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Sun, 07/07/2013 - 10:34
#401
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Kaijuhunter
@Thin

Yeah, I agree with Gzilla. Also, would it be acceptable for me to send Astraea into the fray? She'll infiltrate Diavolo's base in order to free top and Gwen, only to be knocked out and thrown in with them herself. As you can see,
I'm not playing hero. In fact, I'm subjecting Astraea to the same punishment that Top and Gwen are suffering. And Kirito sees Astraea as a little sister sort of figure, so when he finds out both Astraea and Gwen were captured by Diavolo, that'll merely strengthen his hatred for the rest of the Valentines (excluding Gwen and Xindao)

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 12:09
#402
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Gzilla

If by "we" you mean "me," then yeah, I can redact what others wrote. But I'd like to see you guys try to resolve it first before I lay down the law. ;)

@Ultimaknightz: I was just going over a few possible story posts for your character. I'll show you a few here. Other characters will be power-played, but since this is just the discussion thread, it doesn't matter as much.

Begin suggestion

Damian was furious at Kirito. He jumped up from his observer's seat in the council and exclaimed, "How dare you insinuate that I am a spy!" Takiza slammed his fist on his desk. "Silence! You will NOT speak without authorization! Now SIT DOWN!!" Damian grunted and sat down.

Suddenly, there was a loud crash and a clatter as a thin black object jumped through a window, grabbed Seatus, and jumped out. Damian leaped out of his seat and darted to the window, and saw the black thing dragging Seatus away. He raced to the door and ran down the street after them. He turned a corner just in time to see the Finder dart into an alleyway. Gwen caught up with Damian, and proceeded to converse with Seatus about what had just happened.

She began to gasp for breath under the grasp of an invisible force, and was levitated off the ground. Seatus tried to run to her, but fell back against an invisible wall. Damian looked up and spotted Diablo with one of his minions. Damian smirked and muttered to himself, "Don't worry your Highness, I'll rescue you." He summoned his wings and flew up to Diablo, but the guard shot him in the wing, so he plummeted to the ground. He tried to use his wings as a parachute and landed ungracefully on the ground.

He picked himself up and stopped short. A beautiful, sexy woman, dressed in a low-cut silk gown, stood before him. She beckoned to him seductively and cooed, "Come here, Damian, and get the hero's thanks you deserve." He quivered with excitement. Dam straight. It's about time! She leaned in to kiss him, and he reached out to touch her.

Something greasy met his hands. He opened his eyes.

He shrieked, recoiled and tumbled to his butt in horror at the disgusting black monster standing before him. It groaned sadly at his reaction and jumped on him, pinning him to the ground. He heard a feminine voice in his head say, If you refuse to be with me, you'll make a scrumptious meal.

[defeat option]

He screamed and shut his eyes tight. There was a gunshot and a squeal, and suddenly he could move again. He opened his eyes and saw the creature fleeing, leaving a trail of blood in its wake. He looked back and saw Otto holding a smoking gun. Damian brushed himself off, shivered with relief, and muttered, "Thank goodness that thing is gone." Otto piped up, "Ye mean thank me! Goodness didn't shoot nothin'." Damian scowled and crossed his arms. "I had it all under control, you know." Otto laughed and retorted, "Don't try an' deny it, I heard ye scream like a lil' girl!"
"I was not! I was...roaring to scare it away."
"Ha ha ha! Yer funny, kid. You'd sooner scare off a pigeon than that monster, screamin' like that."
"Are you insulting me?"
Otto chortled and lit his pipe. "Nurp, but I won't be offended if ye take it that way. G'day to ya!"
"Harumph." Damian looked back at the blood trail. I'd better stop that thing before it seduces anyone else, he thought ruefully.

[victory option]

He wrested free of the creature's grip and kicked it off. He rolled away, summoned his swords, and took a defensive stance. The monster leaped at him and swiped at his chest. He blocked it and tried to counter-attack, but he missed, leaving himself wide open for a vicious bite to his left arm. He yelped and elbowed the creature, then ducked under a shower of thorns. He wiped the blood from his mouth and cautiously stepped forward, twirling his blades menacingly. To his horror the monster withdrew two rapier-like thorns from its body and did the same. Their blades met, and the two began a deadly dance of death. Normally, he would have been the superior swordsman, but it's difficult to fight when you're relying on an arm that's going numb from loss of blood. The rapiers plunged into his legs, and he staggered closer to the creature's face.

It grinned at him.
He grinned back.

It looked down, groaned in pain, and collapsed to the ground in front of him. Damian withdrew his blades from its chest and de-summoned them. The monster was still alive, but it wasn't going to hurt anyone anytime soon. He looked up at the sky; Gwen was long gone.

End suggestion

Opinions?

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 11:25
#403
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Kaijuhunter

I'm kind of on the fence about that. I think that Gwen and Topo need to have their moment alone, but I'm also interested to see how Astraea's presence would change up the story. Can you write up a sample here for me to look at? Feel free to power play to your heart's content here in the discussion thread.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 12:57
#404
Liminori's picture
Liminori
Ooh!

I just had an idea for a roleplay forum! The Proto Games. . .
I'll put up a link to it soon.
Muahahaha. . .

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 14:36
#405
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
@Thin

That's exactly what I mean. It would be better for them to be alone to see character development. I don't see why Diablo would have any reason to have Astraea in the cooler. Another cell maybe?

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 14:50
#406
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Kaijuhunter
Hmm?

No, I agree with that. I meant Astraea would be out in some top-security cell with guards posted all around her, every part of her body in shackles, etc. You don't just capture an Archangel like Astraea or Gwen and not properly subdue them. So yeah. I meant for Astraea to be put into a different cell. Besides, Astraea is also a high-value individual. She IS the leader of the Valkyries, so Diablo could probably gain something using her as well. Besides, I doubt Diablo would throw Astraea in with Gwen. How often do two thugs that are friends end up in the same cell in real life?

Story post coming soon

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 14:56
#407
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
Ohhh... Okay

Although I really doubt it's a smart idea to capture the leader of a nation... IN that nation. But that's just nitpicking now.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 15:14
#408
Gzilla's picture
Gzilla
@Kaiju

There are some inconsistencies with Axis's story. Not enough to make it look like a lie, but Kirito MIGHT be suspicious *hint*

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 16:30
#409
Liminori's picture
Liminori
What I hope to be a successful thread.

Here you go.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 18:50
#410
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
@Kaiju

Weren't you supposed to post that here so Thin could have a lok at it? He didn't want it official yet?

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 18:56
#411
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Ultimaknightz
@Thin

Damian doesn't just fall head-over heels for any woman, even if she's really beautiful. He's more of the cold; yet fun type. You know, those guys who are really fun, arrogant and handsome but are actually really cold inside. Yeah. He also can't be seduced easily.

Anyhow, in the battle, Damian would've probably used one of his advanced skills he's been training with for a long time. He can do more with manipulating darkness than just summoning swords, you know. :P Take note that this skill(shown below) is used against a training dummy.

Zantetsuken:
Damian muttered what seemed to be the word,"Zantetsuken." Almost instantaneously, 6 japanese characters(ザンテツケン) appeared in a flash of darkness on the opponent, its dark ink slowly moving down the humid air on the target. Damian gripped Chaos Edge's metallic handle tightly, before an intricate pentagon began forming on the stone-tiled floor beneath him. Damian took a deep breath, before the pentagon and himself vanished and reappeared behind the target, the Japanese characters and the target cut into two pieces. Damian dematerialized his sword as he grinned at the decimation he had caused, before fainting.

That move uses both Dark Burst and the 'Double-Edged Blade' ability he has. By going really fast in one second and slicing the enemy with 2x the force, he can deal insane amounts of damage. However, he takes 1/4 of the damage he deals, and if he's too tired, will cause fatigue.

If you're planning to use Damian for something, I'll give you tips on how he attacks:

-He waits for the opponent to attack for a few seconds. If the opponent doesn't attack, in a surprise move, he will.

-He is very perceptive of his surroundings.

-If the enemy brings out weapons, he will summon his swords.

-He usually wants to end the fight quickly. So he'll use a lot of finishing skills, like the Zantetsuken.

-He can manipulate darkness to make things, like chains and spheres.

-He has enhanced physical attributes.

But I see where you're going with this. :P I'll have a post up soon.

@Topoyozada
If I'm a five-year old, this 'five-year old' has a better proficiency over English than you. Which is quite embarrassing, considering that since you're '10', a person 5 years younger than you surpasses you in communicating with others. One tip of advice in arguments: Never try to insult your opponent, because they can easily turn your words against you if you don't plan carefully. And I just turned your 'insult' against you.

Waste of time and posts? How can you 'waste posts'? Perhaps you could 'waste' time, but then again, don't we all? What could be considered as 'wasting time' and 'not wasting time'? Who are we to judge that? Then again, who are YOU to judge that? It seems like you say you 'waste time' only because you want to treat arguing with me as something not worthy of your attention. Perhaps you were trying to aim in that direction, though with your limited vocabulary, I doubt you'd get there.(not an insult. All of us have limited vocabularies, so I'm not saying his is any different. I'm just saying he doesn't know how to structure his argument to say what I said in paragraph 2, line 2, sentence 7.)

I don't even know how one intrudes into another's posts. That's impossible. How can one intrude into another's posts? I don't think you're trying to make sense at all.

I'm just trying to reach a nice compromise with you, but you just say that you don't want to argue with me because it somehow 'wastes your time'. This shows that not only are you ignorant of my posts, but you also do not want to reach a compromise with your arch-enemy, even though he does not treat you like an enemy. I find this to be quite entertaining, as never have I had an arch-enemy without treating him like an enemy before.

You know what? Don't even read this, since you won't bother to anyway.

@Kaiju
Kirito can still save them, ya know. :P I said I was going to redact my post anyway.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 19:01
#412
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
:)

Good, now let's all back out of hero mode for a sec, and build up character influence.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 19:41
#413
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
@Ultima

You aren't treating him like an enemy? You just insulted his ability to write English! You can say it wasn't an insult all you want, you act as if you're all high and mighty. How do you think you can reach a 'nice' compromise when you insult him directly? You have to remember that not everyone in the world speaks English, or has it as there starting language. (Although I'm pretty sure Top is an English speaker by blood, so to speak.) And when the hell did he say anything at all about intruding posts?! He was talking about you intruding in on the moment that was going on. You aren't trying to reach a compromise at all, I think. You're just trying to hide that fact by saying you do. But that's what I think.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 19:47
#414
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Callis-The-Wicked
@Frostrex

&@Ultima That was offensive, considering Top proclaimed in a post, once he reclaimed his account, that his english wasn't very good.

But Top and Ultima are in a fix right now, and it's not like Top didn't have it coming. Same goes for Ultima. They've been disliking each other through many RPs, and this is just the...third direct insult of many.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 19:49
#415
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
What?

Remember, I was away for about two years. And I never even insulted Top. I'm not siding with anyone.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 19:51
#416
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
Frostrex

You kind of have to decipher my post, which part was for you and which was for Ultima.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 19:59
#417
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
Ahh..

Sorry. I just read it all as toward us both.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 20:21
#418
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
OMG WAIT GUYS I JUST REMEMBERED

ARKDETROIT WAS NEVER ANSWERED IF HE COULD JOIN!!! CHECK PAGE 8!!!

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 11:53
#419
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
Thx Seatus

@Akdetroit: it is not too late to join. :)

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 20:25
#420
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
LOL

So glad I remembered. We gotta be cleaner with our posting. XD

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 22:07
#421
Akdetroit
Application

Application

Name: Alec (last name is never spoken, and is redacted on all official forms)

Age: unknown(never spoken and redacted on all official forms, although he is definitely an adult, as he is seen drinking and sometimes smokes his pipe(more details on the pipe below))

Gender: Male

Faction: Belongs to the siral order for the most part, but does not show allegiance in any way

Species: Isoran/Human

Appearance: Wears what appears to be an extinguished vog cub coat, but no one really bothers to ask, although some have started rumors it is the fur of a void wolver, which is widely known as a stiff, unnapealing, and mood influencing fabric, if this is true it takes no effect on him, but, i digress, he has what seems to be a striker imbued with the power of electricity on his back at all times, but again no one has the urge to ask, he normally carries no shield and always keeps some wood and a small knife in his pack for whittling, he has a magnificent mustache and sometimes is seen smoking a pipe, but only on special occasions. He wears a dark hood with black patterns on it, but it is normally down.

Arsenal: his mysterious shocking striker and a heavily modified polaris he never seems to stop tinkering with. as for his shield he carries a dark thorn shield into battle, but almost never has one when he is leisuring about town, when he does it is his exalted honor gaurd.

Abilities: can scare people he does not want to talk to away with his incredibly overwhelming gaze. Can impress people with his many skills, such as whittling, mustache growing, and people intimidating.

Personality: Often only speaks when spoken to, but will get deeply involved in a conversation if it involves him, he is not outgoing and seems dark on the outside, but his friends know he is a good person. he has a good sense of humor, but never cracks jokes.

Biography: grew up as an orphan, but it was not as hard a life as would normally spawn a man of his type, he was often nominated for adoption but was never interested in being adopted and often ignored his possible parents in interviews, and either whittled(as he always has a desire to), or just stared blankly at the table in the room, he was never adopted and does not have much of a problem with it. he grew up as a loner in the spiral academy, never doing extremely well in his classes, but passing them normally. He had 1 or 2 real friends along the way but never really put himself out there. he now operates a small tent in a cetral corner of the marketplace where he sells his whittlings and tinkerings, and the occasional weapon he creates in his small home forge. he has some regular customers he converses with. he doesn't care much for politics, but will read about any news that concerns him.

(this is not related to the app, but do you write the story, or do people write about their own character, as i've noticed that many different people write on the story thread, thanks!)

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 22:30
#422
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
Ahem-hem

You write in posts what your character is doing. While doing this you may not control another's character nor make your character a certified god. And they must be subject to the laws of life, meaning they must take at least a few scrapes in a five-on-one fight.

Sun, 07/07/2013 - 22:37
#423
Akdetroit
Clarification

Thanks Seatus, that makes total sense I have only ever made one app, and it was never replied to so i just needed some clarification on the subject, can't wait to become part of the RP community!

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 11:53
#424
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Akdetroit

The goals of roleplaying are as follows:
1. Have fun!
2. Create a story together.

Write posts that further the story, or refrain from writing posts that hinder it. Bounce off the posts of others to make your next post, and don't forget to leave a hook or bounce point for others to use in making their story posts. Interact with other characters and the environment; don't isolate your character.

Follow these guidelines, and you should do okay. :)

Edit: your character app is quite unique. I'm intrigued to see how he performs. Your app is accepted!

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 13:19
#425
Akdetroit's picture
Akdetroit
@Thinslayer

Thanks!

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 14:16
#426
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Akdetroit

I saw your post. Where is your character, exactly? How did he see the creature enter the council window? Also, you left us no hook for interacting with your character.

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 16:42
#427
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
Echo echo echo echo.....

Echo echo echo echo.....

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 16:53
#428
Akdetroit's picture
Akdetroit
Feedback appreciated

I am editing right now, post will be finished soon.

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 16:54
#429
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
Hello?

HELLO? Hello? Hello? Hello?

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 17:20
#430
Akdetroit's picture
Akdetroit
Done

Post edited, better ?

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 19:07
#431
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
-.-

GUYSSSSS!!! AESTRAEA NEEDS TO ANSWER, TOPO NEEDS TO CUDDLE WITH GWEN, GWEN HAS TO TALK WITH TOPO PRIOR TO THE CUDDLE, SEATUS NEEDS TO TALK TO DIABLO, KIRITO HAS TO DISCOVER AXIS OUT, AND NOT KNOW ABOUT THE CUDDLING!!!

AND SEATUS REALLY WANTS TO TALK TO DIABLO SO HE CAN FIND GWEN AND TOPO ;-;

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 19:32
#432
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Seatus

Did you see my flashback yet? Any opinions on it?

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 19:35
#433
Kaijuhunter's picture
Kaijuhunter
@seatus

Kirito is suspicious, but has yet to find cold hard evidence of Axis' betrayal. I'm working on Astraea's (profanity filled) response to Diablo right now

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 19:41
#434
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
@Kaijuhunter

:D!

@Thinslayer

I'm not sure what to think of it yet. Somehow it feels familiar....

The way "Son" was said...

And the disgusted remark reminds me of the Finder....

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 19:44
#435
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Seatus

All right, I'll give you a hint: the Son is a reference to Seatus. His biological father is not in the conversation.

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 20:13
#436
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
But...

Oh my Vog.....

Latest Post: Seatus is still the same Seatus inside. His travel in time has given him happiness, but it's birthed something severe. It's planted a constant reminder in Seatus's head of how lonely he will be. A Guardian of Time, forever being forgotten. Water isn't just a gift, it's his tears.

Seatus has his true name too.

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 21:13
#437
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
Twilight is still best pony!

Okay, I'm gonna do something. No one interfere with the post please. It'll make sense when it's up.

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 21:44
#438
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
Seatus Alter Ego I Seatus

Seatus Alter Ego I

Seatus Alter Ego II

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 21:47
#439
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
Yay...

More manga... I swear, the world's going to hell because of that crap.

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 21:52
#440
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
Comments

@Frotrex: intriguing! Mind whipping up a character app for Shark so we know what she's like? :D

@Seatus: the way your char changes colors is rather unique, I must say.

Also, Equinox is still awesome. When you found a picture of him, that was one of the few times where my opinion of a character was completely changed by his picture. xD I've been wondering though; what are the major character differences between Equinox and Seatus (besides species)?

EDIT: @Frostrex: considering your dislike of manga, what is your opinion of Nai-Chan's picture of Gwenyvier?

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 21:52
#441
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
Twilight is still best ponyalicorn!

Yep, I'll get to eet.

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 22:08
#442
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
Here

Name: Shark

Gender: Female

Faction: Formerly Morai Foot Soldier

Species: Human

Appearance: Wearing a heavily modified Morai special ops uniform, with a shark mouth decal on the face mask

Arsenal: Death's Bloom: A sinister glaive that returns to its user's cursed hand.
Abilities: can control the glaive mid-flight and can camouflage with her environment, making her close to impossible to see.

Personality: She used to be a fun-loving soldier, no remorse for her enemies, like any Morai. But now she's just a shell.

Biography: A soldier in the brutal Mirai army, she was on a mission into an ancient Isoran ritual ground when some... Thing took over her body. Unless she now does its bidding. She was killed three years ago by Otto as his final mission. Otto had trapped her underneath a shipping crate on a merchant ship that had been hijacked and transformed into a bloodbath. Otto sunk the ship. But she is back. Was Shark ever really dead? Or has it something to do with the Finder and Seatus?

Mon, 07/08/2013 - 22:39
#443
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
Equinox

Equinox is a unique character. His father is a mystery, but gives Equinox his power over elements just the same. Equinox's dad has been portrayed as the devil. And the Snipes on Equinox's shoulders are odd as well. The not only take orders and understand, they are able to morph with Equinox into Zen mode. Zen is also hinted to be Equinox's past self. While in this form, Equinox can sway the battle violently and be able to cause troops to have mercy or leave no survivors. His alter egos are also a major factor in leading people, giving them good intentions, or making them merciless.

Seatus has two alter egos too. His natural persona and his clever persona. He gives people choices if they are invading his Sanctuary or harming his friends, to die or surrender. He has a tragic past, and devotion to the Structure as it's his cross, so to speak. He is in control of water, and is usually patient, but he has trouble with himself lately, sometimes overflowing with despair, and other times assessing the situation. He just needs help, that's all....

Tue, 07/09/2013 - 01:03
#444
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
OMG....

I came up with the most epic idea!

Prepare on Wednesday for an accurate pic(s) of Seatus!

Tue, 07/09/2013 - 05:49
#445
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Seatus

Regarding the "Son" in the flashback...

Have you forgotten your own fanfiction, Seatus? Seatus was born of the Core.

Tue, 07/09/2013 - 15:07
#446
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
I remember

How could I forget my own story, Thin? I know your hint well :)

Tue, 07/09/2013 - 15:47
#447
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
...

Yet another deus ex machina...

Tue, 07/09/2013 - 15:57
#448
Callis-The-Wicked's picture
Callis-The-Wicked
Shushes Frostrex

Seatus, sure popping in, but he didn't SAVE them....

Tue, 07/09/2013 - 16:28
#449
Frostrex's picture
Frostrex
Why do you think I'm always talking about you?

I was talking about the fireball thing.

Tue, 07/09/2013 - 16:38
#450
Thinslayer's picture
Thinslayer
@Frostrex

I wouldn't call it a Deus Ex Machina, since I'd been planning it a while back. Also consider that she was working on the fireball shortly after thrown into the freezer, so it should be no surprise that she succeeded.

The actual definition of "deus ex machina"

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