Well I read it, looks pretty good and I can't wait for a new chapter :) Are there any spots that don't require attention every day, because I get on forums every day or two and I don't want to ruin it for everyone else.
[REBOOTED] Fanfic: Almirian Child-- Chapters Prologue-XI out!
Sat, 03/03/2012 - 09:47
#52
Well I read it, looks pretty
Sat, 03/03/2012 - 11:45
#53
Well...
THere is more spots for the Rival's Party, that I don't have and I won't be able t opost CHapter III- Dwayne with out the full riuval's party so check out what spots are left and post a Character page. :D
Sat, 03/03/2012 - 11:51
#54
Isekuube
Well, I like the thing that I did.
Sat, 03/03/2012 - 19:15
#55
Character app
Name: Diana
Gender: Female
Appearance and Weapons:
Primary Color is blue, wearing Dragon Scale Mail and Firebreak Helm
Equipment is a Gran Faust she wields despite disapproval from other knights for the cursed weapon, Barbarous Thorn shield, Polaris, Shivermist Buster
Characteristics: Very quiet and generally keeps to herself except when around her squad who she seems quite open with, when in battle she will go to any lengths to protect all comrades on her team, even going so far as to throw away defense all together to take a blow for another. She is extremely loyal to whoever she works with and considers betrayal the most foul crime imaginable.
Background History:
"Documented Reports on Knight Diana *****"
Originally part of the Orders Vanguard rank squad, disaster was met during a regular delve into the third tier of the clockworks leading to a near full party annihilation, details of what happened currently remain unknown. Only Diana was able to be found by the recon squad with a dark sword found on her persons. Despite attempts to convince her to part with it for studies she has shown strong resistance to handing it over and refuses to give any information as to where it came from.
Good/Evil: Evil, she follows any orders given by her squad leader Dwayne without question.
Expendability: Due to her willingness to put herself in danger its more then understandable if she dies during the story so I will leave that to you.
Role: Either Rival's second in command or Rival's All-Around
Sat, 03/03/2012 - 13:37
#56
Name: Kamron Gender:
Name: Kamron
Gender: Male
Appearance and Weapons: Personal Color is emerald and has Miracle Hood with Prismatic Glow eyes and Ash Tail Coat, can be upgraded if needed. Has Tabard of the Gold Rose as Costume and uses Freezing Atomizer for buying time to help party, Ascended Calibur for emergencies. If we are allowed 4 weps also has Prisma Driver and Industrial Catalyzer.
Characteristics: Very quiet around people he doesn't know, likes talking with party.
Background History: Used to be a rouge that would help any one he found, joined Dwanye's party when he found them.
Good/Evil: Evil, helps with minor injuries if needed and will assist
Dwayne with major healing right away.
Expendability: Completely your choice, I will try to be more active posting so I don't think I will miss posts.
Role: Rivals healer.
Message me in-game if you need me, im Korakc.
Sat, 03/03/2012 - 19:27
#57
Yeah, so.....
Oh hey, err.... Iseekube, can i add another character? Ill add Tsuna frim the other thread, he can be a solo guy who helps Ice.
Sun, 03/04/2012 - 06:36
#58
Fine with me but...
You can do that but I am adding my brother as a character, he is a loner.. your character can be his friend /shrug. Yeah I think that will work! Submit your character app as soon as you can ok?
Sun, 03/04/2012 - 07:21
#59
Rival Gunslinger spot is still open? Let me give it a 'shot'.
From a project I'm working on, not SK-related, but adapted to fit the SK universe.
Name: Unknown, goes by his alias, "Cross".
Gender: Male
Appearance and Weapons: Generally uses Gunslinger-themed gear, has each 5-star set that he adjusts accordingly with his chosen mission. Uses guns. Lots of guns, from Alchemers to "boss reward" guns (argent, sentenza, biohazard etc). His signature weapon is his Sentenza, often used as a means of execution. He still has above-average skill with a sword, despite only using guns.
Characteristics: Cold, melancholic. Uses dry, sarcastic humour to show his disdain at situations. Strategic mind, always changing loadouts for different missions.
Background History: Originally part of a 4-man squad called "The Horsemen", Cross went by the alias "Death". Along with his allies "War", "Pestilence" and "Famine", they plundered and pillaged the Clockworks for vast amounts of loot. Once they found out about "Project R", they sought to steal weapon blueprints for their own purposes. War, however, was using the Horsemen to obtain weaponry to rule the Clockworks and sow the seeds of chaos throughout Cradle. He killed Pestilence, who was growing suspicious, but a pre-recorded message sent by Pestilence to Death informed him of War's treachery. Death hunted down and killed War in cold blood, but not without losing his love, Famine. Since then, he became a soldier of fortune, hired gun, you name it, doing jobs from "improvised demolition" to assassination.
Good/Evil: In it for the money, but he's not evil, just battle-hardened. He still has a conscience, and shows discomfort in killing innocents. He still kills baddies in cold blood, however.
Expendability: Would like it if he lived through it, but it's your story. Your call.
Role: Rival Gunslinger, hopefully.
Tue, 03/06/2012 - 06:04
#60
Ok... Tsuna's personality is
Ok... Tsuna's personality is a bit diffrent in this one. Btw hes not an Archangel in this story.
Name: Tsuna
Gender: male
Age: 16
Race: Spiralian
Appearance: same as before with the Valkyrie helm and Skolver coat. His Divine Calibur has been edited to look a bit like a DA and an Ascended Calibur combined. Also has the same Divine Aegis. I am currently making a drawing so you can see what it looks like and Illpost the link on here later
Characteristics: now Tsuna is a bit more serious, but still comes through for his friends.
Bio: Tsuna is a lone boy, with no memory of who he was before. He wandered around Cradle in search of answers, but failed to figure out who he really was. He did however, become a great warrior as a result of all the battling he did. But to this day, no one knows anything about him...
Role: ICE'S SWORDMAN!
Mon, 03/05/2012 - 15:29
#61
Subject
Since I am starting Chapter II- The Divine Avengers I think it will be awkward for Ice to meet... well Ice so I'm sticking with Ice #1. I hope I don't sond selfish. So I am opening the Swordsman slot for Ice.
Wed, 03/07/2012 - 14:35
#62
Chapter II- The Divine Avengers
Here it is Chapter II- THe Divine Avengers! Hope you like it!
Chapter II- The Divine Avengers
“I hereby name you all, The Divine Avengers!”
Ice finally said what was on his mind the whole run, “Umm… guys do you want
to, uh, form a squad with me?” asked Ice weakly. “Well, I’d be glad to join your squad
Ice!” said Vot, “As long as you make me second in command” ”It’s ok with me!” said
Aria happily, “Can I be the Gunslinger of the party? I know that I have my Hunting
Blade, but I can still be a good Gunslinger!” Aria had crafted the Hunting Blade at
Moorcraft Manor, when she heated it up all the way.
“Ok, but you know we need more members right?” asked Ice “Well of course, or
at least I did” said Vot casting a playful glare at Aria. “I knew that too!” protested Aria, “I
had to tell Vot…” “What? I was the one who told YOU!” exclaimed Vot in
disbelief. “Guys.. umm, Guys…” said Ice as Vot and Aria went back and forth.
“GUYS!” yelled Ice. Vot and Aria were so startled, Vot suddenly snapped to
attention facing the opposite direction from Ice. Aria ran around in a circle and tripped
facing towards Ice. Ice let out a heavy sigh, “How should we get the right squad
members?”
Just then (Ice must have left the party open) someone new appeared in
the Terminal. The knight has equipped the Seraphic Set, she had a Heavy Plate
Shield strapped to her back with a Leviathan Blade in her hands. “Wow… talk about
convenience…” muttered Vot.
“Who are you?” asked Aria, “My name is Blue!” said the knight named
Blue, “Pleased to meet you! What are your names?” “My name is Ice” said Ice, “I’m-“
said Aria as Vot cut her off, “I’m Vot and this here,” gesturing towards Aria, “Is Aria,”
Vot said. Aria just scowled at Vot. “By any chance… are you in a squad?” asked Ice
casually, “Nope I came down here hoping I would find one,” Ice turned around and
mouthed “Wow” to Vot and Aria.
“Well…” began Ice, “We just made a squad, like literally JUST now as I was
asking about new squad members you came… do you want to be in my squad?” Blue
looked thoughtful for a moment then answered, “Why not? That was terribly convenient
for me and terribly convenient for you guys, I say yes!”
“Great! Now what role are you looking for?” asked Ice, “Well I am a great
medic,” replied Blue “Medic it is then!” said Vot excitedly as he pulled out a clipboard
and scribbled on it. “Why do you conveniently have a clipboard and paper in your
backpack?” asked Aria.
Vot stopped writing and looked up at the wall, “I have no idea…” he said blankly.
Aria shook her head in wonder and walked over to Blue. While the two talked and got
to know each other, Ice went over to Vot to see what he was doing. “What in the Alpha
Squad’s name are you doing?” asked Ice.
“I am calculating the odds of neuro toxic reaction in the core as of today,” said
Vot in a rather professor like tone. “Uhh, you’re kidding right?” asked Ice. Vot laughed
and said, “Of course I am, stupid! Here look,” Vot gave Ice the clipboard. On the
clipboard was some messy handwriting that said:
Leader- Ice
Second in command- Vot
Healer- Blue
Gunslinger and Third in Command- Aria Azalus White
Swordsman-
Bomber-
All-Around-
Other-
“Wow, we still have a lot to go then,” remarked Ice, “Ice-“ started Vot, “As of now
you will refer to me as “Sir”, thank you, as you were saying?” smiled Ice. “Sir,” said Vot
as if it were painful to say it, “That is not a lot of people left, we only need 4 more
people,” “Ok I guess you’re right…” said Ice.
“Then… I accidentally shoved him into the thorns and he had to throw his sword
at the Beast Bell to scare away the pack!” the two girls erupted into convulsions of
giggles. “I did not appreciate that!” yelled back Vot without looking up from the
clipboard. Even Ice laughed that time.
“I say we should go up to Haven to get more recruits!” said Ice, “All in favor
say ‘Aye’ ” “Aye” said everyone. “ Ok then, everyone get on board!” said Ice, he hit
the “To Haven” the elevator hummed with energy and up they went.
When they got up to Haven, Ice gave them orders, “Blue you go search the Town
Square, Vot you go to the Bazaar, Aria you stay here and search the Arcade, and I will
go to the Training Hall,” instructed Ice, “If you find no one go to a rendezvous spot at the
Mineral Deposits, Now MOVE OUT!”
Vot rushed to the Bazaar looking for possible recruits for his new squad. Vot
looked around, but saw nobody that could be in the squad. Disappointed, Vot headed
over to the Mineral Deposits.
Meanwhile in the Town Square, Blue was secretly glad she was sent to the Town
Square, because she got an outbid notice and she wanted to rebid on it. She went to
the Auction House and said to a blue Snipe with a green see-through visor, “Here, I’d
like to put 550 crowns on this Flame Soul,” the Snipe nodded and took the money, but
almost as soon as it took it, the Snipe gave it right back.
“What? Outbid already?” Blue wondered aloud. Blue gave 600 crowns to the
Snipe, but it gave it back again. “What the…” said Blue. She gave the Snipe 650
crowns, but again the Snipe gave the money back. Blue bit her lip, “Ok
that’s fine… one more bid,” Blue said to herself. She bid 900 crowns on the Flame Soul,
but unfortunately for Blue , the Snipe gave the money back.
Blue looked over to her side, and saw a knight with a Rock Jelly helm, Miracle
Hood, a Sinister Skelly Shield strapped to his back, and a Pepperbox, Master Blast
Bomb, and an Electron Charge all clipped to his belt, giving 901 crowns to a Stranger
for a Flame Soul.
Blue walked over to the knight and slapped him square across the face, “WHAT
are you doing bidding on my Flame Soul???” she asked fiercely. “Ok first of all, OW!
Second of all I need that Iron for crafting!” the knight said, now that Blue could see him
more closely he had a Cool Game Face accessory on his Rock Jelly Helm.
They both glared at each other and then the knight smiled and said, “Hey how
about we duel each other for it? Winner keeps it and the loser has to buy it for the
winner, deal?” “Deal!” said Blue triumphantly.
About the same time Blue and the mysterious knight made the duel, Ice walked
around the Training Hall for some new recruits. Ice sighed thinking that he was going to
find nobody and his idea for a squad would be ruined. He was about to give up when he
heard maniacal laughter and series of bomb blasts.
He rushed over to where the sound was coming from… it was over into the
Vial area. Ice saw that there was a knight that was suited up in the Mad Bomber
set, while throwing Big Angry Bombs and Ash of Agnis everywhere, scaring away
Snipes and even some newbies. “Woah man woah!” said Ice, “What the are you
doing?” “Hahahahahaha, throwing by bombs like crazyyyyyy!” “Why the heck are you
doing that for?” inquired Ice. The bomb crazed knight just shrugged and unpinned a Big
Angry Bomb from his belt and threw it at one of the Scuttlebots. He turned to Ice and
said, “It reminds me of the sun in a way that reminds me of gears!” he said, “Here, you
see!” he threw another one directly at Ice.
At the time Ice saw the bomber, Aria was having rotten luck in the Arcade. She
searched and searched, but no avail. “Ugh, dang this…” she muttered to herself. She
looked back and forth, she sighed, asked around, it seemed that everyone there was
already in a squad, she got so desperate Aria even considered a maroon Snipe to be.
She sighed and headed toward where Vot was waiting at the rendezvous spot.
“You sure you want to do this?” asked the knight, “You insult me!” she yelled
back. “Ok then, let’s go sign up for a duel,” he replied. A Duel was something that King
Krogmo introduced to his knights, basically a 2 man duel in Lockdown. 3…2…1…
FIGHT! Blue felt the adrenaline coursing through her veins as she made her way
through the forest thicket of the Lockdown arena. Blue felt paranoid as the suspense of
her enemy could spring her at any moment.
Blue jerked her head left, because she heard a rustle of leaves. She shook her
head and went on scouring the Lockdown field what she didn’t know is there was a
shadowy figure right behind her. Babababababam! Blue felt an explosion of fiery pain
on her back she turned around and faced her enemy. The knight puffed the smoke off
his Pepperbox, grinned, and pointed the gun at her face to fire again.
Blue fled and the knight shot Pepperbox bullets at her narrowly missing with the
occasional bomb flying past her head. Blue hid behind a ruin wall panting. The knight
jumped down from the wall and unclipped a Master Blast Bomb from his belt and got
ready to throw it at her.
This time Blue was ready, before the knight could react, Blue smashed her
Heavy Plate Shield against him knocking the Master Blast Bomb out of his hand and
put her Leviathan Blade against his neck smiling. “That’s the story of how Blue gets her
Volcanic Iron!” she told him. “Alright, alright, you win…” he said.
“Woah, woah, WOAH!” said Ice as the Big Angry Bomb hurled towards him. The
bomb landed right in front of him so the blast radius didn’t reach him. “You thought I was
going to throw it at you?” the bomber asked, “Now, why would I do that?” “It’s not like
I’m insane!” the bomber laughed. Ok then, “What’s your name?” Ice asked.
“My name is… TREVOR!” said the knight named Trevor. “Well, Trevor, I’ve
just made a squad and I need a bomber,” said Ice “Oooh! I’m not in one, so-“ Ice cut
him off, “BUT, I need to see your skill as a bomber, so let’s fight right here, right now,”
challenged Ice, “If you make a good match for me, because there is no way you will win,
you can join my squad, the terms are we fight in this general vicinity of the vial area, we
can use the vials and travel between the shufflebot area and the main floor,” “Ok, let’s
go!” said Trevor eager to get on.
Ice started in the shufflebot area, while Trevor started in the main
ground. “READY, SET, GO!” yelled Ice. He charged up his Gran Faust and unleashed it
on Trevor, he got out of the giant blade and threw an Ash of Agni over to where Ice was.
Ice rolled out of the way and jumped across to the main vial area. He picked up a curse
vial and chucked it at Trevor. Again, Trevor evaded it easily.
Trevor jumped in the air, spinning, unleashing bombs everywhere, Big Angry and
Ash of Agnis alike, leaving almost no room for breathing space in the main vial area. Ice
jumped for the shufflebot area, but he was too late, he was pummeled by blasts and set
on fire from all the bombs. Ice laid on the ground exhausted, “Good job, you can join,
Trevor!” coughed Ice.
“I wonder what’s taking Ice and Blue so long?” wondered Aria. “Maybe they
found somebody, or checking the Auction House, or buying something from the
Strangers?” Vot said as he shrugged, “Hope they found somebody, because our efforts
were failures,”
“Thank you!” said Blue as Grittle, the knight that she dueled earlier, handed her
the Volcanic Iron, “Now I can craft my Volcanic Plate Shield!” “You’re welcome,” said
Grittle. “Hey, by any chance are you in a squad?” Blue asked suddenly. “No, I am not,”
replied Grittle. “Well, you fought good today, do you want to be in mine? Or Ice’s for that
matter,” “I would be honored to be in your squad!” said Grittle. The two walked over to
the rendezvous spot, where Vot and Aria were waiting.
“Ok then, come on, let’s got to the rendezvous spot at the Mineral Deposits” said
Ice once he recovered. “Minerals? I like Minerals!” said Trevor happily. “You were really
good out there,” Ice remarked ignoring Trevor’s previous comment, as they walked to
the Mineral Deposits.
There was hugging, High-fiving, handshakes, and greetings
when they all got back. “Hey, how are you?” “What’s your
name?” “Cool!” “Trevor” “Good” “Pepperbox” “Found him while trying to rebid on
a material...” “Bested me in combat…” “Nobody” “I failed…” “Scaring Snipes” “That
Pepperbox HURT!” “Should’ve seen the newbies, haha!” “Ok ok! Settle down! Vot let
me see your clipboard!” said Ice. Vot handed Ice the clipboard and Ice looked it over
and added in the new recruits, Grittle as the All-Around and Trevor as the Bomber
Leader- Ice
Second in command- Vot
Healer- Blue
Gunslinger and Third in Command- Aria Azalus White
Swordsman-
Bomber- Trevor
All-Around- Grittle
Other-
“Now we need is the Swordsman and the Other!” said Ice, “Now for the name of
our squad!” “I hereby name you all, The Divine Avengers!” said Ice triumpantly!
Tue, 03/06/2012 - 17:13
#63
I like the new chapter.
I like the new chapter. Pretty good writing, too.
Wed, 03/07/2012 - 14:36
#64
Thanks!
Thamk you Korakc! I always do my best in literature!
Wed, 03/07/2012 - 15:12
#65
Nice, nice
Ok, first of all, great story. I like the characters and the writing style you used. You actually DESCRIBED the fights, unlike other ppl...*stares pointedly at a newbie*
Btw.... Is Tsuna accepted as Ice's swordsman?
Fri, 03/09/2012 - 14:28
#66
Join people! come on :P
Join people! come on :P
Fri, 03/09/2012 - 16:37
#67
@Kaijuhunter
Idkw but something is pulling me back from accepting him... Why don't you submit someone who doesn't have anything to do with any of your fanfics, I want to see spomething FRESH! :D
Fri, 03/09/2012 - 18:55
#68
Sure, sure. I juscame up wid
Sure, sure. I juscame up wid dis guy... Hope hes fine.
Name: Satoshi (yeah i like japanese names)
Gender: male
Race: Spiralian
Age: 13
Personality: outgoing and fun loving, but serious in battle. Kind of a wise guy at times.
Appearance: mighty cobalt set, Aegis and an Ascended Cali. Has a com unit. Also wields a Valiance.
Bio: Satoshi is a wise guy kid, an orphan and adopted son of Basil. He is the exact opposite of his "father", preferring to charge right into battle. He cant really keep his anger under control that well, but comes through for his friends when they need him most. He joined the Order after Basil trained him and became a very skilled boy, but eventually went solo. He found Ice's squad and decided to join them.
Role: Ice's swordsman
There, hope u like!
Fri, 03/09/2012 - 19:06
#69
There it is! :D
There! I like that, but I'm going to make a few tweaks to his arsenal. Probably a sword or two more swords (Weapon wise) Are you like on the forums right now? You've been very updatey XD
Fri, 03/09/2012 - 19:12
#70
Updated MP
Updated MP under the Main slot it's a question!
Fri, 03/09/2012 - 21:25
#71
Yes i am active right now
Sure, tweak his arsenal a bit. But try to make it somewhat spiral related, like a fireburst brandish or something.
Sat, 03/10/2012 - 00:47
#72
Another Character app
Name: Jonathan
Gender: Male
Appearance and Weapons:
Personal color Teal, Wearing Shadowsun Slicker and Chaos Cowl
Equipment is a Blitz Needle, a Sentenza, a Callahan though he avoids using it at all costs due to his sheer disdain for loud noises, and a Voltaic tempests he uses to short circuit enemies that are perusing him
Characteristics: Lazy, cowardly, self absorbed are all words that could describe this man. In battle he will often be the first one to try fleeing the scene but when forced he shows a truly spectacular aim as he never seems to miss a shot most likely due to his sheer desire to save his own skin. With his group though he never ceases to boast his own skill and quote "sheer dashing bravery in the face of danger" much to the continual disdain of most of the other members of the squad, if he it wasn't for his good aim they might have gotten rid of him already.
Background History: From a young age Jonathan always had dreams of being a hot shot shooter, he was given his big chance upon the crash landing to Cradle and thus has regretted taking that opportunity ever since. The order immediately recognized his abilities from his training and saw fit to start him with deeper exploration into the clockworks. At first excited he quickly realized what actual battle was like and promptly attempted to unsuccessfully resign afterwards. He almost got his wish to be relieved of service as team after team requested his removal due to finding him "insufferable" when he finally ended up on Dwayne's squad as their gunslinger. At first intending to have him removed Dwayne found himself impressed after seeing Jonathan single handedly shoot down an entire platoon of gremlins after being cornered. Dwayne has since kept him on the squad seeing an untapped potential with him that Dwayne hopes makes up for his daily presence.
Good/Evil: Evil
Expendability: Expendable though he would be more likely to let someone else take the fall for him.
Role: Rival's Gunslinger
Sat, 03/10/2012 - 10:41
#73
Lord Ice
I have posted the intro to Lord Ice hope you guys will check it out!
Sat, 03/10/2012 - 15:12
#74
Going well so far, then?
The story's looking as good as ever, but I'm kinda bummed that Cross didn't make it in, being first to apply for Rival Gunslinger and all. Still, I got Julius, and there's no point in filling up EVERY spot. There's only so much of my genius a thread can take. *emoticon that resembles sarcastic comedy* I'll get over it.
Sat, 03/10/2012 - 15:46
#75
@Scamall
Well, I can surely take a lot of your genius considering how AWESOME I am! *emoticon that resembles AWESOMENESS* Why don't you submit another character, I don't mind.
Sat, 03/10/2012 - 17:01
#76
Well, if you insist.
From another project. Two characters in one slot! Admit one, and get an extra free!
Name: Null
Gender: Male
Appearance: Green eyes. Head bandaged in pieces of his Sword's wrappings. Equipped with Valkyrie Set.
Weapons: Carries only a Sealed Sword and a bloodstained Darkfang Shield.
Characteristics: Rather eccentric and paranoid. Fearful and disturbed. Desperately wants help, but too mistrusting of everyone and everything.
Background History: Captured along with his squad by the Gremlins, Null was imprisoned and forced to watch the horrendous torture and brutal slaughter of his collegues and friends for days on end. Once the rest of the squad were gone, his turn came, and he himself was tortured. He eventually snapped when the Gremlins tried to kill him with his own Sealed Sword, the inner darkness of the blade calling out to him. Disarming the Gremlins and reclaiming his sword, he then went on to start his own slaughter, claiming his trademark Darkfang Shield while doing so. This left him with a split personality, with one trying to break free of the blade's influence, and the other relishing the blood it allows him to spill. He cannot remember his own name, so he calls himself Null, meaning "nothing".
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And now for something completely different.
Name: Faust (Read backstory)
Gender: Male
Appearance: Purple eyes. Equipped with Fallen Set.
Weapons: Faust and a Darkfang Shield.
Characteristics: Cold and calculating. Highly intelligent, but arrogant and vain. Master strategist. Insane in a sadistic playful sort of way, but easily angered.
Backstory: The alter-ego of Null, Faust surfaced when Null's psyche broke under torture and the dark recesses of his mind strengthened his sword, magnifying his inner demons to the point of creating Faust, a manifestation of the sword's dark power. He remained in control of Null's body long after killing the pack of Gremlins that indirectly created him, with Null powerless to resist, and growing weaker. It wasn't until Faust accidentaly dislodged some of his sword's wrappings, causing them to tangle themselves around his head, that allowed Null to force himself through, breaking Faust's hold over him. Since then, Faust has recognised Null as a worthy other self, forming an (albeit uneasy) alliance between them. Null still lives far away from any friendly contact for fear of causing pain, preferring to associate himself with the savage beasts of the Clockworks, for when his life is threatened, he removes his bandages, allowing Faust to reign chaos on their enemies. In this way, he keeps the Clockworks less populated with hostiles, which helps his fellow knights.
"Twist" Degree: If he seems "OP" feel free to nerf him a bit. I'd appreciate it if his (dual) personality was left relatively intact, however.
Expendability: Well, he's one of my more developed characters, but, like my last one, it doesn't matter to me. It's your story.
Role: Perhaps Rival's Other, where Null reluctantly joins up and convinces Faust not to attack the team, or an antihero/villain.
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P.S.: Since Cross lost out on the spot to Johnathan, maybe add Cross as a "mysterious supporting character", appearing every so often, and have him as a kind of mentor to Johnathan. You know, if you want.
Hope you like my idea(s). Scamall out.
Sat, 03/10/2012 - 17:29
#77
I can't quite see the point of this.
I mean, I've read the Almire lore, and if nobody will ever bother to check the wiki, I'm just gonna copypasta it. I see a point in the lore;this, I can't see one.
Lore:
The Citadel originates from a war-stricken land of three competing kingdoms. The smallest of the three, known as Almire, was a land of lush, beautiful trees and golden fields. It was ruled by a young and determined king known as Lord Vanaduke, and, despite its small size, Almire was recognized as a powerful nation for its military tradition and disciplined armies. Given time, it could expand to a mighty empire. For this, the other two kings feared him and formed a truce to invade Almire.
From atop the highest tower of the Grand Citadel of Almire, Vanaduke watched his kingdom crumble. His army was stretched too thin and it was not long before Almire would completely fall to the weight of the two combined armies. Going mad from the pressure, he fled from the citadel and vanished into the mountains, vowing that he would one day reclaim his throne. Leaving behind his family, his people, and his homeland, Vanaduke journeyed into the mountains to the east, driven by superstitious tales of ancient gods within their dark depths.
He tirelessly searched the mountains for many years, no longer the man he was before, but a mad hermit. Then one day he discovered a small cave that radiated with unnatural warmth, smelling of ash and sulfur. Within it he discovered a great chamber whose floor was waist deep in ashes. They were warm, and Vanaduke soon felt the sting of hot coals through his tattered boots. At the center of the chamber was a blackened shrine, whose deity's features were worn and indistinguishable.
Vanaduke began to whisper, reciting the names of his family, the names of the kings before him, and all the towns of Almire. He repeated this like a chant, increasing in intensity until he was shouting. With this he began screaming the names of the rival kings and all the wrongs they committed against his kingdom. He cried out to the god of the mountain to punish them, to give him the strength to take his kingdom back. In his frenzy he looked to the face of the deity and in it he began to see the face deform. The image burned into his eyes and brain like cinders, and contained that which sounded like the screaming of foreign tongues and war drums. With this, Vanaduke began to sink into the ash. He choked on the ash as it pulled him below, tasting sulfur his screams now sounding of roaring flames. Then transformed by the flames and cursed by the deity, Vanaduke was changed, armor fused to his skin, his hands turned to metal claws and beast fur grew along his back, the only feature to tell he was still Vanaduke was his face, even though twisted into the shape of a skull he was still recognized as who he truly was...
Many days later the citizens of Almire watched as fire began to erupt from the mountains. Leading an army of terrible fiends, Vanaduke returned to his kingdom, destroying the occupied forces of the two opposing kingdoms in a single day. In time the two kingdoms fell, Vanaduke's legion burning everything in their path. When he returned to Almire, it burned as well, for everywhere he went, and everything he touched was doomed to ash, thus while re-claiming his kingdom he destroyed it too.With nothing left to destroy, his legions left him and returned to the mountains, leaving the king to sit in his throne of ash and cinder, all the people of Almire dead around him.
There the cursed king has remained since, ruling a burning kingdom from an ashen throne, surrounded by the lost souls of those that once served him. It is there that the king still mercilessly destroys any who dare enter his kingdom, however much the ashen shadow of what was the rivers that flowed with clear water and the leaves of the trees glittered like emeralds under the shining sun.
There. See? Now before you complain to a Game Master about this, I'm not trying to troll, I just am trying to find the point in the rolecasted story. Ok?
Sat, 03/10/2012 - 17:57
#78
@Phantomhamachi
Hence the name of the genre, "Fan-fiction". I do see where you're coming from, though.
Sat, 03/10/2012 - 17:59
#79
Name Creepy the clever
Name Creepy the clever
Gender Male
Appearance and Weapons: costume:Authentic Phantom Mask. Armor: Perfect Mask of Seerus & Shadowsun Slicker With Exorcisor Crest & unclean aura. weapons: Hail Driver & Warmaster Rocket Hammer.
Characteristics phycolagicly UNSTABLE.
Background History:if First Friend mistery(you decide). if All-Around not entierly known he awakend in a hospital with no memery a spliting headace and diecknowses of comeplet insanity.
Good/Evil: evil if All-Around just wered if First Friend
Expendability: its ok that you kill him ( just make it funny and/or ironic)
Role ether Main's First Friend or Ice's All-Around
Sat, 03/10/2012 - 18:26
#80
@Scamall
I think I found the point: It fleshens out the Lore from the Almire soldiers' point of view. NOW I see the sharp point.
Sun, 03/11/2012 - 01:37
#81
Errr oops
Apologies Scamall, didn't notice beforehand that you had made a character already. I had just been looking at the sqaud and saw a lot of serious/dark characters and wanted to balance things out a bit with a man who just seemed like an utter bastard though slightly humorous. I liked the idea for your character though, was quite interesting ^^
Sun, 03/11/2012 - 06:50
#82
@Tailithia
Thanks, and don't worry. I got a character in already. I posted an idea about what to do with Cross, so there's still a chance. I'm happy you made it in, though. Congrats.
Thu, 03/15/2012 - 13:14
#83
@PPls
@Scamall Haha YES! I will make change teh Chapter name of Chapter III to: CHapter III- Cross! It will be a short charpter, but I am going to use it as a form of mystery.
@Regal Isn't Ice's All-Around taken by sombody? Let me check.
@Phantom :( Don't spam my thread and tell me that my Fanfic has no point, I dun wike dat D':
Thu, 03/15/2012 - 19:04
#84
Yes
Lol Ise i just got an idea. If you need help with ur story i can help. If not, ok. Thnx. Btw nice story so far, when does Satoshi come in?
Thu, 03/15/2012 - 19:09
#85
Erm...
*fidgets nervously* Erm, I have no idea... I have not thought of that XD Sorry, but as I'm typing this I think I have an idea. And what do you mean by helping me? Like with fan made chapters?
Thu, 03/15/2012 - 19:12
#86
Lol idk either
Sure, that too, but i can also make some artfor the characters. Not as good as Spiral spy, but I can still draw well. Just post whatever art you need and ill try to have it in as soon as possible. I guess i can help with some chapters... Idk.
Thu, 03/15/2012 - 19:22
#87
Sure,
YES PLZ MAKE ARTS! BUt can you not make the link to limageshack, it's blocked on mai computer DX
Thu, 03/15/2012 - 19:31
#88
Yup
Thats fine thats fine. Im doing hand art, not digital. It may not be as good as Spiral-Spy art, but its good. Ill be creating a pic for Ice soon enough. Btw im putting the link to Deviantart.
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 06:06
#89
/salute
Thank you :D I really appreciate it! lol But it doesn't look like my character is very happy D: Downer...
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 08:56
#90
@ Isekuube
rivel all arouned you just posted tthe titels as (Ice's)
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 09:24
#91
YAYZ!
Random post! :P
YAYZ!
Random post! :P
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 09:41
#92
I dide
I did, uh whoopsies lol I though I fixed that, thanks Regal
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 11:10
#93
newbie :)
errr... i love this thread xD really cool. Any chance of me making an app?
Who can i be if? (preferabaly good, or just an inbetweener :P) Tear-
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 11:14
#94
Tear, I mean, Angelic Tear :P
Sure if you check the OP it has the list of spots that are OPEN, hope you'll check the out :D
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 11:29
#95
Ok.
i will do an edit with app after you awnser, but chose a good thing for me :P can't be evil! :P
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 11:31
#96
Ok,
Reading that I have an Idea :DDDD You will be good person!
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 11:32
#97
Oh yeah,
I am starting Chapter III- Cross today!
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 11:43
#98
So, i make a person, with whatever role you chose for me?
i got two ideas for people, plz tell me what i should beeeee! so i can make an app! it might change the way i do my app :P
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 12:49
#99
SUBJECT DERP
Well, I can probably only use one character, but I'm going to make him the character who chases Cross around.
Fri, 03/16/2012 - 12:52
#100
@Isekuube
Wow, my character getting a chapter of his own. I'm honoured.
YAIY! NEW PAGE! Ok now for what I was going to say:
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Oh yes! I am starting on Chapter II- The Avengers as of today! /celebrate again!