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Sat, 02/04/2012 - 14:18
#101
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Srry, I had to change him a

Srry, I had to change him a little for this fanfic to work.

Sat, 02/04/2012 - 21:14
#102
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
?

Daikar is accepted, right?

Sun, 02/05/2012 - 06:32
#103
Valorai's picture
Valorai
U shall see. 0_o

U shall see. 0_o

Mon, 02/06/2012 - 01:45
#104
Fallenhope's picture
Fallenhope
......

...... not many people commenting.....

Mon, 02/06/2012 - 04:34
#105
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Duskfinder
anyone youvwant can be leader :)

MEEEEEE

Mon, 02/06/2012 - 12:56
#106
Isisdelltion's picture
Isisdelltion
*SHOCKITY SHOCK MCSHOCK*

"THERE." *SHOCK* "ARE." *SHOCK* "PLENTY." *SHOCK* "OF." *SHOCK* "PEOPLE." *SHOCK* "COMMENTING!" *SHOCK*

Mon, 02/06/2012 - 14:35
#107
Valorai's picture
Valorai
So..... 1 Dusk, and 1

So..... 1 Dusk, and 1 Blue....... Anyone else plz comment to decide who will be the leader.

Mon, 02/06/2012 - 15:14
#108
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Isisdelltion
Blue

Blue

Mon, 02/06/2012 - 17:36
#109
Valorai's picture
Valorai
oK! New chapter tomorrow!

oK! New chapter tomorrow!

Mon, 02/06/2012 - 18:46
#110
Duskfinder's picture
Duskfinder
lolwut

Why Isis? WHY??!! This shall not go unpunished >:[.....OFF WITH YOUR HEAD MUAHAHAHAHAHAHA

Mon, 02/06/2012 - 18:57
#111
Valorai's picture
Valorai
There will be no beheading in

There will be no beheading in my fanfic! Go behead isis in a different fanfic!

Mon, 02/06/2012 - 19:05
#112
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Isisdelltion
BEHEADED >:D

NOES MY HEAD! LUCKILY YOU'LL NEVER FIND OUT THAT MY REAL HEAD IS SOMEWHERE...

WHERE YOU'LL NEVER FIND IT!

Tue, 02/07/2012 - 04:25
#113
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Duskfinder
Omigod its under the golden

Omigod its under the golden Apple tree surrounded be carnivorous eggplant/bird mutants isn't it?

Tue, 02/07/2012 - 12:53
#114
Isisdelltion's picture
Isisdelltion
Golden Coconut Tree to be

Golden Coconut Tree to be exact...
YOU SAW NOTHING
*Throws down smoke nacho, disappears*

Tue, 02/07/2012 - 14:46
#115
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Valorai
Well if you real head is

Well if you real head is somewhere else, can i haz ur fake one?

(Pokes Isis's fake head with a chip. *I wonder if it would taste good*!)

Tue, 02/07/2012 - 19:55
#116
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Isisdelltion
Fake head replies "Sure."

Fake head replies
"Sure." *Creepy severed head smile*

Tue, 02/07/2012 - 20:57
#117
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Rachio
Hello

Hello

Tue, 02/07/2012 - 22:46
#118
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Psychodestroyer
Bye

Buhbai

Tue, 02/07/2012 - 22:57
#119
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
...

Two memes, I believe, have sprouted from this site.

Wed, 02/08/2012 - 14:35
#120
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Valorai
Hello Lord-Vanaduck. How are

Hello Lord-Vanaduck. How are you today. *gives awkward smile*

Srrry about no chapter last night. maybe today.

Wed, 02/08/2012 - 17:14
#121
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Valorai
Actuually, maybe no chaptersa

Actuually, maybe no chaptersa today

Sat, 02/11/2012 - 19:13
#122
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Valorai
Current: Welcome to

Current: Welcome to Haven!

Chapter 9
~
"Blue" they all said. I was overwhelmed. We all pitched in, and the Spiral Alliance was formed.
~

END OF 'WELCOME TO HAVEN!'

NOW: Finding the saboteur...

~ Dusk

We all went to the arcade after a few days of roaming in the clockworks. Blue's injury had healed, and the future looked bright. Although there was still a problem left unsolved.....
The air was humid and clouds had formed above. The arcade was cold and quiet, the computers and elevators providing the only sound. Blue, Dusk, Enigma, and Winnip were about to go fight the snarbolax. They had done so several times before, and they all had almost enough of it's fangs to buy some equipment from Brinks.
Brinks and some other knights found a life by selling and/or trading equipment for other things. Although business was slow, more knights were arriving everyday. I began to wonder how many knights Haven could hold.
Some knights were hanging around the gate with the snarbolax in it. How did they come up with all of the names for those gates? The knights noted that we had arrived, and one with a sinister skelly set walked up to me. "Can you please come with us? The 'former' captain of the skylark wants to see you."
I looked at the others. "Sure" I said. The knight let out a cough and fidgeted. "He would just like to see you and your friend "Blue"." sinister skelly said. "Ok....." I replied.
I later came back to the gate with just Blue and I. The knight told us to follow him. After many twists and turns around Haven, we found a building that seemed to be a command centre of some sort. We walked inside were the captain greeted us. We said hello to the captain and he frowned and shook his head.
"Call me Rodgers" he said. This was rare. The captain never gave out his name. "I would like to ask you something..... We have a small problem that I think you could handle easily."
"What kind of problem?" I said cautiously. "We found out the saboteur is still alive" Rodgers said quickly. It was like a slap to the face. I thought that the saboteur died in the skylark were he was hopefully having a slow, agonizing death. Dusk cursed under his breath then composed himself. "Capt- um... Rodgers, we will do anything to help bring justice to the skylark." Blue agreed.
"Well that's good news! We have a few leads....." The captain laid out a sketchy map of the clockworks and notes where they think the saboteur might've camped out. "So." I said to Blue, grinning. "Where to?"

~
Choices to look for the saboteur:

1. Wildwoods
2. FieryFurnace
3. Wolverden
4. JellyPalace
5. Ironclawmunition..
6. Graveyard
7. Treasurevault

Srry for the delay!

Sat, 02/11/2012 - 19:17
#123
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Graveyard. Also, took you

Graveyard.

Also, took you long enough.

Sat, 02/18/2012 - 10:16
#124
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Im srry about the delay...

Im srry about the delay... again.....

Current: Finding the Saboteur. (Graveyard)

~Blue

We delved into the clockworks after a few hours, ready to find the saboteur.
"How exactly will we know what the saboteur looks like?" I asked.
"I didn't think of that..." Dusk said.
Winnip grinned. "I think we'd be able to tell a saboteur from a regular knight." We went onward, unsure of what we'd find. We came to a graveyard, merciless, and heartless. "Just like the saboteur" I thought in anger.
While I was thinking a stumbled across a grave. When I saw an arm pulling my leg down into the ground I screamed. I whacked the arm with my sword, and it retreated into the dirt. "I hate graveyards...." Enigma said. Just then a phantom appeared in front of us and screamed in Enigma's face. As if responding to the scream, a dozen or so zombies popped up and walked over to us. I charged my leviathan blade and let it go. The swing scattered the creatures around us but they were quickly coming back. I just noticed that unlike other graveyards, this one was littered with totems. When we knocked down a zombie it just came back. I quickly decided that the saboteur wouldn't be here. I told the others to follow me to the elevator. we ran along, knocking around the zombies, and destroying obstacles. At one point they were a good distance behind. I noticed out energy was low, and I ordered everyone to use a health pill. As I let the health pill revive me a phantom appeared behind me and struck. I fell to the ground. It was as if the phantom had ripped every molecule apart. I felt dizzy, and I wanted to sleep. As my eyes closed I saw Dusk fighting off the phantoms. He was outnumbered. As one phantom disappeared the zombies finally caught up. There had to be at least 30 of them. I saw Dusk charge up his sword when a zombie jumped on him. He flew across the ground and hit a wall. Then I closed my eyes.
~
Samantha in Haven
~
The others left me behind on the trip to the graveyard. Which suited me just fine since I had something to do. I went to a merchant and asked for the biggest, strongest bomb they had. They showed me it, and I had just enough to buy it. I thought about Dusk and the others. Did they suspect? No, they didn't have a clue. I threw the bomb in the air and caught it with the same hand. Too bad they can't know. But I must go kill the saboteur. I grinned. No. Not a clue.
~
Dusk in graveyard.
~
The phantoms got me, and I was knocked out. But after awhile, I could see where I was, and that the phantoms were lifting the four of us. I was able to glance down. Bad idea. I saw I was being lifted over a fog. It had to be at least a 560 foot drop. Up ahead I saw some ground floating closer. There was a brown door that looks like it should've been disintegrated years ago. The phantoms let out a scream and the doors opened. They carried us inside . I could hear the door being shut. Beside me, I saw Winnip looking terrified. I thought that I needed to escape. But I still couldn't move. Up ahead, I saw a giant coffin with something inside. As we drifted closer the phantoms slowly and gently dropped us and bowed to the coffin.I stared in horror as the biggest phantom I've ever seen drifted out of the coffin. It let out a scream I'm sure destroyed one of my ears. It looked like it was angry at the phantoms. They stood up. The giant phantom smashed it's arm on one of the phantoms. I saw the smashed phantom in the small crater. It was moaning, which I thought was impossible. "weren't phantoms invinceable?" The giant phantom picked up one of the hurt phantoms arms. I watched in what seemed like slow-motion as the giant dropped the phantom into it's mouth. I heard the screams of that phantom. The other phantoms let out some screeches that made the giants expression change. It looked like it was thinking. I noticed I could finally moved, and I got up only to drop to the floor. The others also were getting up. The giant looked at us curiously. It let out a scream so painful, I felt like my mind was being ripped out. I saw some white smoke coming from my body and heading towards the giant. The other phantoms cleared the room. I realized it was trying to suck up my conciousness. The others went into action and started attacking the thing. It paid them no attention. There was no way to beat this thing..... I saw Winnip jump up to the thing and stab his sword into the face. It screamed and knocked Winnip back. The pain must have been to much because he was unconscious. The others followed his example and started attacking the face. I saw that Enigma was trying to send the sword through his skull. It worked, and the phantom quickly went back to it's coffin. I fell on my knees and felt my strength retuning. I grabbed Winnip.
"Hurry! It'll be back!" i said. We ran out of the building with the phantoms following. I saw we were close to the elevator. We stepped on, and I saluted the phantoms. "So long.....Suckers!" We returned to Haven alive.
~
Wildwoods
Fierfurnace
Wolverden
Treasurevault

Sat, 02/18/2012 - 10:34
#125
Softhead's picture
Softhead
Treasure Vault.

^

Fri, 02/24/2012 - 15:32
#126
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Isisdelltion
:D I couldn't resist...

Comment

Fri, 02/24/2012 - 19:54
#127
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Valorai
Im gonna quit with the

Im gonna quit with the choices, since only atrum seems interested.

Fri, 02/24/2012 - 21:05
#128
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Duskfinder
sorry no chance to post...

Treasure vault

Fri, 02/24/2012 - 21:07
#129
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Duskfinder
wait a minute

Who are you and what have you done with Atgatg!?!?
..
..
..
/evil eye

Fri, 02/24/2012 - 21:43
#130
Softhead's picture
Softhead
SHE IS ATGATG.

-_-

Fri, 02/24/2012 - 23:14
#131
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Duskfinder
is she nao?

You might've fooled atrum but I'm keeping an eye on you "skolverbyte" or should I say Dr. Vladmire?!

Fri, 02/24/2012 - 23:56
#132
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Fallenhope
I'm with dusk.

I'm keeping an eye on you......

Wed, 02/29/2012 - 15:18
#133
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Valorai
:3 Srry I havent been able to

:3

Srry I havent been able to post for like..... a week....

But I was actually moving to a new house and my internet wasnt working.

Also, I need ALOTof characters. Im not saure how many yet.

Needs: Name

Gender
Personality (May or may not be included.)
Bio
and...... I guess if you want you could put some other stuff. Only knights accepted.

NO powers. Or.... anything supernatural.....

Also i need a villian. Not an insane one. This person should be more like an assassin.

And Dusk. You got me, I am Dr. Vladmire.

Wed, 02/29/2012 - 19:46
#134
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Duskfinder
EYE NEW IT!!!

Name: DeVel
Race: k-night
Villain
Weapon: Crimson Hammer (5*)
Personality: UBER-EVIL
Bio: One day De-Vel and his brother ,Noobicus, were walking down a bridge talking about how high CE prices were when he accidentaly pushed Noobicus off the bridge. After that incident he basically made professional assasination his hobby because he was AMAZING.
Other: has the uncanny ability to make people think about raisins when he stares at them for a long period of time.

Wed, 02/29/2012 - 19:56
#135
Valorai's picture
Valorai
I am going to eat you.

No. Just, no.

*Pokes Duskfinder. Poke*

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End of story.

Wed, 02/29/2012 - 20:33
#136
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Isisdelltion
NOOO!

AHHH! RAISINS!

Fri, 03/02/2012 - 09:42
#137
Softhead's picture
Softhead
T_T

Name: Korin
Gender: Male
Personality (May or may not be included.): Determined, Focused, young,
Bio: A colbalt knight who wants to be the best Colbalt knight ever, even if he gets belittled by his peers who don't approve of his choices. He created the Vita Blade after buying it from Boost before retiering.
Set: Mighty Colbalt set, Asended Calibur, Master Blaster, Master Blast Bomb and a 4* Caultery Sword(Vita Blade) that has Increased DMG against Beasts and Gremlins high and CTR med( It keeps up with the other 4* weps)

Thu, 03/01/2012 - 16:53
#138
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Might be accepted......

Might be accepted......

Fri, 03/02/2012 - 04:02
#139
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Psychodestroyer
Hmm

Gimme a purpose for the characters, like some detail about who you need them to be, and some vague detail on the personality of the villain, or his purpose, and I'll see if I can help.

Thu, 03/08/2012 - 14:27
#140
Valorai's picture
Valorai
I still need some characters!

I still need some characters! Also, good news! Every week I'll be able to make 2-3 chapters!

Heres a list for some characters I need:

Story: Don't be afraid of the D.A.R.K!

Main Cast:
[OPEN] Im not looking fo specific personalities ofr these guys.
[OPEN]
[OPEN]
[OPEN]
[OPEN]

Gremlins:
[] Must be bad/evil.
[OPEN]

Story: Fire.

Main character:
[Valen] This person can't be good, but can't be bad either. This person should be kinda the asassin type of guy.

Spiralians:
[Omincan] These guys must be cruel, and greedy. They basically are the Main Character's rivals.
[Morhap]
[Ollaya]
Note: More slots for this story will open soon.

Story: When love gets you killed......

Main character:
[OPEN] This character..... Is dead. Must be a good person. (He/she will be watching the knights)

Knights:
[OPEN] These guys have to be good.
[OPEN]
[OPEN]
[OPEN]

Wolver:
[OPEN] This guy will be attacking the knights, but it must be good.

Other monsters:
[OPEN] Same for wolver.
[OPEN]
[OPEN]

Thats all the missions. Once in a while in the chapters, I'll give a few short stories. Something that doesnt have to do with the story itself.

Also, when a cast member gets taken, im just gonna edit this post.

Wed, 03/07/2012 - 15:31
#141
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Valorai
New chapter! Im going to skip

New chapter! Im going to skip past all of the parts.

Current: Finding the saboteur.

Dusk, Haven
~
" It was such a terrible day...... We searched every square inch of the clockworks and found nothing! NOTHING! " I thought. Not even a little snipe crawling up my arm and starting to sleep on my shoulder didn't make me fell good. A moved my shoulder making the surprised snipe roll down my back and onto the ground. It got up and looked at me with sad eyes. Ok... NOW I feel bad. It limped away with a noise of what I could only interpret as crying. It flew to a distant stranger. I looked at ally my friends. All of them looked sad. Except for Winnip and Samantha. They were faking. I couldn't blame them though, since they had just met Pelma..... It wasn't the search that saddened us, it was the loss of our good friend Pelma. We were taking a look for the saboteur in a fiery furnace, when a mob of gremlins attacked. It took a while for us to defeat them, when a bunch of gun puppies surrounded us. They all aimed their flamethrowing mouths at Pelma, and she was burned alive. After destroying the puppies, only her ashes remained.
We had just took a box full of her ashes and brought it to the newly contructed graveyard. We had a ceremony in her honor.
So really you can't blame those two.
We walked through the once shining Haven, which was now orange, like the sky, and our moods. We dragged ourselves to the captain of the Skylark to report we didn't find anything. How would he react? Would he be angry? A few knights were selling goods at the local auction house. There were so happy.... They had nice chats, and were seemed so ....happy...
Wait.
They were happy.... Weren't we trying to find a place like this before? A livable, beautiful planet, with a friendly native species? This place has Everything! Why do we want to leave? We set of to find the perfect planet after the desturtion of our home planet. And we found it. Well.... Except for the local clockwork creatures. If it wasn't for the saboteur, we'd still be searching! But..... It still commited a crime. Why wouldn't he/she just tell the captain about the planet? There was something missing.... Something that would solve this....
We trudged up the stairs to the building the captain was in. When we found him, he was staring at some papers on his makeshift desk.
"What are those?" I asked. The captain looked at us in surprise. So quickly that I barely saw it, the captain switched the papers on his desk with some on a book shelf next to it.
"These?" He asked, pointing to the papers from he book-shelf.
"Nevermind. Uh, Captain, we're here to report of no findings of the knight in the clockworks." I said. The captain hun his head.
"I was going to ask you at your friends funeral, sorry about that by the way, but Some people blocked me, and when I got around you were gone."
I couldn't believe it. The captain just disregarded Pelma without blinking. I tried to hold my anger as I said, "We've checked everywhere except for that place at the rescue camp." He looked at me strangely.
"Now why would you think that the saboteur would hide in plain sight?" he said.
Blue stepped forward, "No... Not the rescue camp itself, the second depth to the chasm when we were crossing----"
The captain stopped and immediantly said, "Second depth?"
"Yes, the second depth. So anyway---"
"There is no second depth" The captain said. I stared into the captain's eyes and realized it as the same time as The others.
Enigma said, "do you think.... Thats where the saboteur is?" We stared at each other for a moment. I ran from the room calling back, "I'll get Winnip and Samantha."
At the same time, the captain and my friends said something similar.
"I'll get you comlinks"
"I'll get the swords"
"I'll start the party!!!!"
Angelo said nothing, and ran with us.
~
I estimate 1-2 chapters left of this!

Thu, 03/08/2012 - 00:54
#142
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Frostrex
Ermm..

Didn't you accept Daikar. I mean, he is a Gremlin...

Thu, 03/08/2012 - 01:48
#143
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Psychodestroyer
Alright /cracks knuckles

Too bad I can't actually do that IRL...

ANYWAY, I'll give character Dev a shot:

Story: Fire

Main Character:
-Name: Valen
-Arsenal: Spiral Sallet+Culet. Dual Strikers.
-Personality: Withdrawn. He/she won't reveal any information you don't need to know. Keeps mainly to shadows, and is uncomfortable being in bright areas due to lack of viable cover. Hides personal motives. Has no friendly ties with anyone, beside professional relationships, so will therefore not hesitate to attack an ally, should it assists his/her motives.
-Other tactical: Prefers a quick skirmish where the opponent can be taken out quickly in a few short attacks. Tries to keep away from prolonged fights. Uses agility in battle to his/her advantage instead of brute force or defense.

Spiralians:
-Name: Omincan
-Arsenal: Ashtail set, Dual wields Dark thorn blades.
-Personality: Main rival of Valen. Has been trying to defeat him/her since before he can remember. He consider's them as more like friendly rivals, although Valen has yet to confirm it.
Other: he has a scar across his Ashtail Cap from where Valen nearly killed him. He was spared for unknown reasons, where Valen could have easily finished him off. He has puzzled about it since then.

-Name: Morhap
-Arsenal: Snarbolax Set, Ironmight Plate shield, Gran Faust.
-Personality: Omincan's right hand guy, he rarely speaks, but always acts in defense of Omincan, shielding him from either physical attacks or even intimidating people who question his boss. He is ruthless in battle.
Other: He's pretty big fr a knight, only JUST smaller than Feron.

-Name: Ollaya
-Arsenal: Fallen set, Acheron, Crest of Almire
-Personality: Sadistic in nature, she will not hesitate to attack allies if they are in the way of her goal. He takes pride in the painful deaths she causes, considering it a bonus if they have loved ones nearby that cry for them. She leaves them so they can feel pain, she considers it no fun if she kills them, because she doesn't get to see them weep.
Other: She lost her own family to a similar incident. She doesn't like to be reminded of that fact, and will go into a rage at whoever mentions it.
She also Likes Morhap, sometimes flirting with him, although he doesn't seem to particularly care, unless her antics embarrass him.

Story: When love gets you killed...(Atg, you're been reading WAY too many of my stories...)

I got nothing for them at the moment. Try again when you have a better idea of who you need them to be.

That's all I got for now, sorry bud.

Thu, 03/08/2012 - 14:26
#144
Valorai's picture
Valorai
? That one story of urs has

? That one story of urs has no connection to this whatsoever. And no one's actually in love with another person....its kinda a metaphore......

the 3spirilians accepted. Ill accept Valen if you accept these changes i want with him:
He has WAY to nooby gear. iD prefer he's 3-5 stars.
Ignore the part about keeping to the shadows. i want him to be professianal, so obviously no one would recongnize after seeing him/her once. Otherwise, great!

Thu, 03/08/2012 - 14:29
#145
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Also, im not gonna be putting

Also, im not gonna be putting characters in a story if they're normal... They have to be special. SrryDaikar

Thu, 03/08/2012 - 21:21
#146
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Psychodestroyer
No worries

Change the characters however you want; the moment I post them for your use, I release any connection they had/have with me; they your characters now.

Anyway, I made Valen nooby because I thought of him as a character relying less on gear. Do you have any changes in mind for him?

If you don't, I'd put Silvermail and Magikat hat. But change it to what you want, this is just a suggestion if you don't have something planned already.

Also, I was referring to the general title, not the actual story plot; I have no-idea where that goes.

I mean, Codename and Sacrifice...hm...someone always dies...and doing...what, exactly? XD

Thu, 03/08/2012 - 21:48
#147
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Kaijuhunter
Pick me plaz?

Hey Atgatg... Can i join the show?

Name: Darkace

Arsenal: wields a Sentenza, a Dark thorn blade, and a 5star version of the cutter that can curse and inflict shadow damage. Wears a snarbolax coat and a fallen helm. Also has a shadowy black cape.

Appearance: look at arsenal. Has red eyes And a shadow version of a com unit.

Personality: silent and deadly, a solo fighter. Relentless in battle

Bio: Darkace used to be a kind and loving child, but when his parents were assasinated, he vowed never to trust anyone again. He is now a malicious and heartless fighter who does not care if he kills. He takes no joy from killing and death, but has no problem with causing those things himself.

Hope u like, please accept him! Btw i have posted chapters 1-12 in The Battle for Haven! Im working on chapter 13, some of it is out now...

Fri, 03/09/2012 - 14:25
#148
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Srry Kaiju, that guy doesnt

Srry Kaiju, that guy doesnt sound like he'd fit with any of my characters.

And Psycho, he doesnt rely on his gear. He relies on his skill. But that doesnt mean he would wear nooby armor.

Fri, 03/09/2012 - 14:42
#149
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Psychodestroyer
It doesn't?

Hm.........

I won't go into a technical argument, but the main point is, he's your character now. Do what you want with him :) Make him tap-dance if you want, he's yours to do whatever to.

Mon, 03/12/2012 - 17:57
#150
Valorai's picture
Valorai
Bump!

Im gonna try to rap this up today.

WHY U NO MAKE COMMENTZ?!?!

Also, can you guys give me suggestions to make my fanfic better?

This is basically wrapping things up:
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After preparing for our trip we started walking towards the chasm.
As we approached the guard stationed so that no knight may go that way, it put a hand to his comlink as. With a nod, he waved us forward. We walked on the all too familiar pathway that we took when we reached Haven.
Even though we couldn't find Winnip and Samantha, we decided to go anyway. This was something that could not wait! We took the rusty elevator that seemed brand new when we arrived. Angelo pushed the button causing us to descend into the clockworks.
The elevator stopped.
"Oh..." Dusk said. "How... do we get to the second depth?" We looked ahead and saw the first depths of the chasm.
"How did we get to the second depth anyway?" I thought.
We stared at each other for a moment.
I thought of something. "Follow me!" I said.
We walked over to the edge of the depth. When we reached the side I saw a small cave, which was exactly what i was looking for!
"Go!" I said. I jumped off the depth and heard someone mutter "Is she crazy?"
I saw the branch i saw earlier and grabbed hold of it a couple feet from the ground.
As I dropped to the ground I heard the others coming, so I started towards the cave.
When I entered I had quite a shock. The cave was empty. No desk that I saw before. But the strange thing was that there was no stalagmites or stalactites, and the most shocking: A giant crater in the center of the room. I knelt to the ground where the crater was. The ground there was still warm, indicating that a bomb had exploded here not to long ago.
"Who do you think did this?" I said.
"I don't know. Probably some knight heard us talking and decided to do the dirty work himself." Angelo said.
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I will either finish tomorrow or later today.

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