'm saying it would...or that I was expecting it to...

Srsly. Good stuff.

Maybe a little tweak here and there, but it's all good. Lawl, rager that thinks everyone's a moron...

Maybe The skylark crashed cuz Kozma sabotaged the Engine and becomes an evil crazy dude and flees to the core to build an army of monsters to exact psychopathic vengeance. Nexon goes to stop him, and Alamar has allegiance issues. So hes like OMG i wanna kill all u morons then gee trying to kill my own kind sucks then I wanna BLOW UP STUFF! and back again...or something. Or he could just be, Gee Kozma, you're crazier than me, die!!!!

Just random idea cluster. Every writer need inspiration somewhere. What better inspiration than raw ideas? I would know, cuz I'm good at creative writing when I can get the right ideas flowing.

Oh and that's not bragging. To balance it, I positively SUCK if I can't get my idea flow.

Fri, 08/05/2011 - 11:55

#41

Valorai

WHERE!!!

*sniff* *sob* well actually its just a story. but please could you tell us when you are going to make the next chapter!! Its been years!!!! Did u forget about us!
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Fri, 08/05/2011 - 15:21

#42

Bonta_Kun

Legacy Username

OMG

Are there going to be anymore spots?

Why has no one answered my question................ T-T

Fri, 08/05/2011 - 16:25

#43

Valorai

Becuse he dosent care

Becuse he dosent care anymore!!!!!! ahhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sat, 08/06/2011 - 14:54

#44

Shadownox

sorry guys.couldnt find it.

sorry guys.couldnt find it. didnt know which page it was on. lol. okay, so i am gonna post the new chapter today and bonta, there will probaly be more in the future so you can be in my story. just dont be sad if i make you a minor chracter. ad p.s. RANGER'S APPRENTICE RULES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Tue, 11/01/2011 - 17:58

#45

Shadownox

Chapter 3 :D

Chapter 3

“PARTY IN THE HOUSE!!!” Will shouted. The Skylark was off! As the former citizens of Spirulus Prime crowded around the gigantic windows to observe the planet’s destruction, food and drinks were brought out and the music was turned up. The planet below was utterly destroyed as the energy storms hungrily decapitated it. But the people around the windows were slowly drawn away to the party. The distant sounds of the energy storms were drowned out by sounds from the party. People were dancing, laughing, eating and drinking the food and drinks. Weapons were brought out and knights had duels to pass the time and to see who was better. They set up vendors in the Skylark to sell weapons, shields, armor, crystal energy, and materials. Everyone was having a great time. Little did they know of the fate that awaited them years later…

2 years later…

“Ughh,” Will said. “I hate this.” Will sat up in his bed and thought about his previous life. He had been a lowly mechanic in his early life, fixing machines and tinkering with spare parts. He had gotten into a fight and was recruited to join the Spiral Order after a member, Nexon, had observed the fight and had thought he would be a worthy member. From that point on, all he could remember was the rough training he received at training school and the satisfaction he felt when had graduated from training school to become a member of the Spiral Order. Not long after that, his home planet was destroyed by energy storms because of the planet’s lack of resources, and everyone was forced to leave the planet. They had scoured planet after planet in the vast galaxy in hopes of colonizing there, but hope prevailed. Will himself had been on a couple of the squads sent down to the many planets they had found, and every time he came back from one, he was tired, hungry, and thirsty. The previous night, Will had done just that, and now he observed himself. His motors were rusting and his circuits were fried. In fact, they were fried so much, he couldn’t even move his right arm.
“I’m gonna have to go to the medic center later if I want this fixed” he said to himself as he experimentally tried to move his right arm with no success. He got up and went to the medic center.
A couple hours later, his arm was good as new and they had even treated his rusts.
“Ahhhhhhhh…” Will said. “That feels much better”.
But just then, the alarm went off. “Wha-!” suddenly, the halls were filled with screaming and shouting and Will was pushed against the walls as a crowd of people rushed past him. It must be an emergency! Will thought. At that moment, a voice sounded through the speakers.
“Attention all passengers. This is not a drill. I repeat, this is not a drill. Please head towards the pod roo…” the voice was drowned out by the continuous screaming and shouting. He ran toward the escape pods like everyone else was doing and jumped into one. He closed the lid and pressed the eject button. He felt a violent shudder as the escape pod was thrown into space. His head hit the wall and the world went black.

Hours later…

Will’s eyes opened. He sat up and looked around at his surroundings. His pod had crash landed on the planet below and wires and gears were sticking out of his body everywhere.
“Oh, great.” Will said. “Now I’m going to have to fix my arm again. And my other arm. And both of my legs. Heck, my head is ready to fall off!”
Luckily for Will, all knights are equipped with medical kits and Will patched himself up. Sparks were still flying, of course, but it was better then nothing.
He picked himself up and walked out the pod door. It had been blasted off during the crash, so there was no need to open it.
Will looked around. “Sure is bright out here…” he muttered to himself. Suddenly, he heard a crack. He grabbed for his Avenger, but it wasn’t there.
“Crap!” he said. “Must’ve gotten loose during the crash”. Then, out of nowhere, something hit him on the head and he went out cold.

Sat, 08/06/2011 - 18:27

#46

Nechrome

Not bad, not bad. BTW, u got

Not bad, not bad.

BTW, u got the title "Rise of the Heroes" from the Lego Hero Factory (curse them for replacing Bionicle!) dvd "Rise of the Rookies," did't u.

Sat, 08/06/2011 - 18:49

#47

Valorai

That was pretty good. Keep it

That was pretty good. Keep it up!

Sat, 08/06/2011 - 22:52

#48

Shadownox

umm.. no

Sun, 08/07/2011 - 15:42

#49

Grittle

bump

Sun, 08/07/2011 - 22:12

#50

Shadownox

YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ALMOST TWO PAGES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WOOT!

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