Thanks for all the support guys...... And Nice work on getting to a 3rd page, dude. Anyway, Night-wove, Can you send it again to Topoyozariane as my cousin read the mail, deleted it and said, "I forgot what was on it."
Cradle Wars [Accepting Character Applications!] [NEW!]
Sun, 02/03/2013 - 04:05
#102
Thanks
Sun, 02/03/2013 - 07:49
#103
Hey Knight!
I've been writing a new fanfic myself, and I've combined elements both from your story and Seatus's. Don't worry though, as you're in the opening credits of my first chapter
(BTW, what's your IGN? I'd like to be able to meet a good writer such as yourself. Hopefully your in-game skill is as good as your writing.)
Sun, 02/03/2013 - 07:55
#104
Wait Onoa, did you get
Wait Onoa, did you get Knight's permission to use his story elements?
Sun, 02/03/2013 - 08:05
#105
a-erhem, eehee, about that...
HE HASN'T RESPONDED YET! Then again, the only thing I have included so far is the fact that Topo's version of Cradle exists, so no story elements included in the fray yet. Still waiting for your response, Topoyozariane. BTW, I hope you're still going strong - it's been a couple weeks with no chapters!
Oh well.
Mon, 02/04/2013 - 22:20
#106
@Artistbma
In fact, I have gotten the green light from Topo, but that's not really important...
The real matter at hand is - what does BMA OF ALL THINGS MEAN? Artistbma... sounds like a mouthful to me, unless, of course, there's a good reason for it... '^'
Tue, 02/05/2013 - 05:29
#107
B
M
A
Initials, my friend. :)
B
M
A
Initials, my friend. :)
Tue, 02/05/2013 - 06:09
#108
Lolz
Anyway...... Working on the chapter! So here's a quote from Smosh: "SHUT UP!"
Tue, 02/05/2013 - 06:09
#109
Lolz
Anyway...... Working on the chapter! So here's a quote from Smosh: "SHUT UP!"
Tue, 02/05/2013 - 06:42
#110
Seriously Double Post.
Seriously Double Post.
Tue, 02/05/2013 - 17:42
#111
Bma stands for a name....
Bma stands for a name....
Wed, 02/06/2013 - 04:00
#112
Huh?
What does BMA stand for? A name? What name........ Anyway, after a few weeks of waiting, people...... I present! Chapter 13!
Chapter 13:
Tiny little skirmishes erupted all over the Arcade, allowing the injured knights no time to rest. Swords clashed, guns were discharged and bodies dropped to the floor, dead or injured. Caleb was in the heat of the main battle, involving Wenger and Kirko, leader of the infamous Omega squad. He slashed right and left, Gremlins Thwackers crying in pain. As he turned to stab another, he found himself facing the muzzle of a Pulsar. The gunner smiled, and pressed the trigger. The next second, Caleb was on the floor. It smiled mercifully as he discharged another, and yet another shot. It was then a blade erupted out from the Gremlin’s body. As the blade retracted, the body fell to the floor, revealing Kris, grinning.
“I love this blade! I wish this war would never end!” Gripping his Acheron tightly, swinging it as if it was a toy.
“I wish for the opposite.” Muttered Caleb, as he was hauled to his feet by Kris, and together they swung back into the fray.
It was hours ago before the skirmishes ended, forcing the surviving Gremlins to retreat and regroup.
“Victory is ours!” Yelled a Spiral, and the whole Arcade erupted into cheering. Caleb didn’t cheer, and quietly slipped into the infirmary, revealing Yttriu, sound sleep. Caleb shook his head, grinning. She wouldn’t wake up even in a war, but she would be startled by even the littlest sound. He sighed, and pressed his lips to her hair, when he was suddenly interrupted by Wenger calling out to him across the Arcade.
“What is it?” Asked Caleb.
Wenger fidgeted, fingering his Argent Peacemaker. “I need you to say your goodbyes to your girlfriend.”
“Why?”
“We need her as a suicidal trooper.” Wenger said it quietly, waiting for the shock to hit. It did.
“NO! Why don’t you get Feron and use him?!” Yelled Caleb, causing half of the knights to stare at him.
“We did. Remember the bomb that killed the retreating Gremlins? That was him. Now it’s your girlfriend’s turn.” He reminded him gently. Caleb sniffled, and whispered,
“I’ll tell her goodbye.” He trudged sadly to the tent. After his went in, he quickly got to work. All the weapons in the infirmary, which was a lot, was taken by him, and stuffed below Yttriu’s movable bed. He then covered the weapons with a white sheet. He took a needle, which was filled with paralyzing medicine, and applied it to Yttriu’s arm. Instantly, her tossing and turning slowed then stopped altogether. He then wheeled the bed out of the Arcade. It was until they reached the Exit of the Arcade then Wenger found them. “Hey! Get here back here! Enforcers, take them down!” Caleb quickly pushed the bed as hard as he could and sat on it. Together, the slid down the hill and into a forest. Finally, after a huge of amount of bumping and crashing, they stopped. As he looked around, he realized something strange. There was a fire, freshly lit, and a few hammocks. It was too late to realize it was a trap, until Caleb heard a voice whisper the words, “Take ‘em.”
Wed, 02/06/2013 - 15:14
#113
Whoa there.
Hot giggity diggity. Ain't that the double-cross. Darn it, you're making my conspiracy look like a five year old's fib! (Must make improvements...)
Wed, 02/06/2013 - 18:59
#114
Awwww
Awww..... Don't feel sad. It's just that i had more experience than you..... About 70 years more experience.......... lolz!
Wed, 02/06/2013 - 21:38
#115
Oh well
Then maybe I can ask you for advice on how to make awesome conspiracies? (What the heck, I'll just go to the CIA. XD)
In case you haven't noticed, I put up my first piece of fanart! It's on my thread waiting to be spread...
Thu, 02/07/2013 - 03:45
#116
Oh cool
Ummmm But no offense..... But my cousin say's it ugly, while I think it's pretty cute..... No lying! :D
Thu, 02/07/2013 - 14:19
#117
Horjay for feedbax
Your cousin is free to think hatever he/she wants. If they thinks it's ugly, oh well. (Sometimes even I think the gas mask makes the guy look like a pig!) Anyway, thanks for your support.
(Are you inactive on SK or something? I've sent a couple mIls to Topoyozariane, but I haven't got any replies yet. Help?)
Fri, 02/08/2013 - 02:15
#118
Wait
You did? Didn't receive it. Did you type the name in-correctly? Or maybe my cousin intercepted it and deleted it :(
Fri, 02/08/2013 - 20:04
#119
Awww
Awwww..... No one replies....... I'm bored.
Fri, 02/08/2013 - 23:41
#120
Chapter 14
Chapter 14:
Caleb awoke on a bed with clean white sheets. As he tried to sit up, he felt dizzy and he sat back down. He closed his eyes, took a deep breath, and then jumped off the bed. “Argh!” and he fell on to the floor with a thud. “Wha-?”He groaned, and he looked down at his feet. What he saw amazed and shocked him. One of his legs was gone, the pants near it bloodstained with blood. He let out another groan and closed his eyes. He heard a door open, and then a gasp. Immediately, that person cried, “Caleb!” Surprisingly, the voice sounded suspiciously like Yttriu. Yttriu hoisted Caleb back to the bed, filled with worry. “We were captured by the rebels, and then I realized that the leader was my brother.”
“Who?” Asked Caleb, then let out a groan as he tried to move.
“Don’t move that leg! A rebel’s Valiance accidently fired, and it took your leg off. And answering your question, his name is Henry. ”
Caleb joked, “Guess I can’t go Wolver hunting anymore.” Yttriu didn’t smile. She wrapped her arms around his waist, speaking through his shirt she said, “We’re outlaws of the Spiral Order now. There are death warrants all over the place.” Her eyes welled with tears.
Caleb hugged her close to him, and said, “It’s alright. Everything’s going to be fine.”
“Fine?!” Yttriu suddenly screamed in hysteria. “You lost your leg. Kris is back in Haven being interrogated and we’re living in a band of outlaws! How can everything be fine?” Caleb scanned the table for the syringe that made him sleep, and spotted it by the water jug. He cautiously grabbed it, and glanced at Yttriu. When she looked away, he jabbed it into her arm, making her yell in pain for a moment. The next, she slumped. Caleb caught her before she fell, put her in bed beside him, and whispered, “I promise. Everything will be just fine.”
Sat, 02/09/2013 - 06:08
#121
Wooo wee
Uh, Caleb...
Sat, 02/09/2013 - 17:53
#122
Wow, they are all jerks -_-
Amputated leg? Did not expected that >_>
You must give up the sake of the hunt by being a rogue instead
Hurrrrr
Mon, 02/11/2013 - 18:59
#123
OH
OH COME ON! SOMEONE READ THIS EXCEPT FOR MY TWO LOYAL FAN_FICTION READERS!
ME MAD!
Mon, 02/11/2013 - 20:22
#124
I read it! :P
I've read all of it, actually. Great work! Looking forward to seeing how it plays out.
Mon, 02/11/2013 - 22:49
#125
I ALWAYS READ THIS TAKE DEH
I ALWAYS READ THIS TAKE DEH CHILL CAPSULE .-.
Tue, 02/12/2013 - 05:03
#126
I read it like 5 minutes
I read it like 5 minutes after it came out, but I felt no need to post.
Tue, 02/12/2013 - 07:57
#127
Awww i'm not in any of the
Awww i'm not in any of the recent chapters and why did Caleb jab Yttriu with the sleepy injection?
Tue, 02/12/2013 - 17:06
#128
^
Use common sense.
Tue, 02/12/2013 - 19:51
#129
^
So he didn't trust the rebels although their leader was Yttriu's brother so he made her unconsious and decieded to leave their camp/base/base camp.
Tue, 02/12/2013 - 21:51
#130
:O
I was reading it about the same time as you were Artistbma.....
Wed, 02/13/2013 - 03:11
#131
lolz
@Rabeet You guessed! I'm going to change the plot then..... requires A LOT OF TIME TO PREPARE....... :\
Wed, 02/13/2013 - 04:22
#132
Actually
Actually, Rabeet....... I'm going to use it. No time making another plot. :|
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Chapter 15:
Henry walked past a dozen rooms filled with patients, and then reached the room he needed. He opened the door and found Caleb and Yttriu, on a bed. His first reaction was to immedeailty reach for his Acheron. Then Caleb looked up and panic filled his eyes. “I wasn’t doing anything with Yttriu……. I just jabbed her with the sleep serum. She was going hysteric.” Stammered Caleb. Henry believed him. Why? He did not know, but there was something in Caleb’s tone that made Henry believe him.
“It’s okay, dude. Just here to ask you and Yttriu, you going to a Weapon Raid in Depth 26 tomorrow? There’s a Gremlin munitions factory there”
“Uh…… I’ll speak for Yttriu this time. We’ll be going.” Answered Caleb, still quivering in fear, eyes on Henry’s Acheron.
“Alright, if you say so.” He slowly walked out the door, closed it with a bang, and walked back to HQ. As Caleb observed Henry go, he kissed Yttriu forehead once, and crawled out of bed. He landed with a thud, him wincing in pain. He crawled across the room, and then managed to open the door. He grabbed a wheelchair and his Valiance, and then wheeled himself past the corridor. Fortunately, he encountered no guards. Unfortunately, he heard a shout right when he was at the exit of the rebels’ Fortress. Sirens instantly sounded, and metal bars slammed all around him, making him unable to escape. Three guards and Henry stridden in front of Caleb. Henry made a ‘tut-tut’ sound, then said, “ Guards. Take him to a prison cell. Ensure he will not escape once more.” Then to Caleb, “I won’t tell Yttriu yet. I wouldn’t be the one who would break her heart. You will.” He laughed manically, as he watched his guards pull Caleb out of his wheelchair and drag him along the floor.
“You won’t get away from this, Henry! You and your rebellion will fall!” Henry smiled and said nothing, and strode back into his room, making plans for the raid tomorrow.
Wed, 02/13/2013 - 04:24
#133
Actually
Double post?
Wed, 02/13/2013 - 04:23
#134
Actually
Triple post?
Wed, 02/13/2013 - 15:27
#135
Hey
yo whats up.
This was a good chapter.
9/10 for effort.
Wed, 02/13/2013 - 20:11
#136
Name:
Name: Michael
Race:human
Gender: male
Personality: clever
Bio: when human, michael practiced karate and went to train. When 13, he wa launched Into space an landed on cradle. The spiral HQ accepted him, not realizing how amazing he is with a sword. He led many expeditions. He even ripped of Seerus' mask and made it his own, he is great at ambushing. He is a vanguard. He is clever, fast, good with a sword and a sharpshooter.
Hope I get in!
Wed, 02/13/2013 - 20:13
#137
8/10
Only suggestions;
More action and why don't you make the crimson order unleash a full rage attack?
Wed, 02/13/2013 - 21:58
#138
NOT YET
Cause if there is a full rage attack then that means their not smart. the KING AND SEERUS IS ALL ABOUT SMART
Thu, 02/14/2013 - 18:39
#139
Dude, he blew up his whole
Dude, he blew up his whole arsenal.
Can my character be in?
Thu, 02/14/2013 - 23:03
#140
Ummm
Your character Spiral Order/rebels/Bounty Hunter?
Fri, 02/15/2013 - 04:58
#141
Chapter 16 is out!
Chapter 16:
Two rebel guards pushed Caleb through a doorway, then another, then another. Finally, they reached where he should have been. Caleb thought of what Henry had told him, “Break her heart. Break up with her. Do anything you want, but in the end, I want her to hate you.” Caleb sighed dejectedly. He opened the door and found Yttriu sitting down, reading a book. She looked up when he arrived, and she grinned from ear to ear as she jumped up and wrapped her arms around him. Caleb quickly detached her hands and took a step back.
“Yttriu, I got something to tell you.”
“Hmm?” She said, as she sat back down.
Caleb took a deep breath, and quickly said, “I don’t like you.”
“What?” asked Yttriu, confused. “What did you say again?”
“I said I don’t like you, so back off. You’re a weak, lazy slacker, and nobody likes you!” Caleb shouted, inside regretting it immediately.
Yttriu stood up, not understanding, “What happened to you, Caleb? Is there something wrong?”
“Well, there’s something wrong with you, that’s what wrong!” Caleb heart broke to see her hurt. He wanted to call out, ‘No, I love you! Your brother Henry forced me to say this!’ But then Henry would have killed him.
“If you hate me so much, then I’ll get going. Wouldn’t want you to be sick of me any longer.” She whispered, tears streaming down her chest. She ran out of the room, sobbing as she went. Henry suddenly appeared beside him, and patted his shoulder, while saying in his ear, “Good Job.” When suddenly the windows exploded inwards and Caleb’s world transformed into a gigantic flash of blinding light. When he finally focused on something, a sword held by his neck, he saw Henry and the guards subdued and held by a headlock by Guardians of the Spiral Order. “Where’s Yttriu?” Said a familiar voice by his ear.
“Don’t know, please don’t kill me.”
“I would never kill you, buddy.” Caleb looked up and saw Kris, wearing full guardian armour. “I got another set.” And he threw it at Caleb. Caleb caught it with his hand, and immedeailty it merged with his body, growing and fitting until his body was completely clad in Guardian armour. “Now let’s kill some Rebels.”
“No.” Said Caleb. “I need to find Yttriu.”
“She’ll be fine. We need to find the other Rebels.”
“No.”
Kris yanked on Caleb’s arm, saying, “Right now, I outrank you. But since you’re a Rebel, I hereby arrest you. So you got to follow me.”
“I’m sorry buddy.” And Caleb kicked Kris right in the groin, followed by a fist to his head, rendering him unconscious. Then he grabbed a ascended Calibur, and ran off, trying to find Yttriu.
Fri, 02/15/2013 - 05:24
#142
/applaud
/applaud
Fri, 02/15/2013 - 17:41
#143
That was one depressing thing to do...
/applaud!
Fri, 02/15/2013 - 18:51
#144
Gtot it!
My character is a spiral order strategist and fighter
Fri, 02/15/2013 - 19:30
#145
That was one depressing thing to do...
Double post, sorry D:
Sat, 02/16/2013 - 07:50
#146
Yesterday was mah birthday.
Now im 15. Haha didnt think I was this young right?
Lololololololololololololollololol. /applaud Knight-of-Vanaduke Very talented indeed.
Sun, 02/17/2013 - 07:15
#147
A very nice chapter indeed
A very nice chapter indeed but i gotta ask WHERE THE HECK IS MY CHARACTER i mean WHEN AM I GONNA BE BACK?
Sun, 02/17/2013 - 09:36
#148
Awesome Story!
I really like it so far, and while there's a few issues, they're pretty minor and I think the story is still great even with them! I've also decided that I'll apply, here's my application:
Name: Mynah
Race: Wolver
Gender: Female
Personality: Very child-like, loves playing with things and is insanely curious. However, she's also kind of mischievous, and can inadvertently cause problems as a result of her playfulness and trickery.
Bio: Part of a Wolver pack until some Spiral Knights raided the pack. Fortunately, nobody was killed, but she and a few other Wolvers were captured by the Knights and taken to the Haven Laboratory to be experimented on. Currently, they're trying to create and artificial Snarbolax to protect against any attacks, Mynah carrying the best results of their experiments. Almost all the time, she's kept in a white room with no windows and only a few toys to play around with. As a result, she's constantly bored, and wants to escape to see the entire clockworks someday. She's tried to escape countless times, however, all of them have been unsuccessful and as a result, she's in the one of the heavily protected rooms in the Laboratory complex.
Appearance (for clarification): Her entire body is covered in black fur. She has three Snarbolax spikes on her back that are fully capable of becoming weapons, and her eyes have become a deep red.
I look forward to seeing the rest of the chapters!
Mon, 02/18/2013 - 20:21
#149
Um...
@Aekuryi Sorry Dude/ Dudette. I'm ending this..... Going to make another Fan-Fiction about this guy named Topoyozada. Please notice it! It's going to appear later..... So Mynah is rejected....... But if you want...... It'll appear in the next fan-Fiction.
@Everyone who has a character inside my fan-fiction: Please all comment and reply! Do you want to keep your Character inside this Fan-fiction, or would you want them to go in my next fan fiction?
P.S The Next Fan-Fiction's not a sequel.
Mon, 02/18/2013 - 20:28
#150
Sure
Sure
yay 3rd page