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[FANFIC] Intentions. The content isn't that mature. I have enough characters >< (any more will be minor one sceners)

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Tue, 07/03/2012 - 01:20
#101
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Trobolta
The bumps~

I gave my free one to this thread for being awesome.

Thu, 07/05/2012 - 08:44
#102
Dreathuxy's picture
Dreathuxy
bump

bump

Thu, 07/05/2012 - 14:41
#103
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
Addressing submissions

@Grittle: Taken into account, gear changes will be undergone to suit him better as my projected role for him as a Clockworks wanderer.
@Trobolta: Included
@Tardas: Changing him to an exiled Disciple of Vog, swapping shield for Dragon Scale and Leviathan Blade for Fang of Vog.
@Dreathuxy: Bio is a bit vague, gear is sort of inconsistent with his so called Vanguard rank, and in my story the Skylark crashed a loooong time ago. Consider reworking.

Thanks for the submissions so far, keep em up.

Thu, 07/05/2012 - 16:31
#104
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Isekuube
Wewp.

Decided to write a whole new app. So here:

Name: Arthur

Gender: Male

Arsenal: Magic Set with shock med Uvs, Grey Owlite Shield, and modded Argent Peacemaker to fire bullets at a faster rate. (Not ASI)

Age: 20

Personality: A very serious, frank and impassive character, who just does the job at hand, and does not flinch at death of others or himself. The only thing he cares about is his work, which is being a tech/engineer guy-person. (You get what I mean (I hope :3). ). Arthur only leveled up his shield and weapons because he felt no need for armour, the only reason he has a shield in weapon is in case that he is getting attacked. He never uses his shield, Arthur always keeps it on his back for safety and his Peacemaker clipped to his belt. He is a very secretive man who is always afraid of attack.

Bio: Arthur grew up being taught about Tech, Binary, etc. by his father who was a master Engineer. Arthur became very interested in this and became dedicated to it and wanted to learn about nothing else. As he grey up, he secluded himself from reality. The only people he would talk to is his father who many times tried to persuade Arthur to do try sword lessons or something else, but Arthur always refused. One day, while his father was working with a group of knights to try and decode some Gremlin Schematics in a lab in the Clockworks, a big group of Constructs flooded in and slaughtered them all. Good things and bad things came from that, the only good thing that came from that is that he finally took up a defensive weapon: An Antingua, the bad thing is he became very serious and has not laughed at a joke from that day on. Today, he just works with the Spiral Order with tech stuff.

If you don't mind a suggestion, I have one. But, I'll just edit this later with a suggestion in case you want it.

~Ise

Sat, 07/07/2012 - 12:36
#105
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Shadownox
DEAD BUNNY!!!

Hi. Can I use Merrioux again for the sequel? If not, here's a new app.

Name: Wench

Gender: Male

Equipment: Miracle Hood with a Cool Comm Unit and Ash Tail Coat with Dusky Bomb Bando. Carries a massive Levi on his back in a gigantic sheath and several concealed weapons (Fierce Flamberge, Shadow Driver, Magnus,) and a pouch carrying his main bombs, his Graviton Bomb and Freezing Atomizer. He carries a Wise Owlite Shield on his left arm.

Age: 19

Personality: Fun, easy-going, he loves hanging out in his father's old workplace, and has been playing with tools since 5. He is a brave guy, and protects his friends with a fierce desire. He flinches at the sight of blood, but, does his job well, remembering the "freak" accident concerning his father and explosions, leading to a gruesome death of someone close. His friends call him "Wrench", by the fact he loves tools. He has many concealed weapons, and is an all rounder, determined to master all 3 classes; Gunslinger, Bomber, and Swordsman.

Bio: Wench lived in a suburban, an average kid, sent to the Academy like everyone else at age 13. He excelled in all weapons classes, and prefered striker class. He was the top of his class, until the tragic accident that changed his life forever; an accident at Crystal Energy Mine 32 which resulted in a massive energy explosion, and the death of many, including his father. His mother fell into a deep depression, and one day, had a heart attack. She did not survive. All of the property fell to him, when he was only 16, but he sold it all. The only place he kept was his father's workshop, including all of his old tools. It was the place he was closest to. From then on, the Order took pity on him, and gave him a place to stay. He graduated later at 18, and bought his own house with some crowns. He settled down, living a quiet life, trying not to attract to much attention to himself.

Fri, 07/06/2012 - 05:54
#106
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Dreathuxy
I fixed it

My character app is redone, please consider putting my knight in.
thanks!

Fri, 07/06/2012 - 20:53
#107
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
Bumpy bumpy bumpy.

Bumpy bumpy bumpy.

Sat, 07/07/2012 - 04:05
#108
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Qwao
Aww

I liked Xzei a lot better than where the main char here seems to be going...

I have 2 questions though, maybe you can answer them x_x

Author

>Why pick a totally new character?

Story

>I thought Lucy(Gran Faust) fell with Xzei.. why was it on the railing?

Sat, 07/07/2012 - 04:11
#109
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Trobolta
The 1 Q is easily answered;

The 1 Q is easily answered; Why write about a(n in-canon, is a) dead character?

the second is prolly a necessary plot hole.

Sat, 07/07/2012 - 09:10
#110
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
@Owao: First question: I

@Owao: First question: I found my original character to be rather flat and generally predictable, not very complex. I'm trying to develop more complex, intricate characters, and testing my multiple protagonist idea. There's also a fair amount of blandness casting the same male swordsman throughout, so this is meant to add variety.
Second question: That'll unravel itself soon enough. Take note at the fact that the Faust Eva found didn't talk to her.

Sun, 07/08/2012 - 18:09
#111
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Porcrhind
My app

Name: Amus
Gender: Male
Equipment: Callahan, Blitz Needle, Gran Faust, Sentenza, Shadowsun set.
Age: 38
Personality: Angry most of the time, Unsocial, He's always drowning his sorrows in alcohol.
Bio: Amus was top of the academy when his misfortunes started. He was assigned to kill two rabid snarbolax, when he heard this he boasted of his great strength, this all changed when he had to face them. He was the only one to escape alive, with his arm infected by the swarm. Ever since then he's been mourning his fallen comrades, and hating himself for being the only one that survived.
Sorry for such a short app.

Sun, 07/08/2012 - 21:53
#112
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
Storyline for the sequel is

Storyline for the sequel is giving me a bit of a headache, so I'm going to toss my readership a small backstory fic.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1432Fhik1FyzMM1mkfFG4d-TApdbyWrhxly1R...

EDIT: Locked for writing, will unlock when finished

Mon, 07/09/2012 - 04:45
#113
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Thunderbog
Name: KrokoGender: MaleBio:

Name: Kroko

Gender: Male

Bio: A philosocator, an adventurer, with an insatiable appetite. Kroko loves to travel down the depths and search for ancient artifacts, even the most old, scrapped and lost scripts. He usually goes alone, unless someone wants to accompany him. Kroko is always profiled low, mostly to avoid eye contacts with interests on what he has, especially gremlins. He rarely gets artifacts, and isn't famous among Haven. He goes around, see the darkness, then reaches the Core, think of it what's inside, and philosophize. Myths can come true but we should know whether if we could do the same, or not, whoever knows what happened that day the Alpha Squad got into the Core, and how they managed to get in. Nobody knows. Kroko didn't gave up his thoughts of getting solutions and tried to figure out everything he could, just one day he passed out, found himself lying on the bed the next day, also has been denied on proceeding into the Core by the Spiral HQ! Kroko worked too hard as they seem to worry for his health. Now then, he tries to relax and enjoy chilling out, but still going into Clockworks to continue searching for artifacts and stuffs.

Personality: Happy-go-lucky as always, clever and manly. His appetite keeps him at the best if he finds enough food to eat. Kroko loves wolver kebabs, and tends to hunt down wolvers that he sees, although given pity to the young ones. He is quite lonely sometimes and lack of love, yet... he seems to be eyeing on men instead of girls(it was a joke used to prank the curious). He cuddles tamed chroma whelps and loves them very much.

Thu, 07/12/2012 - 00:38
#114
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Qwao
What's a bump

:0

Dear vog I can't wait for Lucy's appearance :|

Thu, 07/12/2012 - 18:54
#115
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
I had an epiphany at work

I had an epiphany at work brought on by a cup of coffee and six shortbreads. Expect the fanfic to come out faster now.

Also addressing character submissions.
@Dreath I'll have to redesign your character's appearance and change the rank/appearance, but I'll keep the main personality intact.
@Isekuube Name needs to be more fantasticalish, but I'll keep it in mind.
@Shadownow You can choose whether or not Merrioux reappears. I'm fine either way.
@Porchrind Likely will include, but shortly as a device in relation to how Trobolta acts.

Thu, 07/12/2012 - 19:30
#116
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Porcrhind
@Artfice

Wow sorry for the crappy app it's just that I couldn't put the bio into words I was going to edit it but I didn't have time
I sorta surprised he made it.

Thu, 07/12/2012 - 19:58
#117
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Arctifice
Re: Porchrind

I never said it was crappy. I already have a character slated to be a cowboy cop Max Payne character, having another hard drinking hard shooting brooding gunman would be a bit overkill.

Ideally, your character will appear near the end, as a future self ish character that will shock Trobolta out of what will follow as a descent into madness.

Fri, 07/13/2012 - 08:43
#118
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Dreathuxy
Thank You

Thank you for putting me in.

Fri, 07/13/2012 - 08:52
#119
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Isekuube
Fantasticalish, huh?

Care to elaborate on the pronounciation and what you mean by that?

Fri, 07/13/2012 - 09:19
#120
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
Re: Isekuube

http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/AerithAndBob

Having a Bob name would shatter the atmosphere and immersion I'm trying to create. I can easily modify Arthur into multiple more fantasy-esque names, like Artorias, Artheris, Arthurn, etc. Plain old Arthur is too familiar.

Fri, 07/13/2012 - 15:54
#121
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Isekuube
Ah, I see.

I like the first name. :D You can use that one. Actually, Suprise me, I like all of them. Ofc, that is, if you choose to use him...

Fri, 07/13/2012 - 21:48
#122
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
Bump.

Cool, Trobolta's gonna go on a mad trip.

Fri, 07/13/2012 - 21:51
#123
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Shadownox
DEAD BUNNY!!!

I actually like my new app better (Wench), so can you use him? Thx. :P

Sat, 07/14/2012 - 00:52
#124
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
Is it possible that Trobolta

Is it possible that Trobolta gets some mental fixing after his mad downfall trip?

EDIT: I mean by no more crazy. Complete revelation and closure and finally getting over his life long and increasingly drunk grief over his dead family.

Sun, 07/15/2012 - 02:58
#125
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Thunderbog
[redacted]

[redacted]

Sat, 07/14/2012 - 05:55
#126
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
@Thunder

Rewrite it! =D

Personally i think e had far too many pros than cons. Note that i havent really proof read it though, just looked over it.

Sat, 07/14/2012 - 07:24
#127
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
Thunder your character is

Thunder your character is already written in.

Sun, 07/15/2012 - 02:57
#128
Thunderbog's picture
Thunderbog
!

Eeehhhh! It seems I didn't went in for some time and forgotten to look about it. That's great!

Thank ye for accepting my submission!

Sat, 07/14/2012 - 19:36
#129
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Grittle
@artiface: thanks for the

@artiface: thanks for the acceptance, and i smell smell of SOILED DIAPARS!(from the baby diaper part)

Mon, 07/16/2012 - 01:59
#130
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
Keep it comin~

Bumps~

Keep up the good work, Arti.

Mon, 07/16/2012 - 16:00
#131
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
Currently seeking a handful

Currently seeking a handful of editors.

Editors will have executive editing privileges to fanfics of my choosing, but they must run every change through me, usually written in a different color for ease of identification. This is a non-paid position, I only need people who wish to edit help me out.

Mon, 07/16/2012 - 18:52
#132
Dreathuxy's picture
Dreathuxy
!

I'll do some editing

Wed, 07/18/2012 - 00:57
#133
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
A bump.

I wont let this topic get buried.

Thu, 07/19/2012 - 12:45
#134
Dreathuxy's picture
Dreathuxy
bump

bump

Thu, 07/19/2012 - 13:28
#135
Flists's picture
Flists
What was that about editors?

What was that about editors? I'll assist in any way I can.

Thu, 07/19/2012 - 17:45
#136
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
Contact me in game via PM or

Contact me in game via PM or mail if interested. My usual freelance editor is currently busy with life, and large portions of Intentions need a once over.

Thu, 07/19/2012 - 22:49
#137
Flists's picture
Flists
Are you looking for a copy

Are you looking for a copy editor or a general editor?

Fri, 07/20/2012 - 19:28
#138
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
Bump

Boop~

Fri, 07/20/2012 - 20:12
#139
Shadownox's picture
Shadownox
DEADBUNNY!!!

Did you put Wench in teh story? I haven't read that far yet. :P

Fri, 07/20/2012 - 20:44
#140
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
@Shad

Sadly not yet.

Fri, 07/20/2012 - 23:35
#141
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
Considering the length of it,

Considering the length of it, I have lots of events planned. The only person I can guarantee will get more spotlight in the near future is Trobolta, who will being the long fall into drunken gun fu laden pity. App's too good for him to be a one scene cameo.

Fri, 07/20/2012 - 23:51
#142
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
Yay

My inner fan just exploded. More spotlight is fun.

Sat, 07/21/2012 - 20:22
#143
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Thunderbog
Uh,

Excuse me, Artifice, there's a very disappointing and strange on-going right now as yer story seems, quite invaded by weird colored fonts, which it annoys me that anyone who is editing yer story makes me angry somewhat, could ye ask yer editiors not to toy with the story and make a mess?

Also, congratulations Trobolta, ye're going to appear more than others do. v(^w^)v

I wonder will Kroko appear at the story again? I surely do want to know as well. o3o

Sat, 07/21/2012 - 20:49
#144
Arctifice's picture
Arctifice
The bright color fonts are so

The bright color fonts are so I can track down the edits better.
I'll clean through them when I can.

Sat, 07/21/2012 - 22:44
#145
Trobolta's picture
Trobolta
Thanks Thunder

Now let's dance~ ^( ^w^)><(^w^ )^

Sat, 07/21/2012 - 22:47
#146
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Thunderbog
*dances with Trobolta* ^(^w^

*dances with Trobolta*

^(^w^ )><( ^w^)^

Sat, 07/21/2012 - 23:54
#147
Flists's picture
Flists
You don't like the pretty

You don't like the pretty colors? Sorry =/

Sun, 07/22/2012 - 00:35
#148
Thunderbog's picture
Thunderbog
It's not that I don't like

It's not that I don't like pretty colors, there's something bothering me and that's because someone said he vandalized, and it is disturbing.

Sure, Artifice gave ye guys the permission to edit, but not to make fun of it..

Look, in the Prologue, someone stated Arti is a butt, and then later on the pink font.. ugh.

I'm sorry if I got worked up, once happened myself on a arguement like that. If ye could understand.. >.>

Sun, 07/22/2012 - 00:50
#149
Flists's picture
Flists
=/

The pink font was just some friendly chat between editors, and we got rid of it afterwards since it wasn't part of the story. The "vandalizing" was just a little joke by the artist. I know there are some jerks on the internet, but hopefully you believe we aren't them =)

EDIT: It appears I was wrong about the "Arti is a butt" thing. Huh. It wasn't in a different color so I assumed he wrote it o.O (Editors were supposed to use different colors)

Sun, 07/22/2012 - 20:46
#150
Lizzi's picture
Lizzi

@Thunderbog

My apologies for being a bit playful. :/ I've been an editor for Art ever since he wrote Redemption, and he's used to me doing this kind of thing with other editors and doesn't seem to mind at all. Yes, I wrote the "vandalization" part (the "vandalizing" is the pink text >_>), and I meant no ill will with that. Again, my apologies.

And also, I'm wondering who put in the "Arti is a butt" part. It was there before I even got my editing privileges, so I assumed Art put it in there. o.O

@Everyone

I'm making the first chapter of Arti's story into possibly SK's first graphic novel/manga. I'm hoping to complete the first chapter by Friday, if not sooner. Stay tuned! ^-^

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