Clockwork Heroes RP [discussion][APPS CLOSED]

To all players: Once you get into your pod and launch, DO NOT continue to post. Important transitional events occur after launch that I need to handle.

I observed the Escape Pod in detail.
Small, Tight, gets the job done- It has a single seat and the rest is supplies to keep you alive.
Almost as if There's no way two people could fit. . .
*Squish*
"Stop touching my boob already, Leeroy! or. . . Wait, you're unconcious. That makes it twice as bad!"

Ok, I'll just post a "little" mental-time of Mundy while waiting for himself to man up and launch.
Also, is my narrative doing okay, or am I being too intrinsic and focused towards my character?

Aw, you didn't have to change your post! I was just being nit-picky about it ^^"

The way I see it, Mundy is a Valkyrie, and Valkyries are tasked with defending people. That means he has a greater burden of responsibility than most other knights. As a character, he seems introspective and a bit angsty; If he's to follow the path Serah told him to, he has to think of others more. He must be the source of hope when times grow dark. If there is no hope, he makes his own. His current character shows he can definitely be capable of that someday (just see how he freed himself!), but if he's as self-absorbed as you've indicated, you could use that as a jumping-off point for his development.
Does that sound like a doable development path?

Ummm... Wait! So the mess team got to the pods safely, serah died????, Den has not launch yet, and Ozlo is nowhere to be seen? I kinda don't get it so my post today mike be off to the weird side even more.

I'm kind of waiting on a response. Filia is still with Titan, Cherub, and Tor. None of them have replied recently.

Ozlo is still steering the ship from the bridge. Den hasn't launched yet. Aralon is putting civilians into escape pods. Note that while they could plausibly fit more than one person in each pod, there is only one safety seat, so the unseated passenger will die upon landing.
@Kaijuhunter: I thought Filia broke away from our squad. I was waiting on Titan. But maybe I shouldn't.

@Thinslayer
I guess, but I'll have to watch myself then.
@Kaijuhunter
I think he said that we were supposed to write our own "plots" as to how our characters got to the escape pods. Except for me and Hexlash, since our OCs were tagging along Serah and waiting for her response.
Well, your OC was also tagging along Cherub, but she was running to the escape pods regardless of what Cherub ordered, and didnt ask for any further instructions.

Name: Jeptha Volta
General Description: Medium Build on a taller frame. He has little combat experience, but has trained in the simulators to hone what skills he has to a sharp proficiency. He constantly looks out for anything out of the ordinary and is hard to surprise in general. He is a bit of a scavenger, picking up better gear as he goes in hope that it will help his chances of survival.
Equipment:
-Old zapper prone to malfunction
-Bolted blade obtained in the chaos of the Skylark evacuation. Has little wear and is surprisingly well balanced.
-Short dagger for emergencies carried on belt
-Spiral Round helm with mecha wings and bolted vee
-Spiral Brigandine (those pockets will be helpful)
-Standard issue Proto Shield
-Standard issue HUD and com unit in helm.
-All cosmetic items are in 'Military colors' http://wiki.spiralknights.com/Military except for his parrying blade.
Relevant background:
As a recruit, Jeptha was sent out into combat only once. This situation has had a lasting impression on him, as his commander died to Morai assassins right as he was telling Jeptha not to fight. Jeptha held out against these skilled warriors for a few minutes using guerilla tactics until backup came and the two assassins were killed with blaster and zapper fire. Because of this, Jeptha will not generally follow orders right away, as his commander may have lost only a quarter of his platoon if he had let the recruits fight instead of three quarters.

@Eltrooper: App accepted! Wait until I give you the word to post.
@Feline-Grenadier: It's true I'm not angry about the power play, but it did throw me into damage control mode. Serah wasn't designed to live through the crash. She was meant to shine for a little while then pull your heartstrings when she died. She was never intended to be co-squad leader with Cherub (he was to lead us all on his own for important midgame reasons), nor was her character designed with sufficient complexity to make her viable for the long haul. Her survival throws a wrench into the plot, so I have to figure out what to do with her before moving forward.

That's what I figured, hence why I said that her efforts could be in vain if you wanted it to be, or end up in some ambiguity like a coma. Either result, Aralon's attempt at rescuing Serah is mostly just to put a little practice into what she preaches.

Build around the wrench. . . And I mean that sort of literally, Despite the gremlin symbol being a wrench...
Erm. . .
Debilitizing condition causing hospital-bed arrest.
Even the writer is allowed to deflect a bullet in the cause of powerplay. . .
If you can't think of a role for Serah, don't. Or at least, not until later on.
Meanwhile, I shall keep having Skyla cover for the remainder of the ejectees.

But see, even that poses problems. If I make Aralon's efforts be in vain, sure, it might be 'realistic' in some sense, but it robs the effort of its significance. I could adapt and make her into a full character, but that would take considerable time and effort, not to mention adding one more character to an already ridiculous number of them. Ambiguity is probably the easiest option for me, but it similarly robs Aralon's effort of its significance.
I'll take counter-opinions.
@Liminori: Thanks Lim. :)

Well, it would make a nice addition to Aralon's larger list of failed efforts if you want to take the coma/death routes, as well as a good motivating force for the valkyries and a few other squad mates.
If Serah does survive the trip all the way to even Haven, she might serve as a wisdom-ish figure / motivator for Cherub and a few others. I expect her to play relatively minor roles with the extent of the damage she's taken.

But honestly, just not interested anymore in this.
Waste of a post #45697457

Waste of a post #45697457 - Tech-Star
Do note that Tech's also asked questions in the past that regrettably should not be asked prior to a Google search, so...yeah, one of his more regrettable posts. I'd take it that he now regrets it, but whatevs. That doesn't do much to hurt the thread. :P
On the other hand, what happened during the weekend? We've just got a few players left to finish up their side...

Yeah sorry about that.
An entirely useless post I created there, not the thread. Achieved nothing in any possible way other then filler.
Boy, I am a grade A human being aren't I, wasting everyone's time with useless talk on the internet.
I am just going to shut up and stop bothering you all to save what's left of any first impressions.

*Your fanfict was good; I was actually waiting for more.

I wish I could draw people in a more interesting fashion.
For example, 7th dragon 2020-II's art style is unique because all the characters are posed dynamically.
All I've ever drawn is people standing straight up with their hands holding a sword over their shoulder or something.
ugh my art needs improving so much
Inactivityishness; Summer school

@Feline-Grenadier: I got sick over the weekend. I can't speak for the others. Noel-Exside isn't responding to any communiques. And a couple players left.

@Thin: Is the Skylark beginning to break apart yet? If not, I can edit my post.
As for the "private ships" I mentioned, they are generally not going to be strong enough to clear even a small planet's gravity; the Isorans are still stuck on Cradle.

It is already breaking up in the atmosphere. Let those who have remained behind offer up their last hurrah to their brothers in arms!
*buckles up in a gun turret*

So, Not including myself, there are still others that are still actively playing, or just NPC's that need to get out of Skylark?

Application:
Name: Stenev Ironimil
Age: 36
Gender: Male
Personal color: Green
Gear:
-Fiery proto-gun
-Cautery sword
-Toasty flak jacket
-Toasty sallet(Toasty bolted V) (Toasty com unit)
-Proto-shield
Bio: Stenev Ironimil was a loud child, constantly pulling pranks on his 62 fellow class mates at the spiral academy on Yillomic, Yillomic was the moon of a large gas planet called Moorsume. During most of the Morai wars, Moorsume and it's tiny satellite where ignored by the militarys of both sides. until the release of the renowned ferrous felines, who were famous for killing either silently or with the war cry of "FOR YILLOMIK!!!"
But the war cry may have been slightly too revealing, because after a handful of major victorys for the Cats the Morai completly destroyed the planet and all structures opon it, only to find that all residents had left for Isora only hours before.
When the skylark departed, many of the ferrous felines stayed to buy it passage, defending with their last breaths. five came with the ship, four of whom died manning the turrets, now only one remains: Stenev ironimil
Start of his story I shivered, rolling my shoulders to free any loose ice crystals. It was strangely loud in the Cryo-chamber but not a single knights voice could be heard " who has ever heard of dreaming during Cryo-sleep?" I said aloud, pinching myself.
I started to put on my gear, slipping my helmet down over my ears. Immediately I heard the chatter of voices through my com-unit
"WARNING. ENTERING ATMOSPHERE."
Perfect, I wake up late at the only time when it would matter... I buckled my last strap and reported into my mouth-piece
"Knight 2567 Stenev is now awake, awaiting orders." and I was, for the first time, graced with the voice of Captain Ozlo in my earpiece
"Ohh, good, wait what am I saying? not good at all but it will serve my purpose. Knight Stenev... I have a job for you."
"Yes si-"
"Don't interrupt. we have no time for formalities, the Skylark was fired upon by an unknown entity and is crash-landing on an uncharted planet. my job for you is to keep the engine core from exploding, if it does the whole planet will be kaput and the Morai will have won because of a single. simple miscalculation. GO"
(I will move this to the game-play section.)

@Magmaul-Ace: I forget. One of them explicitly said they'd leave, though.
@Liminori: I'll assume everyone's out of the Skylark.
@Xteri: The bio kinda sucks, but I don't think it'll make a difference. I've got half a mind to accept the app as-is. I'll wait for a couple more apps (or until the next post or two) before making a decision. ;)

Anybody got any thoughts on post #168? I've been waiting weeks to write that one.
For the curious, I'm awaiting a couple new apps.

So...is it time to make last-minute adjustments and monologues?

Fallout 4 Hype is real, meanwhile I'm in a basement (Not really, I live upstairs) learning japanese so I can play a cool looking game nobody talks about (7th Dragon series) so that I feel like I know what I'm doing when it comes to virtual battles.
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I'll be making my post soon, since I'm like the last RP'er on the Skylark who adittionally will be able to post for a few weeks before I have to rely on my tablet to post during the move to Oregon.
On another note, I'm also making a DIY Pip-boy-ish-thing.
Looking for junk has never been so much fun!

I really like how dramatic you made the whole thing, but I think if you had established some sort of character that the players could have known would man the guns, or perhaps emphasized that knights were sacrificing their lives to save those that had managed to flee, it would have had a better effect.
I liked it overall, it made the descent a lot more interesting, though I feel like this should have some gameplay effects.

On that, we are agreed. The idea had occurred to me, but only too late in the story for me to implement the idea.
I did attempt to emphasize that the knights were sacrificing their lives, though. The turrets are manned, and I described them as burning away and shattering. I'd hoped that would convey that concept. :/
Dang it. I need to rewrite that thing a little.

Hay been a while, Thin when you get a chance can you comeon steam. I would like to have a word with ya.

While I wait for Slimavenger and Critzer to respond to character sheet queries, I've been reading up on this one site that talks all about story writing and how to make it better. You guys might want to check it out sometime.
Yuffie's Writing How-To's on Wattpad.
@Hexlash: Forgot to answer your other question. The scene *does* have gameplay effects, which we'll begin to see shortly.

@Thin, that website is really educative (Did i spell this right?), I would never know why my writing's fells odd if i hadn't read it. Anyway, when are you going to advance the story?

I believe the word you're looking for is 'educational.' ;-)
I'm waiting to advance the story once the new players arrive. We won't wait for them forever, tho.

Just curious, Spirals, what is your native language? You mentioned somewhere that you're shaky on English, so I was wondering what other language(s) you spoke. :o

If you wish to cont. or conversation from the other night, that would be fine Thin.

My native is indonesian, and i can understand a tiny bit of chinesee too

You were right... it was really bad...
Nice new chapter...
:P

I have to admit, the content you had in your latest post was really well done. Not only did you evoke nice imagery, but you improved off of Thinslayer's atmosphere.
For example, "celebration brought by the dead" was an excellent metaphor: it explained the mindset of your character perfectly. Then you added onto that by integrating some relatable backstory about the bomb. To top that off, you vividly described your character's physical reaction, and included that little bit about Chael's teammates that makes the reader sympathize with not only Chael but the people being shot down and on the ship.
The one problem I would say that I have with it, would be that it felt fairly cliché. XD

It's the kind of writing quality that writers such as Spirals-Ore display that reminds me that this RP isn't my story; it's everyone's story. I didn't build it; we built it. I don't think I could have evoked any kind of emotional reaction from the latest scene without Spirals-Ore's touch, nor would the previous battle with the gremlins have started off so intense without Noel-Exside's masterful piece.
I think this game will go well. :D
And on that note, I'm tired of waiting for the newbies. Let's get the next stage started.

Well, i did base it on a movie i watched years ago, forgot the name however. Then modify it a little so i can use it here. Besides, a small bit of cliches is ok right?.... right?
( Anyway thin is it ok to make our own landing spots? )

Of course it's okay. I want to encourage players to build the world they're playing in. :)
i forgot i needed to finish my post
blurk. . .