It's already written that in canon, Xzei's dead. And Daren too. But the extra bit i guess is for the laughs.
[FANFIC] Intentions. The content isn't that mature. I have enough characters >< (any more will be minor one sceners)
"Next to me, Tsu was busy facing off against the other mercenary. He brought up a poisoned Striker, grinning tossing it from one arm to the next spinning it in his hand. Tsu sighed, pulled out her hand cannon, and sent him flying into the reactor."
Also, portal 2 "A year in the furnace room, then a year in my refrigerator, then TEN YEARS in the chamber I built where all the dead love puppies scream at you..."
Damn... I need to stop doing this...
Considering writing some spinoffs concerning the main characters. If you're interested in hearing more about a certain character, let me know.
There's this plot in my head that is dying to be written; Trobolta replacing Daren as Datura's older brother. Albeit a better less jerk[butt] one (unless of course, Datura is older than Trobolta then that's pretty weird). Note that he never had a sister before and thus not really knowing anything about Datura so this might actually be a bit fun to see how it all turns out.
I really hope you'll take this into consideration.
@trobolta yes, in the canon they are dead. But I liked the cheesy all-is-happy ending :>
How many years is this story set before the present?
Three years, this will go into detail what exactly happened that caused Harn to be removed from the Enforcers.
Name: Trobolta
Appearance: Has Cobalt Blue colored irises, black-brown hair, is regular height and thin build. Uses a full set of regular Cobalt armor.Has a Spur sheathed over his back, a holster for his regular blaster and a regular defender. Sports a strap worn diagonally across his torso that carries clips for his blaster. Has his and his brother's dog tags hung from his neck.
Bio: A local 17-year old Agarocian Knight whose recent loss of family member has turned him from a loud and reckless person to a kind and well mannered gentleman, much to other local Agarocians' surprise who knew him before the incident. All in all, he's very ruthless when it comes to combat, especially when it comes to gunfights. He currently has taken up residents at a kind old lady's bed and breakfast, much like he did years prior after his parents and their house were burnt to ashes. In turn for shelter, he goes around providing labor and protection from thugs and ill-intentioned Knights from harming to local residents of his neighborhood. But as per law, he is often incarcerated for his well intentioned but never the less, violent actions. He knows the local Agarocian Enforces well and tends to socialize with the less strict ones during his jail time. He doesnt like people talking about his late brother and everyone else prefers it that way. Anyone who harms the locals, badmouths his brother or prevents his visits to his brother's grave will meet a swift end, gently but mercilessly.
Personality: Kind and well mannered and always happy, even in battle, but the lesser thugs knows best to not mess with him. He's a close friend to every person on the block so everyone knows him well in return. He doesnt like to talk about his brother and everyone else prefers it that way. Unless they have a death wish. Because thugs who badmouths his brothers tend to find bullet holes in them seconds later. Often in their cranium if he's looking for a fight. His death glare has the ability to quieten even the most rowdy of thugs and everyone knows to take cover if he loses his temper. He kills off his opponents gently, whispering in their ears to recite prayers before their leave. He's often incarcerated, but he never resists arrest. He goes off a week visit to his brother's grave at the Academy's Fallen Memorial Graveyard a year to celebrate his birthday.
Still requesting character bios for Harn's story. The earlier you get em in, the better chance they'll have of getting a central role in the story.
Trobolta, your character is appearing very soon.
Name: Flists
Gender: Male
Appearance: Grey feather set with toasty valkyrie wings
EDIT: Ohhhh wait, if you could relate me to the long-dead Owlites somehow, that'd be really cool! Maybe as a descendant?
EDIT2:
Bio: Lived a normal life with a perfectly normal (if traditional) family. His winged Owlite robes were handed down from generation to generation to the firstborn male of the family, rumored to be crafted by the Owlites he is possibly a descendant of. Currently lives in an apartment by himself and works as a waiter at a nearby restaurant, but aspires to be a chef some day. Something of a scholar.
Personality: Likes to settle disputes and is somewhat cynical and sarcastic. Friendly and open to those who get to know him.
Arsenal: Carries a Grey Owlite shield to remind himself of his (possible) lineage. A Glacius rides across his back, and a Sentenza on the holster at his thigh. (If you don't want to use the 5* versions, degrade them to Wise Owlite, Blizzbrand, and Blackhawk)
Well that's not really fair for Art. You essentially just told him to make a sandwich with a really vague list of ingredients. Dont be lazy and write a bio and and more better app.
also;
Recipes exist up to 4*
0* gear: Standard issue gear, administered to every recruit at the age of 15.
1* gear: Salvaged gear that is slightly more effective than standard recruit gear.
2* gear: Equipment of a full-fledged knight, usually granted after a year as a recruit.
3* gear: The standard for any practicing, active knight with five years of service. Just as effective as in game 4 star gear.
4* gear: Knights using four star gear are veterans and Vanguards of the Order. Their effectiveness is equivalent to in game 5 star armor.
5* gear: No recipes exist for these ancient artifacts of destruction. Knights who wish to wield these mythical items must be exemplars of a Spiral Knight. However, the reason why they're prevalent in Art's story is that ownership of 5* gear is commonly gunned for by every Knight.
And Valkyries already exist inside the story, Art prolly doesnt want Knights as Valkyries in the story.
Name: Null/Faust
Appearance: Valkyrie Set/Fallen Set, Darkfang Shield. Green/purple eyes.
Biography: Captured along with his squad by the Gremlins, Null was imprisoned and forced to watch their horrendous torture and brutal slaughter for days on end. Once the rest of the squad were gone,his turn came, and he himself was tortured. He eventually snapped when the Gremlins tried to kill him with his own Sealed Sword, the inner darkness of the blade calling out to him. Disarming the Gremlins and reclaiming his sword, he then went on to start his own slaughter, claiming his trademark Darkfang Shield while doing so. This left him with a split personality, with one trying to break free of the blade's influence, and the other relishing the blood it allows him to spill. He cannot remember his own name, so he calls himself Null, meaning "nothing".
Personality: Rather eccentric and paranoid. Fearful and disturbed. Desperately wants help, but too mistrusting of everyone and everything/ Cold and calculating. Highly intelligent, but arrogant and vain. Master strategist. Insane in a sadistic playful sort of way, but easily angered.
I understand if there are changes you wish to make, or if you ignore him entirely. Regarding the magical change in his armour when he 'changes', I figure it would make sense compared to a mechanical planet inhabited hy Gremlins and Demons and all sorts of weird stuff.
EDIT: Reading Trobolta's post, I might not make the cut. Darn.
Well, you COULD write a better app for a better chance in getting into the story. Art doesnt get on (from what i can tell) Until a few hours later.
I rewrote my app like 3 times. And that didnt really help my first character be one of the more important minors xP
I guess you have a point, but it's one of my stock characters, and I've been having difficulty in getting past "auditions" with him. I figured a fanfic of this calibre would be a valid choice to apply for.
I thought I was being nice by giving Art free reign over whatever he wanted to write (it is HIS story, after all), but if you really think I should change it I guess I could add a few things...
Added a bio and expanded on a few other things in my other post.
Harn's story updated to Chapter 5.
Get those character subs in!
Harn's story updated to Chapter 5.
Get those character subs in!
Mine's post 64^
Story looks great so far =)
Harn's story updated to Chapter 6.
Hit a bit of writer's block, so chapters will come out a bit slower.
I knew you were writing something like Max Payne! I figured it out as soon as you wrote the bullet time inducing adrenaline.
And now you're practically writing a part from the game; 3 rich kids who think are hot shots, one of them whose dad owns the town, harasses an old man from a bar.
This ought to be nice.
Free Bumps, Episode 3
Hopefully, it would've been worth the weight.
Updated to Chapter 09 with horrible mother insults.
Facing a small crisis of laziness, so Harn's story won't be finished for some time.
I'm working on a satirical research paper on Jelly Cubes if anyone's interested.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1g_J8nGJGZHkZMoXNn1X_gQKsMAZHLMRqUKWv...
Done. Finally. I'm not motivated enough to write an Epi, so enjoy what I've done.
Xzie's experiences as a father would make for a hilarious tale.
Planning a sequel, so character subs are reopened.
I heard you're writing a sequel. So i came running.
How many years since the original story is the sequel's going to be in?
see this is what we need, more good book authors, not those cruddy recluse do-nothing people
Name: Grittle
Appearance: small parts of jelly, spikes all over his body, rock jelly helm with a cool game face acessory, Divine mantle, sinister skelly shield, Nitrome, Gigawatt Pulsar, 4* Ridagoon, and a fiery pepperbox at his dispoasal
Bio: Once a promenent officer in the order, captured and imprisoned to a freak expirement from gremlins, Grittle excaped, 2 thirds knight, 1 third jelly, he roams throught the clockworks, able to talk to jellies, he is high up in the pyramid of jelly royality, but still feels torn about whose side to choose, his original home, or his new home...
Personality: Mild manner, easily tempered, always focused onto one objective only, horrible multitasker and cannot make desicions easily at all.
im sure you wouldn't choose this suggestion, but i would be pleased if you will say why you chosed/not chosed my character for this story.
Wrote Prologue and part of CH1 so far, I'll post it when I finish Chapter 2.
Name : Tardas
Gear: Volcanic Stranger hat over a vog cub cap with a vog cub coat, with a leviathan blade strapped to his back and a Crest of almire. His stranger hat has a volcanic glasses and a volcanic scarf. Often wields a Leviathan blade in battle, but sometimes uses a divine avenger.
bio : A newly promoted champion with a taste for adventure, Tardas was assigned to Moorcroft manor to defend it from any danger that comes up from the clockworks with his close friend. But when his close friend died at the hands of a bandit changed his view of life for the worse, and he now wanders the clockworks, ruthlessly destroying bandit camps that he finds as revenge for killing his friend. He often refuses to listen the orders from superiors unless they involve killing bandits and is very protective over the little friends he has left, as on the inside he is very afraid of losing a friend again.
Personality: cold and aloof towards strangers, but surprisingly warm to his friends. A skillful fighter, Tardas can notice what most cannot, and can notice an enemy's weak spot before anyone else. Gets distracted very easily and has a frightful temper. Hates wine.
Just gonna reenter mine, with a slight adjustment;
Name: Trobolta
Appearance: has a cobalt blue colored personal color, is regular height and thin build. Uses a full set of solid cobalt armor and heavy round shades. Has an Arc razor sheathed over his back, a holster for his Needle Shot and a great defender. Sports a strap worn diagonally across his torso that carries clips for his blaster. Has a badge and camera hung from his neck that certifies his job with the press and his brother's dog tags. He occasionally smokes a pipe.
Bio: Once a reckless and loud brother who wished to become one of the Order's most greatest marksman. He and his brother we're really close. Could you blame him? His brother was the only last thing he had for a relative. They both had many interests. One of them were to join the academy, out of the need to bring justice, especially to those who made them orphans. But sadly; The younger didnt survive the academy. An accident regarding the destruction of the demo knight training sector has left his brother in pieces. So was the elder's heart. But as oath, he graduated as the top marksman of his batch. But the memories of his brother haunts him. Another separate day at the Arcade, he met with a young lad that reminded him much of his brother. But the cruelty of Cradle also took him away after a few months of bonding. Driven to the edge of insanity, Trobolta was prepared to take his own life. But on that faithful night, an image of his brother appeared before him. He thought he was really insane by then but the ghost plead not to do it. He reminded him of his purpose. His reason to join the Order. The two shared one final hug and an apology before the younger faded away for the afterlife
That night and the still haunting memories had been a constant reminder for his sole purpose in life. To bring justice. But unfortunately, he can't bare to risk another young lad down in the hellish depths of Cradle. He insisted to be transferred to a less lethal corps, and he was allowed. The Spiral Order Library or what many would call it The Wiki because of the ancient term for such that contained numerous data and information about Cradle, it's inhabitant, and it's history. While the Order still forces him down the Works for research, he was sent down alone. It would make due, because he wouldn't want to risk the lives of the expedition if he brought one. Plus, after all that, he prefers to keep to himself and avoid social contact as much as possible, even to his friends. Asides from dangerous research, he also worked part time for the newspaper. He took up photographic journalism and provided the written news with quality pictures.
Despite being in another sector of the order entirely, he sometimes is called forth for a expedition with a team that needs a remarkable marksman and he couldn't deny. Denying could lead to some serious trouble with the Order. Many have their hides saved by the blaster. They later known to become his closest buds, even if his face doesn't show it.
Personality: Is quiet and unvocal. Prefers to keep to himself but always a happy (or at least, on the inside, he tends to half frown a lot) lad. Even if he does speak, he keeps it short and simple. Great with a camera and gun but sometimes his rather still fractured mind state may reveal itself when dealing with the monsters. He gets hyped and manic/psychotic whenever he feels the rush and thrill of killing. He might even start laughing maniacally. But really, those who he considers really close has said that he reeks of brotherly love and care. Loves to read books and very intellectual, despite his recently established mind state. Constantly has fears for all jelly based monsters.
Since I've already included your character in both fics, I'll do some major character tweaks to fit him better, especially in the eight month gap that spans the events of Redemption and the sequel. He's going to be a surrogate Harn, in short, replete with jumping in the air and shooting people in the head.
Aw how sweet~ My char's going to be a drunk gun slinging reincarnate. I think.
BTW, Where the link to the new fic?
Off for a week in Washington visiting family and brainstorming ideas, so progress will be slow. Link will be live when Ch2 is finished, but at the moment only one person besides me has it.
Since he is going to fit into the role of a Max Payne might as well do some work into it.
Sequel looks sweet, really looking forward to reading this one =)
Awww man this is going to be one hell of a ride.
Name: Dreath
Appearance: has a lime green color with a weird armor combination of a skolver cap and a scary skelly suit. Has a silent nightblade used for pounding JK, a rocket hammer for smashing the twins, and a firecracker for bombing little gremlins. Uses a Grey Owlite
Bio: An energetic knight who wants to become one of the greatest knights in Cradle. His ancestors sacrificed themselves on the Skylark to save their only child (so their family will live on) during the crash-landing on the planet. He has a strange condition: Whenever he comes in contact with a faust or gran faust, instead of getting cursed (in battle), he sees his ancestor's last reaction before the skylark crashed, incinerating them.
After he bacame a vanguard, he volunteered helping with recruits on missions. He spends most of his time either helping or constantly replaying danger missions.
Personality: Dreath is a fun, energetic knight who might get a little too fun and spend the night with the enforcers. He is known to kill puppies and collect their remains to build custom mecha knights.
Xzei lives!
Daren gets what he rightfully deserves! All is happy :D
Love the ending (it is right?)