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Mon, 01/02/2012 - 18:51
Valorai's picture
Valorai

"Captain."
"Yes?"
"You should see this."

This day on the skylark was full of excitement. There was a tournament in the main hanger, and many of the knights aboard were doing something. On the bridge a worker checking the monitor. There was interference in a sector a ways in front of the ship. As the captain came over he inspected the interference. "It looks like this interference is masking something." he said. He took the chair and started typing and clicking. Soon the interference was getting smaller, and they started seeing a shape on the screen. Suddenly, it spread to the entire screen and they couldn't see anything. Everyone on the bridge was shouting because their computers went dead. The captain raced to the speaker, and yelled into it, "WE HAVE A SABOTEUR ON BOARD!!!!"

~
Down in the Hanger
~
In the hanger, the tournament had just commenced. The first round was a match between two equally strong knights.

Blue lunged at her enemy with all her strength. He dodged and returned with a slash that made a cut in her training armour. After sparring for another minute or so, the enemy tripped her. She fell and lay on the ground. As he went to use the finishing blow, an alarm sounded.

"ALL TECHNICIANS COME TO THE BRIDGE. ALL TECHNICIANS COME TO THE BRIDGE." As the alarm faded, Blue used the distraction to come up and swing her sword at his face. He flew back a few feet and staggered.
~
"Where is it coming from?" the captain muttered to himself. They found out that a computer somewhere on the ship had tryed to cloak something coming towards them. The location of the computer was unknown. The captain put orders to raise the frontal shields and to sweep the ship looking for the saboteur.

He went to the shipwide com. "EVERYONE ON BOARD RETURN TO YOUR ROOMS. ANYONE NOT IN THEIRS ROOMS WILL BE PUT IN THE BRIG. THANKS YOU FOR YOUR COOPERATION."
~
Everyone in the hanger heard the announcement and fled to their rooms. As the opponent left he glared at Blue. Blue returned the favour with a smile and a wave which made him madder.

Instead of heading to her room, Blue went to a spot in the ship no one could find her. There, she waited for the guards to come.
~

Lol. Im making another fanfic. I think I can do it. For now, i will need 4 people.

Name:

Arsenal:

Appearence:

Personality:

Bio:

Suggestions:

Other:

Mon, 01/02/2012 - 18:59
#1
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Frostrex
Name:Hale Arsenal:Sealed

Name:Hale

Arsenal:Sealed Sword, Firotech Alchemer, Heater Shield

Appearence:Wears Mighty Cobalt Armour, Mighty Cobalt Helm and his colour is Dark Blue

Personality:Loves to make jokes, but is surprisingly serious sometimes

Bio:I... Really suck at this...

Suggestions:Well, I know this is your starting chapter, but maybe a bit longer?

Other:N/A

Mon, 01/02/2012 - 20:59
#2
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Jmtheawesome
Name: Quex Arsenal:

Name: Quex

Arsenal: Grintovec, Antigua, Electron Charge

Appearance: Rather short, Magic Set

Personality: A mischevious knight who tries every way to get a shortcut

Bio: Ive been on the Skylark for some time, grew up and got used to being pushed around, since I like using computers, people call me Qwerty.

Suggestions: What Frostrex said.

Other: He HATES long-term running.

Tue, 01/03/2012 - 12:52
#3
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Isisdelltion
Name: Soro Arsenal: Acended

Name: Soro

Arsenal: Acended Calibur, and nothing else.

Appearence: Wears Solid Cobalt Set, Smallish.

Personality: The sarcastic knight who's a bit negative. Or REALLY negative.

Bio: Soro was one of the engineers on the Skylark, but he's more of a mechanic than a computer geek.

Suggestions: As the other two said above, more writing would be great, but other than that great writing style.

Other: Can get annoying, but he usually nice to be around. Usually is the keyword of that sentence.

Tue, 01/03/2012 - 14:39
#4
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Jmtheawesome:

Jmtheawesome: Accepted
IsisdelltionL Accepted
Frostrex: Not sure....

Tue, 01/03/2012 - 14:46
#5
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Psychodestroyer
Hey atg

What sort of characters are you specifically looking for?

If you need a particular character, but can't quite fill out his details, I may be able to come up with some.

So like you need a borderline antagonist or something, or a disposable guy, I could probably make a character fitting your description.

Ask if/when you need one.

Tue, 01/03/2012 - 16:30
#6
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Well, I need a guy who is the

Well, I need a guy who is the person my knight was battling earlier. Also I need a computer genius. I weirdo/stalker. And someone who is my knights best friend.

Tue, 01/03/2012 - 16:39
#7
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Frostrex
Grrr... Just kidding.

Grrr... Just kidding. If its my character's arsenal, you can change it if you want..

Tue, 01/03/2012 - 18:11
#8
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Duskfinder
:b

I'll be the person you fought :)
Name: Dusk
Arsenal: Acheron, boltbrand, strike needle, voltaic tempest
Personality: Friendly person who is usually lighthearted but when he fights he is very serious.
Bio: After witnessing the assassination of his parents he swore to kill the murderer and to do that he trains everyday.
Other: has basic magical powers and us able to levitate small objects.

Tue, 01/03/2012 - 18:33
#9
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Psychodestroyer
Hm.....

Well, for the knight you were battling...

Name: Kovac
Arsenal: Ash Tail set, Archeon, Swifstrike Buckler.
Personality: A die-hard fighter who never backs down from a challenge, but is very short tempered and quick to anger. Loyalties mean nothing to him when he get's fired up.
Bio: Since he was young, he loved to play with weapons. Unfortunately, he was given a lot of trouble for it as well, so he is more of an Anti-socialist. As a result, he fights mercilessly and has no patience for stragglers.
Suggestions: Tweak him how you want. This is the best I could come up with on the spot. He close enough?
As for the Fic itself, I suggest updating in more substantial chapter sizes. Other than that, I got nothing.

Computer genius huh.....

Name: Angelo
Arsenal: Magic set (With glasses), Striker, Haze bomb, Owlite
Personality: A bit of a geek, Angelo is a borderline perfectionist who loves his whole world organized. Above all, he HATES being incorrect.
Bio: His habit of taking things apart to find out how they work has gotten him into trouble more than once. As a result, he usually keeps his hands to himself and is always double checking, including when asking for permission to do something.
Other: He misses the bullies that picked on him when he was a kid. At least then he had some attention. (He also thinks that if he wears his Magic set long enough, he'll get special powers)

Weirdo/stalker? Whatever for?

Name: Pelma (Girl)
Arsenal: Angelic set with a flower, Dark thorn Blade and Drake scale shield.
Personality: A nosy girl with no worries in the world, she spends her time sneaking up on people and 1)Trying to scare them 2)Eavesdrop 3)plain mess around.
Bio: She used to have plenty of friends, but after an unfortunate transfer, she was all alone. Resorting to spying to get information, people found her more creepy than nice, and avoided her. She doesn't mind all too much. In fact, she finds it more fun that way.
Other: She seems to pop out of the weirdest places...

A friend? That's not much to work with. I'll see what I can do...

Name: Marten
Arsenal: Solid cobalt set with Proto Crest, Fireburst Brandish, Twisted Targe
Personality: Friendly and caring, he stays loyal to his friends, and tries to keep them out of trouble
Bio: As Blue's friend, he can sometimes be paranoid and edgy, as Blue seems to enjoy causing a little mischief here and there. But he'll be there to cheer her up if she ever gets down.
Other: He likes to collect materials...He also likes to remind people that his name is said Mart-en, not Mart-in.

That's all I can come up with at the moment. They good enough? Can you use any? Tweak em how you want if you do.

Tue, 01/03/2012 - 19:00
#10
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Computer genius:

Computer genius: Angelo
Weirdo: Pelma
Friend: Dusk
Enemy:Kovac

Most of them are from atrumvindex, so if you can do better please apply.

AND NO SUPER POWERS!

And Atrum, the weirdo is sorta important to the wholr fanfic.

Tue, 01/03/2012 - 19:09
#11
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Psychodestroyer
Atrum....?

He didn't post here.

Are you referring to me....?

Wed, 01/04/2012 - 09:36
#12
Softhead's picture
Softhead
What!!!!

You mean psychodestroyer? I think you got me confused with him.

Btw, I hope this fanfic is really good!!

Wed, 01/04/2012 - 10:28
#13
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Name: Demens Arsenal:

Name: Demens

Arsenal: Blizzbreaker set coloured to look like a crew armour, Graviton charge with Striker

Appearence: Has eyes similar to Cleavers here: http://forums.spiralknights.com/en/node/33687
Millitary Vitakit.

Personality: Mad, fanatic

Bio: Was normal until a strange expedition on an uncharted planet. He found a statue of a gun puppy and had magical features that made him crazy and a fanatic for a religion worshiping the statue calling it Momoni. He says it will destroy the world unless people will convert to the religon and bellive in it.

Suggestions:

Other: Stalks people to try converting them to his religion.

Wed, 01/04/2012 - 14:42
#14
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Im pretty sure theres gonn a

Im pretty sure theres gonn a be a new chapter tonight!

Wed, 01/04/2012 - 16:40
#15
Uuni's picture
Uuni
Seems interesting, tell me if

Seems interesting, tell me if you need any more characters :P

Wed, 01/04/2012 - 18:25
#16
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Psychodestroyer
^

Try and top the ones I posted.

They were designed with a specific purpose for his story by me. However, if you can do better, feel free to post your character suggestion. If he likes it, he'll dispose of the corresponding character for whichever purpose.

I currently created the characters in the Enemy, Weirdo/stalker, and Computer genius categories.

Feel free to post a replacement.

Wed, 01/04/2012 - 20:15
#17
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Actually im not sure about

Actually im not sure about the weirdo anymore. But I am still using her name. By the way, If you want to know, blues appearence is like this: Angelic set with a (Cant remember the name at the moment) 5* scale shield. With an Antigua. A lavender personal color. Also a flower acessory on helm.

Chapter 1
~
This 'hideout' of Blue's was a small cramped space. I few cycles ago on the skylark a knight who was testing a new gun made a crater in the wall. They did small repairs on it to make it a perfectly square hole in the wall. The knight used technology so that only people who were looking for it would see how to enter. Then he repaired the wall fully so it looked normal. Cycles later he shared this with some friends, and changed the technology so that anybody wearing a certain thing would pass through the thick wall. If nobody was wearing it they would hit the wall looking like an idiot. This thing was a small trinket. It looked like a cobalt helm with wings on each side. Angelo found several of these ancient artifacts on the planet "Aorial". Arioal was a planet the Spiral knights tried to colonize on, but failed. It was a necklace for Blue, and Angelo wore it as a badge on his uniform. Only the people in this close group of friends had them. The knights name was Angelo. Angelo was an engineer/computer genius that worked on the bridge. He held a high position. Angelo was a friend of Blues but they did not know each other at all.

In the hideout Blue watched as the guards marched by looking for the saboteur. There was a small slit that Blue could see out of the 'hideout'. Then other bridge members walked by. Blue noticed that Angelo was at the end of a line. He quickly escaped from the group and went through into the hideout.

"Hello Blue. Hello Dusk." he said.

"Dusk?"

I whirled around. Against the wall was my friend Dusk. "When were you planning on telling me you were there?" I said. He shrugged. I gave a small sigh.

Dusk was the third member of our group. He wore his trinket on the hilt of his archeron.

"So Angelo, what's this all about?" Dusk said. "Apparently the captain thinks there is saboteur on board." he said.

"How's he find out?"
"The screens have gone blank. Captain thinks the whole ship will be destroyed because the saboteur might be blocking something."

The last member of our group walked in on us. Her name was Pelma. She wore the trinket on her ring. Pelma was the newest member of our group. We didn't know too much about her accept she has gone through alot. Her entire family was murdered. They were all found on the floor of her house dead. But no one knew what her brother's fate was. A few cycles later they found his body on the spirialian mountains.

"Whats with the alarm?" She asked.

"Saboteur."
"Oh."

"What should we do now?" I asked. Angelo thought. "Sit tight and see what happens."

At the end of the day the guards turned up empty. Everyone went to bed and hoped for a pleasant sleep.

During the night Blue heard a tapping sound out in the hallway. She got up, put on her armor and stepped outside. It was too dark to see but someone was in the hallway. The sound was more like a clicking then a tapping. It stopped, and she heard footsteps leave the hallway. A bright light popped up a few inches off the ground. She got closer and saw that it was a small rectangle shaped thing. She picked it up.

It was a bomb.

She ran through the hallways to the bridge. The bomb read 15:23. As she opened the door to the bridge the bomb said 5:56. The captain, Angelo and several other knights were looking at a paper on a desk. "Watch out!" I said. They stepped back as I put the bomb on the table. The technicians immediantly went to work.

"Good new and bad news" a technician said to the captain. "Good news is we can defuse the bomb. Bad news is it will take 7 and a half minutes.

The bomb said only 2:30 was left.

The captain was getting sweaty. As the clock said 0:10 he yelled something and slashed a blue wire on the bomb. The clock stopped.

Everyone let out a happy sigh. The captain boasted, "I'm all this ship needs. Why do I even pay you all?"

As I was beginning to leave the captain called to me, "Excuse me Miss, but where did you find this?" I told him about the footsteps and finding this outside my hall.

He told me that the cameras would have caught whoever did this. On the camera we caught the face of the intruder.

The next day they apprehended the saboteur and threw him in the brig. The computers went back to normal.

Everything looked like it would turn out. But we all know it didn't.

Thu, 01/05/2012 - 04:21
#18
Duskfinder's picture
Duskfinder
Really good, are you going to

Really good, are you going to continue in curse of the core?

Wed, 01/04/2012 - 21:01
#19
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Psychodestroyer
About the wierdo

That's no problem. Tweak her however you want.

Or , if you prefer, you can tell me what other specific things you want her to be, and I can try and reconstruct her.

Thu, 01/05/2012 - 14:33
#20
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Il try to get cotc tonight.

Il try to get cotc tonight.

Thu, 01/05/2012 - 18:53
#21
Valorai's picture
Valorai
I thought what Blindshot did

I thought what Blindshot did at the beginning of chapters was cool, so im gonna do it. ^^ -Atgatg
Don't do that. It'll make you look stupid and that you are copying everything good the other writers do. -Dusk
Whatever. -Atgatg
Don't blame we when the summons comes. -Dusk

:3
~Chapter 2
~
Everyone slept great that night. The all knew the saboteur was in the brig and there was nothing to worry about.

The next morning Angelo had no work to do so he went with us.

"What do you guys want to do?" I asked Angelo and Dusk. "I don't know." Dusk said. "They're trying to get the tournament back up." Angelo said. We all went to walk around the ship all at different places.

The Alarm blared.

"Not again." I groaned. A loudspeaker was turned on. "EVERYONE!!!! GET TO THE ESCAPE PODS! GET TO THE ESCA-- AGGGGHHH!!!!!!"
The loudspeaker was turned off. People screamed and went for the pods. At first I thought this was a drill. But there was only enough escape for one use only. The ship shook and slightly turned. I had to hurry to the bridge to see what was happening.

I slammed the door open and said, "Cap- Ohhh!!!!" The whole room was full of ash. Knights were withered and flinching on the floor. The captain was slouched against the wall. I went over to him and checked him. He was alive. Barely. I had to get him to the escape pods. I wasn't to strong. At the time I got to the door Dusk rushed in.

"There you are!" He said. "Let's go! We have to get to the pods!" He took my hand and tryed to pull me. "Not without him" I said motioning at the captain. Together we carried him to the pods. Knights were all crowded around them screaming. Every 5 seconds a clang sounded and a pod shot off.

"Move everyone! We have the captain and need a pod!" I yelled. No one even looked in our direction as the chaos continued. We found a stretcher to put the captain on, and we held him above us as we went to the pods. I saw an empty pod to our right. I told this to Dusk and we headed for it. At the last second some one went into the pod and ejected. We rammed into some other knights and we fell to the floor. I couldn't see anything but feet when a foot smashed into my face and I blacked out.
~
Some time later
~
"Blue?" ,I woke up and saw Dusk. He was holding me and he set me down. "What happened?" I asked. I stumbled and fell onto some kind of cushiony chair. "I found you on the floor out cold when the crowd got into most of the pods. I dragged the captain into this pod." Gesturing to the space we were in. "And then I was able to carry you in here. We were able to eject just as the skylark exploded."

"What?!?"

I looked out the window and saw that the skylark was just a few pieces of metal floating in space. The captain was laying on the chair next to me. "Do you know what happened to Pelma and Angelo?" I asked.

He shook his head. "Theres a planet close by that I think we're going to crash on." Dusk said.

Now all we could do was wait for that planets gravity to grab hold of us.
~
We were entering the planets atmosphere along with some scrap metal and another pod or two. Both of us braced ourselves for the landing and held on to part of the captain to keep his body from flopping around. The ground was getting closer until finally, we crashed with an amazing hit. We were making a crater as we slid across the ground. We hit a rick or something and we all lost our hold to the walls. We all bounced around and so was the pod itself. It hit a flat spot so we rolled until it stopped.
~

I would have wrote a longer chapter but I have to make you guys wait right?

Thu, 01/05/2012 - 19:45
#22
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Duskfinder
NO I WANT MOAR

Yay free scrap metal!

Thu, 01/05/2012 - 19:49
#23
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Frostrex
So you don't want my

So you don't want my character? That's coo.

Fri, 01/06/2012 - 10:19
#24
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Are you going to accept the character I made?

Just asking.

Also, THIS IS GOOD!!!

Sat, 01/07/2012 - 09:45
#25
Valorai's picture
Valorai
DESTROY ALL CANADIANS

I wont be able to make another chapter today. Its my brothers b-day

Sat, 01/07/2012 - 11:11
#26
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Happy birthday! To your brother.

Good for him!

Sat, 01/07/2012 - 18:37
#27
Valorai's picture
Valorai
I've decided to do something

I've decided to do something new. At the end of most chapters there will be a set of options for the readers to chose. The first person to post what will happen next will decide. Ill explain more later.

Chapter 3
~
4:23
~
I kicked the door of the hatch and light flooded in. Dusk got up moaning. "I think I hit my head." he said. There were bruises on all of our bodies, mostly the unconsciousness captains body. We walked out onto the ground. The sky was bright, and it took my eyes some time to adjust. When they did, I saw that it was beautiful. The sky was a perfect light blue, and the ground a healthy green. There were trees all around us. I thought I could hear water nearby. AI figured this planet was not been touched by intelligent life since it was so preserved. The only thing out of place was the line of dirt made by the pod.The captain groaned and I saw him struggle to get up. I ran to him.

"Sir, you should lie down for a bit." I said.

"I feel like a bomb exploded in my face." he groaned. "I think a bomb DID explode close to you." I said.

He replied by moaning on the ground.

I walked a few feet away with Dusk. "What should we do?" I said. "I don't know." Dusk said. "We could leave the captain here and get help. But I don't know if there will be creatures out there. Or, we could bring him with us. We would go slower. And we wouldn't be able to get our weapons out very fast if we needed to."

I thought for a moment. "Well first we need to get supplies out. We can sleep here tonight." I said. We got to work. We got sleeping bags for comfort. There was enough food to survive 3 weeks, same for water.
~
12:09
~
A woke up hearing something. It was a low rumbling. Dawn heard it too. I whispered, "What is that?" Before he could answer a creature jumped from out of a bush and went straight for us.

I got up and put my sword in my grip. Then, I got a look at the creature.

It was a dark yellow, predator of some sort. I knew alot about animals. This was something that would travel in a pack. It had long claws and fangs. Long ears that could pick out a sound from a good distance. I saw in its eyes a killers look. It was a great beast.

It lunged at us with its jaw open. I slashed at its neck only grazing the fur. It landed in a pile of leaves. The noise disturbed the sleeping captain. He rolled over moaning softly. The creature was attracted by the hurt noise. It probably sounded like a wounded animals cry to it.

It sprinted towards the captain only to be knocked aside by Dusks blade. It finally gave up and disappeared into the wilderness.

That might affect our plans. If we left the captain he would be easy prey to the beasts. But we could just seal him in the pod for safety. Now we know that this forest can be dangerous.
~
So heres the thing: I will present you: the readers, to make a choice: Either tell me that you want them to leave the captain or to bring the captain with them.

Whichever choice that has the biggest number of votes by the time of the next chapter will be chosen. This will have a major effect on the story. Choose wisely.

Type: 1. For leaving the captain behind.

Type: 2. For Bringing the captain with them.

(If you've ever read those "Chose your own adventure books" its like that.)

Sat, 01/07/2012 - 18:43
#28
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Leave the captain behind. He

Leave the captain behind. He isn't Oslo or Feron.

Sun, 01/08/2012 - 14:06
#29
Isisdelltion's picture
Isisdelltion
Bring

Bring him along, he deserves to live!

Sun, 01/08/2012 - 18:58
#30
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Need more votes! Ill make a

Need more votes! Ill make a chapter tomorrow if the votes arent even

Sun, 01/08/2012 - 22:19
#31
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Necroterra
OMG GOOD IDEA

Wow, that's an awesome way to write a fanfic, and hopefully it will make it more fun for you too! I vote for bringing him along, I feel like it will make it more interesting. If we leave him, you just walk away and hes not in the story anymore.

Short: I vote take him, good idea!

Mon, 01/09/2012 - 14:35
#32
Valorai's picture
Valorai
lEt me say something before I

lEt me say something before I make the chapter tonight.....

He'll still be in the story either way.

Mon, 01/09/2012 - 17:45
#33
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Bring him along wins! Chapter

Bring him along wins!

Chapter 4
~
The next day we decided to bring the captain along. Who knew if the creatures claws could scratch through the pods metal? We couldn't take the chance of him being killed. We found a cloth to hold him on. We held him high and hiked into the jungle/forest.

We were still running. I estimated we had run a mile, or less. We saw no evidence of the creatures we had encountered before. Although... I did see some eyes looking at us. We stopped for a moment. "Wait a minute..." I said. "Were are we going?"

Dusk said, "We'll we need to find other knights. Then we can see if we can help the captain." he motioned at the captain. He had a dent in his helmet and was moaning. "How about I climb one of those trees?" I suggested. There was a tree behind me that was taller than the others. "Ok. Be careful though. I started to climb the tree.

The tree was rough and there were good places to lay my hands as I climbed. I was near the top and I slipped. I had one hand still on the tree and was able to grab a branch with my free hand. I reached the top. I looked around. This was a forest. There were trees all over. But I did see scrap metal too. There was a do in the distance. I started to see that there were pods all over. I climbed back down the tree, remembering the direction of the pods.

"What did you see?" Dusk asked. "I saw a bunch of pods in that direction." I said. I pointed my hand straight in front of me. "Lets go." Dusk said.

We saw the pod a few yards in front of us. We also saw that a sharp rock had skewered the pod. "Should we go inside?" I said. "I guess..." he said. I opened the hatch of the pod. The rock had come up through the pod so that it was halfway to the ceiling of it. There was a knight in there. The rock went straight through him. We walked outside, out hope crushed. But then we saw the other pods. Could there still be survivors?

After 10 minutes we found 4 other knights. One came up to me. "Did you receive the transmission when you crashed?" he asked. "No" I said. I was confused. "What are you talking about?" Dusk said. The knight began, "When we all crashed we received a transmission that there's a rescue camp near here. The knights found out that the native species were friendly and we all need to head to that camp." He looked behind me. "Is that the captain?!" he gasped. "Yes." I said. "We were able to get him to our pod. Do you have any medical supplies?" He shook his head. "They ought to have some at the camp though." He walked off. "Let's go" I said. We started to head to the camp that the knight told us about.

With two other knights we walked. Soon though the cloth we found to hold the captain was getting worn. There were leaves though that we used. We got some bark from the tree and padded it with the leaves. Once again we walked.

We saw some pods crashed into the mountains. There was a sign that said, "ReScUe CaMp." We walked on the steps that were carved out of stone.

In the rescue camp, some knights came to greet us. The one that looked in charge walked over. "You have the captain!" he said. "We'll give him the help he needs. You have done a heroic thing. Thank you." She took the captain and went to something that looked like a medical tent.

I looked at Dusk. "What now?" I said.
~

This will now range with more selections.

1- Missing companion. (Mission. Helping someone find their friend.) (Extra)

2- Trapped! (Mission. A knight is trapped in the elevator with low energy.) (Extra)

3- Explore the camp (Extra)

4- Look for the guy in charge. (Story)

I would suggest the missions. They are extra so you can read more!

Mon, 01/09/2012 - 18:34
#34
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Isisdelltion
Missing Companion

I'd go for the missing companion mission. Also, I've noticed Qwex and Soro haven't been added in the story yet. I'll suggest to add them together because they would probably be in the same ara a therefore the same pod. Maybe even make them friends. Also, great story, and I LOVE the choice thing!

Mon, 01/09/2012 - 18:39
#35
Necroterra's picture
Necroterra
I vote for the missing

I vote for the missing companion as well.

Tue, 01/10/2012 - 12:29
#36
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Mine

Trapped.

Tue, 01/10/2012 - 16:00
#37
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Lol. There should be and

Lol. There should be and Authors awards! Best written, best plot, least mistakes. )Of course id win them all XD)

Tue, 01/10/2012 - 16:00
#38
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Lol. There should be and

Lol. There should be and Authors awards! Best written, best plot, least mistakes. )Of course id win them all XD)

Tue, 01/10/2012 - 18:06
#39
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Necroterra
^.....

Apparently not the least mistakes award, though.

Tue, 01/10/2012 - 18:43
#40
Valorai's picture
Valorai
(Cries) Anyway. I might not

(Cries) Anyway. I might not be able to make new chapter tonight. At least not if I don't finish homework.

Tue, 01/10/2012 - 19:38
#41
Isisdelltion's picture
Isisdelltion
Well good luck...

...with your homework! Cause I want to read mores!
Anyways, I would obvidhflywin teh laestmitsacks! :D
(Tranlation:I would win the least mistakes, by a long shot) JUST KIDDING!

Wed, 01/11/2012 - 02:52
#42
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
Sorry for pestering, but what

Sorry for pestering, but what were the terms of my denial?

Wed, 01/11/2012 - 15:35
#43
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Accepting 1 new character!

Accepting 1 new character! Must be: Sane. No 'special' powers.

Wed, 01/11/2012 - 15:49
#44
Psychodestroyer's picture
Psychodestroyer
I wanna try...

Name: Winnip

Arsenal: Cromalisk suit, Striker, Defender, Antigua.

Personality: He's a nice, kind guy, but normally clueless to things around him. If something happens, he's the last to know. However, he'll try and help others as best as he can, although more often than not, his habit of taking his guesses as truth gets him and whoever he's trying to help into more trouble.

Bio: Used to be very curious about everything. But after a particular... incident and a stern talking to, he stopped being so curious. Unfortunately, he went a bit too far, and is now next to ignorant.

Other: He likes...shiny stuff...a lot...

Thu, 01/12/2012 - 18:02
#45
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Ill accept it, but ill have

Ill accept it, but ill have to edit the bio and the personality a tinsie bit.

Chapter 4 (Extra mission) Missing companion

We decided to find a place to sleep that night. Since there was so little space, all knights had to share space. We were lucky and slept in one of the cushy pods. Dusk, me and another knight slept there. It was hard because that knight was weeping. "Can you please stop crying?" Dusk said. "We kind of need some sleep...." She looked at him. She looked distraught with worry. "I'm sorry.... It's just my brother... I'm not sure he made it..." She said. We looked at each other.

"Do you know where his pod landed?" I asked. "We were in the same pod. When I opened my eyes after the crash, the hatch was open and he was gone."

Dusk said, "Well then he could be ANYWHERE. In the forest, trapped in a cave.... He's probably dead though." That set her off. She sobbed louder than before. "Nice job." I whispered to Dusk. Now we'll never get any sleep."

I put my hand on her shoulder. "Don't you worry. Tomorrow, we're going to find him." She stopped crying. She looked up at me and thanked me.

We started to sleep again. "Are you crazy?" Dusk whispered. "We'll never find him!" "Sorry, but it's not like we have something better to do."

We slept the rest of the night well.
~
The next day, we asked the knight were her pod landed. After telling us where it was, we headed into the forest.

We walked for a few hours with no luck. Dusk said, "This is pointless. We'll never find him!" After he finished a pod rained from the sky. We heard it thump on the forest floor. Without a word, we ran to where the pod seemed to have crashed.

When we got there, we saw that the pod must have exploded upon impact. We walked into the wreckage. I looked down and saw a knights leg. I looked at Dusk. "Let's not." I said. We started to walk away, but I stopped. In the distance was a shimmer. It looked like metal. And it was moving. I told Dusk what I saw and we ran over to where I saw the shimmer. I saw a knights footprints on the ground. I started to where they were headed.

Something ran from the bushes and blocked my way. It was another creature. But this..... looked purely evil. The wolver wanted food, but this.... wanted to kill us for maybe no reason. It had black skin. COMPLETELY black. The blackest black I could think of didn't compare to this black. It stood on two legs, and hard dark red, sinister eyes. It had long claws, at least a few inches. It had fangs that gleamed in the light. It had a black spikes on its back. It was hunched over, and looked poised to strike.

I took out my sword. I blinked, and it was gone. I was confused. I stuttered, "Wh-where'd it go?" "Where'd what go?" Dusk said. "The creature!" I screamed. "You saw it? Didn't you? He shook his head. I described it to him. "It was probably your imagination." he said. I was shaken from seeing the hideous creature. I went back on the trail the footprints seemed to follow.

We eventually saw a knight huddled next to a tree. He looked insane. He saw us and said, "Oh no... You're not taking me away from this paradise. IT'S WONDERFUL!" He twirled around and fell on the ground. "You should come with us." I said. "No!" He whined. "You caught me! I would have gotten away with it too! If it weren't for you meddling kids and your little dogs too!" ((Heh heh. You see what i did there? It was uh... Never mind...))

"Two things" I said. "We're the same age as you, and what dogs?" I looked behind me. 7 of the creatures we encountered before were sneaking up on us stealthily. One snapped its jaws at us. "RUN!" I yelled. We grabbed the knight and ran in the direction I thought the rescue camp was at.

It was hard with the knight struggling, and the creatures were gaining on us. I saw the camp up ahead. For some reason the animals yelped and headed back into the forest.

We walked into the camp exhausted. Medics came over to take care of the knight. As they were leaving eith him, the knight that asked us to do this came up to him and said, "Winnip!" They hugged and walked off to the hospital. We looked at each other and laughed. "Why do you think the creatures left?" I said. A knight came over and pointed at a machine above us. "Sonic emitters. They keep the wolvers out." He said. "Wolvers?" I thought.

The knight came over to us and said, "Thanks for bringing my brother home. I'm Samantha." We shook hands.

We headed to the pod to get another good sleep.
~
Like the creature I described? Just something that cam out of my imagination.

1- Ask what to do. (Story) You must choose one of these:

a. Find out if the captains better.

b. Explore yourself to find out where to go.

c. Find Samantha. She might just know what to do.

Fri, 01/13/2012 - 04:20
#46
Duskfinder's picture
Duskfinder
Captain

Captain

Sun, 01/15/2012 - 11:07
#47
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Bump!

New chapter today! Winning choice: Captain.

Only one comment? (And that was someone saying a choice....)

Mon, 01/16/2012 - 18:36
#48
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Chapter 5 We decided to go to

Chapter 5

We decided to go to the captain and see if he’s better. We walked to a huge tent that seemed to be the place where all the important knights where.

Inside, we saw knights with papers trying to get somewhere, and everyone was working. I saw the captain at a big desk with some other knights. He looked like he had completely healed. No…. He had a big rip on his shoulder. It had been closed, but there was still a scar there.

We walked over to him. When he saw us, he smiled and greeted us. “Hello! I’m told you are the ones who saved me on the Skylark.” After he said Skylark, his face looked like he just remembered what had happened to it, and his smile disappeared and he trembled a little.

“Yes we did.” I said. We told him the events that had happened when we saw him on the bridge. He listened when we talked about us saving him, but when we described the Skylark’s destruction he grimaced. “It’s in the past. There’s no reason to relive it.” He said. I asked about his wounds. “They’re fine. I was pretty bent out of shape but thanks to you two I’m alive and well.” “That’s great.” Dusk said. He asked, “What do we do now? Live on this planet?”

“The first knights that crashed here found a native species called ‘Strangers’. They are friendly, and let us access their home ‘Haven’.” Dusk thought for a moment. “If you want to get out of the rescue camp, you should take the elevator” The captain pointed behind himself, “And then You’ll reach Haven.”

We thanked him, then we left the tent. “What should we do?” I asked Dusk. ‘He thought for a moment. “I guess we should go to Haven.” He said.

We headed for the elevator.
~
We went down the elevator. When we reached the bottom we found out that Samantha and Winnip were our partners. "We decided to go to Haven now that we found each other" Samantha said. I asked how Winnip was doing. "The doctors helped me." He said. "They got all the crazy out of me." We found some vita pods and grabbed them. We went down

We walked a while and after a minute we found another elevator. A few wolvers popped up. "Get ready!" I said. The wolves ran towards up and we fought. The alpha wolver went after Dusk. 3 wolvers went after Winnip and Samantha. A wolver that had foam at the mouth went after me.

~
Winnip and Samantha
~
"mOVE!" Winnip said. Samantha dodged a wolver lunging at her. She smashed the creatures neck and it crumpled to the floor. She looked at Winnip and saw him slice a wolvers tail off. It whimpered and then lay still. "Where's the third one?" Winnip said. "I don't know" Samantha said. They looked all around. It was nowhere in sight.

~
Blue
~
The rabid wolver tried to bite at my feet, with success. My armor protected me but even that wouldn't last. I managed to cut it's ear when it delivered a bite with such force, it ripped through the armor. Even though we were robots rabies still did damage to us. It did something to our parts that made inactive. I screamed as loud as I could then got out my Antigua and shot the wolver several times. It collapsed on the floor dead. I fell on the floor too. I saw Winnip and Samantha running towards me. The, I blacked out.

~
From Winnip's view
~
Blue fell to the floor looking exhausted. We ran to her and saw her wounds. "We need to get her to Haven!" I said. We ran over to the elevator. Dusk was a few dozen yards away. "Hurry Dusk!" Samantha said. "Go!' Dusk yelled. The alpha wolver jumped on him and he fell down.

"Ok ok..." I said. "Do we go up or down?" I said frantically.

~
1. Up
2. Down

Wed, 01/18/2012 - 11:53
#49
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Down.

Down.

Wed, 01/18/2012 - 14:36
#50
Valorai's picture
Valorai
U crazy fool

Wait, you WANT her to die?

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